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| 2013-05-09 22:37:32 |
Zema Nov - Chapter 1 A new life |
When using another author's fantasy setting and characters, you should get permission first. Or at the very least state that your story is based heavily on the work of another person. |
| 2013-04-19 07:11:18 |
I Was a Virgin Nymphomaniac |
"But I'm not sure we objectify men less."
I'm pretty sure you don't. I'm fairly confident it's very close to equal. Note I used the word "stereotypically" instead of "typically". The stereotype of males objectifying females seems to be much more prevalent then the other way around.
"Not sure why I was logged out."
Timer. You need to be active on the forum (not here, this isn't the forum) periodically or you're logged out for inactivity. Same reason my first comment was anonymous. |
| 2013-04-19 06:39:13 |
I Was a Virgin Nymphomaniac |
No need to apologize. It was meant in good humor. Alas, I am not good enough to convey that through text. Which is why I read here, rather than write. I was trying to point out the irony, where it's stereotypically the men objectifying the women.
Please don't interpret my previous comment to mean that I didn't like your story, or to mean that you shouldn't write more. |
| 2013-02-10 03:51:35 |
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Interesting story so far. Frankly, I find myself skipping the (as others have pointed out) very redundant sex scenes and enjoying the rest of the tale.
Worth a read. |
| 2012-11-18 17:58:51 |
You belong to me |
In the first paragraph it's "my baby sister", then for the rest of the story he's younger than her.
Also, there's apparently a seven-year age difference between them... which means in the beginning he's seven years old when he's lusting after his sister when she's fourteen. |
| 2012-11-14 11:28:31 |
"The Man of the House" - Part 6 |
Assume it's a bug. Right now, this page shows only 141 reads, but from Luvbroker's profile page this same story is shown with 15,864 reads.
The latter is probably more correct, as most stories get a few hundred reads in the first minutes after being posted. |
| 2012-11-11 15:05:30 |
Tales of a Secret Sex Writer, Chapter 9 |
Is it fiction or not? That's what people keep asking. Let me reply with another question: Does it matter?
Consider it whichever you prefer it to be. Perhaps it is both, depending on who you ask. Much like the Holy Bible, depending on who you ask you'll get a different answer. People decide what is true based many times on what they want to be true. Let that be the case with this story as well.
True of not, it's an entertaining story... and isn't that the point? |
| 2012-11-10 18:18:25 |
Youth |
Overall, a good read. Nothing in here that prevented me from enjoying the story, so you get a positive rating.
It would be easier to read with more line breaks- blank lines between paragraphs mainly. No major mistakes anywhere.
Thanks for sharing! |
| 2012-11-08 17:07:47 |
A Step Father's Revenge |
People can't do simple math.
Rene is thirteen, about to turn fourteen, in this story. The divorce came "three years later" when her mom found out about it.
13+3=16
Sixteen is the age of consent in thirty US States plus DC, assuming this takes place in the US.
So while there may be moral or ethical issues with a situation like this, the main legal issue is non-existant.
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| 2012-11-06 15:45:54 |
The Fisherman & The Mermaid-Chap. 1 & 2 |
Don't take this to think I didn't like the story, in fact I gave all installments a positive rating and this is on my favorites list.
But...
hypothermia takes a lot out of a person. It's really unlikely that a person will be after energetic, climbing-on-top sex the same day.
After getting her body temp back up and and a meal in her belly, she should've passed out. Passed out is the correct term, as in a sleep so deep to be virtually unconscious. |
| 2012-11-05 19:05:13 |
Susan's Fantasies -- 3 |
"We wrote it to a DVD and presented it to Sharon as a souvenir"
The balance of power has just swung to Sharon's favor. Tom has the "post vid on YouTube" threat, but he just handed her proof he's been creating Child Pornography and distributing it as well. Both are felonies that will get him imprisoned, cost him his job, and make him a registered sex offender.
The state they're in may have Age of Consent at 16 (30 US states do) but child porn laws are federal- not state- and set at an age of 18. |
| 2012-11-05 18:02:27 |
The Night My Girlfriend Really Tried To Fuck Me |
re: Anonymous reader
2012-10-12 15:18:27
" just for withholding sex from him"
No, it was a chastity belt forced on him against his will. Don't you get it; there are serious ethical issues any time you do something to someone else's body against their will.
Do you also approve of rape? |
| 2012-11-02 16:31:54 |
Allison and the Primdales, Part 1 Chapter 22 |
re: Anonymous reader
2012-01-19 00:38:27
What do you mean Allison didn't ask Kari's permission? You have no idea what she whispered in Kari's ear before she got directly involved. |
| 2012-10-22 18:47:16 |
In Riley's Arms: Part 5 |
re: Anonymous reader
2012-07-16 11:52:40
"besides her getting hurt throughout the whole thing a fantastic story"
It was necessary. The whole thing with Dean had to happen, or she never would have appreciated Riley. I'm not sure she does, even at the end. He does everything he can for her, and she's not really done anything for him.
Riley's an awesome guy. I try not to compare myself to fictional characters, which is good... I can't even begin to measure up. He's been going out of his way to help her, protect her, and make her feel welcome long before he had a romantic interest in her. She's taken him for granted until two things happen. First, she had Dean to compare him to. Second, she started to lose Riley, also because of Dean.
What is Dean never happened? What if she hooked up with even a halfway decent guy instead? Would she ever have left him? Would she and Riley ever have hooked up?
Dean is the epitome of the term 'necessary evil.' |
| 2012-10-20 03:35:41 |
a Game of Inches - Chapter Six |
re: Anonymous reader
2012-08-30 00:10:26
"WTF????? Stephanie...why?????out of all people."
Psychology, man. The two women he cares about have both hurt him. What he needed was non-committal friends-with-benefits sex, and he got it.
Nobody got hurt, neither of them had any false expectations of a relationship and both of them wanted and enjoyed it.
It also may have helped him with the healing process. He was able to have a sexual encounter with a woman who didn't hurt him emotionally. Jasmine was borderline- she didn't hurt him, but there was some disappointment regardless. |
| 2012-10-19 03:53:30 |
Substitute Rides the Bus - Part 2 |
What nation is New York City the capital of?
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| 2012-10-18 05:55:53 |
Welt ~ 3 |
re: Anonymous reader
2011-08-17 20:41:20
How can you even claim that the Latin is off? It's a dead language for we mere mortals; it's still spoken by the immortals in Minus Three's stories.
Languages evolve over time, as Latin would evolve for them. But not for us, since it's dead.
Was it ever established that they are speaking Latin? Perhaps they're speaking a language that Latin is based upon, or perhaps what they're speaking is a a derivative of Latin.
There's just so many logical flaws in your claim that the language spoken by a fictional race of beings is incorrect that I don't have enough space or patience to explain them all. |
| 2012-10-18 04:46:46 |
Muse (10) |
I've read hundreds of stories at this site. To-date, I have saved four of them. For that I feel I cannot bear to "lose".
This is not one of those four.
This story was so amazing, and elicited an emotional response (read: grown man crying) that so few have triggered. I did not save it because I can not bear the thought of reading it again.
In short, it's too good for me to handle a second time.
How fucked-up is that?
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