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| 2012-11-10 15:04:21 |
THE MOON STONE, part 3 (THREE) |
Well. Hardrive. I like the premise of the story. It is partly science fiction but enough fantasy to blend well. It does keep you guessing what will happen next. A lot of good stories on this site are non-erotic to start and build from there. If someone wants a jerkoff story, pick another one. I like this one as is. Do more. |
| 2012-10-13 20:06:50 |
THE MOON STONE, Part 2 |
I loved it. Absolutely keep going. We need more quality stories on this side. I thought I was almost out of something worth reading and you came back with this. I did vote you as my favorite in the last CAW, but even with all the great comments, you were not on the top. I did not agree with the results, but we have a lot of other readers out there. I will always try to follow this one. |
| 2012-08-14 12:29:49 |
The Ten of Them Chapter 8 |
This chapter is so different from the others. It had so many spelling and grammer errors, it was like someone else wrote this one. It is a good story but you need to proofread it much better. It was hard to read like this. The whole series is great and hope for more. Just check it more. |
| 2012-08-07 16:00:14 |
Tropical Vacation |
Very hot story. I do hope you have a chapter two. Loved this one. |
| 2012-08-07 15:35:24 |
Mom Needs Son's Help, Ch. 1 |
Kinkybelle. You did it again. Another hot story that is very well presented. You have a fantastic mind to create these scenarios, or you have such a fantastic life living them. I am not sure which. Your stories are so realistic that it is so easy to see the scene as it is happening. Now instead of just fantasizing about a sext from you, I now have to suffer through a vision of a hot video too. What a life. Thank you for sharing your extraordinary talent with us readers. You are still on top of my list. Larry |
| 2012-08-03 12:57:18 |
Sexting my son 4 |
Kudos. Very cute story. I think more than a few readers might have blueballs that need taken care of. Hope their mothers are not nearby. |
| 2012-08-03 12:42:16 |
Sexting my son 3 |
TFH. WOW. Love it. Too bad you can't post photos here to go with this. |
| 2012-08-03 12:33:08 |
Sexting my son 2 |
LOL. This chapter had me laughing through most of it. I like the subtle humor from the two of them. Different than just outright teasing. Mom's character is actually appealing to me. Shy, yet willing to explore new ideas. Keep going. |
| 2012-08-03 12:17:35 |
Sexting my son 1 |
TFA. This is a great addition to this subject. Though similar to Kinkybelle's, it is different in context. Nice spin on this idea. Looking forward to the other chapters. |
| 2012-06-29 18:47:17 |
I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS!-CHAPTER 5 |
I would like to write how much I enjoyed this story. But instead of something brilliant, I can only post...Duh Duh Duh. I am completely blown away. This is above any level of cogent understanding. You have suceeded on many levels of Romance, Love, Emotion, and Psychological elements that I don't even know how to express myself. You have a better grasp of human psychology than many of the therapists I have worked with over the years. The way you presented the solutions to the families problems is better than some of the ideas I have seen in real life. Brilliant job. Wow Wow Wow! Thank you for this journey with this family. |
| 2012-06-25 15:43:46 |
Too Perfect to Pass Up [Chapter One] |
Please do not have her get pregnant. I don't know why some readers want every young girl, her friends, her mother, her sister, and any other female in 50 miles to get pregnant. You wrote a very good description of a young woman most men would give their left nut to try once. Good job. |
| 2012-06-22 17:40:00 |
Raising Little Tabby Jack |
Wow. Great story. Keep writing. |
| 2012-06-22 10:23:58 |
She Was So Damned Cute! |
This is the kind of story I love. Adventure, romance, a little sex, and jungle. I still live near the jungle and it will always be my home. I have enjoyed all of your stories and hope you can still ..finger.. out some more. |
| 2012-06-20 21:00:27 |
The Ten of Them Chapter 3 |
A little better with this chapter. The amount of money mentioned may be a little fantasy, but the whole story is fantasy. Still love the story line. Very romantic with the hints of sex to come. Very good. |
| 2012-06-20 19:57:57 |
The Ten of Them Chapter 2 |
As I said before, I love the storyline. If you read between the lines and the errors, it is very interesting. It is posted well with easy to read dialog. Please don't take the comments negatively. We just want you to get better. I am not a writer and any thing I would post would be pur shit. You have a great story, keep going. |
| 2012-06-20 18:46:52 |
