Comments from Blindog55
|2012-07-09 23:48:11||Weird changes chap 1||First I would like to say thank you for your courage to write your own story. You should continue, because as you do your skills as a writer will improve. Writting is an art, nobody paints like Picaso the first time out, and likewise nobody writes like Hemmingway at first crack.
It had a few common spelling and grammar errors, but thankfully you didn't run the whole thing together in one huge paragraph. Separating your dialogs between characters is nice.
I look forward to reading more.