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| 2012-09-19 05:26:48 |
Preteen Dream |
@Anonymous reader
2012-09-18 21:58:16
On some level I do agree with you, unfortunately it's difficult to write in style of a 10 year old through 1st person because it drags down the story grammatically and makes it read terrible.
The best thing to do really is to imagine Daisy is recounting the events in the future from a 1st person perspective :) I will try though and dumb it down a little more to a 10 year old style.
@Anonymous reader
2012-09-19 01:42:54
Please read the story tags before reading. You'll find this is marked as 'Young' which is under 18. |
| 2012-09-17 08:50:56 |
Preteen Dream |
Would like to thank everyone for the fantastic support and positive votes :) I will also say that Part 2 will be including much more sex and will be longer as well.
This parts a little short because I'm trying to get back into feel of writing. Hope to have Part 2 up soon :)
Yours,
Cuddlesthabear |
| 2012-09-15 22:00:29 |
Preteen Dream |
Cheers for great feedback once again Kenny :)
and @Anonymous reader
2012-09-15 21:46:46
..... Erm... right ok.. please go troll elsewhere... -_- |
| 2012-08-24 12:06:10 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Would like to verify that;
Anonymous reader
2012-08-23 18:43:07
is me... This site just doesn't seem to like my internet browser and never keeps me logged in -_- |
| 2012-08-22 16:26:18 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
To clarify with the age thing,
This story is based on when I was a teenager which is back in very late 80's/early 90's. Children were actually children back then and sex was only just becoming more open and natrual thing to do and talk about. |
| 2012-05-21 16:20:04 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Hello, Yes,... I know.. I'm still alive don't worry.
Basicly, I will start off with a huge apology for the false promises I gave about part 3, Unfortunately while Kenny is right that I do get praise and good comments a lot. I find it hard to find the motivation to write after I get in from work and often find myself staring at the screen of Microsoft Word with the character thingy flashing away aimlessly.
I have to be in a certain mood to write and it dosn't always come about very often but hopefully this weekend, now that I am taking some time of work I will finally be able to drag my ass onto my PC and write something for you guys which you definitely deserve. So again I'm sorry and I'm not promising a release this weekend but I will do my best.
So yeah, Cheers for the continuing support and again I am so sorry. :(
Yours,
Cuddlesthabear |
| 2012-04-27 14:17:53 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Don't worry about it Sammi, I'm also sorry I responded so harshly.
I'm quick to respond to comments that seem rude and obnoxious and if yours wasn't meant to be like that then i'm sorry I misstook it for that. Glad you love the series but yeah, writing does take time and energy. I promise though, cross my heart that Part 3 will be up this weekend.
Cuddlesthabear.
Also Joseph, plenty of that to come in the upcoming parts. :) |
| 2012-04-26 14:08:13 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Well, Sammi, Re-read what I posted.
I've had technical problems with my PC and I would TRY. Emphasis on TRY, to get it up for Sunday. I got my PC fixed yesterday and I'll get it done for this weekend, however... Writing is not a priority within my life nor will I take rude sarcastic comments demanding I hurry up.
It will be done when I can spare a moment. Try writing yourself in the future and see how difficult it is, then get a job where you work all night, then add a social life to that.
- Cuddlesthabear (An unhappy authour) |
| 2012-04-22 09:21:50 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Sorry guys, been a small issue regarding part 3,
Will try and aim to get it done sunday night. Sorry again. |
| 2012-04-20 15:11:17 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Hey Folks,. Cuddles here with an update on Part 3.
I'm at work using a phone to reply, BUT when I get home tonight 20/4/2012 I will be staying up from 2am (GMT) to write Part 3 in the hopes that it will be done by early Saturday morning. How I'm able to write in a sleep deprived manner is beyond me but suprisingly, thats how this whole series has been written so far... God... imagine me writing when not tired,... i'd be incredible haha.
Anyway thanks for great comments, glad alot of you are enjoying it. Little teaser in whats to come;
The ship sets sail, Lilly and Sam enjoy their first night in solitude. We learn a 'bit' more about Leo and there will be a suprise character on the ship aswell that will be ending part 3 on a bombshell ;)
So it will defiently be worth the read, Thanks again guys and remember, your praise is my motivation. Stay tuned.
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| 2012-04-14 07:54:13 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Would like somone in comments to post a quick feedback about the readability of the dialouge. I put it in italic to make it easier to read but I fear mixing it with standard text has made it difficult to read. Next person to comment can you just clarify this please incase I can improve in part 3
Thanks. |
| 2012-04-14 02:36:28 |
Sex Education [Part 1] |
Well, I've worked through the night and I am absolutely shattered but I am happy to say that Sex Education Part 2 Is DONE AND ONLINE.
