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Comments from Blindog55

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Date Story title Comment
2012-07-09 23:48:11 Weird changes chap 1 First I would like to say thank you for your courage to write your own story. You should continue, because as you do your skills as a writer will improve. Writting is an art, nobody paints like Picaso the first time out, and likewise nobody writes like Hemmingway at first crack.

It had a few common spelling and grammar errors, but thankfully you didn't run the whole thing together in one huge paragraph. Separating your dialogs between characters is nice.

I look forward to reading more.

Dog
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