The Ten of Them. Chapter 1 |
I think the idea of the story is great. It appears that the authors first language is not english. Yes, there are an incredible amount of mistakes. But if you read between the lines, it is an interesting story. I wish I could live like this. |
| 2012-06-19 19:49:59 |
CAW#11 - Cold Winters Day (re-editted) |
I voted positive too. I don't know why it is rated so low. I loved the story. It is one of my favorites. I did flinch a little at the end. Serves him right for calling her a bitch. Keep writing, I will keep voting positive. |
| 2012-06-07 22:45:23 |
GIRL WHO CAME BACK |
I have got to tell you that was an amazing story. Emotion and love and memories all tied together. There is nothing wrong with falling in love with Amy. They already had a close relationship before. Who better to share your life with than somebody who knows all the past and the heartache. Maybe some time with Sarah, who is his age will help him to know his true feelings and that love has no age. Stick to the title and continue with the idea,,,, She came back! |
| 2012-05-31 23:00:32 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Four |
It was great. Very detailed both in story and emotion. No problem with the length. It captivates the reader and holds the attention throughout. Love all your stories. You are one of the better authors on here. |
| 2012-05-31 21:05:17 |
THE MOON STONE |
I think it was great. A few spelling errors but they did not detract from the story. I can envision many more directions to take this. You use the one you like best. This is a great start. No sex does not make a bad story. However you may get slammed by the pervs who complain no one got pregnant, no underage sex, etc. Very different from the usual and, to me, interesting. |
| 2012-05-31 13:48:20 |
A Journey to the Amazon |
That was an amazing story. I loved it. Well written and posted. I hope you do a sequel. Since I have spent many years living near the jungle and the indigenous people, (Maya), I feel a connection to this tribe and their way of life. Even if most of this is fantasy, you made it real and lifelike. Thanks for the adventure. Please continue. |
| 2012-05-07 15:45:18 |
My Beautiful Brother David |
Yes, you did repeat a little too much. But the story was great. You brought out her insecurities and fears and her desire to feel like a full woman. I know she will have her brother help her. That could be some hot scenes. |
| 2012-05-07 15:29:19 |
The Island |
You have started a good story of intrigue. Leaves us wondering where we go next. Well written and layed out. Keep going, I would love to know who the father is, and probably two very gorgeous sisters coming. |
| 2012-05-01 00:13:23 |
Lake Tannin |
Just great. Loved it. |
| 2012-04-24 12:21:35 |
A GUEST FOR A WEEK -- Chapter 05: Friday's Fornications |
Wow. How do you describe in simple words what an incredible , erotic, exciting story that is. You did it with your writing. I have never seen a better example of presenting the sights,sounds, tastes, and desires of passion. I actually had goosebumps and my hands were shaking as I read. There is nothing more that could have been added, or anything left out ,to make it better.
This story cannot be topped by other writers in detail, sensory emotion, or just plain lust. You just made this into my wishful fantasy of my own. How do you say it? You pushed all my buttons. Incredible! Thanks. |
| 2012-04-15 11:41:08 |
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Fantastic. They say love is like poetry. You just proved it with your poetic love story. Being a man of the older persuasion, I love it that there can be romance and love when you find your true partner. New meaning to the phrase...Spare the "rod" and spoil the child. |
| 2012-04-14 10:02:22 |
Availability for work auction part one |
Very different story idea. Quite creative. You started out with a scene that could have really been right out of Parliament. Almost direct from the telly. I think this is closer to being future reality than you think. With the European economy being what it is, This is not so far fetched. Love the idea of the greed of the news media trying to embaress any one from the upper class. Technically only a few spelling or misplaced words, but very professionally done. How do you say it there..Jolly good. |
| 2012-04-12 22:29:27 |
The Plan We Didn't Need |
Contrary to popular opinion, some of us do like to read for the enjoyment of a well written story. The build up is as important as the action. It is good that you can write both. Many comments come in about how many times someone beat off while reading. You will have a mixed audience, so keep going, You did fine. Two women together is still as hot as any other story. |
| 2012-04-10 22:35:07 |
Race Weekend |
