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Comments from jdm320

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2013-10-21 14:32:56 The Story of Ann Chapter 2: My Life on the Farm Very addicting series. Your life sounds like most teens dream but I understand that it may not be as erotic as it sounds. Only one complaint, each time you mean to say let, your say left. Is that on purpose?
2013-10-22 13:08:29 Halloween Frat Party Nightmare very well written story. The sex could have been described a little better,but it was enough to visualize. Keep up the good work.
2013-10-22 14:39:07 Anna's Story I agree with the last comment, the changing from 3rd to 1st person was distracting and the details could have been better. Over all still a good story, good job.
2013-10-22 15:05:37 Nympho at Large On The Farm Nice details. The beginning was a little shaky but it ended well.
2013-10-23 10:32:03 Amber (Part 1 I agree with the other comments. Breaking up the paragraphs and separating the dialogue would help the story flow better. I do not mind the very few grammatical errors. They were not distracting and did not interfere with the flow. Besides this is not a high school essay. Very hot story, first times are one of my favorites. Great lead up to the climax. Looking forward to part 2. Jeff
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