Comments from pcarval
|2012-06-26 15:55:49||Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 26 Two Hearts no Longer Beat as One||Swing with your partner and life can be good. 'Swing' without and really that's 'virtual' adultery! Without your partner you are turning your back to them -- seems you have 'turned your back' with Cathy? The result is then a very likely big 'ZERO'|
|2012-06-28 11:56:48||A Game of Inches - Part Nine||Broke my heart when Courtney died - I was very fond of that girl. Alexis, I'm not very sure about, bit cold, career type; but maybe she's has also a sad history with a lot of hurt? A real big 'let down' with (say) a fiancee would make her stand back & be cautious? Great stories - don't even think of stopping!!!|
|2012-06-28 12:18:16||Breaking Barriers 6: a TRIP TO THE MALL||Agree with these guys -you're going too fast and skipping over scenes that would benefit greatly from more detail - go to 20 chapters if you like - we'll keep reading & appreciating!|
|2012-06-29 05:36:49||I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS!-CHAPTER 4||Quite a story... Still trying to catch my breath! Careful though... even after 3 babies the vagina is NOT readily available for fisting in just 15 or 20 minutes... it usually takes hours to prepare for a birth; fisting is the same! AND... recovery, well now, she'll be as loose as a railway tunnel for many weeks... without considering the high potential for internal damage. I know! I can ask my girlfriend to post a comment if you like?
Great writing & great turn of phrase; but two such stories so close together may cause a heart attack to your more 'delicate' reader fans!!???
By the way - are the twins going a bit 'bi'? Could be fun! I'm resisting reading ch.5 until later!
|2012-06-30 08:17:54||Swinging in the neighborhood Chapter 27 Sherri Becomes an Disappointment||Hi 'Old63' -- Sadly you only borrow your kids for 'a time' then they fly the nest - Sadly also, no matter what way you try to show them life's pitfalls, they only really learn through their own mistakes; but you have to let them go, otherwise you don't get them back!
Walleyeguyi - your story will NEVER disappoint your readers