||Daddy's Little Scientist
||Great story. I like the willingness of his daughter to participate and to keep "the experiment" going. More can be put into the story so continue on with it. Definitely a hot story!
||My Son's Cum Rag, part 5
||You definately have an erotic and sensual way of telling a story. Reading the story, I can't help but wonder what a mother in the story would have been like when I was growing up? hmm. Looking forward to the next chapter.
||Nothing like the advantages of a teacher... good job with the story.
||Learning from a New Family
||Great story...she would make a person feel sooo good.
||Catt...let me know what you decided, just curious. - Jim
||Nicey written story and very lucky dad.
||Subway Stories (part II)
||Hey...you have to delete some of the stuff in your inbox before you can recieve anymore... -J
||My sexy step daughter (Part 3)
||Hot Hot story. This one was easier to read with the spacing. Number 4 should be twice as hot with all three of them.
||Great story. I'd love to read chap. 2 if you plan on submitting one. Very stimulately for sure.
||Very Loving Family
||Great story and having a family like that would be an experience for sure.
||Wake up baby girl: Part three
||OMG...love these..can't wait for the next one.
||Wake up baby girl: Part two
||Reading sleeping beauty to her would become a favorite of mine. Good story and ready to read ch. 3.
||Having an opportunity to see a pussy like Tara's would be amazing. Wonder if it would ever happen....
||Great story. Definitely has that hardening effect.
||Twin Japanese Nieces Pt1
||Quite a beginning to a very interesting story!
||Helenes daughters part one
||A little rough around the edges but a decent story idea. Every story teller can't be super writers and please everyone all the time, keep plugging along.
||A short introduction to Lilith and her Family.
||Sounds like the makings of some pretty wild stories. Spell check might be of some help but as you know, the English language is notorious for having words that sound the same spelled differently and mean something totally different. Good luck.
||My neighbours daughter
||Good story of desire and battle of the conscience eventhough it deals with one of the no nos.
||Stalked & Raped: Part 3
||I think he'll be back...mask and all...wait for him.
||Daddy masterbates for me
||Definitely too fast, but because it's your first story you deserve some slack. Take the suggestion, give some background to those in the story and then build in some circumstances as to why they're doing what they're doing. You're not afraid to use descriptive language so that's no big deal. Let your imagination turn you on to what you would want and how it happens; how you would want it if it was happening to you. I'm looking forward to your next story. Good luck.
||I'll Show You Mine If You Show Me Yours
||What a wicked little daughter, I love it! Waiting to see where this goes.
||a good accident
||Definitely a good story teller. This is my first story of yours I've read and it's distracting trying to put punctuation in the sentences while still trying to keep what's going on clear. Once you learn sentence construction, where commas and periods go, your attention to detail and step by step progression of events, it'll be fun reading. As evidenced by the length of your story and having only one erotic episode, kind of says you're more into content than strictly fuck/suck stick it where ever stuff. I do think that when you establish where your characters are at, some more good sexual scenes whether short or involved won't hurt. I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to more.
||A fun float trip for sure!
||It would definitely be fun teaching a daughter like her. Good story!