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Comment |
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| 2012-12-27 13:29:20 |
Afternoon Encounter |
OK, I'm hooked. Sounds like the kids know a lot about things their mom does, like this is not the first time they've witnessed such goings on. Please continue. You're good. I'm looking forward to many more of your stories. |
| 2012-12-27 13:13:54 |
Becoming a single mom |
Sadly the US is one of the most violent countries on earth. A woman is killed every 3 hours, raped every 3 minutes and assaulted every 15 seconds. I believe this story to be true. It is well done and gets the point across. It is a sad tale that backs up the afore mentioned. |
| 2012-12-26 19:51:56 |
Jessinta 01B - Biker Girl - Remastered |
Getting better. :) I liked it and heading for the next chapter. |
| 2012-12-26 19:44:29 |
Jessinta 01A - The Beginning (reworked) |
I'm heading for 1b. I like it so far. Interesting, but in need of a bit of editing. |
| 2012-11-22 17:09:03 |
My Son's Cum Rag, part 3 |
Thank you Kinkybelle. You are an absolutely superb writer. Please keep up your most excellent work. I can't wait for the next installment. |
| 2012-09-02 12:41:53 |
My Birthday Vacation - A New Cummer (Part 3) |
Great story, please keep it going.
You asked for feedback and suggestions. Here are a couple of things to be aware of and this goes for so many up and coming writers on here and other sites.
'your' is always used before a noun possessive form of you, relating to or belonging to you
'you're' is a contraction of you are
'were' is past 2d singular, past plural, or past subjunctive of be
'we're' is: a contraction of we are
As you can see there's a big difference and for those who know, it's sort of like a screech of chalk on a blackboard every time one sees a misuse of the above.
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| 2012-09-01 16:53:01 |
Part 5, my sexual life slowly begins |
You're getting better and I'm getting more excited. Keep up the good work. Thanks :) |
| 2012-09-01 16:23:39 |
Part 2, I want to be just like mom |
I liked it and you did turn me on. Please keep going. You are getting better and your story is interesting. Thanks |
| 2012-08-24 15:54:31 |
Together with Angela |
Most excellent. I'm heading for part 2 now as soon as I take care of the bulge in my pants. Keep up the good work. Thanks |
| 2012-08-23 21:02:42 |
Three is the Way |
Firstly, you're really good. I can't wait to read more of your work. I love your dialogue and story build. Great stuff!
I cast my vote for Lizzy getting knocked up in the not to distant future. She should be old enough to have a healthy baby. It would be great if her first is her brother's. Alex and George make a deal for who impregnates her first and George wins. Alex gets to watch, of course. The 3 discuss it and then go for it. You're really good at scene description, so please go into great detail as George pumps his potent sperm into his sister to knock her up. Maybe Alex could be fucking her in the ass and feels George pump his baby making load into her.
Many thanks and keep up the good work. :) |