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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2013-02-22 17:37:18 |
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Obviously fiction - but bloody sexy and well written. Well Done Purvv. Positive Vote. |
| 2013-01-04 19:47:28 |
LOVLY LONLY AUNTY !!!! |
What part of "writes better than this." Did you not understand, Numb nuts. |
| 2013-01-02 18:10:06 |
LOVLY LONLY AUNTY !!!! |
And YES, loopy, that last was from me - just in case you were too stupid to realise it |
| 2013-01-01 15:00:13 |
LOVLY LONLY AUNTY !!!! |
I guessed at the "Class" of this offering with the title : Lovely spelt wrong; Lonely spelt wrong - and I wasn't disappointed. CRAP
If being a writer of stories in English was your aim in life - you should have spent more time paying attention to your English Teacher. My six year old nephew writes better than this. |
| 2012-11-28 20:18:39 |
Begginer to this. Hot passionate sex in the club |
Wow, beautifully written, nicely laid out with some spelling mistakes, but well worth a Positive Vote - so that's what I gave you. But I am really pissed that there weren't any sluts like you around when I was capable of doing anything about it. LOL |
| 2012-11-25 14:01:49 |
The Other Half Of Me |
Sorry BOB, I meant continue writing, not this particular story. It's pretty much perfect the way it is. With the best stories I download into Apache and then correct everything that needs it. This story joins the other greats. |
| 2012-11-25 13:58:12 |
The Other Half Of Me |
OK BOB, I'll say it slowly, so you understand. POSITIVE VOTE. What a beautifully thought out and written story of love and heartbreak and . . . . PLEASE continue this. I know the stupid fucking 'A's make it hard to read BUT that is a problem of the site and not you. |
| 2012-11-25 13:33:19 |
Finding My Daddy |
YOU can't fix the 'A' problem phyco, because it is a problem on the XNXX site (possibly a virus or programming error), and has caused many stories to suffer the same fault.
Please continue the story. I think my meds are kicking in and the poor spelling isn't as big a bother as usual, and as you put it 'somewhat intriguing'. Positive vote so far. |
| 2012-11-24 16:53:40 |
Daddy's Hands |
Brilliant WP as usual. I believe the A's are a virus in the system on the site, because they appear in many of the recent stories, (or some anomaly in the program. Management said they were 'on it and it would eventually go away' - I don't see that happening Trev.
Anyway WP - Positive Vote |
| 2012-11-23 19:14:29 |
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Anonymous 00:16:01 Are you as totally mindless as your comments or did you have to really try to be that stupid. At the top of the page it says 'Fantasy' ie doesn't have to be realistic. If you are so desperate for believable, go to an encyclopaedia website. |
| 2012-11-22 17:25:09 |
Kata loves her dad |
Hey John, Don't worry about ole shadowfairy's bullshit. When I write, I do it in Apache word, and then cut and post it, so he would probably think my stories were 'stolen' too. (Mindless little troll that he is)
Really good story, bordering on 'Great'. I would suggest that the actual defloration of Kata could have been more thoroughly described, (ie millimetre by millimetre) this IS a sex site after all, but overall, well deserving of my Positive Vote - and I eagerly await further submissions. |
| 2012-11-20 23:02:19 |
My Son's Cum Rag, part 2 |
Thanks Kinky. Great second part. Waiting . . . . ohh Positive vote. |
| 2012-11-20 22:56:19 |
Fuck Pals Chapter 1 |
Same applies the other way PF. If you're going to insult our intelligence by posting a poorly written story and then try to blackmail the readers into voting positive - you've got a LOT to learn about this site. Suggest : Double spacing between paragraphs, Joe is a name therefore capital letter, the personal pronoun 'I' is always a capital. Taking that one step further 'I'll' is an abbreviation of 'I will' so 'I' is capital and apostrophe indicates letters missing. You spelt 'tight' correctly and then spelt 'mite' wrong. The word is 'might'. 'Semen' comes from a dick 'seamen' go to sea. Simple things mostly that using the spell checker would correct |
| 2012-11-20 22:41:15 |
Fuck Pals |
Saw no paragraphs. . . . .Bye bye |
| 2012-11-16 14:18:34 |
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Sinturian, Your stories are really good from my perspective and I have saved the best. I nearly wrote this one off as crap because you ARE a good writer and you do know what PARAGRAPHS and APOSTROPHES are. However, I persevered, and I am glad I did. POSITIVE VOTE for the beginning to what may be a great story |
| 2012-11-15 05:58:12 |
You WILL be my princess! |
Loverbr
2012-11-13 15:08:58
*before
*Ghostrider939 was not only false about him but very rude and uncalled for.
I'm sure you can see by the tears in my eyes that I really could give a shit about what you think of me. As I first mentioned I could see some merit in your story - and then plainly commented on what the errors were. If knucklehead wants to call me a Grammar Nazi then I am quite prepared to retaliate. I am aware that this is just a porn site, BUT it IS a porn site for 'Writers of Porn' with emphasis on writers, and if you want to put up a crappy presentation because you wrote it on a crappy tablet or cellphone, expect some one to say 'Good Story-Shit layout.' If you can't write right - Don't write! |
| 2012-11-11 23:45:06 |
You WILL be my princess! |
masterj - pleased to see there are still morons content with the 'dumbing down' of the general population to match your idiot level. Phyco - thank you for your understanding - something masterj can't hope to attain. Anon 01:51:53 - since you wouldn't have the intelligence to learn, you probably don't know about the custom called 'droit de seigneur' or The Medieval right to take to wife without permission. Since this was a valid law, IT WASN'T RAPE |
| 2012-11-09 21:22:47 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife |
Anon 17:45:04 Nice to see there are still some mindless cretins still on the site. At it's peak, when this story talks about it, the Clarence reserve was about 5000 acres on a map but when you consider most of it was near vertical in places 7-8000 acres was probably nearer the mark - consisting of 1200 acres privately owned and the rest leased from the Government (Crown Land) Ever so slightly larger than 40 acres, don'tcha think. Idiot. |
| 2012-11-07 18:32:37 |
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Ohh Yes. I gave a positive vote for the story and hope you follow this up with a Part Two, without silly errors. |
| 2012-11-07 18:30:49 |
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Really good story with some utterly stupid mistakes. 'hot an ear to ear smile' and ' I hot a good at how smoking hot she looked tonight'. 'Emily inductively sat down' - I don't know where 'induction comes into it. Rubbish like this makes a story hard to concentrate on and therefore easy to dismiss. I know g and h are next to each other - hit the correct one. If you read the story out loud to yourself you can pick up some errors. |
| 2012-11-06 20:46:38 |
the day i found my son fucking me |
Childish Idiotic CRAP |
| 2012-11-06 20:44:28 |
Kim and Dad |
Normally I complain that writers don't space their writing out enough. This is the other end of the spectrum - taken to ridiculous extremes. The story is quite good but damaged by being spaced out FAR TOO MUCH. |
| 2012-11-06 19:16:25 |
You WILL be my princess! |
Loverbr, This is POTENTIALLY a very good story, shockingly written with no clue to where capital letters should be used, poor use of grammar and no use of paragraphs at all. Normally I would not even READ a story so poorly presented, but I persevered and found the premise of a really good story so I gave you a positive vote for that. I hope that if there IS a Part 2, you get someone to proof read and point out errors BEFORE you present it. As previously mentioned there could also be a lot more detail. Don't assume that because this is a sex site for horny old devils like me, that we don't expect some reasonable care with your writing. Out of ten, I would rate this between three and four. |
| 2012-11-03 16:06:13 |
My Son's Cum Rag, part 1 |
I'm not going to tell you that you are a sexy little minx, Kinky, but I'm pretty sure you are, and I'm not going to tell you that you are a brilliant writer of erotica, because anyone who DOESN'T know that is a fool. Can't wait for next part. POSITIVE VOTE and personal grade of 9/10 (Only because you stopped too soon) |
| 2012-11-02 18:04:07 |
Lisa's Morning After Pill |
Because you lot are such retarded little fucks, I'll write this really slowly. First, TBC - I assume you are trying to censor me from reading whatever I want to and not express my own feelings on the subject matter. What are you, a fucking Neo-Nazi or just a fascist. And you're the dumbfuck who ended his comments with "I liked it man" And the author is a woman.
Anon 17:31:02 is just an illiterate cretin who can't even SPELL a short sentence. And needs the story to have even more physical viciousness in it. Class Act.
Last but not least Anon 10:27:50 - It's relevant to know I am an atheist. About 2000 years ago a few guys, called wandering story tellers, told a story of a great teacher called Jesus of Nazareth, but, as story tellers do, they embellished the stories with idiot untruths like 'born of a virgin', 'walked on water', raised the dead etc. A couple of hundred years later when writing became popular these stories were written down And now people say it's TRUE |
| 2012-11-02 17:17:49 |
Daddy can't say no anymore to his girl |
Normally when I see a story without paragraphs, I just move on and think highly derogatory thoughts about an author who is so arrogant they think their readers should love them whether they feed them crap or caviar. In this instance, I read the story - and loved it. Still piss poor spacing but a really good story. I'll download and rearrange the way it should be and probably read it several times. Anyway - Positive Vote - Well done for the story. Poo Poos for the spacing. |
| 2012-11-02 01:37:15 |
Made in the Slums by boblink10 |
I can just TELL that the last poster is the absolute epitome of intelligence. Negative intelligence that is. Brainless fuck too gutless to sign in and let everyone know what a moron he is. |
| 2012-11-01 22:36:59 |
Made in the Slums by boblink10 |
I'm NOT saying that I am a better writer than boblink, but I think I have a better idea of the technical side of writing, so I took it off my own bat, without the permission of the author, to present the story in an improved layout. Vilify me if you like for my presumption, but if anyone can see how the story is more easily read, and writes accordingly then my job is done. |
| 2012-10-30 21:19:38 |
Silken Ties That Bind |
Fantastic. Loving B&D is fine. I just have issues with pricks that think causing severe pain makes them more masculine, when in fact, it proves their stupidity and lack of humanity. Beautifully written. POSITIVE VOTE |
| 2012-10-30 15:58:21 |
Birthday Present Revised |
How can somebody who obviously has the smarts to write a good story, write such mindless, totally idiotic . . . . .ohhh I get it. This is a deliberate spoof on all the pathetic drips on this site who believe pregnancy is necessary (probably to bolster their own feelings of inadequacy in the 'wedding tackle' department. Good Job |
| 2012-10-29 01:01:27 |
Sister Seduction: Part 1 |
Also be a lot better if this fucked up site fixed their bloody programmes so that the double quotation marks were recognised. BUT anyway I felt that this deserved a Positive Vote as a first attempt . . . . .will not score so again if the spacing issue is not corrected. |
| 2012-10-29 00:57:52 |
Sister Seduction: Part 1 |
When I woke up, I forced myself to sit up, and looked at my clock. 8:35 a.m.
"Oh, shit," I muttered, and I quickly got dressed, grabbed my school bag, and ran downstairs, and into the kitchen where my Mom was making my 12-year-old and 8-year-old sisters breakfast. I opened the fridge to grab the milk, when my Mom said my name.
"Good morning, Sleeping Beauty," she said with a chuckle, motioning to the calendar. June 30th. Summer vacation starts today. MUCH BETTER in past tense and with some spacing |
| 2012-10-29 00:46:20 |
Daddy's little girl, forever. |
Very good story, stopped from being an excellent story, by not being properly spaced out. Paragraphs, paragraphs. Still good enough for a Positive Vote. |
| 2012-10-27 16:52:33 |
Ride to fullfillment |
Zipless sex - Loved it. Positive Vote! |
| 2012-10-27 03:07:20 |
Chuck Chicago Assignment IV |
Still loving it 1stprize. Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-26 20:02:29 |
My homeless stepdaughter Part 3 |
Continuing to be a beautifully written, readable, and sexy story. Great Stuff. . . .Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-26 19:54:14 |
Broken Birds, Part 1, Beth's Agony |
Wow, I'm really surprised at the number of people who think sex is out of place on a sex site - maybe it's better over the altar in a Church. However I was asked to have sex with a girl getting over the trauma of rape, and I did, with all my love and care, and she married me and we have two grown up kids, and we're still blissfully in love 35 years later. TRUE.
