||Family Vacation Chapter 2
||please,, please write more,this could develop into a great series
||Nightly Sins Pt. 6
||too much chatter and not enough action,taking too long to get father and daughter together,and repetious scenes,reasonable effort, score 4 out if 10
||A Tale of Sibling Differences – Underground Secrets
||one veeery sick story,i will not waste my time with the other shit you have written
||you are just a f***wit
||My Moms Friend 1 ch.1
||go back to school and learn to spell,,stupid child
||A former stundet
||i just gave you a negative reading for the same reason that most people will ,, CHAPTERS,FORMATING,
||Allison and the Primdales, Part 1 Chapter 21
||hi daddycums,,,don't worry about the idiots who give nonsensical comments,i have found this entire story to be great reading so far,just hope it continues as good so far, regs from djb8247
||My daughter Annie2
||these idiots who put personals into the comments section should be blocked completely from this section,,,it is purely for comments and or suggestions about the stories,,,loved the way this one is developing,congratulations
||Asmodeus - Demon of Lust: Part One
||for such a young woman to write as good as this means that you have a great future as a writer,very well done so far
||My Pretty Little Slaves
||way too much exageration ,completely unbelievable load of crap///
||A Taste Chapter 3
||too much build up no action
||My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy - Chapter 1 (Fixed!)
||has to be the most piss weak attempt at bdsm i have read so far
||Advantage of being a ghost
||can see where the plot is going but i think that ghostie should be a poltergeist with evil powers to make the story more interesting,,just an idea but worth thinking about...
||A Man and His Pets Chapt. 15-22
||very well written story,highly enjoyable plot,leaves a great opening for the continuation with seperate tales for each of the girl lives after there inheritances,,if not previously considerd, please at the least think about it....
||Cat girl Charity - the beginning.
||i only read 6 paragraphs and switched off,, does not make any senser what ever
||Sister In Law Massage, Part 2
||definately needs to be continued,perhaps the wife joining in after her and the kids get home as well.
||Driven Lust XII
||there must be at least 1 or 2 more chapters there,,pleeeeeease
||The mute girl 3
||good story but i think that you lost the plot in part 3,did not gel with the facts of the girls injuries, good try though,keep at it.
||a blank screen would have more fun and life in it,,,boring
||My father in law
||the spelling is lousy,so bad it ruins the story.
||Sara's Protective Dad part 1 corrected
||i read the story for about 10 minutes then gave up..just did not make sny sense at all, plus spelling and grammar needs work
||too many mistakes to be able to read it ,go back to school
||Sweet Little Sister
||a good story, looking forward to the next part,
||Big Incest Family Fest
||grammar and spelling are lousy, get some writing teacher to instruct you in correct procedures,negative rating
||My days in Thailand part 5: A Thia's storyy
||all chapters need more fleshing out to make them far more interesting
||Jeanie's Big Boy
||whats with the 渵 all the time?,ruins the story and makes it nonsensicle
||sounds more like a sub queen than a straight guy
||Twisted Brotherly Love chapter 1 - 3
||most stupid story i have read so far,all the punishment to a child that age would have killed her in approx 6 hours,you should do some good research before even thinking about another story.
||The Geezer, Pt.4--Rachel's Toys
||good series excepting for last one and a half chapters,personally i found them to be way too much repetition,basically same scenario all the time,after the ghost came into it you seemed to lose any interest in innovation,just samo samo.
||Two way stret PT.2
||2 comments,not negative i assure you,first,,you are writing a story,not a play or script,,,,second, good effort, keep it up.regs from djb8247
||Banned to the Farm 5
||sorry mate but i found it to be far too repititious
||Always The Bride's Maid...
||how soon before part 2?""
||so far that was the best story of brotherly love that i have read so far, no sexual undertones yet, so still absolutely believable,, regs from djb8247, i am an older brother too
||Allison and the Primdales, Part 1 Chapter 1
||hoping this develops as good as ANOTHER YARD, allready had a few giggles trying to figure which trail you will follow,best of luck to you,,,rergards from dave