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Date Story title Comment
2012-12-05 14:47:59 Stepsister Seduction Pretty good story! I enjoyed it a lot, and will be keeping an eye open to for your work from now on. Piece of advice from a personal standpoint... just avoid terms like 'yell' in sex scenes (In my opinion.) how many people actually yell during sex, you know? Your presentation was well done, and you clearly have talent. develop it by writing as much as you can. Good luck, and thanks!
2012-12-12 11:34:03 Sexy Shelly part2 Ok. I'm going to give you a positive for trying.
But. A few pieces of advice to remember in the future. Use paragraphs. If you write in it word and copy and paste it here, double enter for paragraphs.

Also, do a spell and grammar check on word before you post your next story.

And lastly, when you write dialogue, remember that each line of dialouge should start in a new line to avoid confusion of who is talking.

Keep writing. Just try to make it as easy as possible for your readers to read - not all of them are rocket scientist, so try to think logical and find practical ways to make it easy to read - like paragraphs at the start of a new section or thought and so on.

Don't give up. You actually have potential, I think.
2012-12-16 06:25:01 Marie's Christmas Well, that was the nicest rendition of the Nutcracker i've ever read. Very well written and highly enjoyable! It was cute and funny and I enjoyed it a lot.

Good work, and good luck with the votes.
2013-01-03 18:50:31 Chantelle I've done my part in the anti-doodle campaign :) Plus, you know, it was a damn good story!
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