Comments from Cryonic
|2012-02-12 08:45:35||Sweet Dreams Part 4 - Watching the Watcher||One other note. I have the Megan plotline pretty well mapped out (it was originally supposed to be part 2 actually, but it was too in depth and too long term after the long buildup in part 1). However, the Sandy plotline seems to be evolving much differently than I had planned. I haven't decided which way to go with it, or even to continue it much at all. I'd like your thoughts about the direction you would like it to go.|
|2012-02-18 09:40:09||Sweet Dreams Part 4 - Watching the Watcher||If I can only get 800 reads in over a week, I don't think I'm likely to get millions to read it. Just finishing up part 5 now, which is far a far more relaxing episode.
Happy you enjoyed it.
|2012-02-21 12:17:25||Sweet Dreams Part 4 - Watching the Watcher||All comments are appreciated. Actually, an interaction I just wrote for part 6 helps explain some things, but I will allude to it here:
1. She is the daughter of a sex genie. For her, she is exploring a natural side of her.
2. He is still very unsure of himself, and is still growing here. He is a romantic at heart, and wants to make sure his intentions are viewed properly, but he also has baggage from being shunned so many times, baggage Jeannette does not carry herself.
3. The beginning of the next part (5), helps tone down Jeannette a tad, but part 7 as I am thinking it is leaning will do more so, as the focus shifts a bit.
In essence, you are absolutely right. He's still awkward, and trying to figure himself out. She is completely in her comfort zone.
And Part 6 starts having her reacting a bit more to him learning things as well. I only have 7 pages of it done, but I am waking him up. Last scene of part 5 is setting that transition...
|2012-03-02 22:48:20||Tales of a Secret Sex Writer, Chapter 9||Nicely done. Great story.
Actually, I was thinking about the logistics of the harem, and it caught my attention. First of all, at that point, I would personally worry less about the pill, and just get snipped. More fun for everyone, far less worry.
Then I started thinking about the pill. Most girls in a family get the same cycle. If you have each girl take a week though during the month, you get a month of variety. Every week, one leaves, a new one returns. It gives you a natural spice to it, and over a month, everyone can enjoy everyone.
Then again, I overthink things....
Welcome back. I guess that explains why you may have been so busy the past couple of years. I imagine that kind of lifestyle can be draining.
I enjoyed some of the little details too, but that is for a pm.
Thanks again, looking forward to your next inspired story.
|2012-04-14 19:56:44||Sweet Dreams Part 6 - The Light From Yonder Window Breaks||Sorry all. I've been absolutely slammed the last month, and I haven't even had a chance to read everything. I need to reread everything to catch up, and then get back into everything. I had 5 pages started, but I need to get my momentum back.|