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| 2013-04-15 22:31:25 |
An Ebony Wife's first step to sluthood |
Hi Caramel, I had enjoyed reading this story. You're an intelligent beautiful woman with a wonderful talent for writing. I loved how you told the story at a moderate pace with vivid details, seducing the mind... forcing me to see through the eyes of the main character and feeling aroused from reading this! |
| 2013-03-05 18:38:51 |
My Love |
Well, I had enjoyed reading your first shared story on here. I like how the story flowed in the beginning, but I felt it was a little rushed toward to end. I like how you have written parts of the story from Clare and Dean points of view. I felt that the sex scene was decent, but it could had be more drawn out with more sexual foreplay. Anon reader did said some good key points about it. I would love for you to continue writing some more wonderful stories. |
| 2013-02-21 01:09:15 |
Young Awakenings |
Hi taboobabe, I had enjoyed reading this story so far. I like how you grabbed my attention with the actions and details of what was taking place in the setting. The build-up was great in this story. You did a great job describing what was going on in the mind of a 12 year old mind, observing things that he didn't notice before beginning to hit puberty. I would suspect that the aunt kind of knew that Cameron has masturbated to the pictures of her on the phone, but she wanted to tease him a little to see how he would react. I definitely would like to see a continuation of this story. |
| 2013-01-04 20:46:38 |
Charity Graduates 3 : Hope and Change |
This was a pretty interesting chapter! Charity plans to kill two birds with one stone with running for class president and get good looks on college applications. It was amusing to see how Charity and Angie work to get their votes. |
| 2013-01-04 20:04:19 |
Charity Graduates 2 : Getting Even |
Hi badbabysitter, I like the way that you displayed the action in this chapter. I like that the trio had a clever plan to get back at the V.P. It was kind of funny how the trio got their payback and humiliated her. I can't believe how emotional the trio was at the end of the ordeal. |
| 2012-12-31 02:10:43 |
Marie's Christmas |
Redlust, I have enjoyed reading this story. It kind of remind me of the movie, Ant Bully, which the main character is magically shrunken down to the size of the ants. He had to help the ants out and would be turned back to normal size afterwards.
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| 2012-12-02 23:02:56 |
The Librarian and the Bartender, Part two |
Hi Hornypixy, I'm had enjoyed reading part 2 of The Librarian and the Bartender as well as part 1. I felt that the narration in this part was unbelievable in the terms of capturing the details of the action in the bar. I liked how you drew out the fantasy from part 1 to reality in part 2. The sexual scene was hot as hell in this one, but I really like that Emily was referred as two different people in this one. |
| 2012-11-20 23:37:23 |
The Librarian and the Bartender |
Wow hornypixy, this is a wonderful romance story that you have written. There is so much imagery in this story. After reading this story, it seems more like a magical fairy tale, with how Brandon and Emily would end up meeting each other to ending up to being in a romantic relationship. I also love how you would write and tell readers what each character were thinking and feeling from their point of view. |
| 2012-11-16 23:16:47 |
Charity At Work 4 : Learning the Hard Way |
I felt that part 4 was a great continuation to part 3. Yes I thought that part four was dark chapter as well, but I like that Charity has to deal with some bad moments in her life. This is the first time that I have seen some character growth for Charity through out the series, where she is learning some hard life lessons. Keep up the good work. |
| 2012-11-15 23:09:54 |
Charity At Work 2 : Do Fries Come With That? |
Hi badbabysitter, even though I liked part 2, I felt that you rush through part 2 a little. It seem to be a little too short to me. I enjoy charity adventure at her second job, but it was too fast placed and ended too quickly. This is more of a filler type of chapter. |
| 2012-11-15 22:57:58 |
Charity At Work 3: Retail Therapy |
I enjoyed reading part 3 of Charity At Work. I felt that this chapter was well -paced and loved the action in this one. |
| 2012-11-04 21:05:10 |
Candy From Strangers 2 : The View |
badbabysitter, I had enjoyed reading part 2 of Candy From Strangers as well. It is interesting to see what will happen next. |
| 2012-11-04 20:47:14 |
Candy From Strangers 1 : Yardwork |
badbabysitter, I had enjoyed reading part 1 of Candy From Strangers. I feel that this is going to be a great series as well. |
| 2012-11-04 20:05:37 |
Candy From Strangers : Prologue |
badbabysister, I like the insight from the prologue that you have written. Nice setting with a quite a history. I can't wait to read part one of Candy From Strangers. |
| 2012-10-27 20:08:26 |
Faith , Hope and Charity 5: Anal Detention |
Wow, what a way to end the school year! Sooner or later someone would've figure out what Faith, Hope, and Charity were doing around the school. I felt that this was a great chapter as well. I like how you found a clever way to humiliate the trio for what they have done during the school year. |
| 2012-10-19 23:51:41 |
Faith, Hope and Charity 4 : Hot For Teacher |
