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| 2011-05-30 18:27:01 |
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You are right about fulfilling the criteria of the competition. I say this having been unfailrly critiqued for the same reason. I really enjoy the stylistic originality of switching off between 2 1st person narrations in the text.
The Lil presentation is a little elevated in places for a 16 year old, but having written from the perspective of a 14 year old girl in my own submission, I understand this.
Congratulations and good luck. |
| 2011-05-30 14:51:12 |
Stories from Davis Hall 2: Lynn's New Home |
Short, Sweet, & Hawt !! Lynn is a girl-on-girl goddess. I hope to read more about her. |
| 2011-05-23 15:33:14 |
Stories from Davis Hall 1: Brook misses Will |
~ and so begins the adventures of privileged west coast teen students in their ever-expansive sex lives. Starting in June, I will be creating a new profile to start a series that will include characters involved in this series. It couldn't be as good as this one, though. ;-) |
| 2011-05-16 14:29:19 |
Dreams Without Guilt or Shame: the CHALLENGE |
To onehandedtypist below. I am sorry if my naming criteria distracted from the quality of the story. Readers feel free to instruct me on this point of fiction writing.
Perhaps there should have been a criterion for the length of entries. There was none. The muses inform me on quantity of content. I write no less or more. I respect that of all writers. Under other circumstances, I might have serialized here, but the criteria specified "a" story. |
| 2011-05-16 14:26:35 |
Dreams Without Guilt or Shame: the CHALLENGE |
To onehandedtypist below. I am sorry if my naming criteria distracted from the quality of the story. Readers feel free to instruct me on this point of fiction writing.
Perhaps there should have been a criterion for the length of entries. There was none. The muses inform me on quantity of content. I write no less or more. I respect that of all writers. Under other circumstances, I might have serialized here, but the criteria specified "a" story. |
| 2011-05-14 13:40:28 |
Will's new old home: ENDING |
CONGRATULATIONS on an outstanding series. You kept us all in amazing suspense at the end of each chapter. I like the way you tied together events from your previous series.
I will start 2 series this summer that will reference characters from these series. Keep posted. |
| 2011-05-10 13:07:07 |
Will's new old home ending: Part 1 |
Something tells me something really momentous is going to happen between Pierce and Haley. Will the Rev. prevail now that his allies are reduced in number? ~~ still sitting at the edge of our seats. |
| 2011-05-04 17:40:02 |
Dreams Without Guilt or Shame: the CHALLENGE |
To the commenter below: I checked with the writer who issued this challenge. First person female, although it conforms to the criteria, is not a specific criterion of the competition.
Yes, this is muti-thematic, but "bisexual" as a theme raises anticipation of varied scenarios. Many thanks, though. |
| 2011-04-28 12:53:08 |
Will's new old home: Part 13 |
Sometimes I wish I had grown up in "the little town". Are the days numbered for the bitch Rachel? So THAT 'S what "the Farm" was used for. How will psycho Sam strike again? Is Amy Lewis finally out of the clutches of the Rev? GR8 episode! Many more to cum, fer sure. I will message u. |
| 2011-04-25 12:23:26 |
Will's new old home: Part 12 |
That was me, below. |
| 2011-04-19 01:49:51 |
Will's new old home: Part 11 |
Sam son of Claire returns from the previous series, all f**d up from that crazy farm of the Rev.'s back in Nevada. Amy Lewis is in the clutches of the diabolical Rev. Will she be able to escape? Rachel survives a screw up because they've got Amy. Prim and proper Haley is learning some disturbing truths about her past. Now we begin to understand why Rachel is so obsessive.
The twists and turns just keep getting wilder and crazier. How is it all going to get sorted out? LMAO! |
| 2011-04-13 21:51:43 |
Will's new old home: Part 10 |
Planned voyeur/exhibition scenario = fun and funny
shaving off pubic hair as part of foreplay? That may be a 1st.
Amy Lewis will rise again. Will she be the heroine for Will/Brooke vs. the Rev./Hayden?
I will message u.
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| 2011-04-03 23:33:30 |
Will's new old home: Part 8 |
Amy Lewis is going down! But who will she bring down with her? What does Brook still not know that could endanger her relationship with Will? When do we see the return of Rev. Greene? I will message you |
| 2011-03-28 20:21:38 |
Will's new old home: Part 7 |
I guess Lynn will be lesbian and proud. We will watch out for Sam who lived on "the farm" . Will Pierce ever lose that chastity device? I guess that will depend on what happens to Amy Lewis. |
| 2011-03-28 20:21:06 |
Will's new old home: Part 7 |
I guess Lynn will be lesbian and proud. We will watch out for Sam who lived on "the farm" . Will Pierce ever lose that chastity device? I guess that will depend on what happens to Amy Lewis. |
| 2011-03-24 23:53:18 |
Will's new old home: Part 6 |
ROLMFAO! Wish I had that much fun when I was 14. I will message u. |
| 2011-03-20 19:52:49 |
Will's new old home: Part 3 |
girl/girl scene is good. I luv the Amy Lewis character. I hope she is just getting started. Rachel is the stalker bitch from hell who I am sure will orchestrate all the most sinsiter characters. . |
| 2011-03-19 18:25:27 |
Will's new old home: Part 2 |
OK! But more with Amy Lewis and her penchant for blackmailing male students. You are giving up on Brook's peek hole into the boy's locker room showers ~ too much potential there. I will message you. |
| 2011-03-19 17:22:45 |
Will's new old home: Part 1 |
Why would a guy wear sliders in the shower? Any girl who drilled a hole to peek into locker room showers I have ever used would be able to see everything unobsructed on all the guys, often including what it looks like when they wash below the belt. Otherwise a pretty good story from a fellow West Virginian. |