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| 2013-02-23 05:37:18 |
Asuka's Lesson |
If you fix your wall of text problem people might read it |
| 2013-02-20 21:43:30 |
Sex with my cousin |
Watch out for the wall of text break up your work a bit more 8 think |
| 2013-02-05 23:09:05 |
Man of the House PT 6 and a half |
For the record I eluded to him taking long business trips in foreign countries... at least I think I did... and if I didn't I meant to, so he was already swinging that way... The Father that is... |
| 2013-01-11 21:53:19 |
Moms Club the First Saturday |
really really need to work on your structure it makes it damn hard to read.. |
| 2012-11-28 00:19:06 |
Man of the House Pt6 |
The wild A's are a problem that everyone is having at least most of everyone is having... not my fault... and I didn't put them there... quite annoying I agree... please try and look past them. |
| 2012-11-21 00:55:35 |
Man of the House Pt6 |
You say this now at part6? Of course there is minor sex in a minor chapter... Go read the first 5 chapters... This is motive not premise... and of course storytelling .... but I suppose if you didn't read the first five parts you would have missed what is happening. |
| 2012-11-21 00:46:56 |
Man of the House Pt6 |
You say this now at part6? Of course there is minor sex in a minor chapter... Go read the first 5 chapters... This is motive not premise... and of course storytelling .... but I suppose if you didn't read the first five parts you would have missed what is happening. |
| 2012-11-20 21:20:33 |
Cuckolded by A 12 Year Old: The Message |
Your writing too fast and your making simple mistakes.... slow it down a hair or two and go back and check the metal. Then hammer the rest... I understand hitting while the iron is hot... but your mistakes are distracting at the least. |
| 2012-11-16 22:46:20 |
"The Man of the House" - Conclusion |
Its really sad that you are trying to upstage me... mmmmm.... the liqueur
is working goood. |
| 2012-09-16 22:28:19 |
Another Yard VII |
ack! format it better... |
| 2012-09-11 20:53:36 |
Duquan's sister problem Chapter 1 |
The language was a little hard to follow really... but it was a good story
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| 2012-08-25 23:18:10 |
the family's new bitch |
Well someone is angry anyway... but some of your commentoers here are right... You need to work on Vocabulary and Spelling and Grammar... it takes so much away from the story.... Practice... rewrite ... not everyone can publish first drafts and have people like them... |
| 2012-06-06 01:03:42 |
My Sister's Friends Part VII.5 |
Friends and Rabid Readers... I do plan to continue this story.... and the next episode will be coming soon... I have been trying to work diligently on it. Sadly I had a computer crash and had to rewrite much of what I had written. But I'm working on it. |
| 2012-06-05 23:49:35 |
The Girl Who Didn't Have A Mom |
proofread...or find someone who will... |
| 2012-05-31 01:58:49 |
Man of the house pt5 |
Soon Updating soon... sorry Life does often impede my writing. |
| 2012-05-31 01:56:30 |
Doing the Babysitter Pt 3 |
Dont know if we want to start calling it a masterpeice just yet. But thank you all for your kind comments. |
| 2012-02-15 02:01:26 |
The Best for Society a Calling All Writers X story |
The Email address is real and if you really want to contact me you can hit me there, or send me a Private message. As for how to get to the forum... On the main stories page there is a link... then go to the stories forum. Thanks for reading |
| 2012-02-11 12:51:36 |
The Best for Society a Calling All Writers X story |
Like all stories I almost always plan on working to a end will I ever get there I guess we will find out... but there will be additional episodes. |
| 2012-02-10 02:13:50 |
The Best for Society a Calling All Writers X story |
I actually slowed down and did add more description an whole page of it actually. That is not to say it couldn't have used more, simply I wanted it to be sort of vague on one side and horrifying on the other. Thanks for the comment! |
| 2012-02-08 14:26:37 |
Momma's new toy |
