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| 2013-01-03 18:50:31 |
Chantelle |
I've done my part in the anti-doodle campaign :) Plus, you know, it was a damn good story! |
| 2012-12-16 06:25:01 |
Marie's Christmas |
Well, that was the nicest rendition of the Nutcracker i've ever read. Very well written and highly enjoyable! It was cute and funny and I enjoyed it a lot.
Good work, and good luck with the votes. |
| 2012-12-12 11:34:03 |
Sexy Shelly part2 |
Ok. I'm going to give you a positive for trying.
But. A few pieces of advice to remember in the future. Use paragraphs. If you write in it word and copy and paste it here, double enter for paragraphs.
Also, do a spell and grammar check on word before you post your next story.
And lastly, when you write dialogue, remember that each line of dialouge should start in a new line to avoid confusion of who is talking.
Keep writing. Just try to make it as easy as possible for your readers to read - not all of them are rocket scientist, so try to think logical and find practical ways to make it easy to read - like paragraphs at the start of a new section or thought and so on.
Don't give up. You actually have potential, I think. |
| 2012-12-05 14:47:59 |
Stepsister Seduction |
Pretty good story! I enjoyed it a lot, and will be keeping an eye open to for your work from now on. Piece of advice from a personal standpoint... just avoid terms like 'yell' in sex scenes (In my opinion.) how many people actually yell during sex, you know? Your presentation was well done, and you clearly have talent. develop it by writing as much as you can. Good luck, and thanks! |
| 2012-10-31 10:28:26 |
The Chair |
Ah, and THIS is why we love Daddycums. The touch of humour sets it apart from all the other stories in the toys section. And speaking of toystories... I wonder if Woody and Buzz ever met Andy's mom's toys? Especially as they probably had the same names!
Randomn joke. But really, dc, I actually liked this one a lot :) |
| 2012-07-16 13:08:08 |
The Librarian and the Bartender |
Wow, thanks for all the great responses! i'm allready working on a few ideas for sa new story, cant decide if i should do a sequel or just write a new one from scratch. any ideas and opinions on the matter? |
| 2012-07-15 09:14:48 |
The Librarian and the Bartender |
thank you for all the positive feedback. woudl also love to hear any tips you can give me on my writing - spelling mistakes duly noted! English is my second language, so i get a little confused with grammar and so on sometimes. |
| 2012-05-22 15:27:52 |
The Way My Babysitter Tasted |
let me guess, you had to write an essay titled 'my most embarsasing moment' for your fourth grade english teacher. Only, the irony is that your essay is the embarrasing moment. so good marks for hidden curriculum. Otherwise.... yeah, i'm going to stick with no comment. but i agree the story could have potential.If you let somebody (anybody) else write it. |
| 2012-05-04 14:40:55 |
An unexpected seduction 2 |
thanx, glad you liked it! part one is also available (just go to my profile) if you want to read it. xoxo! |