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Comment |
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| 2012-04-03 04:08:06 |
Summer with Daniel |
I'm surprised people this young are even on this site, lol. Good story bro! And yes guys, I'm keen to chat. |
| 2012-03-20 06:34:38 |
Best Clean Up Ever! Pt 2 |
Again, good story, could have been better executed though. Slow it down, write a draft even and add to it later before posting, it just fills it up more and makes for a better read. But still, I really enjoyed this. Thanks. |
| 2012-03-20 06:27:24 |
Best Clean Up Ever |
I loved the story, you could've taken it a bit slower though, build it up a bit more. Was this true? Very, very hot. |
| 2012-01-16 08:18:08 |
First glory hole experience |
Hot story bro! Short and sweet! |
| 2011-11-05 23:13:44 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
And obviously you are a bit too for reading this story given it's tags. That stuff's unneccessary here, and pointless. |
| 2011-09-12 03:57:30 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Sorry, hahaa, click 'BlueNinja' up the top and that will take you to my page where you can then click to send me a private message. I promise I will reply to all as soon as I can. And I swear, I'm not trying to be vain or anything, but I'm pretty hot but REALLY single so would really appreciate any pic swapping, chat, or even meeting up with a nice guy or girl in Wellington if anyone from NZ's on here. I'm nearly 21 so no one older than 25 please. Sorry, it's just a preference. |
| 2011-09-12 03:53:40 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Hey, I'm really sorry to all those who like these stories, but I've been trying for a while to get the third part to a stage where I'm happy with it but I just can't seem to. It's not that I don't know where to take it, it's just that I would consider it bad writing if I was reading it on here myself, so yeah, gutted. By the way, I'm flattered that people want to give me their email address, you know you can go up to the top and click 'send author a PM (private message)' and I will eventually get around to reading it. I enjoy talking with people, especially strangers because I can comfortably be perfectly honest with them. I'm about to start a new story right now though, but only because I know exactly what to write, lol. |
| 2011-09-12 03:52:38 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Hey, I'm really sorry to all those who like these stories, but I've been trying for a while to get the third part to a stage where I'm happy with it but I just can't seem to. It's not that I don't know where to take it, it's just that I would consider it bad writing if I was reading it on here myself, so yeah, gutted. By the way, I'm flattered that people want to give me their email address, you know you can go up to the top and click 'send author a PM (private message)' and I will eventually get around to reading it. I enjoy talking with people, especially strangers because I can comfortably be perfectly honest with them. I'm about to start a new story right now though, but only because I know exactly what to write, lol. |
| 2011-06-20 05:52:38 |
Cinema Part 1 |
That's what the Author's info says dude. Why, you in Welly? Any hot guys or girls that wanna meet me just send me a private message. I may not relpy right away but i'll get there. |
| 2011-06-20 05:52:01 |
Cinema Part 1 |
That's what the Author's info says dude. Why, you in Welly? Any hot guys or girls that wanna meet me just send me a private message. I may not relpy right away but i'll get there. |
| 2011-05-12 05:43:10 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Hahaa. No, I didn't "Dog" that story, I gave constructive criticism. Which wasn't easy because like I said, it was hard to find exactly the right word to describe what was wrong with it. But I stick to what I said. I didn't say he fucking sucks, I didn't call his work shit, so don't come on here hurling that kind of brainless abuse when it has no point behind it. Besides, if it was so bad why'd you read the second one? His story made me want to stop half way through, let alone read part 2. |
| 2011-05-08 05:54:27 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Yes, but in order to set that up I'd probably have to start part 3 from a completely different perspective. It would seem like it was just stapled to these other two stories and not really flow on from them. But keep checking. You may see part 3 up here soon enough. |
| 2011-04-28 07:54:27 |
Cute Little Colin |
Don't be afraid to drag it out, it's not boring so you definately have what it takes to keep the reader interested. Use spell check, it's a god send, lol. But seriously, you need to add more detail or else it's just a brief report, not a story. I won't rate this one as I didn't like the writing but i don't want to discourage you from writing more and improving on it. |
| 2011-04-28 07:43:46 |
Cinema Part 1 |
Probably going to wait until i finish part 5 then release them all together. Or else people just ask for a part 2 then never come back to it. If you do want to follow this story however, add me to your favourites because i have high hopes for this series. |
| 2011-04-28 07:31:29 |
Hitting The Showers Part 2 |
Part 3 coming soon. I'm having trouble with it though so any suggestions would help. I'm trying to keep it as convincing as possible but still give it that driving force that short stories need and the smut that you're all here for. I guess i just thought of this story as closed so it's hard to open it up again, if i can't get it right then i won't post it and i'll just move on to my other stories. |
| 2011-04-26 05:10:37 |
Blonde Boys Bash |
Sorry but that wasn't good. The writing was amateur and the story moved too fast to be enjoyed let alone believed (I know it was fiction but even then it should be realistic to some degree). The sentences were stilted and of a very poor quality as far as creative writing goes. |
| 2011-04-26 04:37:12 |
I love you, Caden - Chapter One |
The story was sweet and cute, but the writing style made it boring and hard to keep reading. It felt too stilted and... not factual, but almost like an essay. I'm struggling to find the right word but it just didn't flow well, felt a bit amateur. Sorry, i guess you just need practice. |
| 2011-04-24 21:40:17 |
Hitting The Showers Part 1 |
Actually no. If you did your research you'd find that countless species indulge in homosexual relationships, not just humans. What's more natural than that? And isn't the definition of "natural" something that occurs in nature? And since humans are a part of nature surely anything we do can be considered natural. But it's a long debate, please read the tags before you click on a story. |
| 2011-04-24 01:33:51 |
Hitting The Showers Part 1 |
My old profile is no longer in use as my all stories accidentally got deleted. So this is the newly edited version. |
| 2011-04-22 23:02:25 |
Cinema Part 1 |
No I didn't steal this story, I'm not using my old profile as all my stories accidentally got deleted when I requested for a few of them to be taken down. Yes, the intro is a bit long but it's for a good reason, I wanted to build up a good base for the story, and I know it may seem a bit unrealistic, but it's not, there are people brave enough to go out on a limb like this and if you disagree, I'm sorry, it's a fantasy, and it's my fantasy. |