Anon 08:50:59 - Thank you - I agree whole-heartedly and feel that those writers who glorify rape deserve the same. This Great story does not. |
| 2012-10-26 19:41:34 |
Raping my father's wife Chapter 1 |
Don't know who the moronic asshole was who doesn't like my criticism, (he's too gutless to sign in and let his identity be known) but I, just like everyone on this site am entitled to my opinion, so fuck you - and the camel you rode in on. AND if you could read as well as you spout shit, and looked at the tags - one of them is RAPE. Personally, I think anyone who gets off on glorifying rape deserves time as Bubba's Bitch in Sing-Sing, but hey, that's my personal opinion. |
| 2012-10-26 17:56:04 |
Babysitter Fun |
Very well written and spaced and pretty damned sexy. Hurry up with Part II. Positive Vote !! |
| 2012-10-26 05:36:53 |
My New Girl Part Two |
Have to go back and read Part I, buy this was fantastic. Positive Vote for beautifully spaced, well written, highly erotic story. |
| 2012-10-25 15:28:41 |
Chapter 1 Deana Cums for a Visit (revised) |
Now THIS, Yummy, is an easily read story. Positive vote and personal grade 8.5/10 |
| 2012-10-24 17:35:28 |
My homeless stepdaughter Part 1 |
Highly erotic and beautifully written (and laid out) story. This has got to continue. Positive vote |
| 2012-10-24 00:42:01 |
The Phantom Stallion |
Beautifully written, but far too classy for most of the sex mad cretins (like ME) that infest this site. Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-24 00:29:23 |
Raping my father's wife Chapter 1 |
Solid block of text, so I stopped there. I am curious as to what chemical deficiency you are suffering from, that you would fantasize about raping ANYBODY . . . . .See a shrink - you are seriously fucked in the head. NEGATIVE VOTE |
| 2012-10-23 17:35:42 |
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One of the best stories you have written. Like one of the other commenters, I do not like rape and abuse stories . . . but this was just excellent. Thank you. Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-21 22:57:56 |
The day it happend |
Have a read of some of the other stories - they show how a story SHOULD be laid out, (ie Paragraphs) If you submit as a solid block of text, you've lost your readers immediately even if the story is good. Of course, in your case, the story will still be shit because that appears to be your style. Is English your first language ??? |
| 2012-10-21 05:20:13 |
Broken Birds, Part 1, Beth's Agony |
Fuck God and his queer angels - Vengeance is mine said the SEAL. Absolutely brilliant start (Shocking but brilliantly written) I must see the rest. Thank you Deneb. Positive vote (Personal 10/10) |
| 2012-10-20 22:51:36 |
Chuck's Chicago Assignment III |
Sorry 1stprize, Last poster was me. . . .I don't like anonymous posts and this stupid fucking system logs me out far too regularly. Still want to see more . . . |
| 2012-10-19 03:10:55 |
Introdoucing The Breeding Bench |
waiste, mummer, catious, convae, Enough said. Shit spelling. My favourite say 'If you can't write right - Don't write'
You also have a domination fetish which sickens me. |
| 2012-10-19 03:03:41 |
Apartment Hunting |
No paragraphs - no read - Neg Vote |
| 2012-10-19 03:00:47 |
Ami Grows Up |
Really wanted to tell you what a great writer you are, greeneyes, but got stuck on this feeling that a writer who is too lazy to properly format a story (ie USE FUCKIN' PARAGRAPHS) doesn't really want me to read it, so I stopped there. Could be a GREAT story - I'm just not interested in getting a headache trying to read it. |
| 2012-10-18 19:09:47 |
Laurie shares her daughter with me |
Re-read your story (because I liked it) and realised why there were no speech marks and some words were spelled incorrectly. You used one of those pathetic speech recognition programmes and then didn't proof read after to find it's cock-ups. |
| 2012-10-18 18:33:48 |
My Mom in Painful Sex |
See what happens when you don't do things right or proofread. You end up with shit like this. No paragraphs (a solid block of text just makes people think 'Fuck it' and move on.) She drank 125 litres of water - 30 GALLONS - Fuck off Noddy - She'd be dead at about five litres. And the story's crap. Puerile and senseless. Neg Vote |
| 2012-10-18 15:48:32 |
E2 - Educating Natalie - 3 Way Fun |
Positive Vote : Well written Billy, beautifully spaced and REALLY sexy. Send Natalie around to my place for the afternoon. |
| 2012-10-16 21:34:36 |
Robbie & Eve - Im right here if you want me |
Some people worry about the tiniest things - like pumping fuel, AND I see the wannabee fucked are still advertising where they're not wanted . . . . .BUT Robbie and Eve - this story was brilliant. Hope you two have a long and happy life together. My wife (Evelyn) and I have been together 35 years and it's still fantastic, honeymoon style love - just with a lot less bumping bellies - old age etc. |
| 2012-10-16 20:57:04 |
The Love Story of Halie and Caleb |
Probably one of the best 'romantic' stories I have had the privilege of reading, though I question it being on a predominantly sex oriented site. Technically faulty, - some spelling errors - wrong word rather than wrong spelling, and not spaced out enough. (Paragraphs too large and therefore possible to lose interest/concentration) Still good enough to get my Positive Vote. |
| 2012-10-15 07:48:27 |
Diary of a Mother Fucker Part 1 |
'She was just lying there . . . .' Highly unlikely a 52 year old gets pregnant. Why make her so old - she could have been 36-40. No paragraphs, rubbed has TWO 'B's, spooned has TWO 'O's, strangely has an 'e' in it. etc etc |
| 2012-10-15 07:37:12 |
Obsessed with Mother's body. |
Should have stopped reading when I realised you couldn't even spell your own nom de plume ( since there is no such thing as a writter I presume you meant Pervwriter) BUT I continued, and realised you were too stupid to know what paragraphs were (they taught you about those in school) and I still don't know what a 'tounge' is. I spell it tongue. Story wasn't bad though, so no neg vote and no pos vote. |
| 2012-10-12 22:51:25 |
Robbie & Eve - I'm right here if you want me |
One of the most beautiful and well written stories I have had the pleasure to read. Well Done!! I have quite a few Japanese and Chinese friends and can understand the attraction to their beauty and Eurasian females are some of the most beautiful women on Earth. Add in the temperament and perfection is only a stone's throw away. POSITIVE VOTE |
| 2012-10-09 20:58:18 |
my nine year old neighbor |
Okay erimaro, I'll be as nice as I can. What a crock of shit. Have you never read a story before ?? The pronoun 'I', as in me is ALWAYS a Capital Letter ; LOTS of spelling mistakes ; No paragraphs ; 'u' is not a word - 'you' is the word. (As in YOU are a lazy arrogant fuckwit who thinks he can post shit like this and expect to be praised as a writing LEGEND.) Well, probably news to you Buddy, but respect in anything is EARNED !! Negative vote - and I didn't even finish reading it. |
| 2012-10-09 17:13:07 |
Grade 9 Camping Trip |
Wow Freaky. I gotta read more of your stories. Don't worry about Anon 15:23:26 - obviously a retarded fuckwit. Layout means you didn't write this on a real computer, (probably a stupid iphone or Samsung Galaxy) and that's a pity, but the story is brilliant. Positive vote. |
| 2012-10-09 01:52:04 |
Sister Catherine's Nighmare CAW 13 |
Pity you were too late for CAW, Jade. This is brilliant and would have given the others a shake up. As usual you prove your skill as a writer. |
| 2012-10-08 04:52:13 |
A Confession A Night of Firsts |
Fantastic Jade. You make your characters so realistic, it's almost a shame you put Fiction in the header. Loved it. Positive Vote. |
| 2012-10-08 04:09:42 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife, Part Three |
OK, Ya got me 23:38:16. Top of the page description says this is, wait for it . . . . .Fiction. So MAYBE, I stuffed up years a lil bit. Fiction writers are allowed to do that . . . .or maybe it was deliberate and the whole story is in an alternate reality. You Decide. Luv GR939 |
| 2012-10-07 23:20:48 |
i should stayed up |
it was new years eve six years ago. My wife and myself were invited to my best friends house for a party.
It was New Year's Eve, six years ago. My wife and I were invited to my best friend's house for a party
NOTICE ANY DIFFERENCE |
| 2012-10-07 22:53:19 |
i should stayed up |
Another dipshit who isn't prepared to respect his readers enough to SPACE HIS FUCKING WORK OUT - so I thought Fuck It - and stopped there. |
| 2012-10-07 22:50:11 |
little sister and me |
Saw a solid block of text and thought - another dipshit who's not prepared to respect his readers enough to use PARAGRAPHS, so I said Fuck It - and stopped there. |
| 2012-10-07 21:20:05 |
stepmom grace |
Good story, spoiled by shocking layout, terrible spelling, atrocious grammar and an arrogance that implies, " I wrote this and you can love it or fuck off." I was going to give a Negative Vote for all of the above, then a Positive Vote for the storyline - and decided to balance it out and not vote at all. |
| 2012-10-07 04:14:53 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife, Part Three |
Sorry to those who noticed. I made a cock up. Please read Part 2 amended before this. Some of Part 2 failed to post - almost certainly my fault. . . .mea culpa. |
| 2012-10-07 04:12:38 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife Part 2 |
I'm sorry folks, I cocked up. - Please disregard this post and go to Part 2 amended. |
| 2012-10-07 04:10:50 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife |
My sincere apologies to readers - Please bypass Part Two and go directly to Part 2 amended to get the correct story. I fucked up and I'm sorry. |
| 2012-10-06 22:36:34 |
Pipe Crew VI |
Still reading (and still impressed) OD (except for the duplicate posting) but the, I WOULD be unimpressed by that, because I'm perfect and have NEVER made a mistake. - Yeah Right!! Pos Vote |
| 2012-10-05 22:27:30 |
Best choice I Made |
Yup Sybil, I'm a romantic soppy old fart who's been married for 35 years . . . .This type of story rings my bell far more than the 13 year old with a 12 inch dick who rapes everyone and their pet sheep.
Great story - Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-03 17:19:44 |
Pipe Crew, Part III |
Still living up to expectations OD, just as good as the first two parts. Like most of your stories - but this is far and away the BEST. Positive Vote !! |
| 2012-10-03 17:17:11 |
Pipe Crew Part II-The whole chapter |
Thanks OD. I'm like a kid on his first date - wondering what's going to happen next. Positive vote !! |
| 2012-10-03 01:47:24 |
Dickie the Exploror in the land of Amber |
Disgusting Eric, JUST the way I like it. Positive vote. |
| 2012-10-01 06:40:40 |
Nearly True Stories, the Second Story |
Sometimes it feels like you're unappreciated . . .but it only feels like it OD. Keep up the good work, and if some don't think it's to their taste, well, that's their taste. |
| 2012-10-01 06:29:16 |
Nearly True Stories, Story 1 |
Thanks again OD. Second of your stories I have read and enjoyed this just as much as the first. You have real skill. Positive Vote. |
| 2012-10-01 06:17:41 |
Pipe Crew |
Thank you OD. This is one of the best stories I have read, and I've read thousands. Please give us a Part Two at least. Gotta go and check the rest of your stories. . . . |
| 2012-09-30 21:21:41 |
Step-daughter, Mendy's and my First time |
Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. Break down the sentences into manageable chunks. Very long diatribes bore most people shitless, and bored people can be less than complimentary in their assessments of your writing style. If it's only a fantasy story, make yourself taller, change the daughter's name to Mindy or Wendy, explain what is wrong with your son (ie Bi-polar or ??)