Ugh... not fond of that particular POV but if you like it run with it not too many folks can deal with that. |
| 2012-01-23 23:15:18 |
The Brother and Sister Next Door r |
Not your best... need to work on content and formatting... good story line however |
| 2012-01-07 12:28:19 |
My Sons Horny Friends...and Me. |
Not up to your normal standards amigo... a happy tale none the less but I think you have forgotten something |
| 2012-01-06 21:40:50 |
Cousin's first trip here |
its a sex story not a text message... Kill all the ellipses and then kill all the ampersands then kill every time you used texting short hand and you might have something this is really too annoying to read. |
| 2011-12-29 19:10:09 |
My Sister's Friends Part VII |
Okay guys I'm sorry about the lack of details, and I apologize for the length. This is a critical scene and I had to add it in and I didn't feel it kept with the previous installment so I made it a separate installment. I'll work on the next one later this evening and will post it when it's finished. |
| 2011-12-29 18:46:31 |
My Sister's Friends Part VII |
Okay guys I'm sorry about the lack of details, and I apologize for the length. This is a critical scene and I had to add it in and I didn't feel it kept with the previous installment so I made it a separate installment. I'll work on the next one later this evening and will post it when it's finished. |
| 2011-12-26 09:35:30 |
My Sister's Friends Part VI |
Part 2? I am pretty sure the next part will be part 7 |
| 2011-12-21 21:22:14 |
my sister and the Wii game |
Um yeah paragraphs or maybe a comma or two if your trying to do the Willie Shakespeare... thing..PM me if you want more suggestions about it really. |
| 2011-12-17 16:26:54 |
Sexual Summer Camp with Daughter's Mates[02] |
Your syntax is interesting... and you use odd words here and there English isn't your first language I take it. Overall good... Needs to be polished a bit more. |
| 2011-12-13 01:59:44 |
Man of the House Part 3. |
The fourth is coming soon I am working on it... I am sorry I was distracted... I have gotten more requests about this story than any other... so I will continue it If you want to hurry me up bribes are good... but you have to know what my taste is to properly bribe me.... It's about 1/2 way I think I will try and finish it tomorrow as there is rum and I can play... |
| 2011-12-01 20:50:35 |
Horny Mom |
You needed a longer and better build up... and maybe some inner conflict here... its a good premise just could use some more...flavor. |
| 2011-11-27 17:11:06 |
Susies story Re Edit |
A little too morbid... and dark for me to really enjoy it.... I probably would have done it differently myself... |
| 2011-11-27 16:30:17 |
camping with mom Part IV |
Needs editing... please? I promise I read it again if you edit it. whatever you did it came out badly |
| 2011-11-09 20:07:09 |
Ellen's Gift CAW9 |
By the by I try and make comments on my stories as myself... don't confuse me with any of these other people... They are almost as crazy and paranoid as I am... cept I wear my tinfoil hat... :) |
| 2011-11-09 20:05:55 |
Ellen's Gift CAW9 |
How do you make a bacon Vinaigrette... Start with Bacon! Heat until crisp.... reserve... 1tbs of grease.... smash into bacon bits.... add bits and bacon to balsamic vinegar... say about 1 cup of that... then add secondary oil... I would recommend olive but safflower would be fine... add a little pepper and oregano and maybe some sage. put in closed container shake vigorously (the container) let sit for at least 1 hour and serve at room temp. |
| 2011-10-21 00:13:09 |
Taking Mom Down to the Woods |
Nice story... you could have left the revelation for later... for when mom truely opens up as to the reason for her "Daddy" lust.... But other than that good stuff. |
| 2011-10-01 15:40:33 |
Mom's Kids 2 |
Excellent there were a few little annoying repatitions that I noted but all in all it added to the story's flavor... Good stuff... keep up the good work |
| 2011-08-15 19:21:43 |
Tera's Horse Ride! |
Space out your paragraphs for easy reading... Other than that I have no complaints... |
