Comments from MrSoftee
|2013-06-23 13:06:07||Girls In My Shed||MrSoftee
Thanks lolaheiress I meant to say, and Diego, interesting comments. More dialogue during sex I'll definitely think about, and I agree in hindsight I wish I'd done a little bit more with Sheila. She's not sexy tho lol. No part 2 sorry this was its natural end, but you can imagine them all having a great time for a long time :) Now I have to think of a new story...
This is Diego again. Author, the story is great. Perhaps a bit more dialogue during sex would be good. But it was an overall good story. The scene was set very well although perhaps a bit too much detail and we didnt get to know the wife very well. I suppose part 2 will take care of that. Good job and keep it up author. Pun intended.
|2013-06-23 13:07:12||Girls In My Shed||3210launch
Mr. Softee-- This story was great. It was sexy and mature and comfortable in a way that suited the characters and narrator perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories, but what can top two sexy teen girls and a hint of the forbidden?
|2013-06-23 13:08:16||Girls In My Shed||Moonlight Gambler
I read this great story last week, but forgot to make a comment. Thanks for a very well-written story. I just finished the "Coping With Retirement" series and I must say, you have your act together! Thanks for your very erotic stories. You sure have us old guys figured out to a T!!
This story needs a nice little post script that says something like, they continued their little adventures all the way thru high school and jr. college, and after the girls graduated from college and found the jobs they wanted to settle into, decided to be each others soul mate for life. Then they wanted one child each, and they chose their friend to fill the bill of giving them their offspring. Otherwise this was a great story, loved every second of it. Too bad that dreams like this never seem to come true for those that really want it. Living alone is a bitch.
|2013-06-23 13:08:46||Girls In My Shed||Anonymous reader
A possible 2nd story in this line could be written from Sheila's point of view; detailing the reasons for her moving out in the first place & some of the things (NAUGHTY or OTHERWISE?) she did while they were separated... Possibly meeting up with 2 young girls on a Monday and being seduced by them at (or after) a Girl Scouts/Guides meeting. (guess who I'm thinking of)
MrSoftee, If you want to, feel free to use this idea because I come up with lots of ideas but can never seem to complete them.
Loved the story:
Earl John of Ucolta
Thanks for your comments Anon/postscript and MR (great nic!). Makes so much difference. Yeah they all live happily ever after, Naomi and Gemma, Nick and Sheila. I nearly had them all go to a Black Sabbath gig together :). I could see Sheila helping Gemma get into politics...
|2013-06-23 13:09:18||Girls In My Shed||Anonymous reader
Wonderful story! And you were absolutely right, the slower the reading the better. Happy writing, and thank you so very much for posting!