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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2011-08-18 14:02:27 |
My Girlfriend and My Sister...both want me! |
Dude, every part of that party scene was from my story... That's not called inspiration, that's called cut-and-paste. Like what you came up with yourself tho |
| 2011-08-18 12:46:52 |
MY TWIN SISTER, TARA - 2 |
I do like a good sexually sadistic RA, always gets the blood movin. Nice twists! |
| 2010-07-04 14:14:29 |
spider man the beginning |
It's a cool idea I must admit. Very original. But just for the sake of the reader, try writing in word first, adding quotation marks for diologue, simple stuff like that. |
| 2009-08-26 22:07:46 |
My Neighbors 2 |
Haha, one day huh? But that sounds so far away! I wish you luck, good sir.
V.A. |
| 2009-07-14 20:08:13 |
Quieting the Storms for Katie |
Great stuff! Lol, tho, I'm not sure how one sodomizes a finger.
V.A. |
| 2009-07-09 10:23:16 |
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Brilliant, either write more or start another, something similar. Either way, your writing is tremendous! |
| 2009-07-09 09:03:40 |
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Awesome, very original! I loved it. I don't think there is much you could possible improve.
V.A. |
| 2009-05-06 13:50:04 |
My Neighbors |
Haha, you've met ME or this fictional character?
V.A. |
| 2009-04-30 19:13:57 |
My Neighbors |
You know I'm not the little boy I used to be, I'm all grown up now baby can't you see?! Vikki's mom has got it going on! She's all I want and I've waited for so-o-o long!
haha
V.A. |
| 2009-02-18 23:19:44 |
Oh God... yes...! |
Haha, Babydoll, you still got it! That was very good, makes my stuff sound like crap lol. Are you planning on writing more?
xxXxx
-Von |
| 2009-02-18 23:16:27 |
Oh God... yes...! |
Haha, Babydoll, you still got it! That was very good, makes my stuff sound like crap lol. Are you planning on writing more?
xxXxx
-Von |
| 2009-01-02 18:52:20 |
My Neighbors 2 |
Weston, my break is going well. But I seem to be cursed with a frustrating case of writers block. Hopefully you will have better luck, please let me know what you come up with.
Kenton, I would enjoy someone working with this plot line. I really should have stopped with the first one. Take a swing at it and let me know how it goes, I would very much like to see what happens next.
V.A. |
| 2008-12-28 18:33:01 |
My Neighbors 2 |
No. But if anyone else wants to take a stab at it, be my guest.
V.A. |
| 2008-11-17 18:37:18 |
My Neighbors 2 |
I don't have the time to write these anymore sadly. So you wont see anything from me for quite some time. If I have a chance, I'll try and write a shorty over xmas break and I'll definately get something out over summer break. But for now, you'll have to look elsewhere for you explicit readings. Sorry.
V.A. |
| 2008-09-12 21:32:55 |
My Neighbors 2 |
Ehhh, I just couldn't stand it any more. I was like halfway through writing the end when I'm like, I don't fuckin care about this one anymore. I realized that I shouldn't have written a sequel to the first. So this will be the last my neighbors.
OH, I want to try something new! I'm not going to continue this series...but, if anyone else wants to, be my guest, i give my 'permission' to take free liscense with this series. I'm actually excited to see if anyone takes the reins on this thing.
Anyhoo, my apologies for the shitty ending and whatnot,
V.A. |
| 2008-09-12 13:09:53 |
My Neighbors 2 |
Oh yeah, I forgot.......
Questions? Comments? |
| 2008-09-05 22:24:44 |
My Neighbors |
I'm trying my best to finish my neighbors 2 but it's so fuckin hard. I just finished my first week of college and I just don't have the passion for it anymore, and it doesn't help that I have an idea for another story fucking with my head. You would think with so much time on my hands I could finish it off in a jiff but I just can't seem to find the drive. Sorry for the wait and I'll keep on trying but don't expect anything soon.
Again, my apologies,
V.A. |
| 2008-08-08 19:36:16 |
My Sister Ashley: The Birthday Bash |
I may go back and forth between the teenage years and the future or have this be the cap point and just go backwards. I'm not sure yet. I'm persuing the My Neighbors series at the moment and have to go back to MSB soon too. But I'll deffinately get to MSA sometime in the future. |
| 2008-08-06 19:47:23 |
Babygirl Ch2 |
Strange stuff, not bad, just strange. |
| 2008-08-06 13:21:34 |
My Neighbors |
MSA 11 should be up in a day and I'm just starting MN2 after that it'll be MSB11 |
| 2008-07-27 19:05:15 |
Sweet Ecstasy |
That was great! Personally I think it could have been longer. Your writing is fantastic and you're very good with details. Really, you don't have to worry about the way you're doing things. Write more!
V.A. |
| 2008-07-10 09:13:41 |
Something Old, Something New, Something Borrowed, Something Blue Pt2 |
You have a way with words that I could only dream of possessing, good job once again. |
| 2008-07-10 08:55:16 |
Something Old, Something New, Something Borrowed, Something Blue |
Slightly confusing with the names, but that in no way subtracts from a fine story. Good work. |
| 2008-07-03 22:30:43 |
Megan At Last : Part III (Conclusion) |
Overall, damn fine work. It's just something about the diologue that throws me off, but I can't put my finger on it. Whatever, I'm sure if you keep it up it'll resolve itself. Again, nice work. |
| 2008-06-30 15:24:34 |
My good friend Brook chpt 2 |
You have a good thing going here Q. All you need to do is slow down and use a spellcheck. You have the beginnings of something very entertaining here. Oh, and this one seemed a little disconnected, make sure you watch the flow of the story, try not to jump around too much. But again, it's a fantastic start, keep at it!
Von Armand |
| 2008-06-27 20:58:58 |
Horny Little Women |
Fantastic writing! |
| 2008-05-26 15:48:29 |
Internship at AS&S - Chapter 1 |
Awesome, I find it hard to believe this is your first story, the writting is phenominal. Your girlfriend is lucky. Please continue the story, but be sure to keep close to the original theme/concept. |
| 2008-05-08 18:35:28 |
Brotherly and Sisterly Love with a little something extra |
I'll be honest, not my cup of tea, but hey to each his own. Um, first thing would be to separate the character diologue. For example, instead of-"Yeah fuck that shit!" I screamed. "I'll fuck that shit!" she replied. Go with
"Yeah fuck that shit!" I screamed
"I'll fuck that shit!" She replied.
ect ect
Then you want to go for the spellcheck, type it up in word first. And take it slow, it seemed very rushed.
But really other than that, you've got yourself a great idea here and I think you should run with it.
V.A.
by the by, where does a 18year old get an assault rifle lol? |
| 2008-04-27 08:11:58 |
My summer Boss 6 |
Yeah, maybe sooner, I'm almost done. But I have a ton of school shit I have to do soo no promises.
V.A. |