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Date Story title Comment
2011-08-21 15:54:05 Stan and Wendy Part 2 They story itself was good. I read both parts. But the amount of grammatical errors gave me a headache. Aside from spelling, you didn't stay in the same tense, words were used incorrectly, punctuation was a problem, and perhaps my biggest pet peeve of all, when I stands alone it is ALWAYS capital.

I am not saying this to be a bitch or anything. I could actually help you fix it, if you wanted. This is purely constructive criticism. As I said, the story itself is great, but it is hard to follow because of all the errors.
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