| 2011-07-22 21:48:39 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 2 DINNER |
formatting is better... now work on proof reading ... |
| 2011-07-21 20:22:15 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 1 THE RIDE (revised) |
Next time round amigo space out your paragraphs... |
| 2011-06-28 21:19:06 |
The Sexy Babysitter |
Read your work... after you have written it ... Please... that alone will help you I'm sure. |
| 2011-06-28 05:29:15 |
Girl's School for the Blind |
Is this really yours because I recall reading it somewhere else? |
| 2011-05-13 13:40:19 |
Amy's Zoophilla |
needs work... spelling please... a little punctuation probably... english now your first language? good idea... just needs refining. |
| 2011-05-05 17:31:05 |
Harry Potter Adventures: Chapter 1 6th Year Begins |
Yes could have done without all the underlining it made it terribly hard to read |
| 2011-05-04 13:10:44 |
My step-sister Sara! |
Wrote you a PM doll check it ... |
| 2011-05-03 01:35:06 |
My Sisters Freinds ... Part V |
Actually CuteyKat the troll said I was good just needed polish... and he was angry that I wasn't polished enough... I'm no Ernest Hemingway... Closer to the Marquis De Sade really but I'm not nearly so polished as he was. |
| 2011-04-30 18:50:48 |
My Sisters Freinds ... Part V |
Well seeing as my English skills got me through College... I'm wondering what the fuck your on about... SURELY my "7th" Grade English skills shouldn't have gotten me past College level materials.
That said this is a free site, I am not getting paid for this I just write the crap and put it up here and rarely look back unless It become monstrous. I appreciate that people like it and they read it and apparently they are willing to look past the fact that I'm not a English major. |
| 2011-04-30 18:23:46 |
My Sisters Freinds ... Part V |
I do call you trolls when you criticize my grammar and don't point out where I went wrong... PM me and tell me where I went wrong or better still E-mail me and show me all the places where I went wrong... The invitation has been on the table, why haven't you taken it? |
| 2011-04-29 16:30:19 |
My Sisters Freinds ... Part V |
I find the more complicated the story the better people relate because life is nothing if it's not complicated... So yeah it jumps around a bit next part will be more stable I think... |
| 2011-04-11 15:01:39 |
My sisters freinds...Part III |
I try to keep on task... it gets harder and harder the more ingredients you add to the pot.. But that is what makes the story interesting. I try not to drift in my stories ... in my threads well that's another story. Read my other stories and see... thanks CJ |
| 2011-04-10 16:06:20 |
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I don't know I guess I wanted more of a setup.... Why rather than the what? |
| 2011-04-07 19:06:16 |
My sisters freinds... |
Interesting... Grammar is poor, the only real context where that might apply I think, is when someone is talking, which means that the characters are using poor grammar. Interesting... of course if you wish to school me on this please feel free to PM email, whatever turns your crank. |
| 2011-04-06 11:48:06 |
My sisters freinds...Part II |
Okay I guess I did turn Linda into Claire that's what I get for not listing the characters at the bottom of the page while I'm writing them |
| 2011-03-16 04:05:02 |
Cybergasm. |
Very cyberpunk, needing a story... |
| 2011-03-05 18:53:16 |
Julie was a beautiful girl |
Spread your story out more it gets hard to read with the close paragraphs... |
| 2011-03-03 00:04:56 |
Will's new home: Part 5 |
You may want to format it in a txt format before you copy and paste it, and yes work on the spelling but all and all keep on plugging we can't all be perfect but constructive criticism helps... While your at it check out my stories and maybe that will help with some of your spelling issues. |
| 2011-03-02 15:11:46 |
Hijabi Slut Anam |
Its not really my bag it's interesting... You repeat yourself a lot, or at least noticeably watch that, drag your story out longer, and what is this leading up to? |
| 2011-01-25 16:25:41 |
