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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2012-12-03 21:39:25 |
You First |
Well written. As you've noted, the posting sometimes messes the format and puntuation up, so you have to carefully edit it after pasting, but before publishing. Very erotic...much like the Shed Club series. Hope you will do a sequal (or more, if you are up to it). There is a lot more to eroticism than moaning and groaning and fucking and bucking. You've captured the essence of youthful exploration. Good job! |
| 2012-11-27 17:23:12 |
The Shed Club. (Part One) |
Couldn't agree less with Bend OverBackwards. His opinion is just one, and judging by your sc oring, most people don't agree with hime. Great series...keep it up. |
| 2012-11-25 19:54:44 |
The Shed Club (Part 5) |
Outstanding series. Very well written. Please write more. Reminds a lot of us about our "learning" period. |
| 2012-11-19 21:52:42 |
Getting Spanked by Mom (part 1) |
Interesting story, but the poor grammer and punctuation was very distracting. You (or someone) needs to proofread the stories before you post them permanently. The theme is intriguing, though. |
| 2012-11-04 13:07:51 |
My Son's Cum Rag, part 1 |
Excellent job. Made me hard...thank you. |
| 2010-08-03 14:25:23 |
Jennas Story |
Well written and very erotic. Thank you |
| 2009-10-19 13:25:24 |
Fascination |
Very realistic...sounds very true. Turned me on. Great job...I look forward to reading more from a fellow Arizonan.
Sinturian |
| 2009-05-07 19:45:58 |
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Nancy...if you read this again, write to me.
Sinturian |
| 2009-05-06 12:20:24 |
Naked daughter 2 |
Very nicely done...
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-23 21:48:18 |
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Well done for your first effort. I hope you will write more. It could be a bit more erotic, but it was very entertaining.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-20 23:51:14 |
Sharon J. |
Thoroughly enjoyed the story. Much like my own Masseur stories. I suggest a little tighter editing, but overall, a very erotic topic.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-16 11:59:54 |
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Probably your best story yet, SSB. I really liked this one.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-16 11:31:01 |
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Good pair of stories, SSB, but it looked like you mixed two together. Need a bit more editing on the first part, but the story lines are well done.
Sinturian |
| 2008-10-16 23:39:47 |
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Another terrific winner, SSB. Nice going.
Sinturian |
| 2008-10-14 12:47:16 |
My Story |
Very moving and revealing, Lady...thank you for sharing.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-14 11:55:05 |
Jane |
Exceptionally well written. Congratulations! I will look for more from you.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-14 11:35:28 |
Welcome Home |
Nicely done... |
| 2008-09-11 23:32:38 |
Molly's Surprise Visitor |
Molly,
A very good start, and generally well written. There were a few small spelling errors, but overall, well organized and sensual. It was a turnon, and I think most guys would be aroused. Try a little more proofing before you post, and as you can see from the end result, put an extra space between paragraphs. Loved the story, too.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-01 12:29:34 |
The Traffic Stop |
To the person who attempted to correct my spelling...
"knight" = armored warrior on horseback
"night" = period of darkness between sunset and sunrise
Spelling in this story is correct, but thank you for trying.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-30 11:41:51 |
Party |
Delicious...very descriptive. You have a way with words <G>.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-29 15:30:24 |
Foreplay |
Nicely done! Love the Moody Blues! |
| 2008-08-28 20:09:17 |
The Masseur |
Hmmm...I don't think Dano was addressing me as the author. I suspect he is only trolling for business. Let him write his own stories.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-28 20:07:27 |
The Masseur 2 |
Hmmm...I don't think Dano was speaking to me...I suspect he is trolling for business. Let him write his own stories...
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-27 21:50:55 |
Weekends with my Daughter |
This is a good story that could be a great story with ,ore careful editing. As another reader commented before, punctuation, spelling and spacing the paragraphs would make a world of difference. Very good effort. |
| 2008-08-27 18:52:09 |
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Good job, SSB. Very clear descriptions. Shows a lot of hard work, that a lot of the critics on here don't undertand. Very hot, as well. |
| 2008-08-27 16:37:01 |
Life at the Palms Part 1 |
Very well written...thought it was going to simply be a slam bam, thank-you-mam when it started, but the detail and word images were very well done. Curious...what happened to Dani? Perhaps in the next chapter?
Good job! |
| 2008-08-27 12:29:21 |
A Thorough Distraction |
Very well done...delicious and sensuous. Certainly causes an erection...LOL. My tongue got hard, too, Congratulations! |
| 2008-08-26 23:37:40 |
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Good job, SSB...I liked it. I also liked the ending, which puts a finishing touch on these things. There can only be so much Oooohhhhh and Ahhh, and then it's repetitive. Obviously, a lot of others have liked it, as well.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-26 09:44:50 |
Barbara M. 2 |
I complimented you on the first Barbara story...thought it looked familiar. Then read this one...oh yes, I remember, I had previously written virtually the same stories. Thank you...immitation is the sincerest form of flattery.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-26 07:13:55 |
One Summer |
English, grammer, punctuation and detail would be helpful. Some of the sentences just ran together and thoughts weren't complete. The story concept is good. |
| 2008-08-24 21:47:23 |
My Neighbors |
Well done...well written and organized. Erotic as hell. |
| 2008-08-24 15:03:13 |
Daddy Loves Me, This I Know |
Well written...could have been broken into chapters, but very erotic. |
| 2008-08-23 13:29:55 |
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Well written...shows a lot of effort. |
| 2008-08-21 12:40:11 |
Barbara M. |
Well done...a little confusing when it started out, but it finished nicely. |
| 2008-08-21 12:07:06 |
Good Morning Dad |
Poorly written...hard to understand. |
| 2008-08-19 14:11:46 |
Back Massage |
Nicely done. I would love to see a bit more description of the actual climaxes you were feeling...but still very nice. |
| 2008-08-18 20:20:34 |
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Well done...liked the story, but it seemed to change focus toward the end. Still very arousing. |
| 2008-08-04 00:38:57 |
daddy please |
Excellent story...well written. Write more. |
| 2008-07-29 11:02:02 |
Sex Education (1) |
Extremely well written and VERY hot!!! |
| 2008-07-27 11:43:54 |
She whimpers... |
Not very realistic, and certainly not the proper way to train. |