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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2011-11-20 23:08:35 |
Wettest dream cum true |
it's a good start, but you need more detail and needs more length and substance. you skip over too much. Nothing wrong with some good buildup, it will help your readers identify with the characters and pull them into the story more. |
| 2011-11-13 09:31:20 |
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you stupid sick perverted pedophile! |
| 2011-11-03 10:16:30 |
Camped out in the back Field |
hey anonymous reader! Fuck off! If you can't handle reading this, then go back to your boring missionary sex world and stop being a hater! |
| 2011-11-03 10:16:00 |
Camped out in the back Field |
suggestion for next chapter? have it so his wife doesn't leave when they come and have Claire sneak in to eat his wife's pussy while she is asleep and turn her into Claire's fuck slave! |
| 2011-11-03 10:13:19 |
Camped out in the back Field |
hey anonymous reader! Fuck off! If you can't handle reading this, then go back to your boring missionary sex world and stop being a hater! |
| 2011-10-26 12:07:55 |
LONG WINTER WEEKEND WITH THE GIRLS Part 2 |
I thought all the chanting was retarded and the way they manipulated her using their love was rather pedophilia and disturbing but otherwise it was well written and a good story. |
| 2011-09-23 10:23:04 |
Earning the Afternoon |
have the son get his mom pregnant and give birth to a daughter, then when she is a teen have dad play with her |
| 2011-09-16 20:13:50 |
Elle's Revenge 2 |
Can't wait for chapter 3! try adding more detail and more substance though. |