Just click my name to go to my profile where you can find it. :) Enjoy. |
| 2012-04-12 16:53:19 |
Sex Education [Part 1] |
Thanks for feedback, Especially from the people who made comments about my errors which I will try to fix up in the next part.
I am desperatly trying to find time and motivation to write part 2, i'm currently half way through and hopefully will be able to get it done this weekend but I cannot guarente, so thanks for continuing support and I will try my hardest to finish this weekend. |
| 2012-04-06 17:46:30 |
Sex Education [Part 1] |
@LilSnow
2012-04-06 14:46:40
Eeep, Seem's your right haha. From looks of it I forgot who orgasmed so your right, it should of been Lilly who stubbed her toe and not Sam. Sorry for mixup.
and don't worry, I plan to keep Lilly involved often, sort of a best friend thing with Sam in their adventures. There will be plenty more themes to come though due to me taking more time and care with details and the actual story line it will be longer between parts but hopefully the mix in story and sex will balance eachother out like you said.
Going to be working hard on part 2 this weekend guys, So hopefully I can get it done for sunday which I doubt but i'll hopefully have it done by next friday night. |
| 2012-04-06 11:02:56 |
Sex Education [Part 1] |
Danke for the comments guys. |
| 2012-02-17 14:17:12 |
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Not usually my type of theme but I decided to give this story a chance and boy am I glad I did. I loved it, It's clear you spent alot of time working on this story and putting in details that made this story stand out amongst the common generic sex stories that are spammed on this site.
Really glad to see another author who hasn't fallen into trap of writing generic stories that all look similiar so thank-you for the thrilling adventure story you have written here :) Look forward to reading more in the future.
Yours.
Cuddlesthabear. |
| 2012-02-10 18:56:49 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@Anonymous reader
2012-02-08 21:29:45
Glad you enjoyed it, I understand the age range might not be everyones cup of tea so I perfectly understand if you find it creepy.
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Anyway, Just updating ya, my new story is almost complete and will be uploaded as soon as possible, again thank-you for the hundreds of positive votes and over 50,000 views! I am thrilled with the success of this story and I hope to provide more quality entertainment over the upcoming year. (Atleast before we all die this year in 2012 hehe) |
| 2012-01-31 12:30:32 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-29 18:36:13
Please seek some mental help as it's quite obvious you are talking about your own comment to yourself which is... well stupid. |
| 2012-01-28 07:42:50 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@Curzon
Thanks for the rating mate, As to answer your question; I never orginally planned to include the mother but if you look back over the last stories comments, a fair few people had requested she be involved. Since this was the last part I decided to just let loose and go for it.
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-28 07:13:53
Thanks for your comment also, Really does annoy me then the high horse knights come rolling in to insult you rather than post constructive critacism. Glad you enjoyed story.
Thanks everyone for comments and im working hard to get the next series up and running ;) |
| 2012-01-26 16:55:34 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
Apologies for tripple comment post.. My browser just lagged massively.
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| 2012-01-26 16:54:38 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
Oh, I just remembered. None of my words are misspelt unless you are willing to state you are better than my spell checker on Microsoft Word, which I highly doubt. I just think youre from America and too ignorant to think perhaps; 'Hmm, maybe this writer is from England and uses different spelling terms than I do over here'. Now, Please do us a favour and go write the follow up to the works of Shakespeare and stop trolling writers who work hard and free on here to provide people with entertainment.
As I stated with the last moron to post a stupid comment insulting me, if you structure your comment and point out my flaws without insulting me, I will happily and thankfully take them on board and aim to improve.
Therefore, with that all said in two long comments, Kindly piss off and grow a pair.
Have a nice evening.
Cuddlesthabear.
PS: If your such a brilliant writer, Register and post your own story then. |
| 2012-01-26 16:54:11 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
Oh, I just remembered. None of my words are misspelt unless you are willing to state you are better than my spell checker on Microsoft Word, which I highly doubt. I just think youre from America and too ignorant to think perhaps; 'Hmm, maybe this writer is from England and uses different spelling terms than I do over here'. Now, Please do us a favour and go write the follow up to the works of Shakespeare and stop trolling writers who work hard and free on here to provide people with entertainment.
As I stated with the last moron to post a stupid comment insulting me, if you structure your comment and point out my flaws without insulting me, I will happily and thankfully take them on board and aim to improve.