Not a BAD story - just needs some improvement. |
| 2012-09-27 19:48:39 |
A Mother and her love of her Son |
Agree with other reader. Really HOT story spoiled by lack of punctuation. With proper quotation marks, this would be one of the hottest stories here. Great work and would love to see a Part Two. ( with Kenzie and punctuation) |
| 2012-09-27 00:31:49 |
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Enjoyed the story Dizz, but some really bizarre spelling mistakes that made me laugh, and broke my concentration. However my wife thinks I'm a sour old bastard and need to laugh more anyway. Positive Vote |
| 2012-09-25 22:11:33 |
Mommy knows best part 3 |
Great imagination, Great story - SHIT writer. Layout, spacing, punctuation etc etc. Didn't make up my mind whether to give +ve vote for story or -ve vote for shit presentation, so I didn't do either. |
| 2012-09-24 18:23:06 |
Cassie |
Of Course this IS an English test, you daft person. IF you want to be considered a writer, then you do your best to write well. Having said that, I loved the story, you spaced it well, only made a few minor mistakes and came up with a very enjoyable end product. Congratulations and POSITIVE vote. Expect to see more from you. |
| 2012-09-24 02:16:28 |
Another Good Night |
To the anonymous fuckwit who doesn't believe I have the right to my own opinion, this is a sex site and I LIKE sex. To suggest that deviant stories don't have a link to actual deviancy is childish in the extreme and this is not the place or time to show what a brain dead cretin he is, BUT if he'd like to IM me, I would be happy to try and educate him, difficult though I see that offer to fulfill. |
| 2012-09-24 01:57:38 |
Lightening Crashes |
Jeez, Sometimes I confuse myself. Everything I believe says this story is shit and you, ATTICUS, are a lazy dipshit . . .and I give you a Positive vote. So maybe you are too stupid to know what a paragraph is, and maybe this story is so similar to about five others that I started to think plagiarism, then realised it was too poorly written to be plagiarised, but, ANYWAY I enjoyed reading it, BUT would enjoy it more if it was written with a bit more care. (corrected version) |
| 2012-09-24 01:55:07 |
Lightening Crashes |
Jeez, Sometimes I confuse myself. Everything I believe says this story is shit and ATTICUS are a lazy dipshit . . .and I give you a Positive vote. So maybe you are too stupid to know what a paragraph is, and maybe this story is so similar to about five others that I started to think plagiarism, then realised it was too poorly written to be plagiarised, so ANYWAY I enjoyed reading it BUT would enjoy it more if it was written with a bit more care. |
| 2012-09-20 01:10:12 |
Chapter one, Deana Cums for a Visit |
continuing ; I downloaded your story and then proofed it into a real story format - and Surprise, surprise - It actually wasn't a terrible story. Quite fun actually. With a bit of experience and care with presentation, you COULD become adequate. I'll keep an eye on your writing to see how you progress . . . |
| 2012-09-20 01:06:21 |
Chapter one, Deana Cums for a Visit |
Things to help you : DO NOT ask your readers to ignore spelling and grammar. This is a site for writers - a specific kind of writer, but WRITERS !! Most obvious error was lack of paragraphs. Make it easier to read by breaking down into bite sized chunks. Too many too short sentences and far to much use of names ie Deanna this and then Deanna that. |
| 2012-09-17 16:27:18 |
Very Loving Family |
Positive Vote, and If I could give you two, I would. Highly sexy story written beautifully, by someone who obviously does not need a stupid voice recognition program to do all the work (and make all the fuck ups that using one entails). Eagerly looking forward to more of your writing. Personal grading 9.5/10 |
| 2012-09-16 04:02:07 |
Another Good Night |
Only my opinion and that counts for fuck all BUT someone who even THINKS this shit has GOT to be fucked in the head. (and a shit writer - no paragraphs) Made me want to vomit. Negative vote !! |
| 2012-09-15 22:21:12 |
Train Ride |
Surprising, well written and really sexy. Great story. Positive Vote |
| 2012-09-15 08:45:30 |
some funny jokes |
I think they're pretty funny too Kitty. Positive Vote !! |
| 2012-09-15 08:41:13 |
More Funny Jokes |
Whoa !! Life changing moment. . . . after 35 years of very happy marriage (Yes - She's happy too or a REALLY good liar) I had come to the conclusion that women didn't have a sense of humour. Positive Vote - some (read MOST) of these are GOOD jokes. |
| 2012-09-14 22:06:57 |
Sleeping Pleasure! |
Wow, Look at all the RETARDS that think this is their fucking dating service. . . .Sorry little pricks aren't they. |
| 2012-09-12 18:04:06 |
Little Sister 2 |
Was not happy with Part 1 (lack of paragraphs - poor layout) but a vast improvement here. Storyline is perverted, disgusting and just perfect. You definitely have a way with words and I EAGERLY await the next Chapter. Positive vote. |
| 2012-09-12 03:59:11 |
Sleeping Pleasure! |
Sorry hob, Won't give you a negative rating - because I gave up when I saw the solid block of text. This IS a site for erotic WRITERS and a good writer knows what paragraphs are and why they should exist. |
| 2012-09-12 03:54:25 |
A Willing Particiant |
Very Enjoyable Gordietown. Well written and very interesting premise. Like to see more from you |
| 2012-09-11 04:38:38 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife Part 2 |
Trying to keep on track but old brains need to wander off on there own occasionally. Next Chapter under construction will show where this is going and hopefully will be quite a bit longer. Rgds GR939 |
| 2012-09-10 22:07:49 |
My Mother, My Lover, My Wife |
Thanks for the encouragement. Unlike my previous attempts, I feel that this story has room for me to explore. More soon. |
| 2012-09-01 02:21:19 |
A MORAL DILEMMA |
Hey John . . . Forget that wanker JoeDirty . . He's obviously mentally retarded - probably a fucked up Bible Belter or educational fuck up.
In my country, like yours 16 is the age of consent and he is too illiterate to find out these things for himself. IGNORE the Brain Dead Cretin and continue your story. |
| 2012-08-23 00:07:38 |
My Brother Comes Home From The War |
Tried to read this incoherent diatribe, but gave up. If you can't learn to space out (ie paragraphs), I can't be buggered trying to read it. |
| 2012-08-23 00:04:30 |
im sorry |
Humor and punchline of a joke is pretty much fucked when the writer can't even keep it coherent because of simple grammar and usage of the fucking language. |
| 2012-08-23 00:00:21 |
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Still not bad BUT spelling is falling away came has an 'e' on the end and a few others. . . . |
| 2012-08-22 23:48:43 |
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Yup, You lived up to expectations. Waiting for more. (Callous little bastard ain't he though??) Positive vote |
| 2012-08-22 23:30:55 |
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I hope this is leading somewhere because you've set up a good basis for a story. Positive vote in anticipation of more to follow. |
| 2012-08-17 18:00:07 |
A MORAL DILEMMA |
Probably the BEST first story I have ever read, and I have read plenty. Eagerly anticipating the second chapter. Thanks John. |
| 2012-08-11 06:25:19 |
CATLYN 2: Valentine's Day |
BRILLIANT story wojo. (Positive vote and 9/10) To me it still feels a little bit too Dominant/Submissive but you wrote it beautifully. Thanks |
| 2012-08-06 21:48:55 |
Me and mom, Under the covers, In the cold (Ch1 Rewritten) |
Spelling is terrible, layout is strange, and this doesn't even count as an appetiser, let alone a story. God save your country's educational system because it can't save itself. |
| 2012-07-31 19:15:28 |
Lil Sis 1 |
Sorry Zidez, but if you put up a story it's going to get both sorts of criticism, however in this case, I'll be nice. Only real problem is not double-spacing between the paragraphs. (Makes the story a LOT easier to read) If in doubt read Pandora's first and second stories and notice the huge difference. Positive Vote and personal grade 7/10 |
| 2012-07-31 19:03:43 |
A rapist's desire |
Beautiful, Pandora. Although the subject matter (Rape) leaves me cold, it IS only a fantasy after all, and you have written it well, with great spacing and imagination. Well done Girl. Positive vote and personal grading 8.5/10. |
| 2012-07-27 03:39:28 |
Brother's love- Part 1 |
Misspelled, poorly spaced rubbish, and totally unrealistic as well. True story my hairy arse. (15 year old with nearly 9 inch dick - where did you measure from - your left ankle) Change your header from True to Fantasy |
| 2012-07-27 03:24:04 |
Loving my sister Chapter1 |
Beautiful first story Pandora, and please take no notice of the brain dead morons who want you to get everyone pregnant. One suggestion is to double space between paragraphs - it makes the stories much easier to read. Positive vote and personal 8/10 which would have been 9.5/10 if better spaced. |
| 2012-07-22 06:02:57 |
Tricking Sam |
What the fuck is a 'tounge' or a 'hyeme' . . . .for fuck's sake I think you're too illiterate to know how to spell tongue and hymen. And a wannabee kiddie fucker as well - YUCK - ohh by the way - NEGATIVE VOTE |
| 2012-07-19 10:04:17 |
Oh Daddy! My step father. |
Potentially very good story totally spoiled by atrocious spelling. Spellchecking would help, but so would redoing your first five years at school. |
| 2012-07-15 23:29:47 |
A cold, stormy night. |
Obviously from one of the Dumb Battalions of the USMC (If at all) because you are too stupid to realise that the personal pronoun 'I' , is ALWAYS a capital letter, AND that paragraphing was invented to make stories easier to read. COULD have been a good thought provoking story but I gave up when I saw a solid block of text. |
| 2012-07-14 02:31:59 |
Sailing with my daughter and friend pt2 |
Very enjoyable and well written story, Thank you. Positive vote and personal 8.5/10 |
| 2012-07-14 02:04:56 |
Camping Trip |
Yup, FACT . Some of the anonymous slaggers you could stack up 10 or 12 to the IQ Point. Thanks Buster, well written, spaced and erotic. . .just what is required on this site. Positive Vote and personal 8.5/10 |
| 2012-07-06 21:14:03 |
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Great story PP, and realistic. Yes I know - I was brought up in Halswell in Christchurch and currently live out near Lincoln University, so I am aware of those places in Dorkland. Still, respect to you - you can't help the fact you were born a sub standard North Islander LOL.
Positive vote and personal grading 8.5/10 |
| 2012-07-05 02:42:21 |
Pam a Horny Mother |
Another illiterate trying to get someone to believe he's Hemingway or Somerset Maugham. Hey Docker - It's Northern Ireland not north island. John and Landrover are names - and therefore capital letters.
