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| 2013-03-22 19:52:30 |
Twenty Odd Years 3 - Running away |
What did you think? Did you read all three? How did I do on the last one? Please comment! |
| 2013-02-10 16:19:20 |
Twenty Odd Years 2 - The Cruise |
Twenty Odd Years 3 - Running Away; is now up. Please rate and leave constructive comments. Thank you for all your support. |
| 2013-02-08 15:59:56 |
Lovers Without Realizing It |
An excellent story. Such a wonderful mix of tension and mystery. Great dialog and pacing. Very sexy. |
| 2012-12-12 16:27:26 |
Frustrated |
nympholepsy was a typo which I was not able to have corrected once the story was posted. This site does not allow you to edit stories once they have gone 'live'. I do appreciate the feedback though.
For those wondering about the story. It's based on an article I once read about female sexual predators which was scary and fascinating. This ended up being my darkest story. It's all the more frightening to know there is at least a few women like this in the world.
Every once in a while, I have to try my hand at horror. |
| 2012-12-12 14:21:05 |
Twenty Odd Years 2 - The Cruise |
Thanks folks! I really appreciate the comments.
I am wondering if there is an appetite for a third chapter. I have started outlining one. The problem is the third chapter is more emotional and, perhaps, less sexy - or full of sex. I wonder if it would be well received if it focused more on some of the difficulties an incest couple faces in society. Please tell me what you think. |
| 2012-12-07 19:06:45 |
Flashes of Brilliance |
VERY solid story. Well executed and hot! Good build up. |
| 2012-11-20 21:12:29 |
Twenty Odd Years |
Thank you for the feedback. I contacted the site admin about the formatting errors. I don't think it was anything I did when posting. I hope to hear back soon to find out how to get it fixed. I think it really distracts too. |
| 2012-11-20 13:44:17 |
My Son's Cum Rag, part 1 |
I really like the story. I have one comment though, No one would say, "I'm Asian" Most Asians are very specific about where their family came from. "I'm Laotian" or, "I'm Chinese" or, "My family came from Sri Lanka" Asia is such a huge continent.
Great story though. Very sexy. |
| 2012-10-22 02:35:07 |
mom and daughter have fun pt 2 |
I agree with the first poster. Spend some time reading the work of others to get a better sense of structure. Otherwise, there is some potential here. |
| 2012-10-13 18:31:10 |
Duquan's sister problem Chapter 2 |
Thanks. I've been working on Chapter 3 and will post soon. |
| 2012-09-11 12:29:05 |
Duquan's sister problem Chapter 1 |
Please take a moment to comment as you rate this story. I would like to hear why you liked it or didn't. |
| 2012-09-11 12:27:57 |
Duquan's sister problem Chapter 2 |
Please take a moment to comment as you rate this story. I would like to hear why you liked it or didn't. |
| 2012-09-10 10:47:04 |
Saturdays With My Sister |
Well written and believable. Good job! |
| 2010-12-15 06:01:18 |
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Well written, great details though the scenario strained my credulity to the breaking point. Though I enjoyed the story, I kept being pulled out of it by the thought, "That seems pretty fast/unlikely/over-the-top" I had to suspend too much disbelief for the story to be as good as it could have been. 6/10 |
| 2010-12-15 06:00:27 |
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Well written, great details though the scenario strained my credulity to the breaking point. Though I enjoyed the story, I kept being pulled out of it by the thought, "That seems pretty fast/unlikely/over-the-top" I had to suspend too much disbelief for the story to be as good as it could have been. 6/10 |
| 2010-11-25 01:42:06 |
Good Vibrations |
A similar thing happened when I was that age. My parents were foolish enough to let us have mixed gender slumber parties all the way up until I was twelve. I lost my virginity when I was eleven. I have to say though, It wasn't the best thing. I didn't have sex again until I was seventeen and it was incredibly frustrating! I almost wish I had not lost my virginity so early. |
| 2010-09-13 21:28:12 |
Sharing My Room With Sis 10: Abby's Fear |
I want to mention also; you have gone exactly the right path with this series all the way. I think it is perfect. (well, a few spelling errors and dog breed changes) You were right not to lessen the love Abby and her brother feel for each other by including Izzy. The narrator doesn't care for Izzy the way he cares about Abby and it isn't in his character to do something that isn't the best thing for all of them. I think this is the perfect end to this story. There should be no further chapters. All the comments asking for inclusion of Izzy's father or the main character's mother or three-somes, are wrong. Trust your instincts. They are good. Let the story stand as it is. It is art. |
| 2010-09-13 21:11:56 |
Sharing My Room With Sis 10: Abby's Fear |
I had to stop reading and collect myself. This is the first story on this site that has ever made me cry. I have read all of the other 9 stories you have posted before and I believe you are an very talented writer. All your stories have been tens but this story deserves a new category. The sensitivity and care you put into the pacing and characterizations has been perfect. It can be a tough job to walk that line between what's hot and what's sensitive. You have shown a mastery of this difficult balance. You have clearly elevated your game with this story. I say, get an editor and publish! |
| 2010-06-26 11:33:56 |
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poor intro to the story. It felt kind of mechanical and not a lot of drama in presenting the incest aspect. A better way to present it might have been to have a sentence like: "The only hitch for Paul, Jessica was his little sister..." at the end of the second paragraph. This feels like a first draft but not a bad start. I would re-edit and re-post. Lot's of potential but not ready for prime time. 4/10 |
| 2010-06-26 11:25:21 |
Hot beautiful girl with large strap-on ravages girl |
Very well written, extremely sexy as well as emotionally satisfying. A lot of a great build up and connection between the characters. 8/10 One note: Shaun changed to Shawn part way through the story. |
| 2009-09-19 11:31:13 |
Megan's Little Brother |
This is a beautiful story Megan. I have to say, as a writer myself, I am jealous, (In a kind way) you have written a near perfect story. Thank you for sharing. 10/10
~Cunnilique |
| 2009-07-27 13:22:44 |
My Aunt Was the Answer To My Sexual Desires |
Very good story. Well written and sensitive. There was clearly love between the characters. Excellent. |