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| 2013-01-21 10:23:20 |
CV IV Shareah Gets Her Wish |
Wow. I apologize for that. Somehow an entire paragraph got deleted and I didn't catch it.
In that paragraph Jack laid Shy into her bed, and went back into the hallway, and that's when he bumped into Jace.
Sorry, but thank you for letting me know. |
| 2012-12-30 13:14:05 |
Christmas VouchersIII Part 2 The young prodigy |
I thank everybody that has taken the time to read any of my stories, and I appreciate all of the feedback. (even though the good feedback is easier to read)
For those of you that didn't like this chapter you may want to skip the next one, and hopefully I didn't lose you completely, because Shy has a lot more story to tell.
For those of you that liked it... Well I think you will enjoy what happens next... |
| 2012-12-26 23:44:59 |
Christmas VouchersIII Part 2 The young prodigy |
I apologize to anyone that I have offended. I didn't tag this story as rape, because in my mind it wasn't... Let me explain.
I will always tell the truth in any story I write, fact or fiction. The truth is that any time a woman dresses slutty in public there is the risk that a guy or guys in this case will take more "liberties" than may be desired.
In the case of this story Shy won. As long as she could have her daddy first she was into it and she got her way through persuasion.
I don't believe that this was a rape scene because Shy was into it. Plain and simple.
Again I apologize if I have offended anyone as that was never my intent, just telling a story as it crosses the vision of my imagination.
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| 2012-12-26 21:21:48 |
Christmas VouchersIII Part 2 The young prodigy |
Okay talk to me folks... In my opinion this was the best piece I have ever written. It is by far the the one I am most proud of, but so far the lowest rated.
Please let me know. Give me some feed back here, because I am at a loss! |
| 2012-12-23 06:32:29 |
Christmas vouchers |
I do apologize to readers for the slight confusion regarding Shareah's/Shay's name.
When I write I engross myself in the story, becoming the reader myself as I write, and go with whatever is there... Shareah is her given name, and Shay is the affectionate title that Jack has given her,... I don't know.. Like I said I just go with it... :) |
| 2012-12-22 17:43:16 |
Christmas vouchers |
As always I love to read, and to respond to comments. I don't care if they are compliments or criticisms. I like both, because both help me to become a better writer.
Also I actually have most of this story completed in rough draft. If you want more it will be posted soon so watch for it. |
| 2012-11-22 23:58:10 |
Teaching Her Girls How To Fuck(Part 1 The Mother) |
good story but does need a lot of work on spelling and grammar |
| 2012-11-22 18:19:42 |
Kata loves her dad |
thanks to the two previous commenters. i am very fond of tgis story and i do plan on continuing it. I can tell u that, while Vivian does start out, "on top of the world," she does not end up that way... and that is about all i will say on that topic. ;-) |
| 2012-11-22 18:19:40 |
Kata loves her dad |
thanks to the two previous commenters. i am very fond of tgis story and i do plan on continuing it. I can tell u that, while Vivian does start out, "on top of the world," she does not end up that way... and that is about all i will say on that topic. ;-) |
| 2012-11-22 16:43:04 |
Kata loves her dad |
response to shadowmancer,
i would never, could never, and will never post a story that i have not written myself. while i do admit freely that there are many stories on this site that involve a father and gis daughter, and it is possible that there may be some similarities from tgis story to others... this story was in fact written by me within the past week... i resent the implication that i would waste my time and the time of my Reeaders by publishing someone elses work.
i am asking for constructive criticsm folks. apparently shadowmancer is incapable of.intelligent thought. Would it make sense for me to publish someone elses work and then ask for Reeaders to help me improve on it?
please... constructive critucsm please!!!
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| 2012-11-22 16:32:06 |
Kata loves her dad |
response to shadowmancer,
i would never, could never, and will never post a story that i have not written myself. while i do admit freely that there are many stories on this site that involve a father and gis daughter, and it is possible that there may be some similarities from tgis story to others... this story was in fact written by me within the past week... i resent the implication that i would waste my time and the time of my Reeaders by publishing someone elses work.
i am asking for constructive criticsm folks. apparently shadowmancer is incapable of.intelligent thought. Would it make sense for me to publish someone elses work and then ask for Reeaders to help me improve on it?
please... constructive critucsm please!!!
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| 2012-11-22 14:22:16 |
Kata loves her dad |
i would greatly appreciate those that rate this story to also Leave a comment... this way i know where i go right and where i go wrong... i do my best to make my stories enjoyable but it seems that i always get what i consider to be a high number of negative ratings... i would like to improve but i dont know what it is that people dont like... thank you... |
| 2012-06-28 19:41:56 |
Breaking Barriers 7:Amanda and Caitlyn tell their story |
oops caitlyn and amanda |
| 2012-06-28 19:41:17 |
Breaking Barriers 7:Amanda and Caitlyn tell their story |
Well to be totally fair, and totally honest that is where the story had to go. The story is written in first person, so I couldn't take you to what was happening with caitlyn and paige, because Ray wasn't in there. Of course Ray was going to want to hear all of the details though. Wouldn't anybody in that situation?
It was encouraging to hear that the readers felt the same way that I did though! |
| 2012-06-28 05:31:05 |
Breaking Barriers 6: a TRIP TO THE MALL |
Thanks for thie tips and requests I will keep them in mind, and try to implement them when and where I can |
| 2012-06-27 19:17:36 |
Breaking Barriers 5:Pin Me |
please comment if you want this story to continue. There is a lot more that could happen, but so far the comments have stopped coming so as of now I am thinking that people have lost interest and I should start a different story. Please let me know. thanks
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| 2012-06-27 19:10:37 |
Breaking Barriers 4: The Initiation |
well so far 2000 ppl have read this and so far no comments. I don't know if that means I'm losing peoples interest, or what. should I leave it at 5??? |