First chapter poorly laid out, incoherent, misspelled and written with the skill of a ten year old, so I gave up there. |
| 2012-07-03 23:57:17 |
THE COMMUNITY 2: Book of Esther |
Don't worry about Dickheads who put down your writing Wojo - write for those who love it. (Like ME) and write for yourself. Can't wait to see where you go from here. 9/10 and Positive vote |
| 2012-06-29 17:24:13 |
Damaged When Examined |
Another ELP masterpiece, thought provoking - to someone with a brain, and beautifully written/ spaced. 9.5/10 and Positive Vote |
| 2012-06-25 22:53:28 |
Damians Harem part 2 |
DS, I REALLY wanted to give you a positive vote and tell you what a great writer you are, BUT I would be lying. The story isn't bad but is totally spoiled by shocking/terrible/childish spelling. You really need to find someone who has some competence in the English language to proof read your writing before you submit it. |
| 2012-06-24 17:14:30 |
My Own Lolita |
Not bad for a first attempt AceAes, but, as with most newbies, spacing makes the story easier to read. Break the story down into bite sized chunks by double spacing your paragraphs. Otherwise, very good and positive vote. (7.5/10) |
| 2012-06-23 18:23:30 |
Confessions of a Wayward Gynecologist- Pt1 |
Agree with previous critics. Beautifully written erotic story. Well Done and Positive vote. (Why can't some of the other contributors to this site take as much pride/care with their work.) 8/10 |
| 2012-06-23 04:05:14 |
Punished by Mr. K |
Very rare for me. I gave you a positive vote for the story when I SHOULD have given you a negative vote for lack of paragraphs. My mind MUST be slipping. |
| 2012-06-20 21:28:55 |
Daddy Locke |
Lack of paragraphs did NOT impress me, but not bad for a 19? yr old. Would like to see more, properly spaced out. |
| 2012-06-19 21:51:42 |
A HEAVEN FOR NINA |
curiousgirl, You may be lovely, I don't know, BUT you have no sense of funny . . .I was being sarcastic to an on-line friend (and fellow writer who happens to be better than me) Look at the votes and you'll see I voted positive. Luv GR939 |
| 2012-06-17 06:30:47 |
Tommy Gets his Slave 4 |
Ho hum, as usual . . . .pathetic piss poor rantings (poorly written) of a sick wannabee racist. Hasn't even got the guts to own up to his own failings as a human being. |
| 2012-06-16 23:42:18 |
Peeping Tom: Part 1 |
Yup . . .Gotta admit I'm looking forward to the next installment . .Well, hurry up . . .what are you waiting for. Positive vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2012-06-16 03:02:53 |
Fucking Daddy ch. 3 |
Fantastic little three part fantasy, beautifully written. Positive vote and personal grading 9/10. I get a lot of humour reading about all the fuckwits that think pregnancy is necessary . . . .NOPE. |
| 2012-06-15 00:36:16 |
My virgin cousin |
Gave up on the first line. If a writer is not prepared to follow simple laws of writing and properly space out their work, I'm not prepared to waste my time and get a headache trying to read it. Paragraphs are there for a reason - to break down a solid chunk of text into readable bites. No vote !! |
| 2012-06-14 18:38:02 |
Little Red Riding Hood |
Plenty of scope to continue this one. Wolfie catches Red again and Daddy jumps in just after Wolfie finishes screwing Red and gives her some of his log, after tying up the wolf. Granny could decide to fuck the wolf into submission. Mummy could join in a threesome with Daddy and Red - and they could ALL live happily ever after. |
| 2012-06-14 18:13:26 |
Sexy Snow White and the Hot Hunter |
One exception to a perfectly written story. The word below. Bellow is a loud yell and spoilt my concentration. Please MORE - I love this nonsense. + ve vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2012-06-12 22:35:38 |
Babysitting |
I thought this was great when the author can't even spell aching in his own nom de plume, and then doesn't even understand the basics of the English language. BUT, even better was the number of fuckwits who don't understand the word FANTASY |
| 2012-06-12 18:28:59 |
Loving my Pappa |
Beautifully written story without any unnecessary profanity or grubbiness and especially without any of the stupid domination or taking advantage that most of the idiot writers seem to like. I loved it and voted accordingly. Positive vote and personal 8.5/10
Gee I HATE the stupid program that doesn't allow quotation marks. |
| 2012-06-12 18:27:23 |
Loving my Pappa |
Beautifully written story without any unnecessary profanity or grubbiness and especially without any of the stupid domination or "taking advantage" that most of the idiot writers seem to like. I loved it and voted accordingly. Positive vote and personal 8.5/10 |
| 2012-06-11 22:24:53 |
my sister Kim |
Try to get the facts right and keep them that way. Kim/Stacy/Kim and varied dick sizes - rubbish (and rape/blackmail) Crap story. - vote |
| 2012-06-09 02:31:28 |
Defiance: Chapter Five |
Great continuation to a really good story. Thank you Captius. |
| 2012-06-09 02:29:24 |
Mit Has Gotten Her Answers |
Thanks Lucky. Great ending to a VERY enjoyable story. |
| 2012-06-08 19:11:33 |
A Rainy Day |
Sorry to all. The bloody system logged me out. I wrote the last comments about our resident fuckwit troll. |
| 2012-06-08 04:15:23 |
Curious 10 Year old |
Don't like the girl's age personally, but you said it was a dark fantasy so I can't complain. You're a very good writer, (spacing, spelling and grammar) and I'll look for more of your work. |
| 2012-06-07 18:48:21 |
Daddy's secret girlfriend 1 (completed) |
Ohh Sammie, I TRIED to hate your story, not the subject ; I love that, but the really bad spelling, erratic layout and poor grammar. BUT . . .
in the end I just flat loved it. Realistic (mostly) and therefore possibly a true story. Please keep writing. I'll look forward to seeing if you develop into a really good writer. |
| 2012-06-07 01:35:31 |
Medieval Torture |
Crap, crap crap . . .I know eight year olds who can write better stories with more skill than this. Take up hairdressing - your writing sucks. |
| 2012-06-07 01:32:38 |
Slave Market |
Absolute Crap : Spacing . . . the pronoun I is always a CAPITAL LETTER and u is not a word - you is a word. . . . .you are an illiterate. Please stop writing until you get at least a primary school education. |
| 2012-06-04 20:51:15 |
Married with children |
I'm 60 and I'm still waiting for my "jids to come home from school".
Should put your age up top because if this is an example of your writing, they'll think your about twelve, AND a liar. True story ... my hairy arse. |
| 2012-06-04 20:42:11 |
Same mistake |
Yup, Ah figured any clown who liked a 454 Chevelle would have trouble with English. Great story let down by, well not much actually.
Sometimes not capitalising the pronoun I as in me. Positive vote and personal score 7/10 |
| 2012-06-04 02:18:44 |
SHORTY |
Why don't Rebecca the sexpot and horny old man soxpapers just fuck off - This is NOT your fucking dating service |
| 2012-06-04 02:14:36 |
Defiance: Chapter Two |
Good onya Captius. Who says your fantasy has to comply with anyone's else fantasy anyway. Read your very good story as a stand alone and forget the other gods and all's fine. Waiting for next instalment. |
| 2012-06-03 22:29:02 |
Mit 3: Her Final Request |
Naughty Lucky. . .leaves plenty of room for a Part 4. More sex, more romance until she's about twenty, then her parents find out and she gets the boot . . .and Lucky gets a live in lover (or wife) |
| 2012-06-03 22:17:30 |
Mit Has More Questions |
Good Boy Lucky. Keep Going, there's a good chap. Chapter Three please. |
| 2012-06-03 22:10:02 |
Calming Mit's Fear of Boys |
Ooooh Goody, a decent writer. Oh God It's you Lucky. Well suppose I'll just have to admit your pretty damn good. Next Chapter Please.
Positive vote and 8.5/10 |
| 2012-06-03 20:07:24 |
Tiffany birthday |
Sorry, I gave up... shocking spelling, no idea of punctuation or spacing and my fantasy is that anyone will be able to read the story without just junking it in despair. If this is the best you can do as a writer, I suggest a job at the Golden Arches or Kentucky Fucked Duck. I don't vote negatively for poor writing but this time I was tempted |
| 2012-06-03 16:59:47 |
Stacy's Awakening |
Could be a good story. I don't know. Saw the solid block of text and consigned this to the "I can't be bothered to read this if they can't be bothered using paragraphs". |
| 2012-06-02 22:00:34 |
Sibling Rivalry - Coping with Retirement Ch5 |
Jesus, Some people worry about the stupidest things. Thanks Mr S
Bloody great story and I've followed all the well written, well spaced chapters with growing fascination. . .Well Done. +ve vote and my personal 8/10 (PS Seems none of the other monkeys are prepared to sign in preferring anonymous slagging) |
| 2012-06-02 21:58:54 |
Sibling Rivalry - Coping with Retirement Ch5 |
Jesus, Some people worry about the stupidest things. Thanks Mr S
Bloody great story and I've followed all the well written, well spaced chapters with growing fascination. . .Well Done. +ve vote and my personal 8/10 |
| 2012-06-02 18:35:34 |
Defiance: Chapter One |
This could be a GREAT story. Are you destined for greatness ??
Brilliant start, well written and totally absorbing. Part Two please |
| 2012-06-02 17:09:59 |
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Really funny, zany little story and I loved it . . .and my positive vote should show that. 8/10 |
| 2012-05-30 22:31:46 |
The Girls Next Door ? 7 CJ?s Birthday Surprise |
Sorry oldman, Last poster was me but this idiot site keeps logging me out. I don't like anonymous criticisms. ( A LOT of them come from mindless cretins - NOT all but a fair few) |
| 2012-05-29 03:35:47 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Three |
Worth the wait Captius, worth the wait. Positive vote and personal 80%. |
| 2012-05-25 02:44:20 |
Kneeling for the Duke |
Excellent (and tantalising) start to what COULD be a very good story.
I await, with bated breath, the next Chapter. |
| 2012-05-22 21:06:42 |
Sara's Protective Dad part 1 corrected |
Sorry H93, Premise for this story is good and I REALLY wanted to like it, BUT shocking abuse of the English language makes that really hard. I can only assume your primary language is not English and you are using a translation program. If so, it sucks. |
| 2012-05-20 22:03:42 |
First time at, at the health club |
delouses - delicious?? I'm not gay but this story was really well written (and quite titillating) and spoiled by a couple of non words. Looking forward to Part Two . . . |
| 2012-05-16 22:50:17 |
Helping my Mom |
Great story. Loved it. But, at last I realised what anonymous means ;
illiterate, mentally retarded dumbfuck who doesn't want everyone else to know their name. In Sparta, most of your critics would be left on a mountain side to die by freezing to death or be eaten by wolves.
Proof that the education system is failing. |
| 2012-05-16 20:09:23 |
Mother Gets Hers - Part 2 |
Yup . . . Great stuff lad. Plenty of scope for continuation. I'm waiting
8.5/10 and +ve vote |
| 2012-05-16 01:59:03 |
Damians Harem |
Great story somewhat spoiled by shit spelling and insufficient spacing. Would have felt it was more readable and believable if Damian was at least 15-16 but still a bloody good first attempt.
For the other monkey's info (as they obviously don't have Google) -
Youngest recorded birth was to a 5 year old and MANY under 10. |
| 2012-05-14 18:21:43 |
SHORTY |
Gotta rate as one of the soppiest, most beautiful sexy romance stories I have ever had the pleasure of reading. Fantastic. Some of KA Hmnd and Lubrican's stories are equally as good . . . . and believe me, that's pretty illustrious company to be in. |
| 2012-05-13 17:48:53 |
Mine and Daddy's little secret |
Pure nonsense . . .Incoherent, misspelled, block of absolute garbage.
PLEASE . . .save my time and eyes and DON'T bother with any more writing. Go back to watching telly, or doing drugs or something - anything but trying to write. |
| 2012-05-10 22:36:56 |
9 year old adventure |
Same as first critic - needs more detail but good work for this anyway. 7/10 |
| 2012-05-03 18:16:56 |
Doing the Babysitter Pt 2 |
I'm enjoying this very much CJ. Please keep going. + vote 8/10 |
| 2012-04-29 18:27:30 |
In love with my 5 pedifiles Part1 |
I sought of guessed at the quality of this story when I saw you couldn't spell bastard in your own name, and couldn't spell pedophiles in the title - and I was right. Potentially exciting story spoiled by shit spelling. If you can't Write right - Don't write. 3/10 |
| 2012-04-28 16:06:26 |
Massage after work |
Potentially very good story spoiled by being a solid block of text. Paragraphs, paragraphs, paragraphs. . . .like a fine meal - break the story down to tasty bites that can be savoured. 4/10 |
| 2012-04-27 23:35:45 |
lonley mommy |
Congratulations . . .one of the absolutely WORST spelled abominations of the English language I've seen. |
| 2012-04-27 23:31:41 |
Jake's Incredible Summer Chap. 6 |
MEEE TOO. . . .This is a great story. Hurry Hurry PUHLEEZ. |
| 2012-04-27 17:08:46 |
Hermione the Rubber Love Doll |
Childish, as expected from fanfic, and confusing. First Harry releases an erection over a foot long and then has an 8 inch cock. Keep trying . . .one day you may produce something readable. |
| 2012-04-26 19:58:38 |
Jake's Incredible Summer Chap. 3 |
One of the better written and laid out stories on this site. Hope and expect more of this story. Positive vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2012-04-26 19:05:24 |
Dealing with my sisters disability |
Maybe the last defective should just fuck off. Not everyone has a perfect life, but sometimes bad things can lead to something beautiful.
