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Date Story title Comment
2012-07-12 16:27:06 Getting the Cheerleader Hey Kristinarox,
I liked your story. It was quite sexy.

A few notes:

You forgot a word in: "Nick watched through the trees in her backyard which gave him a perfect into her bedroom to see "

And the layout needs a little bit more work. The line breaks seem a little bit random.

If your into this stuff, I'm looking for somebody to review my work. Let me know if your interested.

Keep on writing!
2012-07-14 14:45:17 Entrapped, Enslaved. Chapters 1-4 Thanks for the compliments!

Yeah, I'll finish. Don't know how long it will take though. I've got a few more things planned :)
2012-07-14 18:49:55 Entrapped, Enslaved 11-13 Don't worry. Peter agree's. He'll take care of it in the next chapter ;)

Glad you enjoyed the rest!
2012-07-15 18:31:37 Enslaved, Entrapped 14-16 I'll do my best to write some more as soon as possible. It's a little busy at the moment.

@Charmbrights, Don't worry, I wouldn't copy suggestions word for word. I might not use them at all. But I'm curious as to what other people would like to see happening. That's all :)

Thanks for commenting and/or reading!
2012-07-17 12:33:58 Catherine 1 I liked it, more please!
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