Therefore, with that all said in two long comments, Kindly piss off and grow a pair.
Have a nice evening.
Cuddlesthabear.
PS: If your such a brilliant writer, Register and post your own story then. |
| 2012-01-26 16:49:09 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-26 16:37:54
I think you need to climb off your 50ft high horse and grow the hell up. You are on a story where people write stories of sexual nature for, lets be honest.. Horny people to masturbate to. I cannot stand you people who act like they are professional writers with a degree from Oxford University. Your example of my incorrect use of 'are' was done only once. I admit there are a few flaws but calling me uneducated because of a few simple errors, been in mind I do ALL my writing and proof reading from 1am - 6am onwards because of my work schedule. So. Climb off your high horse and think (Like an educated person) before posting a ridiculous comment and insulting an author because of a few tiny errors, which lets be honest... do not make this story unreadable as you seem to make out in your over exaggerated comment.
Oh.. and you misspelt anything and 'before' should not be in capitals. Because of this I was only able to read half your comment. Ts |
| 2012-01-25 12:35:12 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-24 20:42:47
Thank-you for your comment, I have written non sexual material before but it's much harder to get apreciation for it. I prefer erotic writing more than normal story writing. As for my name.. it kinda reflects the nature of my stories, they arn't meant to be taken seriously :) it's fictional fantasy not real life. |
| 2012-01-24 17:59:10 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4 [REPOST]) |
5 Weeks on... still not deleted... *sigh* |
| 2012-01-24 17:58:37 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4) |
Cheers Kenny, Personally I hate this version I wrote.. to slutty for my liking.. It;s been 5 weeks and im still waiting for it to be deleted -_- |
| 2012-01-24 17:56:48 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 2) |
Chapter 3 is already up mate, Click my name to go to my profile where you'll find the whole series. |
| 2012-01-24 17:55:23 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-24 14:59:22
Alas, I write in about girls in a different era lol. I wrote this based on how things were when I was growing up, Girls were alot more different it seems.. Now a days you have a smoking chav who shags every boy they meet :/
Also I would be a little concerned if you knew many 11 year olds yourself considering you should be over 18 and yet reading a story of this nature hehe. |
| 2012-01-22 13:38:29 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
Thanks for all comments guys, Really glad you lot enjoyed it and I hope to write more soon.
@ Anonymous reader
2012-01-22 13:24:24
Register and theres place on forums for that.... Please dont spam my stories comments with that :/ |
| 2012-01-21 09:29:54 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
@ Anonymous reader
2012-01-21 09:14:40
I'm certain it's england. I did a bit of background research on raids like this and there was an incident similiar to the ending of the story in the news back in around 2002 in south of england. So I based the ending loosely on that. Perhaps I may have gone a slight overboard with the raid but hey,.. We're influenced by american culture on TV and in film. Personally I don't think it matters much. |
| 2012-01-21 03:09:29 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 4 NEW] |
Final chapter is done and uploaded. Sorry for delay. |
| 2012-01-06 19:00:13 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 4 NEW] |
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-02 19:21:00
I was aware about the pissing part, But I just generally assumed 'Water Sports' was stories asociated with sex in water ect*. Anyway thank-you for correction.
@Anonymous reader
2012-01-05 14:21:29
All in due time. A final part is been written as I type this. |
| 2011-12-29 06:34:10 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 4 NEW] |
@Anonymous reader
2011-12-28 19:35:51
Nah, I sent an email asking for those two stories to be deleted last month.. Still waiting for a response.. I've sent about four emails now. Anyway, Originally I was in a hurry and didn't take much time writing the original part 4 so it was a piece of crap really. So I rewrote part 4 and it became this. Explains it in the top before the actual story. |
| 2011-11-14 13:32:11 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4 [REPOST]) |
Sorry guys, Im ashamed at this story so I have put a request for it to be deleted. I'm going to work harder and slower at my stories rather than dish out this slutty crap. So again apologies. Different part 4 to come soon hopefully. |
| 2011-11-14 13:27:29 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4) |
:/ Ya know..... I actually agree with two comments below... I'm pretty ashamed at this... SO, I'll be requesting this be removed and I'll go back to the drawing board and take my time writing the stories instead of trying to dish them out weekly. In addition I'll go back to my traditonal rommance style instead of this slutty crap :/ Shot myself in the foot here guys and I admit that so sorry. Promise to get rid of this crap ASAP. Thanks for feedback. |
| 2011-11-13 17:36:52 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4) |
Apologies for horrible formatting. Reuploading with correct formatting, I will post story link in comments. I'll request this story be deleted asap. |
| 2011-11-10 12:13:50 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
Im going to the assume the last three comments are one person, if not thank-you anyway. Your comments are very detailed and explain alot of faults with my writing that hopefully I did fix in part 2 and 3. Anyway thankyou for providing constructive critacism without flaming me and I will defiently take it on board. |
| 2011-11-10 12:11:43 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter (Part 3) |
Lolololol....
