||Interstate Innocense pt1
||Just flat out loved it. Conjures up very vivid memories for me. The situation is simple, but it all comes to life because the characters are believable and easy to relate to. Like Dan, it took some patience on the part of a more knowledgeable girl to get me going the very first time I started to go beyond kissing. You made both kids feel very real.
||Your assuming that you're comment is correct, but your missing some information. If your not too busy, go back and check the first comment in the entire thread. Your going to be surprised.
I actually do know the difference and apologized for that mistake right after I read through the story when I posted it. When an author writes a story of some length, there are going to be instances when some things slip by their notice. Usually, I wait a while after finishing before posting. A few days time gives me a better chance to correct mistakes. This one I posted right after I finished.
I didn't need the grammar lesson, just a better proofreader.
||The Doctor was In
You seem to have gathered a few haters for some reason. I agree with you that a couple minor errors are not a distraction in a story written for fun. I sure hope so, because I make little mistakes all the time. I proofread most of my stuff pretty thoroughly and still manage to not see a few of them until after I've posted.
Please keep writing. The things you create have far more value than the picky criticisms ever will. Many of us who write here may not be literary geniuses, but I like to think we entertain people with our stories. If only great writers got to post on sites like this most of us would be deprived of the opportunity to share and entertain and there wouldn't be very many stories for readers to enjoy.
Your work is very readable and fun. Your ratings are pretty high for a reason. Most people who have read your stories like them.
||The Tree House
||I can tell the author was just writing a "grabber" at the end to get people curious about the next installment. It fell kind of flat, but those kinds of things are hard to do sometimes. Dropping a total swerve like that is rarely going to work, but I have seen a few times it did.
Some of the comments in this thread are pretty harsh and unwarranted. The story didn't go to my favorites list, but compared to some of the "unreadable" crap out there it was just fine. The author's taste is their taste. No need to sermonize if it doesn't line up with your own. Just skip their stories.
Keep writing, KTM, You have some very loyal readers, and some like me who will at least take a peek at anything you write.
||I'm kind of going to write about whomever I want to write about.
Liam had a lot of growing up to do over the course of the story, but his behavior with Jane is pretty consistent with fourteen-year-old boy behavior. And overall, Liam is fairly nice. He's just thick when it comes to understanding Jane's reluctance.
If I only write about saints the stories will lack much for drama and character growth. Also, most guys wouldn't see themselves in the fourteen-year-old saint. And most girls wouldn't recognize their adolescent boyfriend in the character, either. I really think the argument that nearly breaks them up is pretty much a slice of life for an awful lot of teens.
I'm sorry you didn't like the story, but thanks for the kind words about my writing. The lead character in "Art and Life" is NOT a nice guy, so you might want to skip that one. The guy in the story I'll finish and publish later this month is a really sweet guy. You might like that one.
||Yep, somebody bombed me pretty good.
||I wrote this one kind of fast when I was thinking about a girl I had known back in junior high and high school.
I was in a hurry to post it, because I enjoyed writing this one. I did notice a couple spelling mistakes: "you're" instead of "your" twice! And a handful of misplaced commas popped out when I looked at it after I posted. Hope that wasn't distracting for you.
||Twincest Sabrina and Katrina's Story Part 4
||I'm enjoying this series. Hope you're having as much fun writing them as I've had reading them.
||I am also very hesitant about leaving any "real world" contact info on this site.
Stories like the ones I'm publishing here are not the type of work I will eventually try to get published. This is where I put the things that I just want to share with people who might enjoy them. These stories are churned out in about a week where the things I try to get published in the mainstream are polished and re-written for years. I still put heart and effort into these stories, but there's no way I can put in the time on them to try and make them truly professional.
||I'm really glad that people are connecting to Penny and Vince. While they represent the dream of finding your soulmate in your very first attempt at romance they are also exactly the kind of kids I grew up with and chose for friends. There were plenty of other personality types in tiny towns like theirs in the 80's, but kids much like them and Pete were the ones I hung out with.
I respectfully disagree with the poster who thinks they talk too much like hicks. I don't know if that person spent much time in the dying little towns along the Wisconsin/UP border 30 years ago, but I grew up in one. Rural poverty was/is very common in those areas. You would hear plenty of the speech patterns and expressions used in this story. Odd thing was, one little town might even be very different from the next as far as income levels and attitudes. And that would be reflected in the way people spoke.
||Thanks for all the compliments, folks. I have the next story in the Campton (Penny) series about half done. It focuses on Pete. There's some Penny and Vince in it, but I always intended Pete to be the central character in the follow-up. It's kind of why there's a lot of him in the Penny/Vince story. Pete's story has more story before the "action," but I guess that's kind of my style--as much as I have developed one yet.
Campton is fictional, but my first HS girlfriend lived in a town very much like it--and was a slightly older version of Penny. I never got along with the local guys (because I took one of their few girls), but I've come to learn to identify with them through the years. The characters are fictional as well, but quite real to me.
I am working on a sequel to the Benny/Gabby/Natasha story as well, but this series has my heart and mind occupied right now. Other stories and series are on the back-burner for a week or so.
||By the way, I encourage anyone who has read this story to pop over to msnyder's profile and read his story entitled "Urchin." Read the rst of his work, some of it appears to be highly rated.
It will up his readership numbers and also clarify to anyone who has read both that while the stories have similar titles and tell of a man adopting and then romancing a young girl, they are drastically different tales.
You're way off base with that. I had never seen or heard of your story until about fifteen minutes ago. I clicked your profile and read it when I saw your post. They're similar in general theme and title, but very different in most every other way. Our writing styles and the personalities of our characters are very different. And those are the things that make a story.
This site has hundreds of stories about men developing a romantic relationship with a stepdaughter/stepsister. Hell, mine is actually about a couple developing a romantic relationship with a young girl. Step-incest is one of the basic themes of the genre. My take on it is my own. Yours is your own. The accusation of plagiarism is simply not justified.
||GOOD KARMA 3: RANDI
||Well, I was worried when you went that young with the story, but it kind of made sense for Zeb. And you were very nice to the girl. This is still totally a boy fantsay, but I think a lot of girls sure wsh their first time had been like that. I'm kind of a Zeb/Brandi fan, but I can see where hes headed toawrd Mindi the whole time. Nice job on these stories.
||GOOD KARMA 2: CYNDI
||I agree with the last comment. Keep him sweet with this girl. I like your grown up stories better, but your tenn stuff is usually pretty sweet, too. .
I didn't really like the "Bad Boy Phase" one you wrote, because I hate stories about teens being abused. But I like you're writing, and you're usually nice to the younger girls.
||AGENTS OF SHIELD 3
||You might draw some heat because your categories include male/females, and you don't have a male with multiple females. My guess is you misread it.
Very good story, but not one that will get a lot of hits due to length. I think you should maybe write romance novels or something. They can't be much more work than what you put into your long series.
||AGENTS OF SHIELD: Chapter One
||This feels like TV romantic comedy but with sex.
||AGENTS OF SHIELD 2
||Fun series. You write girls well.