badbabysitter, part 4 was a great addition to the Faith, Hope, and Charity story. I figured that a chapter like this was coming sooner or later even through you had gave readers hints. I like that you were consistent with this part as the previous ones. The action was great and well as the details that went with it. I can't wait until you post a part 5! Well done! |
| 2012-10-12 23:30:20 |
The Cherry Shop |
Hi Dizzyworks673, I felt that you had written a nice decent, but chilling tale. I love how the tale was told about the cherry shop. The ritual part of the story seem kind of weird to me, because the way the girls were used in the ritual. I felt that this part of the story could have been done differently. Overall, this is an excellent story and I have enjoyed reading it. |
| 2012-10-11 22:34:36 |
Sister Catherine's Nighmare CAW 13 |
As a talented writer in my opinion, it seems that you had to dig down a bit to write such a wonderful, but yet disturbing tale. You definitely would have readers feel some strong emotions from reading this story. |
| 2012-09-30 20:28:17 |
Faith, Hope and Charity :1: Beeder |
Yes, we finally get to see what happens at school. I like this introductory chapter that we, the readers, get introduced to new characters and school life. Overall, I felt that this is a well written chapter with some new beginnings and anticipation to come. |
| 2012-09-30 20:15:01 |
Faith, Hope and Charity : 2: Smoking in the Boys Room |
I see that Faith, Hope, and Charity are getting to know the football team a little better. I like that this is a chapter that leads the reader to the point that Charity is finally gets into a relationship with a guy from school. Of course the action in the boys room was hot as well. |
| 2012-09-30 20:02:18 |
Faith, Hope and Charity : 3: Charity Breaks Down |
In this chapter, I see that Charity had to deal with some issues and pressure in being in a relationship with a person. This chapter also shows that many people like Charity sometime have to think about the other person and try to make a compromise, or decisions on what we do when they're in a relationship. In overall, I really enjoy reading this chapter as well. |
| 2012-09-30 00:17:26 |
Charity Starts At Home : Chapter 2 : Entertaining Guests |
Hi badbabysitter, I loved how descriptive you was in this chapter with the action. I'm not big on grammar, so I won't say anything on that. This chapter was well written and thought out. I will have to read chapter 3 to find out what will happen next. |
| 2012-09-29 23:04:36 |
Charity Starts At Home: Chapter 1 : Mother-Daughter Reunion |
Hi badbabysitter, I loved this introductory chapter of this story. I felt that it is well written and a great beginning for the later chapters to come. ( I know that you had already written them, but I'm going to read them when I get a chance.) |
| 2012-08-29 00:12:11 |
Mom Let Me Fuck You |
Erotical, this is a pretty decent dark fantasy type of story you have written here. I like that you were pretty descriptive in this one, especially about the characters. |
| 2012-08-28 02:01:19 |
ON ROYAL PALM ESATE Part One: Happenings between a man and a woman |
Erotical, I like how this story had started out so far. I love that Renee is forced to move to a new environment where she begins to learn about various things that were kept from her. meforyou couldn't have said it any better! I definitely am ready for a part two. |
| 2012-08-28 01:23:23 |
Yukio's Adventures Part 5 |
HI JadeM, you never seem to disappoint. I love part 5 of this series. I see the Yukio is still continuing with her adventures. I see that she had a warm welcome from some people at school with her welcome to Texas type of party. In part five, I like that she get to know a little about her neighbor a little, but at the same time, we are learn a little more about Yukio. The sex scene with Hillary and Tonya was a nice way to start the chapter. I wonder where would her next adventures would lead her to and what other experiences she had in her past? |
| 2012-06-20 23:08:31 |
A Sexy Subject Part 2 A Lesson |
Yes sexynicole69, I definitely enjoyed reading part 2. I see that you have reveal some more background info in this one. Another excellent scene with Mr. Burkle and Trish. Two visits in one day and this is only the first day of tutoring......hmmm lol ...I wonder what other lessons Mr. Burkle have in store for Trish.? |
| 2012-06-04 00:16:48 |
CAW#11 - Cold Winters Day (re-editted)II |
Well this story kind of have that cold eerie feeling to it. Well as a reader, I know this female, who is 5'7" and 103 pounds had to go through some kind of abuse in her past. But, I wasn't expecting her to do what she did to the guy and the other 4 victims who didn't knew about her past. The ending was so unexpected, but I kind of like it. I know that this is a CAW 11 entry, but I would love a continuation of this story, or a pre sequel to give the reader more insight into her past. (I hope that you're understanding what I"m saying.) |
| 2012-06-04 00:01:16 |
CAW#11 - Cold Winters Day (re-editted)II |
Well this story kind of have that cold eerie feeling to it. Well as a reader, I know this female, who is 5'7" and 103 pounds had to go through some kind of abuse in her past. But, I wasn't expecting her to do what she did to the guy and the other 4 victims who didn't knew about her past. The ending was so unexpected, but I kind of like it. I know that this is a CAW 11 entry, but I would love a continuation of this story, or a pre sequel to give the reader more insight into her past. (I hope that you're understanding what I"m saying.) |
| 2012-05-30 00:32:21 |
JESINTA 6 - 16a (Boxing Gym) |
