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| 2012-12-16 18:00:21 |
Charity Graduates 1: Fatherfucker |
ummm , no, I dont call it Batman... where do you think you saw batman |
| 2012-11-14 03:42:42 |
Heather makes a deal with the dealers |
Strong middle, but the run on paragraphs tend to detract from the story.. i feel parts of it were very rushed. My advice is take your time.. you had great dialogue but kept smashing everything else together |
| 2012-10-29 04:03:06 |
Cuckolded by a 12 Year Old : 2: The Nanny Cam |
I love how you are offended by his wife cheating on him...yet the husband doesnt sleep with her, pays for sex with prostitutes and has sex with children...somehow that's accepatable |
| 2011-03-02 21:59:02 |
Charity Starts At Home: Chapter 1 : Mother-Daughter Reunion |
dear jen jen.. that is also bullshit... but if you want to try proving me " wrong" feel free to show me exactly where it is my story allegedly appeared before then.. a link would be nice |
| 2011-03-02 17:11:21 |
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no , you don't.. i have found MANY of your stories dating back YEARS on different sites by different authors
and if you really are such a good author, why is your grasp of grammar so exceptionally weak outside of your stories |
| 2011-03-02 14:47:04 |
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stop stealing peoples work |
| 2011-03-02 14:46:25 |
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this was stolen from Lit over a year ago
stop stealing people's work |
| 2011-03-02 14:43:04 |
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stop stealing people's work |
| 2011-03-02 14:42:25 |
listen to your hushand |
nearly impossible to read.. the paragraphs were a headache..while the action was interesting ii a ll just seemd to be a run on stream of consciousness |
| 2011-03-02 02:16:05 |
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who did you steal this from? |
| 2011-03-02 02:15:14 |
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except she didnt write any of this |
| 2011-03-02 02:14:30 |
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wow, plaigirsim looks fun |
| 2011-02-08 17:00:42 |
Charity Starts At Home: Chapter 3 : Gotta Hve Faith |
You fellas are hilarious... you were given the chance to vote against this story if you didnt like it, and you didnt do it...somehow this is my fault?
that and you come attack my story on the merit that some one voted against you...and then you add this conspiracy theory that I'm somehow the one thats responsible for people voting for me
and you dont even have the courage to log in and show your true colours under your own name "anonymous"..it must be really rough for you to be such a coward |
| 2011-02-05 22:52:04 |
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Awkward and the dialogue is stilted, while the premise is novel, the characterization is two dimensional at best |
| 2011-02-04 22:42:59 |
Charity Starts At Home : Chapter 2 : Entertaining Guests |
to the second anonymous.. of course its hard to believe; its fiction lol... blonde school girls with huge tits dont shag their mothers friends while she sleeps on the bed in the real world lol
but I am glad you liked it |
| 2011-01-29 21:23:33 |
Charity Starts At Home: Chapter 1 : Mother-Daughter Reunion |
This is my very first story post.. |
| 2011-01-29 21:23:25 |
Charity Starts At Home: Chapter 1 : Mother-Daughter Reunion |
This is my very first story post.. |