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Finally it was 5pm on Friday afternoon; it had been a hard long week at work with lots of stress and problems to deal with. But now it was time to have some fun and unwind. Me and the girls had arranged to go to his new club in town called 'LUSH'. It had been open a few weeks and we had heard it was amazing. The place to be. On the way home I sat thinking about things, as you do, what to wear, what it would be like, what sort of people would be there etc. I snapped back to reality when my phone went, a text from the boyfriend James. He said that he had to work late so would be late home a little later than normal and did I want him to bring any food home. James is a good man, a quiet man, always looking after me as I need. I replied to him to bring a takeaway home and I would see him there.
Back home I started to get ready, first things first a nice shower to get rid of the day. I turned the shower on and went in to the bedroom and started to get undressed. I pulled my work top up and over my head and tossed it to the side. Next was my bra, just a plain bra that helped make my breasts look bigger than they are (I have small breasts 32b). Then I slipped my trousers and panties down and added them to the pile of cloths I had discarded. I stood naked looking at myself in the mirror for a moment, looking myself up and down. I'm five ft five inch tall with long ginger red hair that flows a quarter way down my back, I'm a size 12 with a little weight I would like to lose but not that much, I wanted to go down to a size 10 ready for our summer holiday that was coming up in a few weeks to turkey. As I stood there looking at myself I slid my hands up to my breasts cupping them. I love how they feel, they may be small but they are firm and perky with a few freckles dotted over them topped with little hard nipples. I have always wanted larger breasts but never had the money or the guts to do anything about it, and besides James always says he loves them and anything more than a handful is a waste. While holding my breasts my eyes wondered down to my ginger haired pussy. I like to keep it trimmed in to a landing strip, I like the way it looks and feels, I have not had that many sexual partners only losing my virginity when I was twenty and have only slept with four guys including James so it’s still nice and tight. I slid my right hand down to my pussy; I started to slide my finger around the tip of my pussy then down to the entrance and the back up and around my clit. I was starting to feel really good, my pussy juicing up when all of a sudden I got the feeling I was been watched. I Looked around the room to see if James had got out earlier that he thought but I couldn't see anyone, as I looked around I came to the window and across the road I could see the guy who lives in the house opposite staring at me from his window. I dived on the bed and then up against the wall. I stood there feeling so ashamed and shocked that someone had seen me naked and playing with myself that wasn't my boyfriend. As I stood catching my breath I noticed my nipples were as hard as rock and my pussy was tingling. I was confused, why was I feeling like this? I slid my hand to pussy to find that I was dripping wet and at just the touch of my finger to my clit made me cum, and cum so hard like never before. As I recovered from this unexpected orgasm I realised why I had got so turned on, it was the fact a stranger seeing me naked and playing with myself excited. My embaracment gave way to another feeling, one of lust. I wanted more! I wanted to show this stranger my body again.
I moved to beside the window and glanced around and across the street hoping to see this man still there hoping to see me again but the man was not there anymore I felt a slight tang of disappointment that he was not there. I looked at the clock and it was coming up to 6.30pm, I should really get in the shower and continue to get ready.
By the time I had finished in the shower James was home with a takeaway, he called up to let me know he was back so I headed downstairs with just a towel wrapped around me so as not to let my food get cold. As I entered the front room to get my food James was not alone. I had completely forgotten he had asked his mate Steve round to play video games tonight and have a few beers while I was out. For a moment I thought I should go and put some cloths on but I decided it wouldn't be a problem. As I walked in I said hi to Steve and went to give James a kiss. He looked shocked that I was only in a towel that did little to hide everything but didn’t say anything. I bent over and gave James a kiss and then picked up my food and sat down. I looked over to Steve and he had this big smile on his face that confused me. As I started to eat I realised why he was smiling, as i bent down to give James a kiss my towel must have risen up at the back a little and I had given Steve a flash of my pussy! I went bright red. As we eat my pussy started to tingle again like it had before and I realised that it was down to Steve seeing my pussy. My mind was racing and I was having trouble focusing on eating my dinner, my pussy was getting hotter and wetter by the second. My mind was running through so many things, how excited I was, what did Steve think, what would James say if he knew? It was then that an idea popped in to my mind I wanted Steve to see my pussy again but this time I wanted to do it on purpose, but how. I ran through a few ideas until one sounded like it would work. As we finished eating I put my plan in to action first I would uncross my legs, then let them fall open just a little a first. Steve didn't notice, how could I get him to look without James seeing what was going on? That's when I had the idea - I could do it like it had happened before. I got up and walked over to James, I made sure I had my back to Steve and bent over to give James a big kiss knowing that my towel would ride up again, only this time I made sure my legs were more open so Steve could see right up my pussy. My god did I feel naughty! I stood up straight a went to walk out the room as I did I looked at Steve who again had a big grin on his face as he watched me walk out, my plan work I thought to myself as I made my way out the room and back upstairs. I felt so naughty and alive my body tingled all over. When I got to the bedroom my pussy was aching, I had to see just how wet it was, I slid my finger down to my hot pussy WOW it was so wet I couldn't believe it, I have never been so turned on, I stood there feeling just how turned on I was and how good it felt to touch my very hot wet pussy, I needed to cum and cum now! However a noise made me jump, my phone went off and brought me back to the real world.