Sorry to end this little debate but;
Anonymous reader
2011-11-10 04:08:16
Is correct :P Im afraid Daddy had no involvement and is sadly deceased. Anyway.. Im writing part 4 at the moment and after part 4 I am open to suguestions from you guys. Thanks for all support and remember I regulary read comments and emails and always respond as soon as I can.
Email; Cuddlesthabear@hotmail.co.uk
Or comment here or inbox me. Thanks for reading. More stories to come. |
| 2011-11-09 13:47:59 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 2) |
@Anonymous reader
2011-11-09 02:11:19
.... Ok... I would've happily taken your point with pleasure... However you seem to be lacking sufficient intelligence therefore I couldn't give a damn anymore. You say I made the mistake of having 6.3" in part 1 and only 6.2" in this part which I admit I did... But thats a reason for me to stop writing anymore parts? I think not. Too add to your humiliation.... the main character is NOT called Kenny.... It's Steven.. So how you can make a comment pointing out a minor error when you yourself are unable to get the protagonists name correct is just beyond me. Thank-you for the rating but I suguest in future you keep your dumb comments to yourself.
Have a nice day. |
| 2011-11-07 16:51:49 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter (Part 3) |
Thank-you again for all the positive comments.
As for the ideas you guys have suguested, I have already planned out I think three more parts which will include some more people perhaps but im afraid I don't really feel that pregnancy would be apropiate this early in the series OR at Issy's age. |
| 2011-10-31 14:16:48 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
Well, I'm in my early twenties now and back when I was around 11... Girls were not light they were today, :P Alot has changed but I find it easier to write in the time I was a teenager as it's easier to rememebr the qualities and make the characters more beliable and trust me.. in 90's things were different :P |
| 2011-10-29 07:22:35 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
Majority of people giving negative ratings are anon trolls who just troll on this site giving stories bad reputation. Seen it plenty of times before on other stories. Currently this part stands at;
61 - Positive
12 - Negative
Then you get the other 4000 people who don't vote atall. So yeah... Just have to get used to it and not judge a story by it's rating. Thanks for comments anyway. |
| 2011-10-29 02:33:17 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 2) |
@Anonymous reader
2011-10-29 02:22:29
Erm... I don't quite know what your saying... but in the end, in my view..a Pedophillic story is where the child is made an object of sex. My stories are NOT like this. They involve passion and love, emotion within the story shows the characters connection and passion with eachother. But hey.. that's my opinion.
Also Issy's dad is dead im afraid lol. I decided to have Natalie as a widow. :) Sorry guys. and seriously... damn trolls have killed Part 1's rating :/ |
| 2011-10-29 02:27:52 |
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Bondage and torture aint usually my thing, I prefer the first part more as it was more relaxed and fun for everyone, But still great story which I did enjoy. So Positive rating from me :) Keep them coming.
Cuddlesthabear. |
| 2011-10-28 14:06:23 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
Ya know.. When you give negative ratings... Would be nice to know why... |
| 2011-09-23 19:52:19 |
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@Kenny
Thanks for the comments, I always read the comments on my stories and take into consideration what people say. As for the views of a fifteen year old, The reason why that is fairly accurate is because I am only 22, so I still have a fair ammount of memory of what it was like been a young teenager. Also thanks for been supportive with the grammer and spelling issues, I've found the american and english dictionary to be a pain at times also.
I've read a few of your stories and found the writing to be great but I personally am not really a fan of gay sex so it didn't appeal to me much but the quality of the writing was great.
Thanks for comment. |
| 2011-09-15 11:14:57 |
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Guys, Part 2 is already up with part 3.. This is just a edited upload of the first part to check if I got the grammar bugs out. If you want the other parts just click my name.
@Anonymous reader
2011-09-15 01:15:57
Are you that much of a douchebag yourself? Oh wow... A spelling mistake in a word that isn't even part of the story. Do you get off to yourself been so pedantic or somthing because frankly your comment is ill constructed and just a waste AND insult to the english language even more so than the actual spelling mistake.