Spying on Mom and Brother II |
Good plot... work on your details and expand further, and maybe work on spelling and grammar too or have someone edit it for you. |
| 2011-01-13 03:31:54 |
My Big Horsecock and my two Sisters |
1 break up your paragraphs.... 2. Don't repeat the same word twice in the same paragraph if you can manage it. 3. Give your discriptions some more flesh. 4 go back and re-read what you have written once you have done 1-3. 5 Practice.... |
| 2010-12-18 10:29:27 |
Man of the House. |
a story that I put more thought into... that would be a trick |
| 2010-12-15 02:31:26 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 19 |
I will try and get more done... Soon.. but if I don't it may be a while before the next episode. I will try. |
| 2010-12-10 20:37:14 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 19 |
Amanda is Brandon's mother and the mother of NIcole on the island... Denise is Star's mother and just a character I threw in... I'm sorry if you got confused |
| 2010-12-09 18:02:27 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 19 |
Boy you guys don't ask for much, thanks |
| 2010-12-09 01:30:54 |
I LOVE MY MOMMY |
Really? no buildup just all of a sudden a normal mom is going to do this what the fuck is the motivation? If your going to write a story have it make sense and not jump directly to the improbable sex, we the readers need to know why the improbable sex is happening. |
| 2010-12-08 00:41:31 |
shipwrecked chapter 1 |
It makes me laugh this story is oddly familiar. Good stuff! |
| 2010-12-08 00:14:01 |
shipwrecked chapter 1 |
It makes me laugh this story is oddly familiar. Good stuff! |
| 2010-12-03 04:13:21 |
Man of the House. |
Thanks so much for your praise, I'm glad you like it. Want to thank Megan for keeping my story on the straight and narrow as she reminded me of some things that I needed to keep in mind. And thanks to the rest of you I have enough for part two but I think I will post it maybe this weekend so it will be up sometime next week. |
| 2010-12-03 04:12:52 |
Man of the House. |
Thanks so much for your praise, I'm glad you like it. Want to thank Megan for keeping my story on the straight and narrow as she reminded me of some things that I needed to keep in mind. And thanks to the rest of you I have enough for part two but I think I will post it maybe this weekend so it will be up sometime next week. |
| 2010-12-03 04:12:46 |
Man of the House. |
Thanks so much for your praise, I'm glad you like it. Want to thank Megan for keeping my story on the straight and narrow as she reminded me of some things that I needed to keep in mind. And thanks to the rest of you I have enough for part two but I think I will post it maybe this weekend so it will be up sometime next week. |
| 2010-11-30 18:17:31 |
Tricked and Treated at a Halloween Party |
Its a good story I like the plot and the quasi mystery... |
| 2010-11-17 11:24:00 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 18 |
You did see this before... And I am I just wanted some extra morsels for you to snack on.Somehow it unposted Part 19 is mostly done maybe tonite I'll submit it... I hope |
| 2010-11-17 11:23:52 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 18 |
You did see this before... And I am I just wanted some extra morsels for you to snack on.Somehow it unposted Part 19 is mostly done maybe tonite I'll submit it... I hope |
| 2010-09-30 02:54:27 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 17 |
Well happily part 18 is almost done so sooner rather than later. Hopefully you all will like that part as well.Someday soon there will be an escape from the island... |
| 2010-09-23 19:03:27 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 17 |
Well crap I think I thought this was longer when I posted it |
| 2010-09-19 06:43:55 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 16 |
Right for those of you who are waiting part 17 is now in Validation which means that very soon it will be posted and you can read it and....I'm sure you will all have very exciting feedback for me. I'm sorry for the delay but sometimes life gets in the way of writing stories. |
