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| 2011-10-10 17:17:54 |
Only A Gothic Sisters Love Part 1 The Beginning |
I really didn't like your ending to Gothic Amy but this is really good. |
| 2011-09-18 07:26:26 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 10 I Know Pronounce You... |
Anonymous reader
2011-09-15 22:26:26
I think lilith should fall in love with a 14-year-old girl or something, a bit of a random twist
YH! u could use my character ;) 1 year older but close enough.
I definitely think lillith is better with another girl than with a guy, im not too keen on max, i mean he's a nice guy, ish, but i just never really warmed to him. |
| 2011-09-15 13:59:15 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 10 I Know Pronounce You... |
And no punishing Lillith! |
| 2011-09-15 13:58:56 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 10 I Know Pronounce You... |
Bit disappointing, didn't like john marrying amy but i guess it's your story =)
I don't think lillith should get together with max, i think she'd be much better in a lesbian relationship, maybe with 2 other girls. that'd be awesome.
Again with the pregnancy, =( sad times, i like reading your stories and that won't go well.
I think you should definitely put in some more kinky stuff, you could go on a honeymoon and do some exhibitionism, bondage etc. and/or you could use the fantasy room for some special time with some pissing (i'm not against it) and a dog. ^_^ |
| 2011-09-08 21:00:29 |
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Great job, this story is much better than the last.
don't let things get too out of hand for him and remember to have a plotline, not just sex =) looking forward to part 4 |
| 2011-09-08 20:43:54 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 9 TEASING |
i get that it takes time to write sometimes if u have block but can u at least post a message saying something so we know u havn't just dissappeared from tne site. |
| 2011-09-08 20:20:22 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 9 Moving In Together |
pregnancies are a bad idea they always end a series because the author cant include them in anything and they take up so much time that the characters wont have time for much. if you realy wanted to you could have lilith or amy get pregnant depending on whether john makes amy a bitch she could look after lilith's baby or if not lilith could look after amy's baby. i think this whole lilith/amy war thing is good, but i think that he should marry lilith, he's always shown more affection to her and she's such an amazing character. |
| 2011-09-06 12:13:20 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 9 Moving In Together |
After all she did say she was gonna be a bitch =) |
| 2011-09-06 12:11:27 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 9 Moving In Together |
you could really emphasise the dog thing with some beastiality if anyone else is interested in it. maybe amy could wake up and be angry at Lilith being untied and they could get a pet dog which they could use to teach amy a lesson not to have a go at john.
I'm not overly keen on the wedding but its interesting, probably just because i prefer lilith as a bride. =) |
| 2011-09-03 22:27:49 |
Gothic Amy and Me Part 8...When a Door closes a window opens... |
i think you should put in some bondage, peeing , animal sex, something really fetishy to spice things up and grab peoples attention.
As always, positive rating, would have liked to have seen more with lilith but i guess that can wait =D
~Snow. xx |
| 2011-09-02 21:30:49 |
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Sorry that last post was by me, i got logged out. |
| 2011-09-02 19:53:48 |
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I agree don't include the adults, also avoid pregnancy as it can kill a good series. you should check out a t.v show called: a town called eureka. pretty much your described town, it might help you visualise it better. quite good for a first story, you could have him make his sister do some really fetish sex stuff tryna see how it works, like dogs or peeing, whatever your fetishes are. one last thing, could you make her talk a bit more while they're doing stuff, makes her seem lesd of a drone and more her will being bent to his.
~Snow. xx |
| 2011-08-28 08:34:19 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 7 Fitting In, In college |
Hey sorry i forgot to include character ages, their both in late 15, snow doesn't know her birthday so she just goes by the end of the year and grace is mid january |
| 2011-08-28 08:14:57 |
Gothic Amy And Me Part 7 Fitting In, In college |
Hey could u add in 2 more girls please? Grace: 5'1, dark brunette, light mixed race, dark brown eyes, ear-length hair, shy little sub, bi, bondage fetish. And Snow 5'1, pure white hair just below ear-length, silver eyes, white, Shy, Grace's girlfriend, cum fetish, bi. thx ;) |