Next time take note from
Anonymous reader
2011-09-14 23:18:03
and don't be a dick about it please. |
| 2011-09-09 16:19:26 |
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Finally to the 'pedo story' thing. In my eyes pedo stories focus around sexual acts of a child only and contain no passion or rommance within them but rather just focus on the sexual aspects instead of the emotional side. This is not my style and I perfer to include the emotion and make the story much more light hearted rather than dark and eery. For this reason I don't see my series as pedophilic even though the characters ARE underaged but rather a mature and passionate series, others may agree or disagree but im afraid this will be the only story containg characters under the age of 13. |
| 2011-09-09 16:17:33 |
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@Anonymous reader
2011-09-09 13:31:24
I actually really do agree with you. The problem with this part of the story is that I aimed to finish it last night as I was planning to be really busy this weekend and I didn't want to leave the audiance hanging on part 2 for four days but plans changed. So in response to this I accept the ending is weak but I have ideas and I will be doing a major rehaul of my stories, bringing them all together and proof reading until my eyes bleed and desperatly attempt to remove every grammar error. I will reuplod the series in one post which will be a collection with part 4 included as a conclusion and elements of part 3 re-written involving more character interaction and speech explaing and talking about the acts dicipitated within the story. |
| 2011-09-09 13:21:45 |
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@Anonymous reader
2011-09-09 12:42:05
I have no problem with your critiacism and I welcome it with open arms as I know the only way to improve is to be told my errors but please in future dont post comments along lines of
"You need a major overhaul... or at least a decent education"
or if you were the other person "Go back to school."
There is just no need for those comments, Pointing out the problem and giving me advise on how to improve would be fine. Eitherway it's done with now. I am going to re-read all the stories and spend hours fixing them up and repost them all into one post as an complete collection.
@Last Comment
I am actually dyslexic but I do not request sympthay but rather understanding, I have read stories on here for a few years and I aspire to write great stories that people will enjoy but you will have to remember that my mental limitations will get in the way but I do not want sympthay. I want to be told of my errors so I can fix them and write am |
| 2011-09-09 11:03:22 |
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-ciated but don't be a dick about it please. |
| 2011-09-09 11:03:02 |
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@ Last Comment.
Even though I apreciate your critascism and pointed out a flaw in my story, You don't have to be a sarcastic asshole about the matter. It's funny also, I remember there was point when I was 10 and two days later I was 11.. Strange how that can happen. I admitted at the start of this story I fucked up last time and apologised but I guess your too ignorant to read that.
@Comment before last.
Just one example? Do tell me more... but considering I am dyslexic and brand new to reading I think I have done pretty well on here as the stats speak for themselves. All three of my stories are above 90% possitive so i must not be as bad as you think. I would apreciate if you could give me the feedback of my other mistakes without also sounding like an arse.
Finally to both of you. I'd like to see you register on here and actually try and contritbute a story of your own and let others judge it and hunt each and every word searching for grammer errors.
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| 2011-09-08 12:09:36 |
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@Last Comment
I planned for this to be a trilogy but I MAY extend it if requested by a few people. As for number of chapters it just varies between stories. Just a place to give people a chance to stop reading and take a break if needed since at the chapter areas the sexual hight has decreased really ;) |
| 2011-09-08 12:07:47 |
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Love your stories, Great work and great structure and rythem with them and unlike most mind control stories, you keep yours in a realistic perspective. Huge fan and see you as a great insperation to me.
Enjoy a hug :) *Hugs*
Keep it up mate. |
| 2011-09-08 10:54:13 |
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@Last Comment.
Thank-you.. Finally somone see's it like I do. Of cource, I would never do this sort of thing in real life but you do have to rememebr that this stuff did happen and was considered normal. Thanks for comments and feedback but can I ask for somone to explain my grammer issues and spelling? I have proof read this a few times and found no faults with it so any extra help would be apreciated. I am new to writing stories so I am still learning but again thank-you for all the positive feedback and comments. |
| 2011-09-05 13:55:27 |
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I'd like to apologise for all the ?'s in random words.
For some reason it replaced all the " " and ' ' when I copied it from Microsoft Word to the XNXX site. If anyone has a fix for this please let me know and I will fix and re-upload as I know they can be a real annoyance. |
| 2011-09-05 13:54:57 |
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I'd like to apologise for all the ?'s in random words.
For some reason it replaced all the " " and ' ' when I copied it from Microsoft Word to the XNXX site. If anyone has a fix for this please let me know and I will fix and re-upload as I know they can be a real annoyance. |