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2009-07-27 13:22:44 My Aunt Was the Answer To My Sexual Desires Very good story. Well written and sensitive. There was clearly love between the characters. Excellent.
2009-09-19 11:31:13 Megan's Little Brother This is a beautiful story Megan. I have to say, as a writer myself, I am jealous, (In a kind way) you have written a near perfect story. Thank you for sharing. 10/10

~Cunnilique
2014-03-07 15:03:06 My Sweet Sister Sasha Damien this feels like a first draft. I recommend you rewrite from scratch in a new document and produce a second draft. Right now the character motivations don't make sense and the environmental descriptions are disjointed or incomplete. The 'idea' of a story is there but it needs a lot more work. Good effort. keep trying. 4/10
2010-06-26 11:25:21 Hot beautiful girl with large strap-on ravages girl Very well written, extremely sexy as well as emotionally satisfying. A lot of a great build up and connection between the characters. 8/10 One note: Shaun changed to Shawn part way through the story.
2010-06-26 11:33:56 poor intro to the story. It felt kind of mechanical and not a lot of drama in presenting the incest aspect. A better way to present it might have been to have a sentence like: "The only hitch for Paul, Jessica was his little sister..." at the end of the second paragraph. This feels like a first draft but not a bad start. I would re-edit and re-post. Lot's of potential but not ready for prime time. 4/10
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