My phone had just gone off at the most frustrating point, I was starting to really enjoy the feeling my fingers were giving me and it had interrupted me, I answered it, it was Sarah, my best friend since school, and one of the girls I was going out with saying that the taxi would pick me up in about 30 minutes. Dam I thought that's not long enough to enjoy myself and get ready. So I had to but my pleasure on hold and get dressed, do my hair and but my face on as James called it. I did my hair and makeup and then picked out my outfit. I had decided to wear this little black top that was a little see thru but with a nice black bra would be fine and a little skirt that finished half way between my waste and my knees. I choose some black French knickers to match my bra to finish. Next shoes, well boots as I decided in the end. They were knee high black leather ones. As I stood looking at myself in the mirror making sure I looked ok I remembered what had happen the last time I was looking at myself in this mirror and felt my pussy get a little wetter. A thought ran through my mind, I put it straight out my head as it was too naughty and there was no way I could do it, or could I? As I stood fighting with my thought a text came through saying that my girls would be here in 2 minutes. At this point I thought to hell with it and slid the French knickers down my legs and stepped out of them, tonight I am going commando I said to myself and that thought excited me even more.
The taxi pulled up outside I got my bag together and said goodbye to James and Steve and stepped out into the night to have some fun. As I closed the front door James shouted to me to have fun and enjoy myself. I got to the taxi and all the girls were in already. Sarah, Jenna, Michelle and Lynn. I got in and off we went.
in the taxi on the way to the club the girls laughing, joking and talking about what they thought the night may hold, what the club would be like, who would meet someone etc. for me however my mind keep wondering, I had never gone out with any knickers on before I felt really self conscious and could not believe I had. I ran through the afternoons events and how two men had seen my private place and how much fun it was knowing that they had seen me. I was drifting not really listening to what the girls were saying I was in my own world. I was again brought back to the real world when my phone vibrated on my leg, it was a text from Steve, I felt my face flush slightly and was nervous about reading the text. As I opened it all it said was 'thanks for the show Sophie' this made my face flush even more but I had to smile to myself, Sarah asked what was going on, I just said nothing still smiling to myself.
Once we got to the club we headed straight to the bar, the place was really busy and it was only 8.30pm but it was still a new place and thought no more of it, we decided to have a walk around the club to see what it was like, there were two rooms, the first playing pop sort of songs, the second paying more dance music. Around the dance floor was a raised seating area on both sides, as we walked past a table came free so we stepped up and grabbed it. Soon it was time for more drinks, Michelle and Jenna went to get them while the rest of kept the seats, they return and had drinks for us all along with shots, I'm not great with shots they go straight to my head but I thought well I'm out to have some fun so why not. I took my two shots one after the other and soon started to feel them having their effect, I never really liked shots but what the hell.
As we sat chatting about our lives my phone went, Steve again asking if I was having fun, I replayed I was and thought nothing else about it, put my phone way in my bag. A Few minutes later Sarah asked me to go to the toilets with her. When I was in the cubical I checked phone to find 2 more texts from Steve, the first just said 'make sure you are on your own when you read the next text' I was confused but as I was on my own I open the second text, it said 'my turn to return the favour' with a picture attached. I couldn't believe it; Steve had sent me a picture of his cock!!!! WOW was the first thought I had, I couldn't stop looking at it, it was huge at least 9" long. I sat there on the toilet with my skirt up around my waste staring at Steve’s cock, I was getting nicely turned on with the sight of Steve’s huge cock and it and it was only Sarah knocked the door to make me release where I was. I put my phone away, finished up and we headed back to the table. There were more drinks and shots waiting for us upon our return.
