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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2008-07-27 11:43:54 |
She whimpers... |
Not very realistic, and certainly not the proper way to train. |
| 2008-07-29 11:02:02 |
Sex Education (1) |
Extremely well written and VERY hot!!! |
| 2008-08-04 00:38:57 |
daddy please |
Excellent story...well written. Write more. |
| 2008-08-18 20:20:34 |
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Well done...liked the story, but it seemed to change focus toward the end. Still very arousing. |
| 2008-08-21 12:07:06 |
Good Morning Dad |
Poorly written...hard to understand. |
| 2008-08-19 14:11:46 |
Back Massage |
Nicely done. I would love to see a bit more description of the actual climaxes you were feeling...but still very nice. |
| 2008-08-21 12:40:11 |
Barbara M. |
Well done...a little confusing when it started out, but it finished nicely. |
| 2008-08-23 13:29:55 |
Ancient Adventures |
Well written...shows a lot of effort. |
| 2008-08-24 15:03:13 |
Daddy Loves Me, This I Know |
Well written...could have been broken into chapters, but very erotic. |
| 2008-08-24 21:47:23 |
My Neighbors |
Well done...well written and organized. Erotic as hell. |
| 2008-08-26 09:44:50 |
Barbara M. 2 |
I complimented you on the first Barbara story...thought it looked familiar. Then read this one...oh yes, I remember, I had previously written virtually the same stories. Thank you...immitation is the sincerest form of flattery.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-26 07:13:55 |
One Summer |
English, grammer, punctuation and detail would be helpful. Some of the sentences just ran together and thoughts weren't complete. The story concept is good. |
| 2008-08-26 23:37:40 |
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Good job, SSB...I liked it. I also liked the ending, which puts a finishing touch on these things. There can only be so much Oooohhhhh and Ahhh, and then it's repetitive. Obviously, a lot of others have liked it, as well.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-27 12:29:21 |
A Thorough Distraction |
Very well done...delicious and sensuous. Certainly causes an erection...LOL. My tongue got hard, too, Congratulations! |
| 2008-08-27 16:37:01 |
Life at the Palms Part 1 |
Very well written...thought it was going to simply be a slam bam, thank-you-mam when it started, but the detail and word images were very well done. Curious...what happened to Dani? Perhaps in the next chapter?
Good job! |
| 2008-08-27 18:52:09 |
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Good job, SSB. Very clear descriptions. Shows a lot of hard work, that a lot of the critics on here don't undertand. Very hot, as well. |
| 2008-08-28 20:09:17 |
The Masseur |
Hmmm...I don't think Dano was addressing me as the author. I suspect he is only trolling for business. Let him write his own stories.
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-27 21:50:55 |
Weekends with my Daughter |
This is a good story that could be a great story with ,ore careful editing. As another reader commented before, punctuation, spelling and spacing the paragraphs would make a world of difference. Very good effort. |
| 2008-08-28 20:07:27 |
The Masseur 2 |
Hmmm...I don't think Dano was speaking to me...I suspect he is trolling for business. Let him write his own stories...
Sinturian |
| 2008-08-29 15:30:24 |
Foreplay |
Nicely done! Love the Moody Blues! |
| 2008-08-30 11:41:51 |
Party |
Delicious...very descriptive. You have a way with words <G>.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-01 12:29:34 |
The Traffic Stop |
To the person who attempted to correct my spelling...
"knight" = armored warrior on horseback
"night" = period of darkness between sunset and sunrise
Spelling in this story is correct, but thank you for trying.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-11 23:32:38 |
Molly's Surprise Visitor |
Molly,
A very good start, and generally well written. There were a few small spelling errors, but overall, well organized and sensual. It was a turnon, and I think most guys would be aroused. Try a little more proofing before you post, and as you can see from the end result, put an extra space between paragraphs. Loved the story, too.
Sinturian |
| 2008-09-14 11:35:28 |
Welcome Home |
Nicely done... |
| 2008-09-14 11:55:05 |
Jane |
Exceptionally well written. Congratulations! I will look for more from you.
Sinturian |
| 2008-10-14 12:47:16 |
My Story |
Very moving and revealing, Lady...thank you for sharing.
Sinturian |
| 2008-10-16 23:39:47 |
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Another terrific winner, SSB. Nice going.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-16 11:31:01 |
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Good pair of stories, SSB, but it looked like you mixed two together. Need a bit more editing on the first part, but the story lines are well done.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-16 11:59:54 |
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Probably your best story yet, SSB. I really liked this one.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-20 23:51:14 |
Sharon J. |
Thoroughly enjoyed the story. Much like my own Masseur stories. I suggest a little tighter editing, but overall, a very erotic topic.
Sinturian |
| 2008-11-23 21:48:18 |
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Well done for your first effort. I hope you will write more. It could be a bit more erotic, but it was very entertaining.
Sinturian |
| 2009-05-06 12:20:24 |
Naked daughter 2 |
Very nicely done...
Sinturian |
| 2009-05-07 19:45:58 |
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Nancy...if you read this again, write to me.
Sinturian |
| 2009-10-19 13:25:24 |
Fascination |
Very realistic...sounds very true. Turned me on. Great job...I look forward to reading more from a fellow Arizonan.
Sinturian |
| 2010-08-03 14:25:23 |
Jenna’s Story |
Well written and very erotic. Thank you |