Comments from pcarval

Date Story title Comment
2012-06-26 15:55:49 Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 26 Two Hearts no Longer Beat as One Swing with your partner and life can be good. 'Swing' without and really that's 'virtual' adultery! Without your partner you are turning your back to them -- seems you have 'turned your back' with Cathy? The result is then a very likely big 'ZERO'
2012-06-28 11:56:48 A Game of Inches - Part Nine Broke my heart when Courtney died - I was very fond of that girl. Alexis, I'm not very sure about, bit cold, career type; but maybe she's has also a sad history with a lot of hurt? A real big 'let down' with (say) a fiancee would make her stand back & be cautious? Great stories - don't even think of stopping!!!
2012-06-28 12:18:16 Breaking Barriers 6: a TRIP TO THE MALL Agree with these guys -you're going too fast and skipping over scenes that would benefit greatly from more detail - go to 20 chapters if you like - we'll keep reading & appreciating!
2012-06-29 05:36:49 I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS!-CHAPTER 4 Quite a story... Still trying to catch my breath! Careful though... even after 3 babies the vagina is NOT readily available for fisting in just 15 or 20 minutes... it usually takes hours to prepare for a birth; fisting is the same! AND... recovery, well now, she'll be as loose as a railway tunnel for many weeks... without considering the high potential for internal damage. I know! I can ask my girlfriend to post a comment if you like?
Great writing & great turn of phrase; but two such stories so close together may cause a heart attack to your more 'delicate' reader fans!!???
By the way - are the twins going a bit 'bi'? Could be fun! I'm resisting reading ch.5 until later!
2012-06-30 08:17:54 Swinging in the neighborhood Chapter 27 Sherri Becomes an Disappointment Hi 'Old63' -- Sadly you only borrow your kids for 'a time' then they fly the nest - Sadly also, no matter what way you try to show them life's pitfalls, they only really learn through their own mistakes; but you have to let them go, otherwise you don't get them back!
Walleyeguyi - your story will NEVER disappoint your readers