WSF. I read this on the forum first. It is a trip down memory lane. It was really like this back then at tracks all over the country. Thanks for helping us to relive some good ol' times. |
| 2012-04-10 22:30:01 |
A GUEST FOR A WEEK ? Chapter 04: Thursday?s Thoroughness |
That was hot. But Rick absolutely has no willpower. He only lasted about six seconds before giving in to his lust. I think I could go at least seven seconds. Maybe only because of my age. You know how to add passion and pure lust to your stories. The only thing that could be any hotter, would be to add scratch and sniff to the computer screen. Looking forward to the next unbelievablly sexy night with the two of them. |
| 2012-04-09 11:44:33 |
The old cell phone |
LOL Now that is funny. I wish I could have thought of that for my ex. But in reality that would not be me. But it is fun to imagine. Thanks for the laugh. Just remember if you don't want others to see, DON'T DO IT! |
| 2012-04-09 11:25:51 |
SHORTY |
You have just written the most romantic, passionate, sexy. fantabulous story on here. You have a talent for bringing all the emotion, excitement, and love to life in all your stories. Well layed out, with no errors or grammatical mistakes. Love the references to the old Atari and First Apple products. And the reference to the boy Wosniak, is his father in the neighbors garage working on a job? Keep writing. |
| 2012-04-08 16:41:57 |
Doomsday (Fixed and edited) |
Please be a southern gentleman and do part 2. I think you will have a big following. I am waiting. |
| 2012-04-08 16:32:05 |
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No preaching. Just a few mistakes, But very well done. Tough subject. It is hard to come up with anything good to say about such happenings other than you did a great job of storytelling. |
| 2012-04-08 16:08:34 |
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Dan You mixed the name in the second paragraph, but that was the only mistake I saw. You carried the theme on through this part well. I am actually getting angry reading this (fiction) because I know it happens. Parents give their young children to Ministers, or Priests to use and abuse as they see fit. Thanks for presenting a story we actually need to think about. Keep going. |
| 2012-04-08 15:45:35 |
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Dan. You took on a subject that is sure to be controversial, but needs to be told. You are right that many people take religeous beliefs to the extreme. Acts done in "The name of God" are tolerated and accepted, when they should be banned and shameful. Well written story so far, Including the part where Father Dan is transfered, instead of punished for his acts. happens all the time. |
| 2012-04-07 20:14:59 |
Grandpa's Journals: The Cowgirl's Confidence, Partr 3 |
2stfauther. Thank you for the trilogy. it is as good as your others. You have a real talent for portraying a loving caring relationship between a grandfather and grandaughter. Whether it is in Florida, Oregon, or Alaska, or the Caribbean, it is done well. As a grandfather myself, I would not want to do this with my grandaughters. but as a male reading a fantasy, it is well done. Thanks |
| 2012-04-07 14:49:37 |
Doomsday (Fixed and edited) |
Now this is my kind of story. I love to read about survival situations. You did a good job of selecting useful items. Including of course five beautiful women. Just a note. The MRE's will keep and would be better stored for later. Use up the perishables first. Nitpicky, I know for a story. But you did a fantastic job of writing it. Please continue with more chapters of this. It can be interesting, and sexy at the same time. Just a selfish note. Add another male, like a paramedic for example, to help with any emergency. |
| 2012-04-06 21:50:06 |
SWEETEST SURRENDER |
I do not know what words I could use to describe this better than just how you told it. The story speaks for itself, and I don't want to spoil it. Gooood Job. |
| 2012-04-06 18:43:22 |
LITTLE SISTER'S FIRST DANCE |
That was the most detailed, erotic, sexy, scene I have read in a long time. I wish it could be like this for every girls first time. Unfortunately it sometimes isn't. Very good writing. It is also nice for a man to be in love with his partner too. Makes it so much a richer expeeience. You did that with your writing. Fantastic job. |
| 2012-04-04 22:38:05 |
Rescue at sea |
To all the landlubbers that might need to know, just use channel 16 the emergency channel monitored by the Coast Guard. But with these two women don't bother. A week or two won't hurt. |
| 2012-04-04 08:49:38 |
A SOPHISTOCATED AND VERSATILE LADY |
