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| 2011-11-22 00:34:54 |
Blooded. |
Amazing....once again, BR....I haven't been logged in when I made my other comments on other stories you have written....but I am still quite impressed w/your work....I haven't read ALL of your sbmissions...yet...but I look forward to reading the rest. You really know how to capture the reader, the sense of intrigue and excitement w/your detailed descriptions in every line...love the final line in this one...lol...I can't wait to read more!!! |
| 2011-09-10 12:37:58 |
Me and Hannah's first time |
This could've been a better story if: (1) there weren't so many run-on sentances, (2) the grammar was better, (3) had more details, (4) wasn't written by someone who can't use sexual vernacular/slang correctly. While the"jist" is the story was ok...it asn't easy to follow...I got bored very quickly....hell - I got a headache just trying to follow it! Practice your writing skills & pay attention in you English Comp classes! |
| 2011-09-10 12:37:15 |
Me and Hannah's first time |
*damn little keys on my phone! Even I have trouble spelling!!* |
| 2011-09-10 12:35:05 |
Me and Hannah's first time |
This could've been a better story if: (1) there weren't so many run-on sentances, (2) the grammar was better, (3) had more details, (4) wasn't written by someone who can't use sexual vernacular/slang correctly. While the"jist" is the story was ok...it asn't easy to follow...I got bored very quickly....hell - I got a headache just trying to follow it! Practice your writing skills & pay attention in you English Comp classes! |
| 2011-09-10 10:58:13 |
Hung Like a Horse |
damn that was fucking hot! my cunt is wet & tingling from reading this....Hell - I came w/o even touching myself!! PLEASE write a sequel to this! I remeber WISHING my one cousin wouldfuck me...he is tall, handsome, muscular & has a huge cock....ooohhh....just thinking about it makes me hotter!!! Keep us cumming!! |
| 2011-09-10 10:03:01 |
Ron, Hermione and a tree house |
I thought this was hot AND sweet...Ron & Hermoine have fancied each other since the beginning...I kinda figured Hermoine had a "sex kitten" side hidden beneath her bossy, know-it-all exterior. And Ron? Well, he went from being a sweet goofy little geek to a massively muscled man w/a TON of lust & love in his heart for Hermoine...it was well written...a little shorter than I expected, but I think you did a very nice job. Now if only I could get Ron to take ME to his treehouse! LOL! |