Great story well written and I give a positive vote. (TWO if I could) |
| 2012-04-26 17:16:49 |
Doing the Babysitter Pt 1 |
Kitsune Lord said it - Great start giving the characters history and humanity, well written. As an opener 9.5/10 . . . .I'm waiting CJ |
| 2012-04-23 02:27:12 |
First day at work |
Do us all a favor - DO NOT CONTINUE. Pure rubbish. |
| 2012-04-23 02:05:39 |
Cowboy, and Indian Girl, |
Lack of paragraphs nearly . . .but only nearly spoiled a good story.
Generally I loved it and hope to read more from you. 8/10 |
| 2012-04-14 02:39:45 |
SIMPLE SIMON |
Great story, really well written. Why are so many males so fascinated with the dreamtime fantasy when some of the TRULY BEAUTIFUL are slightly less than physical perfection (if one is stupid enough to to fall for that single standard anyway). My love is and was never a Pin Up girl, but 34 years and two kids later, she's still my idea of perfection. Great job Wojo . .My thanks |
| 2012-04-09 22:39:23 |
My Brother and Me |
Loved the story but hated the shocking spelling and the brevity of the story. AND if you can write this story then autism is not the problem - laziness or just "don't give a fuck-itis" is. |
| 2012-02-23 15:10:23 |
Would You Like That Orgasm With Fries? |
Not too bad at all Babe, Sounds like you can be an evil bitch when you put your mind to it. BUT I still think you're gorgeous. |
| 2012-01-25 18:06:47 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Two |
One of the best Captius. Please don't keep us hanging. MORE
Please Sir, I want more !! |
| 2012-01-06 20:09:00 |
The Storm |
"Love" was too instantaneous ??? BULLSHIT. I met a girl 34 years ago and fell in love in the first ten SECONDS. I married her six weeks later and, two grown up kids later, she's still the little bunny that lights my fire . . . anyplace and any time. Great story by the way. I loved it. |
| 2012-01-06 15:35:18 |
Seducing My Stepfather - Part 1 |
I agree . . . very hot. (Determined little slut, wasn't she ?) |
| 2011-12-22 18:47:57 |
Sandys Slumber Party (Revised) |
Re write was well worth it. Totally unbelievable BUT it should be, it's fantasy . . . and I loved it. At my age it would kill me, but hell, gotta go sometime. Thanks ( and waiting for the next part.) |
| 2011-12-07 06:48:39 |
Times with Megan |
Possibly good story spoiled by shit layout and presentation. Read a couple of sentences and chucked it. |
| 2011-12-02 15:04:19 |
A HEAVEN FOR NINA |
Shocking story. This is a sex site. ( For poor helpless old twits like me to bust a nut reading about all the sexual acts we either didn't have the guts to do or just missed out on.) Find a site that deals in literary classics and works of literary genius and this will fit right in. |
| 2011-09-27 07:06:34 |
The Suprise |
Sexy and romantic - well written. . . .Thank you |
| 2011-08-13 19:22:08 |
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Hey PP. I really enjoyed this. Good show. Positive vote. 8.5/10 |
| 2011-08-13 01:19:44 |
My Breanna My Darling 2 |
Whoa. Wish I had some of your drugs. . . .barely understood story, shocking spelling, grammar and punctuation. Try golf because if this is your best, writing is NOT your strong point. |
| 2011-08-03 20:22:58 |
My Cousin, My Love Part 1 |
Very good first effort. Will follow your progress with interest. |
| 2011-08-01 02:48:32 |
Hermoine's Adventures Episode 1 |
Gotta be good when a self professed fan can't even spell the star's name. First off - it's Hermione. |
| 2011-07-17 22:02:18 |
My Very First Time |
Gave you a Positive vote, Teresa, because, for a first story, it wasn't too bad. Using the z instead of 's was daft and ruined your chances of a good score and some of the spelling left a little bit to be desired. I would be REALLY interested in a story from you written properly. |
| 2011-07-15 00:05:20 |
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Really good story DaneJ. I loved it and voted accordingly BUT, because I AM picky, the past tense of drag is dragged, not drug and a girl's waist is beautiful and not to be confused with waste - which is literally garbage. Apart from that, I have watched your progress as a writer, and you have done well. . . .congratulations. |
| 2011-07-13 06:40:02 |
TEENAGE GIRLS FOR SALE |
Funny, fantastic story written by a master. Positive vote 10/10
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| 2011-07-08 20:50:47 |
FEMALES FOR HIRE |
ELP You bastard. This is why I failed to get my submission in, in time.
How the hell could a Dumbo like me even PRESUME to be this good.
Positive vote and 10/10 |
| 2011-07-04 01:42:33 |
The Fat Slob Next Door |
Thanks fb, Good to have you back in the saddle. ALWAYS a good read. |
| 2011-07-03 20:41:51 |
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Wow, a trio of good stories. All well written and easy to read. ( and easy to jack off to - not that I actually DID of course ) Positive vote |
| 2011-07-03 20:24:42 |
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Another really good bit of fiction from a really good writer. Positive vote and personal 8.5/10 |
| 2011-07-03 20:15:50 |
Falling in Love with Mom |
No great redeeming social value, BUT, a bloody good, sexy read. If I want a classic, I'll go to the Library, but for a good fun read, this will do. Positive vote and personal 8/10 Well written, spaced and proof read. |
| 2011-07-02 21:36:25 |
All for Mr. Redman Chapter 11 |
JadeM, You are a wonder. . . . .and such a fantastic writer I love you. The sex had me constantly horny and the romance had me tearing up. Brilliant, Young Lady. Totemo ii desu yo. 10/10 and Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-28 22:55:30 |
First Time With Mom |
Don't put true story if it's not . . .and in this case it's NOT. Mathematically impossible for 18 yr old to have first sex at 14 and have a 10 yr old daughter. |
| 2011-06-28 03:48:44 |
Penny, May I Rescue you from Hell? |
Lucky you classed this as fiction Donkey, because it was as far from reality as most of yours. Doesn't stop the fact it was a really good bit of escapist fantasy - and I loved it. Positive vote ( obviously ) |
| 2011-06-27 01:42:42 |
More Cousin Judy |
Solid block of text. Too bloody tiring to read - so I didn't. |
| 2011-06-27 01:40:39 |
My birthday surprise |
Gave up, so no good vote ( or bad vote ). If you're not prepared to take some care, and put in punctuation and paragraphs, then I'm not prepared to read it. |
| 2011-06-27 01:35:36 |
My big, happy family! |
Why do juvenile little dickheads like DD66 always want you to get your mum and sisters pregnant. GREAT story and I hope he bonks his sisters but fat bellies are not necessarily required. Positive vote for story and personal 8/10. |
| 2011-06-27 01:27:33 |
All for Mr. Redman Chapter 10 |
Yup, You're a sexy, nasty, lovable little minx . . .and the story is
bloody great. Thanks JadeM. Positive vote and 9/10 personal vote. |
| 2011-06-26 06:10:11 |
Backpacking With Daddy |
Agree. Last three paragraphs took story from almost perfect to merely good. Positive vote but no banana. |
| 2011-06-25 21:04:55 |
My Gym Buddy Sister |
I gave this a positive vote, because I liked the story. The spelling was pretty good except the past tense of the verb to do is I/We did.
I ( as in me ) is always a capital I, and sentences always start with a capital letter. ( Stupid illiterate writing because someone doesn't care enough to get it right distracts me and pisses me off.) Spacing was good. Generally, with more care, you COULD be a good writer. Keep trying and I'll keep reading. |
| 2011-06-25 02:40:40 |
My Sweet First Wife |
I am sorry, Happy Rabbit, for the learning difficulties you must have but this story is GARBAGE. You have obviously not used Spellcheck because there is an abundance of incorrectly spelled words. Spacing between words is another problem. That's what a tab key is for. Story is incoherent, rambling off subject and poorly planned. Use of capital letters is random and totally illogical. Your score reflects this and will probably not improve. |
| 2011-06-25 02:21:03 |
All for Mr. Redman Chapter 9 |
JadeM, You are a silly nice girl. You know I jump on writers who don't care what rubbish they feed their readers. You are far from that bunch of idiots. This story has always been thoughtful and thought provoking, romantic, sexy and just a bloody good read. Thank you Kirei-sama. ii desu yo. |
| 2011-06-23 04:25:46 |
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Very good start - and can't wait for more. Positive vote |
| 2011-06-23 02:59:19 |
Delirium |
Thanks O_I, really fun fantasy story. Plenty of sex, well written
Positive vote and personal grade 8.5/10. |
| 2011-06-23 02:06:25 |
The Doctor Is In |
Sorry JadeM, that last was me, and the bloody system logged me out AGAIN. |
| 2011-06-21 21:16:55 |
Camping |
Agree. Premise was a bit hard to believe, but generally the story was good, let down a little by not enough description of the sex. After all this is a sex site. I'll follow your stories with interest to see if you get better. 6/10 |
| 2011-06-21 02:00:52 |
Camping Trip (Part 1) |
I'm feeling generous today so - no negative vote . . .but so close.
A certain amount of reality makes fiction better.. Young slim guy - 11 inch dick - sure !!! Next story. Disjointed, not enough background detail, too short. |
| 2011-06-20 03:56:42 |
Little Amy's first time with Anal as a bonus |
Fantastic, I LOVED IT. All kiddie fuckers should die. Positive vote |
| 2011-06-18 00:06:09 |
Defying My Family Part 4 |
This story just gets better and better. 10/10 |
| 2011-06-17 23:54:21 |
Please Fuck Me Son! |
OOoohh Yes Mummy. Sit on my big dick and I'll pump you full of thick bubbly spunk. My fave fantasy. Positive vote. Personal grade 8/10
MORE Please |
| 2011-06-17 10:17:31 |
Lost Sailor |
Yup, Previous critic says it all. This is great BUT - needs a Part 2
Positive vote anyway and personal grade 8.5/10 |
| 2011-06-17 06:26:50 |
Aternoon Play with Daughter |
Happy Birthday to Me. . . .Bloody great. 8/10 |
| 2011-06-16 22:15:19 |
Loving Lisas Pretty Pink Pussy Petals |
Typical Jackass Tales. Beautifully written, funny, romantic and sexy enough to have a good session with my right hand ( or go and bounce my sweetie around the bed ). Positive vote and 10/10 |
| 2011-06-16 07:31:06 |
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Yup, I KNOW I fucked up when I turned down that scholarship to Barber College. Keep writing. . . . .please. Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-15 19:53:06 |
Family Sex Slave - Pt 1 |
Stories can be very good, and spoiled by the distraction of shocking spelling. That applies in this instance. |
| 2011-06-15 02:46:49 |
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Watcha trying to do, Druid ?? Do you hate me so much that you're trying to get me to wank myself to death. It's working dammit. 9/10 |
| 2011-06-15 00:25:04 |
The First Meating |
Not to my particular tastes but a beautifully written story. Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-14 21:43:10 |
How I raped my daughter |
Another failure of the Education system. Spelling is absolute rubbish, story has no thought, and rape is a disgusting act. Neg vote |
| 2011-06-14 21:37:21 |
Defying My family Part 3 |
Agree with DD. This is a well thought out story. Keeps me guessing where next ? Positive vote and 9/10 |
| 2011-06-14 00:35:23 |
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Love this story. . . .now Alexis can go kitty smuggling with out the colours clashing. Good show eh what. |
| 2011-06-14 00:32:30 |
Pedos hanging by their Bollocks from a Lamp Post |
Fuck, I LOVE this series. All I wanted to do to fucking pedos, was kill them, but you have MUCH more entertaining ideas. Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-13 21:19:08 |
My Family - Amy |
What a load of absolute pedophile drivel. Poorly written with more mistakes than a Bizarro Dictionary, stupid bloody text abbreviations and a disgusting lack of remorse. You said this is TRUE. . . .EXPECT a visit from the cops. Yuck !! Negative vote |
| 2011-06-13 19:33:16 |
Defying My Family Part 2 |
Thanks SR. I'm loving this story. Positive vote. If Kimiko is missing out, send her to my place. |
| 2011-06-12 20:14:46 |
My Japanese Love Part 7 |
Thanks SR, another great part to a GREAT story. Positive voteand personal 9/10 for this one. |
| 2011-06-12 01:35:48 |
Me and The weird girl. |
Nope. . . .Did not enjoy. Have you not heard of paragraphs, or is your school not up to that level yet. If you are 25 and just wrote that story - I'm a Dutch prostitute. . . And I think you have a weird idea of what truth is. I don't require your thanks for reading this, rather your apology for wasting my time. |
| 2011-06-11 20:01:53 |
The Beach House |
Thanks Preverted 1. Another curiously addictive start to what HAD BETTER BE a multi-part story. Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-11 19:39:21 |
Defying My Family |
Positive vote SR. You pander to my tastes unashamedly. Eagerly await the confrontation and further episodes. |
| 2011-06-11 02:06:37 |
My Japanese Love Part 6 |
Great story, I did not like the ending - I wanted Amya for myself. |
| 2011-06-10 20:19:33 |
My loving daughter and my wife. |
The problem MUST be education. Poorly written without any care for spelling, grammar, punctuation, paragraphing or the laws of humanity.