So here I was sat in this club having had four shots and on my third glass of wine, thinking about Steve's huge cock and feeling very horny. That's when I realised across the dance floor there was a guy, no more than twenty staring at me smiling, I smiled back at him and looked away. As I did my eyes looked down to my lap and I soon realised why this guy was staring, my legs were slightly spread and from where he was standing he must have been able see up my skirt? I felt the same rush from before spread through my whole body, so I decided it was time to have a little more fun. I looked him straight in the eyes and opened my legs even more so he could see right up my skirt to my pussy. He smiled at me and I just kept looking at him knowing my pussy was on show to anyone happened to look. This guy then did something that I didn't expect, he nudged his friend and leaned in and said something to him. That's when his friend looked over in my direction. So here I was sat with my legs open showing my pussy to 2 complete strangers in a public place and I was so excited and turned on about doing it. As I sat there showing my pussy I felt a hand on my shoulder, Jenna, she wanted to dance so I had to leave my flashing point and join them on the dance floor. Soon I was in the flow dancing away, as I was my mind kept on bringing the image's of the two guys staring at my pussy to the front and it was not long before I realised just how turned on I was. I could feel my pussy juice starting to run down the inside of my thighs. God this was torture, I had spent most of the afternoon, turned on like never before and had only cum once! I had to change that. I moved to Lynn and told her I was going to the toilet and id be back soon knowing that I just had to please myself there and then and tidy up a little, I couldn’t really just let my pussy leak juice everywhere now could I. I started off towards the toilets and just as I was about to enter the loo's someone grabbed my arm, it was Lynn she had followed me. It was a lot busier now so there was a queue for the toilet so I passed the time talking chit chat with Lynn all the time feeling my pussy getting wetter and wetter and more juice running down my thighs. Soon it was my turn to get a cubical, at last I thought now I can take care of business. Lynn on the other hand had other ideas. As I entered the cubical she followed me in saying it would be quicker as she shut the door behind us. Now I have done this before and it is a lot quicker but I mean come on, how hard is it for a girl to a little private time. Well, as this again would be time I could not do what I needed and wanted to we took our turns, checked our makeup in the mirror and off we went.
On our way back to meet the others I diverted of to the bar for a forth glass of wine, just as I gave my order a guy jumped in, added his drink to my order. Just as I turned to him to say something he said 'don't worry I'm paying' it was then I realised who he was, it was the guy I had flashed earlier. I just smiled and said thanks. He introduced himself as Mark. Our drinks game and he paid, he then turned to me leaned in close to me and whispered in my ear that he and his friend had liked the view very much. I could feel myself blush a little but due to the alcohol I said he was welcome and glad that they liked the view. We continued to chat for a while, he told me he was 23, worked in a bank and was single. It was then he said he was going back to his friends and suggested I should come along so he could introduce me Jon (the other guy I had flashed) as he would like to meet me. I agreed and followed him over to his friends; they were all standing on the seating area opposite where I was before. Once there in introduced me to Jon who gave me a kiss on the cheek, and thanked me for the flash, there were three other friends with him Tim, Matt and Tom. As we all chatted Jon announced to the other three guys that I was the one that had flashed him and Mark. This caused me to go bright red in an instant.
Tim was the first to say something 'that’s not fair' he said ' we should all get a flash' I just didn’t know where to put myself but a devilish idea game in to my head ' Why Not ' I thought, James told me to have fun and I was having fun. So I decided what the hell. I told the guys to get around me in a circle, with that done I lifted up the front of my skirt and showed these five complete strangers my wet pussy. I could not believe what was happening to me and I was doing this, but it felt amazing, a huge turn on. As I lowered my skirt all the guys had big grins on their faces. Mark leaned in and said that my pussy looked amazing and very wet. I told him it was as I had been so turned on all afternoon and not been able to do anything about it. With that he came really close and whispered that he could, and with that he started to slowly slide his hand up my skirt. He inched higher and higher up my thigh staring me deep in the eyes. I did nothing to stop him, to be honest I didn’t want him to stop. He reached the top of my thigh and moved his hand over to my hot, dripping wet pussy. As soon as his fingers made contact with my pussy I felt my legs go weak, Mark held on to me tight as he continued to work his finger on my pussy. His fingers felt so good and I was soon on the verge of Cumming. He must have sensed this and leaned in and kissed me full on the lips, that was it I exploded! It was like I had just had an electric shock wave after wave of pleasure shot though me, if it was not for Mark kissing me I would have screamed in pleasure louder than the music. Mark did not let up he kept playing with me and before I knew I came a second time, this time harder than before, I just went weak, my head spinning. My legs unable to hold me up on their own.
