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| 2012-11-10 04:48:46 |
THE MOON STONE, part 3 (THREE) |
Yes, I am finding this tale quite enjoyable. [Sorry, I have been quite busy and therefore short of 'reading time'.]
Having skimmed the others' commentary, I only say, "Well, yeah." |
| 2012-09-08 12:35:59 |
THE MOON STONE, Part 2 |
Excellent. I intend to spread rumors of 'your words'... |
| 2012-09-07 10:52:51 |
Spring Break Broke My Heart |
Rutger5 / R5, I've read your writing previously.. and this tales realism is fabulous! Your character expresses himself very well.. I trust he will be wise enough to realize is rarely gotten. I'll say no more. We await part two. |
| 2012-09-03 21:28:38 |
Lindsay's Dirty Secrets |
Awesome tale. (Please check for typo's more carefully.) Neat part one. 8-D |
| 2012-08-27 13:48:25 |
The Wolves of Paris. |
Wow! As previously commented, the intracate manner your tale has been woven so tightly to the facts (aka historical record) shames ANY attempt I've EVER made at juggling time... more concisely: AWESOME! |
| 2012-08-27 09:56:58 |
SEX FORMULA 69 |
2012-08-27 Monday 09:50(EDT) Reading this CAW-12 entry, I had difficulty with the quotation:
"... privy to most of thing going on at..."
and presume you intended to say
"... privy to most everything going on at..." |
| 2012-08-26 12:28:01 |
Tristane of Eloise |
2012-08-26 Sunday 11:45(EDT)
Dr. Janelle is especially interesting due to her French/English bilingual nature. (Maybe that's interesting to me because my own mother spoke French before learning English. It seems that her babysitter -- apparently from Quebec -- was mostly speaking French.
Having been introduced to French before kindergarten {{Thank You, Grandma!}}, I have used that insight most of my life. To find it in the stories I enjoy recreationally is just a pleasure. Perhaps akin to the 'classes of western music' (eg., structure of Classical, polyphony of the Baroque, the styles of various Dances, the Pentatonic melodies of Irish Folk, ...). Oops, wandered.
Dr. Jannelle, has that 'far, far away' character, because her intimate thoughts so-often come out spoken (or muttered) "en Franaise" [in French]. Once the reader grasps (or just accepts) her character, the readers perception of the writers character (Dr. Janelle) become like a musical group, chorus or band that |
| 2012-08-26 11:12:16 |
Tristane of Eloise |
[QUOTE=ELaken-Palmer][QUOTE=MartinJD]...-08-23 Thu... never saw the tie (described so visually by 'horsewithnoname' as the 2x4 to the face). Awesome.
Could you add a picture of Cookie's ring (to your picture gallery)?[/QUOTE]
I did as you requested and added both Cookie's ring, from Auntie Nell, and the ring that Uncle Bryce had given to Kate - which she threw out the door.
Please consider putting your comments on "Tristane of Eloise". I'm interested in how you saw the character of Dr. Janelle...[/QUOTE]
First, I apologize for appearing so (alof, if you will). It's summer-time and as little as I pretend it to be, I love pretending to juggle with my incessant master: time. [And so, I move on.]
I am SHARING my PM'd request and your quick response (this much later, because I'm a terrible juggler). |
| 2012-08-26 10:51:48 |
Tristane of Eloise |
The first time I read this, the details of the doctor's whole-hearted effort are felt as the primary plot. The primary character introduces so little (aparently traumatized, here) while at least two primary perspectives (the Doctor and the Patient-handler) are alternated so their 'braiding' toward the end leaves the reader shocked with surprise (like a suspense-thriller). (Indeed, upon my first-reading, I was astonished to recognize characters from a sequence of tales -- from which I don't think I have read but 2 or 3! ) |
| 2012-08-15 15:41:00 |
I AM NUMBER 69 (CAW 12 Entry) |
ClaireBare,
Earlier (CAW 10 & 11), I fantasized of writing. Educated as an engineer, I sought to build a plan .. a strategy (if you will) to create suitable contribution to this "CAW" event .. as well as more.
Like so many things, this too resembles an iceberg: what you see is so much less than the whole of it.
The fantasy you've presented is fabulous. Yours is the 3rd (or 4th) of the CAW#12 entries I have read.
I plan to make further notes after reading other entries.
Sincerely, MartinJD
8-D |
| 2012-07-10 20:36:08 |
Digger |
I am giving your story a (+) rating here.
The typeset presentation (back in the forum), is vastly better (and I mean because of the typesetting). |
| 2012-03-15 09:31:05 |
Our Best Summer - CAW 10 |
20120-03-15 Thursday -- The month's half gone (and I thought I'd have all the tales read by now).
This is a great story, farmerJoe!
Early on, you you had a lot to put down in so many words -- and you did (even with that bit of, um, being from oz). Jenny's departchure happened. Just so final -- as it is.
So many comments-to-read (a nuissance to me as a reader -- I trust you to savor them -- well, at least a few). |
| 2012-02-15 11:16:26 |
CAW 10 *The Best Decision I Made* |
As already said, "Great Story!"