| 2010-07-23 04:15:13 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 14 |
While I hope you indulge me with Part 15 and 16 which I just finished a little while ago, and its validating please be patient it should be coming out soon I'll try and look at part 17 and figure out what is going to happen next. CJ |
| 2010-07-23 00:18:53 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 14 |
Sorry it took so long friends but I had to do some crap in real and I was having writers block... But you will be happy to know that part 15 is validating now and I'm working on part 16 now and I'm about 1/3 of the way though with it I think. Thank you all so much for reading. |
| 2010-06-04 03:49:49 |
Spin the Bottle |
Good stuff keep on keeping on... CJ |
| 2010-05-12 21:17:55 |
A Sleepover With Aunt Stephanie |
Great story... Will there be sequels? or is this just a stand alone? |
| 2010-05-12 03:44:03 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 13 |
I submitted the next installment a little while ago so expect it soon. Glad you all like it. Feel free to contact me if you have any questions comments suggestions whatever. Or check the sex stories forum I have a thread there if they ever get it fixed. CJ |
| 2010-05-12 03:41:34 |
a truth or dare game changed to sex |
Maybe paragraphs and more coherent thoughts too... I'm not saying its a bad story by any means it could just have gone on longer and been better. At least break it up a little and give us the readers some more description what were you feeling, what did it sound like taste like ect. Just a friendly thought. CJ |
| 2010-05-12 03:41:26 |
a truth or dare game changed to sex |
One more tiny comment... 5000 characters is not really that many my own ongoing series is right at 337 thousand characters.... Make it bigger... bigger is better. CJ |
| 2010-05-12 03:36:58 |
a truth or dare game changed to sex |
Maybe paragraphs and more coherent thoughts too... I'm not saying its a bad story by any means it could just have gone on longer and been better. At least break it up a little and give us the readers some more description what were you feeling, what did it sound like taste like ect. Just a friendly thought. CJ |
| 2010-05-08 11:06:54 |
Stormy... |
Justwondering... No idea perhaps only to compare themselves to others outside of the main... or have colleagues read and compare its fun and harmless... |
| 2010-05-08 10:55:20 |
Stormy... |
Justwondering... No idea perhaps only to compare themselves to others outside of the main... or have colleagues read and compare its fun and harmless... |
| 2010-05-07 15:02:45 |
CAMP: Sibling Rivalry |
Hmmm There was a series of about 50 chapters about Camp...<- this particular line back in the day....and it seems to be following the loose ends of it. not sure if he wrote the first camp. |
| 2010-05-07 14:19:24 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 13 |
Right you guys need to stop with the psycic visions okay... just let me tell the damn story. CJ |
| 2010-05-07 04:44:58 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 13 |
Right you guys need to stop with the psycic visions okay... just let me tell the damn story. CJ |
| 2010-05-06 23:01:08 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 13 |
Yes it was a bit short but I wanted you all the readers to wait for the next installment assuming I can finish it. I'm sorry if the characters are a little flat, I was sorta rushing to make them fit and get this addition in. If I ever have more time I'll do a rewrite and make it smoother. |
| 2010-05-06 22:40:32 |
The Plane Crash Pt. 13 |
Yes it was a bit short but I wanted you all the readers to wait for the next installment assuming I can finish it. I'm sorry if the characters are a little flat, I was sorta rushing to make them fit and get this addition in. If I ever have more time I'll do a rewrite and make it smoother. |
| 2010-05-05 23:16:25 |
Homecoming |
Wow depressing... good but depressing... CJ |
| 2010-05-05 23:14:31 |
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I agree this is very nice short and sweet and yummy good stuff.. CJ |
| 2010-05-05 23:09:11 |