That was another great story Douggie. I am wondering if for you, writing a sex scene with someone you actually know, is better than a fictitious partner. If your friend Me Pink Girlie is as pretty as you describe, I would love to see her photos too. Very erotic sex portrayals. It is also interesting to look for the difference in British and American terminology in wording used. Just by reading someones story you can usually tell where it originated. Nothing wrong with eithers linguistics. Any way after all the blah, blah, by me, I like this one too. |
| 2012-04-04 00:14:43 |
Like a Good Neighbor |
I think I need to go over and borrow his paint sprayer too. Very hot story and very well presented. Good job. |
| 2012-04-02 19:43:17 |
My first gang bang |
When you finished, was it as good as you hoped? You sounded satisfied. Another good story about fantasies. You kept us reading. Any more? |
| 2012-04-02 19:33:00 |
The other man |
It is nice to read about someones fantasies, and see them come true. I think we all would like to see ours come true too. But then what would we wish for or dream about? Maybe it is better this way, just reading about it and wishing we were there. Good story. Part two, John brings his wife next trip. |
| 2012-04-02 15:07:43 |
Wyatt's island |
Sorry. Even if this was an original story, the spelling and punctuation is so bad, it is hard to read. Try again and check your work. This was bad. |
| 2012-03-29 16:40:02 |
Shane's Girl |
That was cute and sweet. Quite a few errors. But the story was excellent. Even the nervousness came through. It is also nice to read about a guy who is caring enough, to not only use a condom, but care how the girl feels. Nice story. Just check your words a little more. Don't rush. Like sex, it is better done carefully and slow. Thanks for a nice one. |
| 2012-03-29 11:59:09 |
Son Helps His Mother Cope |
Actually that was a very well written story. No glaring errors and easy to read. I like the fact that it is a little different in content than other Mother/Son stories in that the son is a little older, not a virgen teen. Also that the mother is asleep and is not a deliberate attempt at incest. The son, willing, changes that a little, but a good story. thank you. |
| 2012-03-26 11:10:44 |
The Princess and the Blacksmith |
Broadsword. I read it again. I have tried to think why this gets to me so much. You do have a few mistakes and some of the dialog is disjointed, but underlying all that is some of the wildest and craziest humor I have ever read. All the profound thinkers and experts will say it it "off the wall". But you know what? Shit sticks to the wall. This might be insane, but how does it compare to the supposed greatness of Chaucer's Canterbury Tales that bored the s..t out of me. As I said in my first post, this is either genius, or the most demented thing on this site. I am still laughing. How can someone read?...King: I bought you a cat.
Princess: Auntie says I should play with my pussy.
But this one is boring.
or Princess: Why are all the poor people smiling?
King: Because they don't have children.
LOL LOL I am sorry, I can't type and laugh at the same time.
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| 2012-03-26 10:51:43 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 5 |
Hey Douggie. Another great chapter. I like it that little petite Marie, and not the brawler Andy, that kicks the s--t out of the bully. Never piss off a woman. To be a little nit-picky, the first few scenes where they start seducing their partners, the actions were a little rushed. You did better later on, and the scenes were more complete and well described. Your whole presentation of first time love was remarkably well done. You kept the nervousness and anxiety as part of the process, and still allowing the passion and lust to rule. In words... it does sound technical, but in reality it is as you described it..."fucking amazing." And as always your spelling, punctuation, and presentation are mistake proof. Perfect. Good writing Douggie. I am trying not to be critical, but to try and help. I know, all the expert advice is from a non-writer. But you really do a great job. |
| 2012-03-24 14:45:15 |
DR. Jekyll and Ms. Heidi |
Now that is a different story line. You are probably not far off from genetic research like this. I wonder what it would be like for a man to be a woman for a day. You almost made it real. Thanks for something different. Is there a part 2? The daughter has plans. |
| 2012-03-23 10:43:26 |
Handyman |
John. That was an amazing story. Not enough adjectives to describe it. Sexy, romantic, sensual., caring, interesting. A good blend of romance and humor. Thanks for showing how good an experienced male can make a woman enjoy her first, or hundreth, time. I enjoyed your other story, Moving In. Both were done in this theme of true, caring, and enjoyable relationships.Sex in a story is great, but when done with taste,(ahem) it is terrific. You can put it into words very well. Good job. |
