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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2013-06-04 13:30:54 |
I Love a Parade |
Sounds just what a drunk lonely man would do. I thought it was good but a little rushed. |
| 2013-05-22 08:47:11 |
Rhiannon, part 4. |
I wish she had told it all. Even though Chester molested her the baby wasn't his. He should have told the judge he was sterile. Frank should have gotten his too. |
| 2013-05-20 11:25:12 |
Rhiannon. part 1. |
Not bad so far. I know Mom is coming into the sex soon. A part 2,3 or more is needed. |
| 2013-05-18 18:08:17 |
Spider-Man: Ultimate Beginnings Chapter One |
I don't care who wrote it, it needs spacing. Almost like one long paragraph with breaks in it. |
| 2013-05-10 09:38:41 |
Happy Mothers Day! |
It is a bit short but drag out the humiliation. Don't forget the ass fuck and maybe get Mom pregnant by son too. |
| 2013-04-07 06:52:27 |
Red Hawk the Spear Maker(Part 3 The Great Meeting Ground) |
To the Anon that doesn't like cliffhangers. Do you watch tv? If so you like cliffhangers. Most shows tease you with "coming next week!", which is a cliffhanger to make you come back to watch. Do you read all books straight through? if not another cliffhanger.
Your whole life is full of cliffhangers you just don't realize it.
Don't complain until you write a story. Then you will see the value in making them eager to come back for more. |
| 2013-03-31 02:54:09 |
My Whole Family Needed Me 2 |
VERY WELL DONE !!!! I'm glad you made the spacing changes. It read much better. Now all you have to do is keep up the excellent work and I'll read every word you write. I'm going to favorite your story so I won't miss any parts. Thanks!! |
| 2013-03-30 07:28:11 |
My Whole Family Needed Me |
Very good but a little more spacing to ease the reading. I hope the next part is as good as the first. |
| 2013-03-22 21:34:46 |
My Photogenic Mom Chapter 4 |
Are you writing this or copying and posting? Please use breaks between paragraphs. Make it easier for us to read and rate. |
| 2013-03-22 21:32:36 |
My Photogenic Mom Chapter 1 |
Had to give it a negative rating. Breaks in the story makes it easier to read, |
| 2013-02-22 14:19:17 |
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very good read. Will there be a part two? |
| 2013-02-21 10:12:21 |
Bobby's new power |
A strange way to control people but unique. What happens while wearing clothes? Please continue. I want to read more, |
| 2013-02-19 08:03:55 |
Mom taking care of me 4 |
One slutty Mom. I had a woman like that but she was younger that me by about 15 years. We did it all over. Keep up the story, I like it very much. |
| 2013-02-12 20:11:22 |
Young white girl tutor blacked by african basketball player |
Hey Anon, If you don't like it, why did you read it? Do you secretly want a big black dick in you? |
| 2013-02-05 14:07:27 |
Maya: Forbidden Lust of a Horny Indian Housewife part 2 |
Very good but I prefer the spacing of the first part. It made reading much easier for me. |
| 2013-01-26 06:53:50 |
Dad's Porno Magazines: Chapter 1? Finding the Magazines |
The story is great but really 40D tits? I like big boobs too but most times smaller tits will do for me. Not complaining just giving my opinion. |
| 2013-01-22 04:38:05 |
Teen Neighbor Obsession |
Even though I liked the big tease I couldn't follow it very well. Moe spacing please for an easier read. I'm sure part two wilol be hotter! |
| 2013-01-19 08:32:11 |
The New Life (Prologue) |
Loved it!! Can't wait to read chapter one. |
| 2012-12-29 23:19:00 |
Batgirl Returns Part One |
Nice story but when did he take the gag from her mouth? You didn't mention that and a few grammar and spelling errors were found. I hope part is coming soon and will be better. |
| 2012-12-23 15:33:07 |
The Son Who Could -revised |
As for rating, the first story was trash to me. Bad spacing, horrible plot, terrible ending. Negative rating.
The original story was much better. Laid out right, better plot and a better ending. How could you take a good story and make it crap? |
| 2012-12-13 10:35:57 |
my brothers join in |
Not a bad story/ Nice to read about African-Americans for a change.
