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| 2013-05-15 20:16:03 |
Boy with the Saint Vitus touch |
I quite enjoyed this story. I hope that you do continue and add to it.
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| 2012-11-04 16:11:13 |
Helena's Nightmare |
It is a great story.
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| 2012-11-04 16:00:03 |
Sweet Little Sister |
You are doing fine. Proofreading can only catch so much as you know what you ment to write and will see that as you read. Spell check and grammer tic will also only catch so much. errors are going to occor. Yes I would like to see a second part.
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| 2012-07-26 10:34:08 |
Brother's love- Part 1 |
I am sorry but I have to give this one a negative rating. It starts off with bad grammar and dose not get any easier to read. Use a grammar editor if you have one. It will not catch all the trouble but will help. Proof read, always proof your work and when your going through it hit enter when ever you reach a paragraph. This will put a second paragraph key on the text and separate them in here. Above all Don't give up on your writing. |
| 2012-06-07 00:46:59 |
Equestrian reversal. The rider is ridden |
Very hard to follow. I lost intrest very quickly |
| 2012-05-15 00:30:17 |
PARTY |
I dont know what is going on with the doubling of my posts. seems the last three stories I have posted have posted twice. |
| 2012-05-13 21:25:12 |
Mine and Daddy's little secret |
I can not rate what I can not read. There is a lot of criticizing but none telling you how to fix it. You need to proofread. fix what you find wrong and double space between paragraphs. Take your time, and always PROOF READ your work. |
| 2012-05-13 20:43:56 |
The Satanic Witch Ritual aka (The Lilith Touch) |
I have absolutely no idea what I just read. |
| 2012-05-10 13:56:57 |
Substitute Rides the Bus |
Some times less is more. too much detail can make it boaring. |
| 2012-05-10 13:39:54 |
A Night with Lizzie's Barbies |
I just read the comments, It is unfortunate that they allow children to post. Has to be children or they would know what Fantasy means. This was a great read. Thank you for posting it. |
| 2012-05-10 13:24:06 |
Cheerleader Full story |
I can now see why anonymous comments might be blocked; Comments section is for I think, commenting on the story. your likes or dislikes maybe how it could be made better. if your want to Sext or hook up join a forum that does that not here.
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| 2012-05-09 10:01:24 |
Sex with my horney mom |
Your stories might be good, but they are not legible. If you do not go through your posts and separate the paragraphs you end up with a cluster-fuck of a mess. Proof read, and hit enter between the paragraphs as you do. it helps
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| 2012-05-06 21:00:45 |
Sister -- Brother -- Lover |
I read it twice and still do not know if I was reading a sex story or Med update |
| 2012-05-06 11:20:53 |
laura gets her wish |
Double entering between paragraphs will keep them seperated when you post the story. it is nearly impossable to read without the breaks bettween them
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| 2012-05-06 11:14:38 |
The babysitter returns |
Very well written loved the story thank you for sharing.
Double enter when spacing paragraphs will keep them from jambing together when you post here.
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| 2012-05-04 18:49:39 |
Dinner At Master L's |
Out side of hinting at pedio, the story line is solid. couple of typos spell check didnt catch but I wont diss a good writer for that. Just have to be on the level. those harping that Longer with more detail are full of shit. A good discription leading the readers imagination to fill in the detail is perfection. when you try to fill in every detail the story can drag out.
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| 2012-05-01 23:06:52 |
Shelly was my first Girlfriend. |
It is kind of hard to come up with a second part to your first time with a girl. Memory isnt so clear. |
| 2012-05-01 12:56:06 |
My Gift For You |
Delicious, My older sister did not do a strip for me, but she did the next best thing, she gave me her girlfriend. |
| 2012-04-27 16:49:29 |
Jamie And Michelle |
Thank you, that is the kind of info that helps
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| 2012-04-27 01:27:34 |
Cheerleader Full story |
Incest, Might in a fiction, but never really wanted to screw my sisters. growing up with them was bad enough. without adding that sort or thing. |
| 2012-04-26 15:02:56 |
Natural Born Cocksucker Part 1 |
Interesting concept. Good job of relating her thoughts. |
| 2012-04-25 00:28:03 |
Just a little fun |
Blackmailing sisters never turns out good.
first chapter comming along nicely.
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| 2012-04-25 00:15:07 |
Prom Night |
I missed one word proof reading, that I can find.wrote burry instead of burying. and that is all you can give for insite. Please, Like or not like, I am not making anyone sign in to vote on my stories. so far as I know their free for anyone to read and vote on. |
| 2012-04-25 00:06:49 |
Shelly was my first Girlfriend. |
Who am I going to address if I comment on the comments, If a reader were to leave a name, It might be possable.
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| 2012-04-24 02:58:59 |
With my best friend |
it can be very frustrating when your in love with your best friend
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| 2012-04-24 02:33:02 |
Prom Night |
Look again, I never said Cat was my first, I said she was my High school sweetheart. Shelly was my best friend, and my first girl friend.
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| 2012-04-17 15:04:43 |
Cheerleader Chapter 3 |
I have to agree, and They were there when I posted this. I am sorry for the messed up format. If anyone knows how to prevent this from happening Please let me know
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| 2012-04-17 15:03:08 |
Cheerleader Chapter 2 |
I am sorry for the messed up format. If anyone knows how to prevent this from happening when I post, Please let me know. |
| 2012-04-17 15:01:30 |
Cheerleader |
I am sorry for the messed up format, If someone knows how to prevent this from happening when I post, Please tell me.
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| 2012-04-13 00:01:47 |
Persuading the Girl Next Door 2 |
I love how this is going. please continue. |
| 2012-01-12 20:28:12 |
Genie Chronicles 30 |
Some one missed the mark. I was into the first 29 installments then got a look at this crap. the only way they were written by the same person is if there was a total personality change.
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