It's always and truly a pleasure to read fabulous prose. Your style seems as young as you've stated your age... flowing from headings & titles to your 'Introduction' then the subheadings are there but the words of your story prevail 'til the end.
Also, thanks to the proof'er (and you again, for brilliant prose)! |
| 2012-02-01 07:03:44 |
From Lonely Unfilled Housewife to Perverted Slut Part 1 |
You told part one of your story wonderfully. (Please -- if you can -- use "scared" to replace those two "scarred" ocurrences, thanks.) |
| 2012-01-17 03:43:06 |
Swinging in the Neighborhood |
You've really got to check the spelling (by proof-reading it -- otherwise you'll miss any correctly-spelled homonyms).
As I clicked the vote-button, great tale! (So good it just drips with reality!) |
| 2012-01-16 04:43:01 |
Ober's Daughter & Me |
Your flight left WAY too fast. Should've gotten creative -- fantasy awaits the words you could describe it with! |
| 2012-01-01 11:39:32 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 3 |
Yup! What all the comments above were sayin'... :-D |
| 2011-11-26 12:55:32 |
Brother And Sister "MEGAN'S GIFT" |
Incredible story. Your writing is awesome! (As it seems to have been in every tale I remember reading by you.) |
| 2011-11-05 12:41:24 |
Ellen's Gift CAW9 |
Keep that proof-reader (aka chief-editor). Oh, and isn't it "post and beam" (as opposed to "pier and beam") construction... asking because I'd just never heard that phrase... but then again, I'm in New England. |
| 2011-08-03 12:48:56 |
Caught III |
You have presented your story wonderfully, APerv2. { I was going to say more -- but there's no need for my rambling on. } Great job / familiar { maybe New Jersey } style! |
| 2011-08-03 12:46:49 |
Caught III |
You have presented your story wonderfully, APerv2. { I was going to say more -- but there's no need for my rambling on. } Great job / familiar { maybe New Jersey } style! |
| 2011-01-31 23:43:37 |
My New Houseplant 1 |
Great! I enjoy stories "written by women" (because I am not a woman). Well presented! I would enjoy more (but you'll have to find the "sprouts.") Only ONE typo' -- 'burrowed' would be the spelling of 'borrowed.' |
| 2011-01-31 23:43:17 |
My New Houseplant 1 |
Great! I enjoy stories "written by women" (because I am not a woman). Well presented! I would enjoy more (but you'll have to find the "sprouts.") Only ONE typo' -- 'burrowed' would be the spelling of 'borrowed.' |
| 2011-01-31 23:42:39 |
My New Houseplant 1 |
Great! I enjoy stories "written by women" (because I am not a woman). Well presented! I would enjoy more (but you'll have to find the "sprouts.") Only ONE typo' -- 'burrowed' would be the spelling of 'borrowed.' |
| 2011-01-23 04:16:34 |
Trapped |
Get a proof-reader (or just do two stories so you can fix the stuff spell-checkers miss - like homonyms: to, too, or two). The content is good. Your presentation needs some polish. Keep it cuming -- oops, I meant coming. [ha ha ha] |
| 2011-01-19 08:34:30 |
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Excellent! (But wasn't his brow furloughed or furrowed -- rather than furloughed?) |
| 2011-01-19 08:34:17 |
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Excellent! (But wasn't his brow furloughed or furrowed -- rather than furloughed?) |
| 2011-01-19 08:33:26 |
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Excellent! (But wasn't his brow furloughed or furrowed -- rather than furloughed?) |
| 2010-12-10 00:11:04 |
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The grammar. (I'd figure I'd missed it 'cause of your bein' "down under" -- but, I don't think so.) Ace THAT up, and it'd be TOP NOTCH! |
| 2010-12-10 00:10:12 |
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The grammar. (I'd figure I'd missed it 'cause of your bein' "down under" -- but, I don't think so.) Ace THAT up, and it'd be TOP NOTCH! |
| 2010-08-17 08:48:54 |
Christine and Serena: Part 1 |
Quick & to the point. Certainly. you've made a trial presentation. It does move FAST! I must imagine you've done so intending to "lay it all out there." Do continue! |
| 2010-04-23 18:38:55 |
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Would fantasy of being a beast be called beastiality? Wow. That was incestuous, too! Furre. Hmm... |
| 2009-01-20 03:40:24 |
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Blazer (my web-browser) "doesn't support ajax" so I'll leave a positive report this way (in words). |
| 2008-09-01 05:44:41 |
Widow Neighbor - Revisited |
No Ajax (on palm treo's browser).
Awesome finish! |
| 2008-04-26 10:56:36 |
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Good Story (no AJAX, here).
The "mind control program" seems to be a little far-fetched. Straight hypnotic-suggestion, however, would not likely be part of an 18 yr.olds skill-set. Hmm. |
| 2008-04-26 09:23:03 |
Naked daughter 2 |
Good Story
(my browser does not suppor AJAX). |