||Impressive! Creative plot, fleshed-out characters, believable dialogue, credible fantasy, natural diction, good but sometimes a little iffy on spelling, grammar and punctuation. Some may wonder why such details are important. A story is a universe. Even minor errors are flaws in the fabric of that universe that remind the reader it isn't real and bounces them out of the story. Or think of them like potholes in a highway. Still, this is some great writing. Thanks, VS.