||Little Red Part #2
||good story. a bit rough on the sex play.
||Little Red (modern day)
||Three wolves, One in each opening. Yummy
||Daddy's little Sex Doll
||Do not complain there are no Paragraphs without letting her know how to put them in. Loading the damn story takes away the Paragraphs. Its not her fault. Someone needs to Post the Way to keep Paragraphs at the point before you submit your storys.
||Michael's naughty little stepsister
||Okay love, Take your time don't rush let the story flow out how it wants, then proof read. I never know what I have wrote till I go back through it. Make your charicters believable. A fourteen year old with masive hooters. Possable, but not plausable.
Never rush a story. keep it neat, keep it clear, Keep it believable. (Within paramiters. Fantasy has to have some streatch of belief) and you will be golden. JME69
||People have to edit their work. when you read or when your typing dble enter between paragraphs this will put a space between one paragraph and the next. It makes it much easyer to read if the story is not in one big block. JME69
||First of Signing in is not at all difficult. I found two typos. Grammer and puncuation. For the most part is correct. The Story it self, Well It sucks. Jimmy it is not your best work. Sorry
||Longer with more details. NO. NO and NO. Less is more. Say it clearly and precisly in as few words as possable. Tell the children that are looking into ADULT STORIES. Listen to your lituriture teacher. the writing should inspire you to see the story not put you to sleep
||Because you think it is not does not mean it is not a true story. I have seen some really sick stuff take place. If you get lucky I might jot down a couple of them that will make you wonder if their even possable let alone true stories.
||I think this is the least erotic sex stroy I have ever read. It is well written, just not sexy.
||Seducing the Kid Sister Part 2
||Yummy, got me thinking of my BFF, Only it was my brother watching
||Katie's First Girlfriend
||A double enter when you write a paragraph will keep them seperated when you post. Not bad not bad at all love it
||Either My story does not rate comments or no one found enough to complain about LOL