My only problem is you need to space your paragraphs to make reading easier. Other than that keep writing!! |
| 2012-11-24 20:19:11 |
raping grandma and mom pt 1 |
I gave you a negative rating for your paragraphs. PLEASE break them up! Reading ONE long paragraph is not only boring but impossible. That makes your story unreadable and a negative comment magnet. |
| 2012-11-24 20:16:51 |
raping grandma and mom pt 1 |
I gave you a negative rating for your paragraphs. PLEASE break them up! Reading ONE long paragraph is not only boring but impossible. That makes your story unreadable and a negative comment magnet. |
| 2012-11-17 12:05:25 |
MY TEACHER THE TEASE Part 2 |
It was a bit short but my main problem isn't your fault. I think it the site formatting your story. Odd letters and symbols in the show up. There are a few grammar errors but not enough to take away from the plot.
Mostly I would say space the paragraphs a little better and just a little more description of the action. |
| 2012-10-21 07:34:18 |
Mom, Wine, and a Scary Movie |
Also could have spread out the paragraphs a bit more for easier reading. |
| 2012-10-19 08:56:13 |
Driving for a good time |
The hero of the story doesn't really need to move again. They were drugged at the prom. She was out cold and won't remember who did what to her. I think we need a part two. |
| 2012-10-18 08:06:07 |
My sexy principal is My Mother |
Nice domination story but paragraphs are too long and you need to spell check better. I hope part two is better written. |
| 2012-10-16 04:10:02 |
Pipe Crew X-Sandy |
DAMN!!!!!! Wrong time to end this part!!!! Now I have to wait to see what his Father is up to. |
| 2012-10-13 03:07:56 |
Pipe Crew VIII- The Loss |
Are we going to get the story of his Mother and her brother anytime soon? Please don't rush the Mother/son sex. I like the way he and his sister make love. |
| 2012-10-13 03:07:17 |
Pipe Crew VIII- The Loss |
Are we going to get the story of his Mother and her brother anytime soon? Please don't rush the Mother/son sex. I like the way he and his sister make love. |
| 2012-10-11 01:49:16 |
My sexy step daughter (part 2) |
Same as the first part. Too jammed together. You need to space it better. |
| 2012-10-11 01:47:41 |
My sexy step daughter (Part 1) |
I really wanted to read your story but the jammed up too long paragraphs stopped me. Will try to read part two. |
| 2012-10-11 01:25:56 |
Married with Children |
You could have had Bud lose his virginity with Kelly while she was tied up or involved him somehow. |
| 2012-10-07 04:15:35 |
The Counselor Chronicles Part 1 |
I gave it a positive rating but why do they all have rather large tits? Can't they be slightly smaller? I like large tits but 15 and 16 with double D tits? Yeah I know fiction and imagination but just my opinion. |
| 2012-09-30 03:12:00 |
My Son's Mother - Part 1 |
Sounds like a revenge thing to me. I hope he gets more pics or video first and then does some old fashioned blackmail with multiple partners. |
| 2012-09-22 19:06:53 |
Working Mom 7 |
Where was the driver when all the fucking was happening? |
| 2012-09-03 11:55:28 |
Working MOM |
I am giving you a positive vote even though I could not finish it. Please edit and re-post so I can enjoy it like everyone else please. |
| 2012-08-17 11:51:09 |
Helping hand |
I disagree. This was worth reading and I thought was well thought out. I am not homosexual but enjoy all things sexually written if done well. I advise you to continue your series. |
| 2012-08-12 16:42:25 |
the family's new bitch part.2 |
To the anon reader. CAN YOU READ!?! He said "first off i just want to say that to those of you who didn't like the story, don't read it. for those of you who started bitching on how it was: go look at someone else's stories. to those of you who commented correcting my grammar: again look at other stories. this is not a site to become a real author this is a site where people post sexual stories. I didn't write the story on my Iphone but my computer fucks up and spell checks everything that way. thank you for your feedback but if all your going to do is bitch then don't read the fucking story. and if you don't like it, go fuck yourself... oh wait. you already did >:)"
Now if you can read you know what to do.
