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| 2012-08-30 23:46:28 |
The Ten of Them. Chapter 1 |
Very nice; very nice for a prologue very good, little teasing between him and his mother was very good. the boy seems very humble can't wait to read the rest. |
| 2012-08-26 02:36:08 |
Vengeance 2 |
Nice very nice Ellie seems to fall a little deeper into BDSM and she likes it one thing though here you seem to leave Ellie out of most of the action in this one but love the fact that he brought another girl down. Also it's not so bad to be unnoticeable it makes it easier to blend in. |
| 2012-08-26 02:16:10 |
Vengeance 1 |
Might I just say excellent work here. would you attribute this to Stockholm syndrome? But truly marvelous was that they enjoyed it and one seems to want more this is going very nicely. |
| 2012-08-24 01:13:49 |
danny phantom ghost boy series 2 jayrich |
Wow, was I the only one dying of laughter at Desirees wish. Hahahaha it still surprises me the thing people can come up with in these stories good job can't wait to read the rest. |
| 2012-08-24 00:23:43 |
Promise You Won't Break Me |
A few grammatical errors mostly missing commas and stuff but not really any grammar errors, for you, anyways. Keep in mind most people stick to the popular English so some my not understand some innuendo. Excellent story can't wait to see what happens. |
| 2012-08-23 21:38:08 |
Doctor Who - A minor annoyance! |
Okay was I the only one dying of laughter after the horse head nebula thing. That was so out of the blue so random that only the doctor would even say something like that!! Hahaha nice I hope to see more. |
| 2012-08-20 02:38:21 |
...And every girl in the family. |
Humm I have to say good story you have potential but there are parts that simply cannot be over looked yes you are focusing on the main character but to make the story better focus on the girl you say she felt good but only went that far what pain did she feel when her hymen was br |
| 2012-08-20 02:37:58 |
...And every girl in the family. |
sorry typing this on my phone.*broken? how did it feel to have her pussy split open so much? had she ever mastubated? These are a few things that make the story better and more believable trust me go into details on the female and it will be a lot hotter. |
| 2012-08-20 02:34:49 |
...And every girl in the family. |
Humm I have to say good story you have potential but there are parts that simply cannot be over looked yes you are focusing on the main character but to make the story better focus on the girl you say she felt good but only went that far what pain did she feel when her hymen was br |
| 2012-08-19 03:35:14 |
Such good friends; Chapter 1--Beth |
Good story. The story itself is solid, work on the structure separate the dialogue into there own paragraph but to who ever said they could not follow the story... Well brains aren't everything nice job can't wait to read the other work. |
| 2012-08-18 17:17:51 |
Cousin brittney 1 |
Nice good story very sensual, filled with love hope to see the update soon |
| 2012-08-17 21:49:25 |
My cousin the BOSS part 1 |
Great story my I be so bold as to inquire that Linda was harassed by her older? Younger? Brother I miss small details sorry. Over all great story I see that this could be come a great story or was a great memory which ever a good story is a good story. Chow b001 out |
| 2012-08-12 01:30:54 |
Clean Slate CH 1 |
Loved it can't wait to see more the brother must be an idiot to be tricked so easily but they have said ignorance is bliss. Great job, Chow B001 out! |
| 2012-08-09 01:30:29 |
Me and My Sisters Friend Part 2 (My Sisters a Slut) |
Really entertaining but I can't help but feel something was missing?? But totally awsome great job please update. |
| 2012-08-02 00:14:56 |
My Sister's Friends Part VII.5 |
Humm very good very good I don't usually write reviews words have a strog power but here I will make an exception. You are begining to show the mental fatigue of the character which has slowly been building from the start of the story I mean come on this guy is no gigolo and he was shown to be very loyal in the begining and obviously he may put on a mask or hide behind the pleasure but the mind can only take so much. Really, really, REALLY!!! Want to see where this goes. |
| 2012-07-31 01:13:57 |
Sexy Sisters and Mom |
This story has it all the dirty feeling that comes from doing something you know your not supposed to; the delicate balance between brother and sister to girl and boy. This story was hot a work of art muddled only by slight grammar errors great job. Chow b001 out!! |