Angelinas Seduction and Brads Naked Surrender |
Very nicely done I liked this one too! CJ |
| 2010-05-05 23:00:44 |
VAGINAFEST - Chapter 1 |
Not too bad if I do say so myself...CJ |
| 2010-05-04 15:59:19 |
The Plane Crash Pt.12 |
After flailing around for a while trying to figure out how to eek some plot movement out of the story... I figured out what to do, and the next installment should be coming out very soon. |
| 2010-05-01 20:29:40 |
Aftermath |
Actually I stole the opening paragraph at the direction of Ejls who wrote it... I have another story with the same opening paragraph....its sorta a contest thing... but that's okay |
| 2010-04-22 23:29:24 |
The Plane Crash Pt.12 |
Vincent- Just because most of them couldn't find their way out of a wet paper bag without help doesn't mean they are all idiots. Bored I know I didn't mean to do it! I'm going to go looking for something to help with that its either that or I stop the story right here, and I don't think anyone will be happy with that |
| 2010-04-21 02:25:10 |
The Plane Crash Pt.11 |
Of course its a hanger it wouldn't be worth doing if I couldn't hit you with a hangar...The next section will post in a few days it's already written just waiting for validation. |
| 2010-04-20 22:41:20 |
Homecoming part 3 & 4 |
The perspective is still screwy the premise is good one of these days when I have time I'll show you what I mean. |
| 2010-04-17 10:35:18 |
The Plane Crash Pt.10 |
Well crap I'm going to have to give out bonuses now for people figuring out that I actually looked at a map before I decided on where I wanted this fictional story to take place... thanks for paying attention. |
| 2010-04-16 20:46:12 |
The Plane Crash Pt.10 |
Oh and there is a thread in the stories forum that you can talk to me about stuff there... anything that's already happened no spoilers. |
| 2010-04-16 20:41:19 |
The Plane Crash Pt.10 |
I love you readers you are the best. but now that someone has done gone and pointed out the technical flaw... I can tie it in and not hurt the story. Two or three times zones is what only 30-45 NM. And it really wasn't about Time zones it was about Time Difference... which is entirely more important. |
| 2010-04-15 23:23:21 |
The Plane Crash Pt.10 |
Hi all my rabid readers just wanted you to know that I'm working on the next chapters... Had a bit of writers block that I needed to work through. Thanks so much for you comments they mean alot . Don't be afraid to contact me I'm happy to answer any questions or read anything you want me to read. That said I hope to have the next three or so chapters done by Wednesday coming. |
| 2010-04-12 14:36:58 |
The Plane Crash Pt.10 |
Thanks there reader I absolutely knew I was talking out of my ass at that point which is why I did my best to explain the concept without going into the math of it and it was necessary for proper navigation. Finding longitude is something only that I understand the theory of. |
| 2010-04-11 04:42:37 |
The Plane Crash Pt.9 |
After thinking about it for a while I have opted not to make you all wait so the next three chapter installment should be coming out sometime next week. let me know what y'all think. |
| 2010-04-09 20:57:31 |
Passion |
Lot of questionable things in a historical setting...it was a fair story I suppose, the violence is fine but move on and use the same descriptions for your rape scenes. |
| 2010-04-09 01:06:49 |
The Plane Crash Pt.9 |
Thank you all for your comments and for reading thought you would like to know that the next installment chapters 35-39 is proving to be longer than I had expected please be patient with me I'll hammer it out as I can. |
| 2010-04-08 22:32:35 |
homecoming |
The story is good... The perspective leaves something to be desired. But nice for a first try |
| 2010-04-08 01:00:39 |
The nasty sister |
Yikes this could have been formatted better....Please in the future |
| 2010-04-08 00:23:50 |
The Plane Crash Pt.9 |
Really I didn't know I had any gay sex in this part of the story maybe I should go back and look at it... I think that has to be the saddest comment I have read, and I doubt he or she even read the story. But oddly there is a flaw in that statement god did make Steve also. |