Attracting pedophiles by writing about sex with a child is personally abhorrent. Seek counselling, and if this diary account is TRUE, please overdose on some lethal drug . . . . .YUCK !! Neg vote |
| 2011-06-10 20:08:15 |
My Japanese Love Part 5 |
Still a very good story SR, and I didn't see the twist coming either. Some grammar errors in this one, but minor and only a twisted little OCD mind like mine would probably pick them up. Positive vote and 9/10 personal rating |
| 2011-06-10 19:52:07 |
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I think this is the start of something good. Positive vote |
| 2011-06-10 06:05:00 |
The Accidental Fuck CH1 |
Good premise, totally spoiled by shocking spelling, grammar and no paragraphing. |
| 2011-06-10 06:00:44 |
Abduction |
Bloody good story. I enjoyed very much. Thank you and Positive vote 8/10
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| 2011-06-09 20:16:33 |
Daddy cums home after work |
Jesus, pyro, Part 2 please, and HURRY. My cock's so hard I could punch holes in 1/4 inch steel plate. Positive vote and 9/10. |
| 2011-06-09 20:01:48 |
My Japanese Love Part 4 |
Fuck, shadow, That was so bloody sexy, I had a chubby almost from the first word. ii desu yo. I LOVE Japanese girls (in my mind) and I envy AJ. Positive vote. 10/10 |
| 2011-06-09 06:03:10 |
Honey, I'm Bi |
Another beauty jandk. Positive vote |
| 2011-06-09 05:59:00 |
New's Year Romp |
God. You're a disgusting sex mad pair of perverts - isn't it bloody great. Fantastic story . Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-09 05:30:55 |
My Japanese Love Part 2 |
Agree with JadeM. This is even better than Part 1. Positive vote
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| 2011-06-09 05:16:35 |
My Japanese love |
Lovely start. I want to read a lot more. Positive vote. |
| 2011-06-08 23:49:42 |
My Japanese Love Part 3 |
I loved this really loving story, sr, and think you must have a deal of knowledge of Japanese culture. Well written and spaced, and an absolute pleasure to read. Positive vote and personal grade of 9/10 Thank you |
| 2011-06-08 21:19:24 |
Package Deal 2 |
Really good story. Loved it. 8.5/10 More please. |
| 2011-06-08 21:10:51 |
The Hotel- REPOSTED |
Yes please, MORE, MORE. Really well written, spaced and REALLY sexy.
Positive vote and 9/10 Personal grade. |
| 2011-06-08 20:54:06 |
Sibling Love |
Thanks oddmast, really good story. Maybe more, and more descriptive, sex.
Positive vote and personal grade of 8/10. More sexy bits = more points LOL This IS a sex site. Thanks anyway. I enjoyed it very much. |
| 2011-06-08 05:02:03 |
All for Mr. Redman Chapter 4 |
And YES Jade M, the last post was from me. |
| 2011-06-08 03:52:09 |
All for Mr. Redman Chapter 3 |
Yummy, Jade. The first two were good but this is the best yet. Fun, sexy and well worth reading. Positive vote and personal grade 9/10. |
| 2011-06-08 03:18:38 |
Redeeming Mom |
Mum didn't need redemption - she wasn't guilty. . . .but the story was bloody great. Good boy Jason, Here's your reward. Positive vote 8/10. |
| 2011-06-08 02:51:50 |
All for Mr. Redman |
Firstly JadeM, my most abject apologies. The hymen remark was totally wrong and as you so correctly pointed out you had written cervix. The second comment about hockey, please refer to authors info at top of page. I again apologise for your belief that I was challenging your gender, but if the word had been hymen, I'm sure you can see where the challenge could have originated.
Shitsurei shimasu I apologise for my stupidity. As mentioned I respect your writing and regret my poor reading. Since I wrongfully accused you publicly, I respectfully request your forgiveness via the same medium. |
| 2011-06-07 21:28:54 |
Poppy: Flower In The Dark - Part 1 |
What sort of sick mentally retarded fuck even thinks this shit.Totally brain damaged candidate for Hitler's ovens. NEGATIVE VOTE |
| 2011-06-07 05:00:40 |
Hanna episode 3 - Ultimate Lapdance! |
Very good story, well written and spaced. Positive vote (personal 9/10 ) PS You can always tell who the retards are. They say get her pregnant. Don't be swayed by such tossers. |
| 2011-06-07 00:37:01 |
The difference between a boy and a man |
Firstly, I have no problem with the subject matter, and the layout is pretty good, but the spelling is childish. If you want praise - MAKE AN EFFORT. Pissant excuses like Oh I was standing on my head or I did it on Notepad are not credible. Getting it right is. I gave you a Positive vote because you have potential, just don't try to tell me that your fucking Notepad can't spell. Resubmitted because it dropped part of my critique. |
| 2011-06-07 00:29:44 |
The difference between a boy and a man |
Firstly, I have no problem with the subject matter, and the layout of the story is pretty good, but the spelling is childish. If you want praise - MAKE AN EFFORT. Pissant excuses like Oh I was standing on my head or I did it on Notepad. Getting it right does. Simple really. I gave you a Positive vote because you have potential just don't try to tell me that your fucking Notepad can't spell. |
| 2011-06-06 21:16:51 |
Playing with Sister and her Friend Part 2 |
Kiddie fuck stories make me sick. Just another way to attract pedophiles to this sight. Not needed. Writing and spacing are good but the subject is shit. |
| 2011-06-06 21:10:10 |
Morgan's Rape |
Let's see. Technically, this story is good, well spaced and pretty well written BUT you seriously need to attend a creative writing course.
Too short, no character development and poor story development. It's tagged pregnant but here's nothing to suggest pregnancy except he fucked her. He unintentionally touched her tits. . .crap. She asked him to bust her cherry so it's not rape. Potential here, but no gold star at this stage. |
| 2011-06-05 23:25:17 |
Siblings Discover True Love |
Jessie and Alex FIRSTLY - Ignore that tosser jsinner. You told us at the top that the sex came later and if he can't read, he shouldn't be here and SECONDLY, you'd only want me there if the second part was fiction ( too old and ugly ) and I want your true story because it's beautiful. PS I gave Positive vote like I promised. |
| 2011-06-05 23:17:03 |
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Good start, Tricky. Plenty more to cum, I hope. |
| 2011-06-05 20:49:26 |
SEVEN MONTHS WITH MARIE: PART ONE |
Sexy story, beautifully written, spaced and I loved it. I shall return and give Positive vote when I can vote again. Only regret - I wasn't there to give some to Big Tits Karen. |
| 2011-06-05 20:29:41 |
sex with my cousin |
Won't give this a positive vote until you learn about paragraphing, grammar, spelling and lying. In a TRUE story, you stick to reality
we fucked on all 7 beds in the house,the stairs,and the floor,when i told her to take a shower with me.we got in the shower and i immediately bent her over and fucked the back of her pussy making her moan and scream. Yeah, sure, whatever. What a legend - in your own mind. |
| 2011-06-05 19:43:35 |
Siblings Discover True Love |
Pointers not needed. A beautiful love story, nicely written, with a bit of rather spicy physical contact tossed in. Personal grade 9.5/10 - you would have got the other 0.5 if I could have joined in (LOL) |
| 2011-06-05 05:50:14 |
All for Mr. Redman |
Gave you a positive vote JadeM for the good writing, BUT I'm surprised that even a Japanese Canadian can't spell hockey and a woman who puts her hymen at the wrong end of her vagina seems more like a wannabee woman rather than the real thing. |
| 2011-06-05 05:33:36 |
A Better Me Through Genetics |
JadeM, this is a magnificent start to a great series of stories.
Positive vote and 9/10 |
| 2011-06-04 19:10:04 |
My sister and I Pt. 3 |
You are kidding . . .RIGHT ?? This is a beautiful story, well written and if there is not a Part 4 SOON I may hunt you down and hurt you.( JK ) Positive vote |
| 2011-06-04 18:56:07 |
Need a Ride? |
I gave this story a positive vote for the technical excellence of the first attempt at writing. Beautifully written, spaced and grammar/spelling, but about a subject I have no interest in. Could have categorised this story up top, so I knew it was Gay. |
| 2011-06-03 02:28:14 |
Diary of a Sick Kid |
Good story, well written and a wee bit sexy. Good on Mom for solving the problem without actually getting into the emotional trap that often occurs with incest. Positive vote and 7.5/10 Personal grading. |
| 2011-06-03 02:04:39 |
Babysitting my niece |
To be this childish, the girl can't be over eight and the fact that this is listed as Fantasy (ie something you'd like to do) as opposed to Fiction which means entirely false, I suggest you get help for your sick persversion. Negative vote. |
| 2011-06-03 01:23:08 |
My Hot Aunt Babysitting Me |
Sorry. System logged me out. Last post was me. |
| 2011-06-03 01:11:24 |
MORE THAN JUST MOTHER AND SON |
Christ on a crutch, I could have killed myself, wanking over this story.
