Comments from Pervetose

Date Story title Comment
2012-07-22 02:49:29 Milk of Desire, Book II, Chapter 2 : Jake & Jen went up a hill, but not before I got my fill. IM thinking the mom is already under the influence because of the sweet butter used during dinner..did he pay close attention to who used it? did she maybe not have any then but grabbed a cookie later? lots of potential there...lots of cum blasting into these girls as well ..are any of them on the pill?
2013-03-21 23:20:28 A new day, a new me part 8 yes definitly needs some plot ...he needs to have a rival or at least something or someone in his life has to make things wrong or difficult for him far im loving the story and your characters are developing well ..but like poster above you need a plot or a story to work from

could be anything maybe someone gets in an accident..maybe someone is attacked..maybe someone spies on him with a girl or lady and causes trouble somehow maybe there is a pregnancy or std scare..bring us more I know ill be reading
2013-04-01 00:40:37 My Photogenic Mom Chapter 1 its decent but yes this could use a rewrite just for paragraphs still gave you a pos rating thou