| 2012-03-22 12:05:31 |
House Girl |
Yes, this is a very different approach to a story. These nano-transmitters are not that far fetched. This really could be part of our future lives. But being old-fashioned, I still prefer the lure and chase as opposed to mind control. However, I would have loved this when younger. Thanks for a new story and please continue. Good work. Angela and Theresa are both my preference in beautiful women, exotic. |
| 2012-03-21 17:56:53 |
Dream girl |
Actually that was a good story. A little short and could use more character development. But it had the feelings of a wife who is feeling neglected and her fantasies. We all have some like this. A dream lover who fulfills all our desires. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-21 11:32:56 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 4 |
Another good one Douggie. Very romantic and sensual at the same time. I like the way you broke up the thoughts and activities of the two into sections. Made it easy to read and follow the characters, Maybe a little too technical or clincal in your body part descriptions, though accurate, for some readers it needs to be more erotic. Do you know what they call the perineum in the states? "Tain't" Because it tain't ass and it tain't pussy. HA HA Your story really is about first love as well as first sex. Well done. |
| 2012-03-21 10:52:49 |
A GUEST FOR A WEEK -- Chapter 02: Tuesday's Temptations |
I see that many men like this fantasy. Why not. Please do chapter two and we will gladly read it. Good story. |
| 2012-03-21 10:45:43 |
A summer in Oregon, Part One |
I don't know why some people think that ranching, hunting, camping, etc. are only manly activities. My very femenine daughter, who happens to live in Oregon, is a better hunter than most men I know. She can outshoot most of her male friends. It has to be difficult for someone who is mixed gendered to live with people who are predudiced or unwilling to understand. Good start to this story, Hope to follow up with part two. Good luck. |
| 2012-03-20 22:35:00 |
Bitch for a Night |
Different kind of story. Need to mix these dogs with Willie the Dog in another story. Love to have him tell us all the other stories. Thanks for this one. |
| 2012-03-20 22:03:39 |
Two Wishes. |
Oh, and the second wish will be for $100 million dollars just in case. |
| 2012-03-20 22:02:38 |
Two Wishes. |
Can you please give me Darius' phone number? I want to wish for a lot more years with my wonderful wife. I have everything else that is important. Just more time. |
| 2012-03-20 21:20:09 |
Foster dad |
Very well done. Good description of the action. A nice short story from your memories and a great addition to your list. Thanks. |
| 2012-03-20 15:58:38 |
Math Tutor 2 |
Lucky twice. Don't push your luck too far. After you described Sheryl's "flabby" pussy, I am more thankful that my wife is older and in better shape. I see that no math work got done this time. No more need for a tutor. |
| 2012-03-20 15:43:30 |
WIfes birthday party at her salon |
Interesting story. Need to check your spelling a little better, but at least you presented it. Good job. |
| 2012-03-20 15:15:13 |
CAW #9 - The Most Painful Gift |
I enjoyed the story knowing the characters were fictional, It was well written and easy to read. As in most stories, we don't have to get too deep into the emotional or psychological aspects of the characters. Just enough to lay a background on the storyline. Some couples stay together if only because of the investment in time and money of a business or lifestyle. Some because of an emotional need to belong and not be alone. Each reader can draw his own conclusions. Another good job. |
| 2012-03-18 20:45:43 |
Moving In |
Just a note to other readers, His other story Mountain Rescue is just as hot. Good reading and perfectly legal. I know, How boring. |
| 2012-03-18 20:41:37 |
Moving In |
Very good story and easy to read. Really good story line too. This has to be on top of most mens fantasies. Technically even touching the 14 yeaar old falls under molestation and possible attempted rape charges. class A felony. However since this is a fantasy story it never happened. Love the idea and would love to live in this fantasy. Thanks for writing this. |
| 2012-03-18 16:59:30 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 3 |
Douggie. You do this perfect. I can't find any errors in spelling or punctuation. Your descriptions of their sex act is very sensual and complete without ever being mechanical. You really bring out the emotion of young love and the first time, at least as I think I remember it. Excellent story so far. Many scenarios to follow, with her parents, the bully, full penetration, etc. Just don;t get her pregnant the first time. Keep it a sensuous love story growing over time. Good work. |