As I came back down to earth I found another hand, this one was on my ass. it could not have been mark as he was still playing with my pussy and holding me up straight, I looked round to find Jon standing there stroking my ass, I don’t know why but I leaned in and kissed him hard. So here I was in a nightclub kissing one guy and letting another finger my pussy while three others were standing watching. What was I doing, I had never done anything like this in my life but I wanted more and more! The feeling was incredible; I had never felt so alive!
as I continued to kiss Jon with mark still fingering my pussy which was so wet it was unbelievable, someone took my hold of my hand and moved it, it was placed on the outside of some trousers and I could instantly feel a nice hard bulge. I ran my fingers along the bulge and gave it a little squeeze; the bulge grew as I do so. I could not see whose crotch I was feeling up and little did I care if the truth was known. As I continue to rub my hand across the bulge of my mysterious man there was a big commotion that startled us all, the guys looked to the centre of the floor as I straightened myself up as best I could. As I finished I turned to look and see what was going on but couldn't see much, just a big group gathered in the middle and some bouncers. I wondered where my friends were and hope they were ok. I thought I best try and ring Sarah. I got my phone out and found I had several missed calls and texts, all from Sarah; she was trying to find me. As I read the texts it became clear that they had been told to leave due to the state Jenna had got into. I text Sarah to find out where she was, as I waited for the response Jon came up to see if I was ok and I told him what had happened and I was not sure where my friends where. A text came back saying that they were outside waiting for me. I told Jon that I had to go but he said not to worry, he had drove and would give me a lift back. I thought about it for a moment, did I want to be on my own in a club with a group of guys I didn’t really know, this was when my horny side kicked in and said stay and continue to have fun, and by the state of my pussy and just how horny I was I had to agree. I text Sarah to carry on as I had met up with some other friends and they would look after me. With that I put my phone away and leaned in close to Jon and said I was ok with that and gave him my best sexy wink and smile.
After another couple of drink and lots of flirtatious behaviour between me and the five guys it was time to go. It was 1.30am and I was quite drunk. We all finished our drinks and headed outside to Jon's car. The car was parked around the corner from the club but I was still a good 10 min walk. I complained my feet hurt and with that jumped on to Mats back so he could carry me. Of course this meant that my skirt lifted up at the back and exposed my bare ass to the world. Tom moved in behind us and started to grope my ass as we walked, he soon discovered he could also feel up my pussy which was still soaking wet. Once we reached the car I got down off matt’s back and gave him a big sloppy kiss for the ride. Looking back this may have been the kick start the guys were looking for. Before I knew what was going on I had them all around me, hands everywhere. I was still kissing Matt but could feel my skirt been lifted up around my waste and hands grabbing my ass and pussy, fingers were been teased around my pussy and anus, which made me jump as I had never had anything in my ass ever, (I did get used to the feeling though and soon found it to be very pleasurable to have my ass fingered). My top was pulled up along with my bra and hands were all over my breasts pulling my nipples. I felt a mouth take my exposed nipple and suck and bite it. I through my head back and moaned out load in the intense pleasure known. I felt so dirty been felt up and used by these five strangers, but I liked it, it had awaken something in me, something dirty!
As I stood in the throes of pleasure I heard a zip been pulled down, then a second, a third until all five had opened their trousers. I reached out with my right hand to find the first one I could (Tom's) I reached inside his open trousers and felt for his cock, I pulled out his hard cock in to the night air. He was not that long but he was thick, god was he thick, I could hardly get my fingers all the way round it. As I stroked his fat cock I moved my left hand out to find another. This one was Jon's as I reached inside his open zipper I could feel his hard smooth cock. I slid my hand down to find the tip to pull him out and it just kept going down his leg, where would it end? I reached the tip and eased him out, fuck me he was HUGE, he felt even bigger than the photos of Steve’s that he had sent me. it was long and thick and I remember thinking that there was no way I was going to be able to fit all that inside me, no way at all, but it was going to be a lot fun trying.
