||Megan and I relax. Part 1
||The format sucks and makes it hard to read. Fix it and maybe it might get a positive rating. Should be a little longer also
||To bed with my little sisters
||Stop pawning this bullshit as being real. If it is real then your family is some fucked up people and should really seek help.
||A fantasy becoming reality 1
||You can tell it was written in an hour. Why would you post something that you hastily wrote knowing you would get hammered from comments about it. The story could have been good if it wasnt rushed so much.
||Peeping Tom 2
||Fantastic, as all your stories are.
||Miranda's First Time
||I have to agree with the last comment completely. I like fantasy to but they do have to be kinda believable.
||Me and My Sister(Short Story)
||This wasnt even a short story, just rubbish
||Aunt Chloe - Part 1
||I thought it was a good story. You did good for your first one. With some more practice you can become a very good writer.
||I wouldnt even bother with a part two on this story. The topic was not very interesting at all. This is pretty much a generic story and you could find hundreds on this site just like this one.
||This was definitely not the same ole same ole. The theme was awesome and the writing was great as always. Other authors on this site should learn from the build up that Aperv2's stories have.
||My Brother and Me part 1
||You use the word "then" way to much. Makes it sound like an annoying kid telling you a story that you cant wait until they finish. Nice concept though.