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Date Story title Comment
2012-06-01 16:57:08 Beach Ball Delight I really enjoyed reading your story - it has a pretty nice build up and great finish. I would love to be able to read a sequel to what happened here. I think you should start writing a second part. Anyway: Great story!
2012-10-20 12:29:27 Mommy, Son, and Best Friend Even though I don't consider this story to be particularly realistic, I enjoyed reading it. Especially the first part where the two boys explore their bodies was a nice read. Overall, it was a nice story - thank you for posting this one.

I assume that this will not be your last story, so here are a few things that I could make your stories even better.

You are getting to the point too quickly. Why don't you use a longer introduction? Let the boys meet for the first time. Let them get friends and let them later on be best friends. Let them admire Danny's mom for a longer time. Make her not agree instantly, let her get sexual with the boys step-by-step.

Use more explanations. Of course, overloading the story with useless sentences will not be beneficial, but describing more exactly how the characters feel, what they think, what they smell, hear, etc. will make the story more vivid and, more importantly, more realistic!

There are so many possibilities! Use them!
Keep up the
2012-10-20 12:29:47 Mommy, Son, and Best Friend Even though I don't consider this story to be particularly realistic, I enjoyed reading it. Especially the first part where the two boys explore their bodies was a nice read. Overall, it was a nice story - thank you for posting this one.

I assume that this will not be your last story, so here are a few things that I could make your stories even better.

You are getting to the point too quickly. Why don't you use a longer introduction? Let the boys meet for the first time. Let them get friends and let them later on be best friends. Let them admire Danny's mom for a longer time. Make her not agree instantly, let her get sexual with the boys step-by-step.

Use more explanations. Of course, overloading the story with useless sentences will not be beneficial, but describing more exactly how the characters feel, what they think, what they smell, hear, etc. will make the story more vivid and, more importantly, more realistic!

There are so many possibilities! Use them!
Keep up the
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