| 2010-04-07 04:04:57 |
The Farm Pt.2 |
maybe spread it out a little for easier reading good job |
| 2010-04-04 13:52:34 |
The Plane Crash Pt.8 |
No use of grammar really no page breaks for new paragraphs or periods or anything huh. I'm consistent in my grammar or lack there of if your so wound up in your little box that you can't handle a little bad punctuation perhaps you should stick to serial stuff. |
| 2010-04-04 13:27:25 |
The Plane Crash Pt.8 |
No use of grammar really no page breaks for new paragraphs or periods or anything huh. I'm consistent in my grammar or lack there of if your so wound up in your little box that you can't handle a little bad punctuation perhaps you should stick to serial stuff. |
| 2010-04-04 03:44:17 |
The Plane Crash Pt.8 |
Eels or fish..... I'll have to think really hard on that one... Maybe??? |
| 2010-04-02 00:21:25 |
The Vertical Smile - part 2 |
Good stuff... keep writing! |
| 2010-04-01 21:11:18 |
Karen |
Very nicely written... excellent lead up that holds the reader and I liked the rest as well. |
| 2010-04-01 03:45:21 |
The Plane Crash Pt.7 |
Part 8 is validating.... |
| 2010-03-31 19:12:10 |
The Plane Crash Pt.7 |
Honestly if you want to copy edit my stories, I'll be happy to let you I know I'm less than perfect in my writing I try but some of the mechanics are lacking I agree. |
| 2010-03-31 14:39:15 |
The Plane Crash |
Well let me just say that I'm not an English major. but I appreciate the criticism. if you can find someone to proof read for me or you want to let me know! |
| 2010-03-31 05:12:05 |
Moving brings Siblings Closer |
Nicely done but I might have left it open ended to expand on later. |
| 2010-03-30 23:02:56 |
The Plane Crash Pt.7 |
Okay here you go I'm sorry it stops so abruptly but well you'll see |
| 2010-03-29 21:56:48 |
The Plane Crash Pt.6 |
Wow.... and Yes why not a flying boat? Look it up please and see if the IJN didn't have them if you can prove me wrong... Please do so. |
| 2010-03-28 23:37:35 |
The Plane Crash Pt.6 |
Part 7 I just posted hopefully you all like it as much as part six give it about 3-4 days from the date of this post to appear. Thanks |
| 2010-03-27 16:06:46 |
The Plane Crash Pt.6 |
What you want me to Ruin the end and tell you what happens next? No no no but I appreciate the comments. The full text of this which I may post in full when I'm completely done writing it right now is right around 30,000 words. and to my l337 freind j00 dk wutz comin n3xt |
| 2010-03-26 20:52:14 |
The Plane Crash Pt.6 |
Thanks for all your support. I realize that there could be more action, and I skimped a few times but that is the price of plot movement and it would be only a mediocre story if I sacrificed the plot. I promise once the plot allows me to I'll pull out all the stops in the meantime please be patient, and thanks for reading |
| 2010-03-23 20:30:46 |
The Plane Crash Pt.5 |
You all will be happy to know that the next 4 chapters are validating and should be up in a few days |
| 2010-03-20 18:22:54 |
The Plane Crash Pt.5 |
Sadly no Linux the cat has so far eaten the cables to 3 monitors 4 power supplies 10 mice and 6 keyboards...Linux isn't technology friendly oh and the I/O cable to my MP3. But he keeps off the Evil women so its all good. |
| 2010-03-20 01:11:52 |
The Plane Crash Pt.5 |
Thanks you all, it will be a bit before the next installment I'm afraid my cat destroyed my keyboard... Yes my Cat... He is a very anti technology cat... But I promise more to cum soon as I can hammer it out. Mostly the backspace and enter key are not working properly. |
| 2010-03-11 23:00:15 |
The Plane Crash Pt.3 |
Appreciated that there reader but explain what you mean mis-jointed... are you saying that I'm connecting things that cannot be connected or did you mean dis-jointed and your having a hard time seeing how things connect? Though I'm pretty sure mis-jointed isn't really a word. I don't mind the criticism just be specific. |
| 2009-11-10 17:02:57 |
Lucky dog Ch7: Special Accommodations |
I like the plot it could use a little bit of refining I think but good |