I dropped to my knees so I could face this huge cock, wow it looked even better than it felt in my hand and if possible even bigger. I was curious as to what the other three had for me, I turned to Matt reached in and pulled out his cock he was long but not thick, next was Mark, his cock was a lot like Matt's long but not thick and finally was Tim. as I reached in his zipper I felt skin straight away, he was commando to just like me. I liked that. I moved my hand in further and could not believe what I was feeling. I pulled out his cock and.... oh my god!!!
Tim had this massive cock; it was long and very thick. I put both hands on his cock top to bottom and still there were inches over and there was no way I could get my finger wrapped fully around it. I had to taste this monster. I moved my lips to the head of his penis and opened my mouth wide and slowly slid my wet lips down his length. mmmmmmm did he taste good. I took as much as I could in my mouth before started to choke (about a third of his length) and then back up to the tip. As I continued to suck Tim's cock Jon and matt stood either side of me, they took hold of my hands and guided then on to their rock hard cocks. I started to wank them as I continued to suck the monster in my mouth. after a short time my jaw started to hurt so I let Tim slip from my mouth but continued to wank him as I took Mark in my mouth, this continued for another fifteen minutes or so, taking each cock in my mouth in turn and another in each hand. I was in the middle of a circle of cocks making my way round to each of them and loving every minute of it. It was then I was picked up and told it was time I cock in a different hole other than my mouth, and well who was I to complain the state I was in.
The back door to the car was opened and I was positioned bent over with my top half in and my ass in the air for anyone to see. I felt the first cock nudge the entrance to my pussy, I was so wet that the cock slide in with ease, after a few thrusts he was balls deep in my soaking pussy. At last I was getting the pleasure I had wanted all afternoon I thought. I didn't know however who’s cock it was in my pussy, I knew it could not have been Jon or Tim by the size of the cock it must have been Matt or mark. I didn't really care and it was not long until I was coming all over that cock buried in me, I let out a scream of pleasure as I did. As they continued to fuck me the other door opened and Jon climbed in for me to suck his cock. The cock behind me set the pace, driving his cock deep in my wet pussy pushing my mouth down over Jon's cock We stayed like this with one fucking my pussy and me sucking Jon until they pulled out and was replaced with another. I knew this cock, due to the thickness, it was Tom. He drove in to me in one hard thrust making me moan around Jon's cock. As tom continued to fuck me I felt myself ready to cum and when he reached his hand round to my clit I exploded all over him. Tom had a steady pace as he fucked me but before long it was time to change. I was moved around to the front of the car, I sat on the bonnet, legs spread waiting my next hard cock. Matt moved between my legs and I knew then the first cock belonged to Mark. Matt slides his cock in slowly making sure I felt every inch all the way. He soon built up pace and soon was fucking me harder and deep than I had ever been fucked. The other for guys were standing wanking their hard cocks waiting. I didn’t want to wait for long I wanted a cock in my mouth while been fucked.
I climbed down and got Tim to stand in front of me so I could suck that amazing cock once again. Jon got in behind me and pushed his huge cock up and into my pussy. God he felt big in me but so fucking good. Matt and tom stood by my side so I could wank then and mark got on his knees below me so he could suck on my swinging tits.
The only one not to fuck me now was Tim with his monster cock. He and Jon swapped positions. I felt Tim nudge his cock to my opening and slowly push forward. He got about a quarter the way in and pulled out. Then forward again. He did this for a few minutes and inch by inch my pussy opened up to him until he was to balls deep in my pussy. I had never been so full of cock, I had cum twice just by him squeezing that thing in me! Now he started to fuck me and boy did him. He was fucking me so hard and deep I was taking the entire length that Jon had for me, something I was not able to do before! I came again and again as he fucked me; it felt like I was having one long orgasm. It was not long before my legs gave up and I could not stand up on my own, I was exhausted but the guys were not finished. I was moved over to a patch of grass matt lay down and I climbed on top, his cock sliding back in my pussy, tom brought his cock to my mouth and with Tim and Mark on either side for hand jobs. It was then I felt the fifth and final cock. My eyes bulge and I screamed in pain as Jon slide his dick in my ass. It hurt so much but I soon got used to the feeling of having a dick up there and I quite liked it after a few minutes. I thought now this is the fullest of cock I have ever been, with a hard cock buried deep in every hole.