| 2012-03-18 13:10:57 |
Mountain Rescue |
Very good story. I would love to live in the mountains like that again. I did when I was younger. But not with two hot women like that. I might still be there. Very easy to read, good layout, and enticing storyline. Thanks for this one. |
| 2012-03-18 12:31:19 |
Willie the Dog - the Full Story |
Oh my god blue I never laughed so hard reading a story. This was terrific. You almost think like a dog. This one should have been in the contest. Imagine if our dogs could tell us about our neighbors. Might make for many good storys. Please do more like this. Thanks for the laugh. |
| 2012-03-18 00:01:06 |
Verde County |
Great as a sex story. Glad it was fiction. Imagine the sexual harrassment and abuse of power suits. You are right, Most law enforcement officers would never act like this. Imagine it? Maybe. It did sound like a woman telling the story. With the embarrassment and shame. Nice job. Part two in Estes Park or Grand Junction with her friend. |
| 2012-03-17 23:32:15 |
A Chance Encounter? |
Why no comments on a good story. Very sensual and with the surprise ending a very good read. You really brought out the emotions and feelings of both women. The guilt with Beth, and the hurt with Katie. They say once a woman tries another woman, they might not go back. Oh, I hope not. |
| 2012-03-17 23:01:04 |
Math Tutor |
What, no other comments on a good story. In my college days I did flunk Algebra, twice. I needed a tutor like this and it might have been different. I did ace Geometry and Calculus. And in the rest of my life I never found a need for Algebra. Waste of time. I would sign up in a minute if I could get this tutor. Thanks for the treat. Good story. |
| 2012-03-16 21:35:32 |
Friends with Benefits pt1 |
Why is it that if a girl has sex with several guys, she is labeled a whore. But if a guy has multiple partners, he is a stud. Unfair labeling. At least they both have experience, like in this story. Great sex. The ex girl friend has nothing to say who he is with. She left him. Open game. |
| 2012-03-16 18:10:23 |
A GUEST FOR A WEEK -- Chapter 02: Tuesday's Temptations |
seltra. Very good story. What male in his right mind, (The lower one), would pass up an opportunity like this? Hot! Well written and very enticing. Please write more. This is a sexy story well worth reading. |
| 2012-03-16 17:24:55 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 2 |
You got it perfect this time. Good story with No spelling or grammer errors. Your descriptions of the couple having sex are very thorough, without being repetitive. Very sensual and romantic From my own experience, I seem to remember being very nervous and anxious the first time. Your characters are very relaxed and comfortable together. Many ways to go from here. Maybe a confrontation with the bully at the river, where the other girl joins in and attacks them, and James either has to watch, or defend his girl. Keep writing. Best work yet. |
| 2012-03-16 09:34:04 |
Dinner Date |
Not bad for your first story. I know the extra letter inserts are from a problem in posting. I just tried to read around them. Good story line of a man with two sexy females. Most mens fantasy. Maybe a little brief in some spots, and jumps off topic, but not much. Good start. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-16 09:12:59 |
More than best buds 1 |
If tying a paper ball to a baloon and lighting it is a killer party I don't know what you call lame. At least you wrote a story for the first time. Not too bad. Just that Casey walking through a double locked door would freak me out a little. Not to mention getting caught with a dick in your mouth. You left it with a scene that does make you want to know what next? Is she bringing her girlfriend? Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-15 18:32:17 |
Sex&SexY.x2 |
Really? A man with a 12@1/2 inch dick and she has to fake it. I guess the rest of us men do not stand a chance of helping. Sex is still a lot more than just a dick. Thats why women can have sex with another woman and NO dick. Love to read the next part. Her husbands car? Her Fathers? Her Mothers????? |
| 2012-03-15 18:22:10 |
Glamour |
Very nice. Good story idea too. The interaction between the two women was well presented and exciting to read. Hot!!! Would love to be a photographers assistant and prep a beautiful woman for a photoshoot. Can't wait for her next appointment. |
| 2012-03-15 18:10:55 |
The Late Bloomer and The PilotÂ’s Wife |