As my next door neighbours in Australia would say, " Fuckin' Bewdy Cobber." Positive vote 9/10 |
| 2011-06-03 00:37:50 |
OEDIPULSATION: THROBBING FOR MOM |
Oediplex you cur. . . Where have you been. Lovely story well written and spaced and mission executed with extreme prejudice. Positive vote. (Personal 9/10) |
| 2011-06-02 20:31:23 |
A Deadbeat's Diary - First night as a Bouncer |
OK, I don't like violence, but that's me. Story was well spaced and very few errors. Still had a stilted feel to it, but that will probably disappear with experience. Bit too much blood, did you kill a chicken while having a fuck??. NOT the best story I have read, BUT a definite improvement over your others. |
| 2011-06-02 06:50:36 |
Harry and Kari; Father and Daughter |
Anal rape - against her will - no fucking way. Negative vote. |
| 2011-06-01 21:10:32 |
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Good news - no negative vote Bad news - no positive vote....Just saw a solid block of text and passed on it. No paragraphs - no read |
| 2011-06-01 01:42:43 |
A Daddy's Love |
Firstly Epoch the fuckwit - at the top it says "teen female" and you must be the only cretin on Earth that thinks 10 yrs old is a teen errrrr NO
Secondly UP - I can read what I fuckin' feel like and if you let other people to post under your name . .EXPECT the criticism
Thirdly UP as mentioned, if it had been correctly labelled as pre-teen I would have left it to the kiddie fucking skanks that will love your shit. If the girl had been 15-16 this would have received a positive vote and my admiration. BUT IT WASN'T labelled correctly, She WASN'T 15-16 and the story DIDN'T get my favour. Live with it. |
| 2011-06-01 00:45:38 |
Rachaels Story Chapter 1 Time stands still |
Fantastic start. More PLEASE More. Positive vote and 9/10 pers grade. |
| 2011-05-31 20:37:59 |
Mom introduces me to sex |
Really enjoyable story and I gave it a positive vote, but you have to learn the difference between truth and lying. If this is a true story then your other story is a lie, and vice versa. Yet you claim that both are true stories. Not possible. |
| 2011-05-31 20:21:05 |
My sexy sister |
This is a very good story, well written and as sexy as hell. Sis was not exploited, in fact had the brains in the relationship. Positive vote and personal grading 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-31 05:44:19 |
You CAN'T Fuck a Teacher |
God Blue, I don't know whether you're a provert or one of the Marx Brothers ( or all of them ). Soo funny - and sexy. 9/10 |
| 2011-05-31 05:08:01 |
Damn, My Sister is HOT |
OOhhh Blue. Love it. 9/10 (and obviously positive vote.) |
| 2011-05-31 00:36:27 |
The Perfect Fuck |
Well written and presented story about a loving couple who just don't happen to be fantasy perfect. Works for me. I ain't perfect either, but the missus reckons I'll do til Mr Perfect comes along. . .and she's been waiting nearly 34 years. Thanks jandk. Positive vote |
| 2011-05-31 00:16:54 |
A Deadbeat's Diary - Older Woman who hadn't been laid in 19 years |
I loved it. Just when I thought you couldn't possibly be a lower lifed sleazeball, you proved I hadn't even begun to approach what a scumbag you really are. Yuck |
| 2011-05-31 00:07:04 |
A Deadbeat's Diary - One hell of an hour |
YUP dbd. No doubt about it. You ARE a deadbeat no account scumbag motherfucker. Think you can just fuck around everywhere, get all those skanks pregnant, and then expect the tax payer to pay for it. What a fucking low-life. Negative vote.
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| 2011-05-29 23:15:22 |
A Long Night |
Maeneko, This story was really REALLY funny. And very well written.Positive vote and personal grading 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-29 21:54:10 |
The Portrait - Part 1 |
Another really beautiful story. Ohh What artists have to endure for their art. Positive vote and 8/10 |
| 2011-05-29 21:44:50 |
DADDY PORN |
Loved the story Kimiko. Thank you. Positive vote and personal 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-29 20:49:13 |
Daughter and Dad |
Straight to my favorites list. Do not pass Go! Do not collect $200.
This was bloody marvelous. Positive vote and personal grade 10/10.
There had better be a sequel. . . or I'll hunt you down and piss in your ear. This has the potential to be one of the great romantic sex stories. Thank you. |
| 2011-05-28 22:55:41 |
Hanging Pedos from a Lamp post by their bollocks |
Don't know who that fuckwit (Anon 13:12:14) is but he is obviously brain damaged. Loved the story - please write more and ignore stupid little cunts like him. Positive vote and 9/10 |
| 2011-05-28 22:50:05 |
Jake Pleases His Pregnant Wife Melody (Episode 1) |
Loved it. Silly romantic. Sex should be fun. Thanks for writing this. Positive vote and my grading 9/10 |
| 2011-05-28 21:49:20 |
Open Fire - Chapter 2 |
Sorry. Load of shit. I want to read a decent story with decent character build-up and not be dropped in half-way through. As far as this goes - not worth reading. |
| 2011-05-28 20:55:38 |
A Childhood Love Revisited |
Positive vote for a well WRITTEN story, but, if it is true, YOU are a prize arsehole. She gave you her love and v-card and you think she is a slut. You were too gutless to tell her you had another girl in Michigan, and screwed her anyway. Your parents should have used a condom. |
| 2011-05-28 20:43:40 |
A Daddy's Love |
Must like negative votes. If you'd made the age 14-15 I would have given positive vote but pedophilia and rape don't ring my bell. |
| 2011-05-28 20:35:15 |
Hacking into my Aunts Computer |
Blue, Your spelling sucks . . . . .BUT the story is filthy, disgustingly sexy . . .and I loved it. Positive vote and personal 9/10. |
| 2011-05-28 03:14:37 |
The Camp Nurse, part 1 |
Read the whole series and loved it. Great work. Positive vote and 9.5/10 Personal grading. Thank you NightShade |
| 2011-05-28 00:47:19 |
New Town, New Life |
Right on the edge. Any younger and this would have a negative vote and reported which would be a pity because you're a very good writer and the story breaks new ground. As it is I gave you a Positive vote and rating 7.5/10.
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| 2011-05-27 20:56:33 |
Mom-Son Honey Camping 2 |
Pure plagiarism. Stolen from another writer. Negative vote. |
| 2011-05-27 20:08:56 |
School trip |
Was this written by the same person as the other stories ???. Yes..very good story but : names ALWAYS start with a capital letter ; circumstances does not start sur. Get a proof reader. Without the distraction of some really bad spelling and grammar, this would be a great story. Still gets Positive vote and personal grade 7.5/10 |
| 2011-05-27 20:00:07 |
How I lost it |
OK. This story is great. Well written and spaced and bloody enjoyable. You have real talent and I'll be reading all your stories. Positive vote and 8/10. |
| 2011-05-27 19:37:26 |
Worthless And Disgusting Cunt-Kitty |
Sorry. Not this one. To each his (or her ) own but I LOVE women - all women - and any story that shows them as trash is not acceptable to me. I rate this story 5/10 for you excellent writing, but you lose the other five for subject material. |
| 2011-05-27 19:20:15 |
Marcys daddy |
Fantastic. This story has GOT to have a sequel. Positive vote and my personal 9/10. |
| 2011-05-26 23:29:30 |
My Sister Sarah and I - part 2 |
Just to let you know. . .last post was me. Bloody system keeps logging me out. Shit - I HATE that. |
| 2011-05-26 06:30:57 |
My Sister Sarah and I |
Hey. . . .Where the fuck is Part Two. Quickly. Positive vote |
| 2011-05-26 05:56:44 |
The Storm |
I've read a thousand stories on this site and this is in the top TEN. Bloody great. Well written, realistic and romantic. Sex without love is just muscular exercise, and I can relate completely with your truckie. Positive vote and personal grading 9.8/10 ( 10 if you like I'm not going to niggle over 0.2) Thank you old man for a lovely story. |
| 2011-05-21 07:57:16 |
Rider Chapter 2 |
This one was a really good story. Well thought out and descriptive. Thank you. Positive vote and my personal grade 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-21 06:32:31 |
Brotherly Love |
Really good first attempt. You MUST have previous experience elsewhere. Positive vote and 7.5/10 |
| 2011-05-20 04:37:01 |
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Pedophilia, negative vote and reported to site controllers. |
| 2011-05-19 06:55:26 |
A Fantasy Comes True (A Greek Tale) |
The BEGINNING to what will be a fantastic love story. 9/10 and Thank you. |
| 2011-05-19 03:45:36 |
Cold Night |
Another good story Lamenise. As already pointed out, could have been longer, but exciting and beautifully written. Also leaves scope for continuation and would love a second part to this one. In fact, in this case a second part is almost necessary. + vote and 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-19 03:32:38 |
Waking Mom |
Great story Lamenise, with plenty of opportunities for a sequel. Would love to see it continued. + vote and 8.5/10 personal grading Thank you |
| 2011-05-19 01:30:38 |
The "RED' hot lady next door |
I just KNEW Fix'm would be here with bells on. . . .He just LOVES redheads.
Meee toooo. Great fun story. I love it. Please Keep Going. + vote |
| 2011-05-18 22:11:55 |
Indian Delite |
Love inter racial. I've really got the hots for a beautiful Bangladeshi lady friend but I.m married and I would NEVER risk our friendship and my marriage by doing anything but dream. Another story for my favorites list. + vote and personal grading 8.5/10. Maybe another similar story ending in marriage and children. (NOT children for sex - that's disgusting) |
| 2011-05-18 20:38:23 |
Terri's Cherry |
Thank you Lucky. One of the nicest sex stories I have read. No underage, no violence, just a really believable really good story. + vote and personal grading 8/10 |
| 2011-05-18 19:12:42 |
My Best Friend's Girl |
Do I want more ? Are you fucking kidding ? Well written and really sexy story, nicely spaced and easy to read. Get to work, I'm waiting. + vote and personal grade 7.5/10 |
| 2011-05-18 05:06:37 |
My sister-in-law Tabitha's Visit part 1 |
Loved it, you dirty adulterous little maggot. +ve vote and personal 8/10
You're a good writer and a bastard as a husband. Like I care LOL |
| 2011-05-17 21:59:09 |
Dad and his Girls |
Bloody good start to what could be a very good story. I have no revulsion with incest provided the child is old enough to make her own decisions. (ie 13-14 plus) Positive vote and 7/10 for this part. Psychic not physic - Use a spell checker. |
| 2011-05-17 21:45:45 |
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Another rant by an inbred, retarded, asshole who thinks his sick perversions are actually laudable. Against the rules of this site and against the laws of every nation on this planet. What a sick defective. negative vote. AND by definition, Fantasy means You actually want to do it. Yuck. |
| 2011-05-17 05:13:45 |
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Yup, I can live with this story. Great writing, well spaced, erotic + vote and 8/10 |
| 2011-05-16 23:24:25 |
Daughter has her price. |
Great start, but she's obviously been taught to be a mercenary little witch. Well written and presented story. Blackmail doesn't ring my bell so I don't find it sexy and I would never pay for sex ever. 8/10 and + vote for the story. More to come I hope because I'm curious. |
| 2011-05-16 09:50:13 |
My Best Friend and Pizza (part 1) |
You probably won't be so happy to hear comments when or if one of those mindless trolls starts destroying your credibility with their insane rants, but if you ignore them, rest assured, your skill will be noted by those who count. |
| 2011-05-16 09:33:11 |
In the Name of Love |
Thanks Horse. I'm an atheist - and loved it. Different My grade 8/10 and obviously positive vote. |
| 2011-05-16 03:57:38 |
Laurie shares her daughter with me |
I won't repeat your errors because the others have already told you, so I'll only say, those apart this was a good story and I enjoyed it. Overall 6/10 |
| 2011-05-16 03:39:15 |
The Nerd -Epilog |
Wow, that ending blindsided me - and was really inventive. Thank you for posting this story. I really enjoyed it. + vote |
| 2011-05-15 22:04:30 |
My Pregnant Neighbor |
See Pudman, You CAN write a very good, sexy story without bringing up sex with children. + vote and 8/10 personal grade. |
| 2011-05-15 21:53:43 |
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This crap is pure incitement to low-life pedophiles to corrupt children. Scumbags who like this illegal and morally reprehensible trash should be chemically and physically castrated. - vote and reported |
| 2011-05-15 21:46:00 |
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Another disgusting story by a brain damaged pedophile wannabee who doesn't have any concept of legality or decency.....- vote and reported. |
| 2011-05-15 21:35:31 |
NIGHTS IN WHITE SATIN (rewrite) |
OOops BSoD, another good story. Keep this up and I'll come to expect it. Still some silly spelling mistakes but the story - Really good. + vote and 8/10 grading for this one. |
| 2011-05-15 21:09:27 |
Anna's Story Repost |
What a change BSoD, Considerably better writing and easy to understand.