twistedsister, I loved that you took Jesinta's focus away from the biker gang and the v.p. for a minute. I see that you had Jesinta introduced us to a new character in the school. The oral scene with Jesinta and Jimmy was awesome as well. I am liking the direction that this series has taken so far. |
| 2012-05-17 02:03:51 |
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Wow, you have a little nice sex scene in this part! I felt this part was pretty short. I figured that Jessinta would had hung out with the biker gang most of the time or doing some exploring and make some money like she did in part 2 and 3 of the story. Like I said this part is good, but it was too short in my opinion. I definitely voted positive on every part so far. |
| 2012-05-17 01:44:29 |
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I wonder what Jessinta will do now that she got suspended? I see that you make it easier to read, even through I didn't had any problems reading this. I curious to see what will happen next. This story is developing pretty well so far. |
| 2012-05-16 23:50:30 |
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Hi Twistedsister, this is a very interesting story that you had begun to write. I loved the fact that the main character, Jessinta, is a young girl that has a quite of few issues that many girls her age that don't have to deal with. The way the story is written, many readers including myself are getting a strong emotional vibe from reading this story. The lack of love from her parents and having to move from place to place, causing her to adventure off elsewhere. When she discovered the biker club hideout, it brings back good memories about the past. She looks to the bikers as her family, because they allowed her to spend time with them and look after her. The bikers showing her love that she couldn't get from home. Excellent written story so far! |
| 2012-04-18 02:20:00 |
My Best Studies Ever - finale |
Hi snowleopard3200, I felt that this was a well written finale. I liked the fact that this part of the series, you just focused on Benjamin and Samantha. It shows how much that they had learned from each other and how much they really like each other. I didn't expect Ben to ask Samantha to marry him after she expressed her feelings about him. It was an unexpected ending for me, but it was a very good ending. Oh, I also loved the vast amount of details in this part of the series as well. |
| 2012-04-03 22:28:07 |
My little pink friend |
Damn Amy, I love this story. You actually have a story to tell people when or if you show people your little friend. I loved how you were describing yourself masturbating. You are a woman who knows what she wants sexually and not afraid to do a little exploring. |
| 2012-04-03 22:14:14 |
My Neighbour wore nylons |
Hi Amy, thank you for telling this story. I really like the story. I wouldn't mind having a Nancy in my life at that age. |
| 2012-04-02 01:22:51 |
My first infidelity |
Hi Amy, this is a nice little story. Sounds like you had some fun in your day. I wish that you could have some details on the other girls. I would love to see your 34ds. |
| 2012-03-30 01:32:08 |
Friday Night |
Wow Amy that was hot! |
| 2012-03-30 00:59:49 |
Spoilt Brat |
Hi Amy, this the first story that I had read from you. I thought that it was a decent little story. I not going talk about grammar, because you write better than I can. The way that you describe the sex scenes in the story were great. Also the plot was great, but there were some things that I felt that were lacking here. I felt that you should had let the story build up. I would had try to the tell the readers more about the relationship between Freddie's Mom and Dad. For ex. how or when the relationship began to go downhill. Maybe you could of tell the reader when Freddie's Mom and Dad met. Maybe a little more background on the parents. You should of had some more details about each of the characters like facials features, etc. I will pm you some more on this story. |
| 2012-03-24 02:05:01 |
My Best Studies Ever Part 3 |
Hi Snowleopard3200, part 3 is a wonderful addition to My Best Studies Ever series. I felt it was a success. I like the interesting, but unexpected events in this one. I wasn't expecting Ben's aunt to be a part of this one. The reader get to know a little more about Ben's aunt. I also like that some secrets are revealed in this part. The amount of sexual foreplay was nice as well in this one. Nice little cliff hanger at the end. I wouldn't mind reading a part 4! |
| 2012-03-18 00:54:20 |
A Super Life - Chapter 2 |
This chapter was hot as hell. Great as usual. I loved the adventure that Eriko gets into in this chapter. Nice cliff hanger at the end of the chapter. I hope there will be a chapter 3. |
| 2012-03-06 02:10:54 |
A Super Life |
Wow JadeM, your imagination must been working overtime in this one. This story could be one of those amine hentai movies. This story shows how wild of an imagination you have and your creativity. I do like the main character Eriko. I like that she is not afraid to it admit her liking of sex and goes beyond some boundaries that some seem forbidden to most. I also liked the way that this was an adventure for Eriko. The way that you describe the sex in this story was pretty amazing. Mr. Hunter is a little weird, but I glad that he got what he deserved. I couldn't tell you want I would could change or what I didn't liked about it. I got to say, what an excellent written story by you. |
| 2012-03-02 23:31:45 |
My Best Studies Ever part 2 |
I can't wait for part 3! |