Very good story. Obviously no major spelling or grammatical errors. I like the way you developed the character from shy, to willing pupil, to master student of seduction. Just a note. For better reading, break up your spoken parts into separate sentences, like on some of the other sites. I know that sometimes when posting, it does not come out like you printed it. I like the story and the declaration we are all learners, not masters. Hope you write more. Good job. |
| 2012-03-15 12:14:12 |
New Neighbor: Part 3 |
Spring break is coming up. Please do part four. Is the empty lot next door for sale? Maybe you might get another new neighbor. I hope you start another story too. Good writer. "A" in English Lit. |
| 2012-03-15 11:41:02 |
Lightning ch 1 |
Interesting story concept, but you sentence structure is a little rough. A few spelling and grammer errors too. Break up you paragraphs and separate them with spacing to make it easier to read. Some of your thoughts jump around so try to think through the idea and make it a little clearer. You have characters that can take this story in many different directions. Continue and with patience you can make a great story. Thanks for a new approach. |
| 2012-03-14 18:59:40 |
Black Neighbor Baby Sitter Part Four |
I liked your series of stories. At least everything is consensual. Good detail in your descriptions of the two having sex. Hot scenes. Please do not push the little daughter too much. Might be crossing the line of decency. Just my opinion. I love the rest of the story. Keep going. |
| 2012-03-14 16:45:11 |
How her stepdaddy became just 'daddy' PART ONE |
I did not mean i did not like the story. I just did not like the character of the person you present You did a good job of making them real. Love to resd more. |
| 2012-03-14 15:26:06 |
Kim's adventure |
You know when you stop to think about it, it is cheaper this way than spending a hundred for dinner and drinks, and the most expensive--gasoline--. And a sure thing. Nooo I still like the old fashion way with a little romance and loving. Not to mention an hour or so of foreplay. I will keep it like it is, even if my wife is ten times as expensive. |
| 2012-03-14 15:05:21 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 1 |
Here in Belize and Guatemala, our schools are called college at what is nomally called high school in the US. University here is the same as college there. |
| 2012-03-14 15:01:45 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 1 |
meforyou. Another great story. Good layout and easy to read. Also no obvious mistakes in spelling or grammer. I like how you put in the emotion, anxiety. and nervousness of first time love. I just wish I could still remember my first time. Ha Ha Most of your stories have this trait of feelings. Good job. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-14 09:23:59 |
How her stepdaddy became just 'daddy' PART ONE |
Very good start to your story. I may not like the characters as you portray them. Thats because you described them so well. Wish Dan would have the courage to bust Gregs nose once. Bullies should not always win. Good format and easy to read. I would love to read more of this story. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-13 18:58:48 |
my sister: then & now |
Wow. Hot story. I could picture this as I read. My little sister is still gorgeous and she is now 62. Never sex, but I could still imagine her in a hot tub. Fantasies at least never quit. |
| 2012-03-12 11:43:06 |
SEX AND TRAGEDY: My Story: Part 1 |
Meforyou. That was a well written story. Different perspective than normal. I like the fact that finally the man gets caught and punished. More real life. You mixed the feelings of doubt and attraction very well. Very descriptive sex scenes. The fears of Tina are what many young girls experience, when involved in incest, and last a long time. You covered a lot of emotions in this story. Good job. |
| 2012-03-11 23:46:29 |
Fiance's Encounter With A Pony |
I think I and a hundred other men would love to live in this fantasy. THREE beautiful women and a ranch. WOW. I love your whole series of stories. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-11 19:18:18 |
Sleeping Monica |
Ditto again. You must have proofread you work very well, or you are perfect in your typing, no obvious mistakes in spelling or grammer. Love your stories, even if it is not my personal taste. Your love and passion is as real as mine. No difference. More! |
| 2012-03-11 19:12:03 |
Monica's Birthday |
Another well written story. It is so descriptive, it is almost as if you are narrating the action as it's happening, as opposed to making it up as you are writing. It also reveals the attraction and passion you have for Monica. I would feel the same in my relation with my wife. Very erotic. Thanks again. |
| 2012-03-11 18:46:08 |
At The Park |
I found nothing wrong with it. A well written story, easy to read, and nice detail. look forward to reading more from you. Thanks |