So here I was in a car park with five strangers I met that night fucking every hole I had to offer and I loved every single second! The guys kept changing around so they all had the chance to fuck all my holes. All five of them took their turn fucking my pussy, ass, mouth and had gotten hand jobs when there was not a spare hole to be had. My pussy and ass are stretched and sore but I didn’t care. Tom who was fucking my ass suddenly said he was about to cum. he withdrew his cock and I climbed off Tim’s, (which slipped out of my pussy with a pop), got on my knees in front of him ready for his cum! The others join him standing around me, again I'm in the middle of a cock circle with them all wanking their cocks for me. I look up at Tom and tell him 'come on baby give it to me, give me your cum I need it, want it' and stick my tongue out ready and waiting with that he lets out a moan, his cum flies out, the first jet hitting square On the fore head, the second lands right on my outstretched tongue followed by a third and forth. This sets Matt of next, his cum landing on the right side of my face running down my cheeks, then on the left another cock blows it load, Jon shooting his cum all over my face, jet after jet landing on my upturned face. The three have finished Cumming and I take each in my mouth to get the last drops of their cum. Marks grabs my head turning towards him just as he shoots his hot cum to add to the others, again I take him in my mouth to suck him dry. With four down there was only one left, Tim. He was not quite there he wanted my pussy once more. He helps me up and over to the bonnet of the car. I lie on it legs open and he drives his hard massive cock in deep. He fucks me as if his life depended on it, his friends cum all over my face. As he looks down at me I whisper ' fuck me like the slut I want to be and give me your cum you horny fucker'. His pass increases harder and harder he fucks me I scream as one more orgasm washes thru my body, he pulls out his dick and shoots his load. The first two jets landing on my tits, a third, forth, fifth landing on my stomach and pussy, yet he still has more another three coating my ginger haired pussy, that's it he’s dry. I slip off the car on to my knees to suck this cock one last time. Mmmmmmm
I scope up load after load into my waiting mouth and rub the rest as best I can into my skin, pull up my skirt and my top down, leaving my bra off. The guys took their cock away and Jon says 'still want that lift?' we all laugh climb in the car and head of.
I get them to drop me around the corner from my house I give them all a kiss and my number and thank them for an amazing night, the Night off my life, climb out the car and walk the last bit home covered in dried up cum all over my body and bra in my bag. I check the time it was nearly 4am, which meant I had be fucked like a whore for just over two hours, I was so tired.
As I got home I went upstairs James was asleep in bed, I took a quick shower to clean myself up and climbed into bed, James stirred turn over asked if I had enjoyed myself, I said yes baby I had a great night, gave him a kiss and rolled over with a smile on my face remembering just how good the night had been, and how now I had a taste for cock I wanted more and more, I knew where I was going to get the next large cock. Watch out Steve, Sophie wants her fun!
5 comments

anonymous readerReport

2013-03-31 14:22:43
just another worthless fucking slut wife! the bitch should be a homeless whore

anonymous readerReport

2012-12-21 09:16:06
love this! so glad to hear your first week of motherhood has been a happy one. paekrr is just insanely beautiful, and i love this photo of her perfect little newborn bum and feet!the nice thing about the very early days (like months 1-4) is that even though they do speed by in one sense, they are very slow in another. since baby isn't mobile yet and sleeps frequently, you'll have SO many peaceful hours to just drink her in, snap a million perfect photos, and whisper sweet nothings in her ear. it's such an amazing time, and i'm thrilled to see you're already loving it! can't wait to hear more about this darling little girl, and of course see more pictures. you guys are awesome! all my best to you three.cheers!

anonymous readerReport

2012-08-07 01:46:26
It's a hot story but, like the others have said, it's important to have spaces between the paragraphs. Also, too many run-on sentences, lack of punctuation and other writing errors that should have been cleaned up before the story was submitted. I'm only saying this to be helpful because it will hopefully make your future stories easier to read and more enjoyable for your reading audience.

anonymous readerReport

2012-08-06 20:58:24
Wall to wall text is a real challenge for a reader. Please arrange paragraph breaks and spaces.

anonymous readerReport

2012-08-06 14:23:09
Paragraphs!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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