Personally I liked the story AND the ending. |
| 2012-08-05 09:32:40 |
Struck By Lightning |
Not only do I agree with the negatives, I think you stole this and re wrote it. I have seen this story elsewhere and better written too. |
| 2012-08-05 09:11:36 |
Mom had no idea |
Please sir may I have some more? |
| 2012-07-29 06:34:54 |
I need your help brother |
Not going to rate it yet. The story is all right but please spell check your next part. A few errors but not enough to spoil the story. Great effort. |
| 2012-07-19 16:38:17 |
Impregnating my Unsuspecting Sister |
The only reason I gave you a negative rating was due to spacing. Too close together makes it very hard to read. Please add some spaces between paragraphs and resubmit. |
| 2012-07-06 15:04:43 |
My not so innocent sister |
My only problem was spacing. Part two should be spaced a bit more for easier reading. |
| 2012-06-30 07:05:35 |
Rape A Virgin Aunt |
Too long and too sick. I could only scan it not read that sick crap. They should take this crap off the site. |
| 2012-06-30 06:51:32 |
My interesting summer |
Need a re-write and better spacing. |
| 2012-06-23 08:53:31 |
Progenitor 1: The Beginning |
Your story is unique to say the least. I don't want to be negative but better spacing would make it more readable. I think you should space the paragraphs a little bit more so the don't seem to run together. I am looking forward to part two and any others to follow. |
| 2012-06-17 05:43:35 |
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I got off twice with this one. More please and add Anthony. |
| 2012-06-16 02:30:40 |
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Hey Anon, just enjoy the story or ask to be his editor.
I like the way this is going. Next part please. |
| 2012-06-16 02:22:54 |
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Nice to see a slow seduction with a youngster. I hope it all goes well and lasts a bit. |
| 2012-06-14 07:15:18 |
My Sister Got Spanked by the School Bully - pt. 2 |
To all of you negative people. Sometimes the bully wins. Get ovet it! This is a porn site. If you can do better then do it, stop whining! |
| 2012-06-14 07:02:28 |
Mind Control Family |
Could have been better. You are rusty and need an editor to help you. A rewrite and a part two would be great. Good luck. |
| 2012-06-08 18:40:50 |
11 Year Old Kasey's Beginning |
I hope there's more cumming to come. I love little girl stories. |
| 2012-05-12 13:49:56 |
mom is my birday call girl |
Not to be rude or cruel but I suggest a re-write with an editor. The basic story is very good but an editor could make it better. Looking forward to a better written part two. |
| 2012-05-12 13:44:18 |
The Crabwalk |
I love these stories also. I have to say though that "little" girls today know much more than their parents and grandparents did at their age.
For example I followed two sexy pairs of hips into a store. After a few minutes of conversation I asked ages. One said twelve and the other was fourteen. They looked and acted like eighteen years old. Too mature for their own good. |
| 2012-05-10 11:21:43 |
sexy mom's taste part 1 |
"To be continued". Why? |
| 2012-05-10 11:18:24 |
A special afternoon with Heather |
Your stories are very erotic and inspiring. I hope you keep them like this. |
| 2012-05-10 11:14:59 |
Picking up my daughter at dance class |
To the unknown protesters, lighten up it's a fantasy. One I'm sure we all have had at one time or another. It's difficult to look at young girls today and not imagine them having sex considering some of their morals and exposure to all kinds of sexual information.
I though the story was well written and had just enough sex to interest me. He did not hurt or force the girl and she enjoyed it as well. |
| 2012-04-22 10:07:04 |
Accepting Rides From Your Teacher Isn't Always a Good Idea |
Good story but how old is Sally? She seems to be developed bodily and sexually active. Her boyfriend(?) brags about her. Parents go on business trips and leave her home alone for the weekend. Need more background please. |
| 2012-03-31 08:32:34 |
Grandpa's Journals: Peeping at My Grand Daughter's Window, Part 3 |
I waited to read all three before commenting. All three parts were very good. Can't wait for the next three plus parts. |