| 2012-03-10 21:06:13 |
Sweet Sex |
OK I have to admit I am a chocolate addict. I like chocolate as much as sex. Now put the two together like this.....ORGASM. Also at my age I could eat more chocolate than pussy. Well let's see about that. |
| 2012-03-10 15:00:33 |
Teds revenge |
Ha Ha. What a great funny story. I love your comment about how many police could show up for a call like that. I have had to respond with the police on several calls to assist. I can just picture this scene. I have seen some strange ones, but this one would have had me laughing myself silly. Good story. Keep it up. |
| 2012-03-08 16:37:58 |
Mile High Loving 2 |
Another hot story. You need to be on a relocation flight where they fly the plane to a hub where it is needed and NO passengers. Lots of time to play. I do need to check out the stewardess better. More |
| 2012-03-08 16:29:07 |
Mile High Love 1 |
Ok On my next flight I am going to check the stewardess' fingers. maybe she can stir my drink fo me. Hot |
| 2012-03-08 16:01:33 |
Cousins Cumming Part 1 |
My only comment is that the boys should be a year or two older. Jacob at 8 is a little too young to start this. !3 and 14 is good age for the two of them and 11or 12 for Jacob. Just my preference. |
| 2012-03-08 15:46:47 |
A GUEST FOR A WEEK -- Chapter 01: Monday's Madness |
Very good start to this story. Many different ways to go from here. You put in enough detail to keep it interesting. No major errors and easy to read and follow. Thanks for starting this story line. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-06 20:31:29 |
Favorite Aunt |
Thank you for a story of "mature adults". Nice to hear that love and passion still exist for other couples in the golden years. Really enjoyed reading your story. Hope you do continue this plot. |
| 2012-03-06 15:06:15 |
Pregnant..Hot...BrokeDown |
Very well written. Nice job of mixing the passion of sex with love and caring. Good romantic story. Hooray for viagra. Miricle pill. |
| 2012-03-05 20:25:21 |
A Step Brother's Kiss |
Great. A little technical and mechanical in description, but how else can you describe in words the incredible feelings and sensations of mind blowing sex. You did a great job of putting into words the passions that come to the surface when you find the right partner, even if it is with a family member, as done in many of these great stories. I can't do it as well as you did. Real talent. |
| 2012-03-04 16:06:40 |
Wife's Encounter with Jake |
Another great story. Thank you. Very well written and spaced making it an easy read. Glad she still needed her man. |
| 2012-03-04 15:41:12 |
Bree 3 - A Trip To The Mountains |
Now you have done it! You just made men obsolete. Any women reading this will agree with you that no man can match this. Your descriptions are so well done that you can actually feel the sensations and emotions. Well written. Not just remove clothes, stick it in, done! Keep up the good work. |
| 2012-03-03 14:07:49 |
My early years: Part one: Mary's lesson |
Do not feel bad. I barely remember my first, because it was so long ago. But I do like the story. Your choice of words made it sound like the thoughts of a young boy and girl. Later we spoil it with all the cunts and dicks and other names. Still nice to reminice about the first time. Virginity, male or female, only happens once. I wish I could remember mine. HAHA |
| 2012-03-03 13:28:47 |
The River |
I have always enjoyed stories about New Mexico Been through there a few times. Stories like this make me want to go back. Love to hear more stories of the Wild Bunch. I like the way you post your stories, very easy to read. Enough detail to put you right in the scene. Good job. Want more. |
| 2012-03-03 11:03:55 |
The Wife's Dare |
Thanks for fixing the quotes whoever did. Reads better |
| 2012-03-02 18:16:48 |
Bree 1 - Kate |
Great story. Easy to read. Good job of taking a fantasy and making it sound real. I still remeber my youth on a ranch. Girls really do love horses. I think many men would be jealous if they knew we came in second place. I am anxious to read the rest of the stories. |
| 2012-03-01 21:49:41 |
Hell Hath No Fury...Ch5 |
Thanks for the next chapter. I thought this was the last. Now I am in suspense again. Very well doe on the end of each Chapter. Keeps you hooked for the next. Very believable story too. Could happen in real life. Ok now do #6 |
| 2012-03-01 19:42:25 |
Full Circle - Chapter Eight |
Please Please Please do Chap 9 (The attack) and Chap10 (pack and move) so we do not have to die of suspense. This is the most exciting story I have read. I love the high-tek arms and ordinance you use in your story. Love to see the adhesive rounds used. Could make for some comical scenes. |