Although the story is not one I would normally find interesting, in this instance I felt for the young artist. Still some spelling problems but today I am holiday from the Spelling Police. Under the requirements of the contest, I think this is a most suitable story, thus + vote and 7/10 personal grading |
| 2011-05-15 03:13:31 |
Anna's Story |
Sorry, see nothing here to pique my interest. Illogical spacing, some shocking spelling and a story I couldn't even follow. |
| 2011-05-15 01:17:17 |
My Best Friend and Pizza (part 1) |
This COULD be the beginning of a GREAT romance story IF you learn that paragraphs are necessary. I nearly ditched this story to the depths of ignominy when I saw a solid block of text. Glad I persevered because your writing is really very good and I enjoyed the build-up. IF you stop here I will hunt you down and pee in your shoes, and your left ear. Paragraphs please!! |
| 2011-05-15 01:07:59 |
The Snapper |
Impressed. Not all men like anorexic beanpoles although a skinny minnie can be fun occasionally. Well spaced, well written and agree that a sequel would have been nice. 8/10 |
| 2011-05-14 20:17:59 |
Virgin Honeymoon |
The realism of this story tore my heart and the human-ness of the two of you really got to me. A realistic story, not a fairy tale and in reality things don't always end up perfectly. Glad you found another love to share your life. You are obviously worth loving, but I can also understand the break up. I know how the trivialities of life can sometimes overshadow the really important bits. 9/10 and positive vote. Thank you for sharing your life. |
| 2011-05-14 19:45:51 |
A weekend with a 13 year old virgin |
Sky. Maybe I live in a dream world, but unlike the sexy old fart, I didn't find the story unbelievable. Rare, maybe unlikely, but pretty erotic, almost romantic and very very sexy. Well written, with enough spacing so I didn't choke on words.
I loved the story, and thank you for putting it up so we could read it. + vote. |
| 2011-05-14 02:27:22 |
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Hardrive, In the past I may have been less than impressed with SOME of your stories. Have no doubt that I am more than impressed with this one. Tomorrow, when I have the ability to vote again this gets a positive vote - NO QUESTION and I personally grade this 10/10. In my eyes NOTHING can be done to improve this lovely romantic story. |
| 2011-05-14 01:42:02 |
A little sister brother thing Part 2 |
hotjohn . . . .agree with other comments. Bloody good sequel let down by not watching spacing. This is not the Grammar Police (in this instance) but simple logic. If it's easy to read - more people will read it. Doesn't take a dummy to work that out (and you've proved you're no dummy) 7/10 and + vote. . .Points lost for layout |
| 2011-05-13 14:38:16 |
My sister got drunk |
Spelling, grammar and layout near perfect. Story so-so. Would have been better with a bit more "fleshing out". Looks like you wrote it to a tight schedule but to be good you've got to allow over three minutes. Subject was great and this COULD have been a very good story. As it is I find it mediocre at best. 4/10 |
| 2011-05-13 14:25:11 |
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Congratulations. You've sent a record for literary incompetence. Nearly every third word spelled wrong, shocking grammar, childishly written and whoops something good - very well spaced. Obviously written by a dyslexic 10 yr old or another failure of the Australian educational system. Don't try to write stories when you come home from the pub drunk. 2/10 |
| 2011-05-13 04:47:45 |
Maternal Desire |
No need for pregnancy. Only fuckheads think every son should get his mother pregnant, probably because they are the result of a defective birth through incest?? Great story which could be continued, just not with him getting mommy "up the duff". But then, You're a shotgun and he's already given her both barrels. As a stand alone, this is still very good. +vote and 8/10 |
| 2011-05-13 02:44:33 |
I Want To Make Love Too |
Anonymous 14.51.44 is a wanker - Disregard. Absolutely lovely sexy romantic story, well written and spaced. Easy to read (and NO rape, NO violence and NO 5-6 year olds) and just plain good erotica. Thank you for writing and sharing this excellent effort. + vote and personal grading 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-13 02:04:14 |
13 year old virgin |
Thought this was going to be just another "Let's fuck a 13 yr old and ditch her" saga. But, I got it wrong, and I'm glad I read on. Really enjoyable story, well written and spaced AND written in REAL English, not bloody txt speak or pidgeon English. 8.5 out of 10 and obviously positive vote. Thank you and well done. |
| 2011-05-12 22:54:21 |
Worshippind Miki Part Two |
Very enjoyable and extremely well written sequel, beautifully laid out and an easy pleasure to read. If any more detail was included it would be too much, so keep an eye on that, but this level made a superb story. + vote and personal rating 9.5/10 Thank you for writing it. |
| 2011-05-12 21:17:33 |
Fucking Dads New Girlfriend |
Blue, You seem to make a habit of exploring different styles rather than stick to a particular genre, and this one is a beauty. Inventive, well written and spaced and really easy to read. Congratulations on an excellent story. Obviously + vote and my personal rating 9.5/10 |
| 2011-05-12 20:54:38 |
Becky And Her English Teacher |
Baddaddy=Goodwriter. Very realistic, beautifully written, well spaced and therefore easy to read. I could feel myself in the mind of this curious little sexpot (not bad as I'm a nearly 60 yr old male) Wish I was a teacher. +vote and personally 9/10. Thank you for writing this exceptional story. |
| 2011-05-12 03:30:18 |
My Lovely twin Part 2 |
Hey dav, wassup. . .First you send me am IM saying ta for criticism and them carry on. You use a big word like tumescent correctly - yet don't know the difference between waist and waste or just don't care enough to get it right. Good story spoiled by crap layout and shit spelling isn't a good review.. . .Buck up. I KNOW you're better than that. |
| 2011-05-12 03:29:27 |
My Lovely twin Part 2 |
Hey dav, wassup. . .First you send me am IM saying ta for criticism and them carry on. You use a big word like tumescent correctly - yet don't know the difference between waist and waste or just don't care enough to get it right. Good story spoiled by crap layout and shit spelling isn't a good review.. . .Buck up. I KNOW your better than that. |
| 2011-05-12 02:56:28 |
Kat and Old Man |
Really good and imaginative story written beautifully. Loved it. |
| 2011-05-12 02:32:06 |
It's Not A Handicap part 1 |
While I totally abhor the subject of rape and think rapists are sick bastards, I have got to say that your writing style is pretty good and technically enjoyable. |
| 2011-05-12 00:46:47 |
Rape of dolly (continued) |
OOhh look mummy. Another piss poorly written rant by a pathetic prick who takes his own mental deficiencies on women by degrading stories of violent rape. As well, the spelling is kindergarten level, layout is shocking and grammar absolutely atrocious. So this is the future of humanity. |
| 2011-05-12 00:40:55 |
The Nerd - 5 |
senorlongo. Loved the whole story. Thank you for posting. I've run out of votes today so you'll get a + vote next time I log in. |
| 2011-05-11 20:09:58 |
My friends mom |
SHE apologised when she caught him wanking in HER house. Yeah right. I can accept that it probably is a 13 year old's fantasy, and your spacing (layout) is really good but writing it as a 13 yr old gives it less appeal to me. Keep writing because I see some talent that will improve with maturity. + vote for your attempt and personal grading 6/10. Something different, but you should be out bonking at your age. LOL |
| 2011-05-11 08:04:07 |
MOM WANTS TO BE MY CUM BUCKET! - CHAPTER 1 |
See that pathetic little troll Wantsomefun is still around. Ignore him he has NEVER written a story and is only a legend in his own tiny little mind. You know what you call a troll with two brain cells - Gifted. |
| 2011-05-11 02:36:53 |
Holly Chapter 2 |
Yup Tobias, as expected. . . a bloody good erotic story. Thank you for submitting and allowing us to enjoy your skill. 8/10 |
| 2011-05-10 19:56:14 |
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Thank you Rebel. This story is getting more interesting as it goes along. |
| 2011-05-10 19:54:01 |
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Not bad Rebel, I'm starting to get really engrossed in this story. Well Done 8/10 |
| 2011-05-10 19:37:05 |
The Nerd - Part 4 |
As usual senorlongo, LOVE the story and I'm waiting for the next installment.
Thank you for the time and skill to provide my enjoyment. 8/10 |
| 2011-05-10 10:53:19 |
Little Girl finds her mom's magazines Part 4 |
Yup, Really, really good. . . .could have been longer and is pretty well set up for a sequel ??? Pretty please. + vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2011-05-10 10:47:32 |
The Therapy I Needed |
Yep, Fix'm. More please. I love this sort of story (as you well know) |
| 2011-05-10 04:49:48 |
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Very good story, well written and spaced, and just bloody enjoyable. Eagerly awaiting next Part. |
| 2011-05-10 01:53:49 |
Southern Comfort - 2 |
Looking forward to Part Three |
| 2011-05-10 01:40:30 |
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DAMN, DAMN. . .I was really looking forward to trashing this story, having just finished reading some crap, BUT I can't. Beautifully written. A really good read. More PLEASE. . . .+ vote and 8.5/10 (trail wound into the forest - not winded and "my pussy muscles squeezing my hard dick" threw my concentration) |
| 2011-05-10 01:22:13 |
Office Story |
At the top you asked if I would read more of your stories . . . NO THANK YOU
Reasons : paragraphing (none) spelling, punctuation, words missing and generally I don't like first person talking to me because I am not your female lover . . . .just a cranky old fart who would like you to take a bit more care in your writing THEN I think you could be very good - just not yet. |
| 2011-05-10 01:11:58 |
my first time |
Don't you monkeys get the idea. 12 years old is STATUTORY RAPE. He can go to jail for a long long time. Has the school system collapsed so much that you have no idea of the simplest of English grammar. For instance I as in me is always a capital I. Simple really. My favourite saying is If you can't write right - DON'T write!! based on the saying Anything worth doing, is worth doing right. I can only assume you want to treat us, the readers, as idiots, and any crap will do....SORRY. . . if you submit sub-standard work it WILL be criticised. |
| 2011-05-10 00:07:43 |
The Nerd - Part 3 |
I am LOVING this story. Keep it going. I'd like to see Morgan suggest that her mum and Sara move in also . . . .Ohh Boy the possibilities . . .9/10 and + vote |
| 2011-05-09 23:42:58 |
Study Time |
I wonder why someone with an obvious talent for writing, would want to write, even fictitiously, about a subject that degrades women and contains violence and non-consensual acts. Make no mistake you are potentially a great writer, just the subject matter offends me. |
| 2011-05-09 21:58:32 |
My Girlfriend and My Sister...both want me! |
Geez, MR.Kool, This has GOT to be one of your best - and your worst is pretty good. There HAS to be a follow up to this. Get a bigger place and a HUGE bed and keep them both satisfied. They are obviously sexually compatible and in the long term Sis could provide a baby or babies and the kids could grow up with two mothers. 9/10 and + vote. ***** |
| 2011-05-09 20:57:08 |
Little Horny? |
Watch your tags - this is not a joke of any sort. Written by somebody with no idea of morals, probably under aged and to whom English was their least favorite subject in school. A writer first reads at least hundreds of stories so they get an idea of how stories should be written. Poor attempt. 5/10 for trying. |
| 2011-05-09 20:44:09 |
My Lovely twin. |
dav, I'll have to disagree with Happy Rabbit and say this was not a GREAT story BUT admit it was really good. Some really inventive imagination and a couple of interesting twists, but I felt it didn't flow very well. I'd be prepared to believe you are a bit uncomfortable with the English language. Having said that I enjoyed reading it, and will probably read it again. I've given it a + vote and a personal score of 7/10 and I've already got you listed as an author to keep an eye on. You show promise. |
| 2011-05-08 23:36:30 |
I Discover Jenna's Secret |
Not my usual, but bloody well written and I could see/feel the attraction |
| 2011-05-08 23:24:05 |
Roses for Monica Part Two |
Sorry Rutger, Got my authors confused but comments and respect for good writing remain. GR939 |
| 2011-05-08 23:22:14 |
Roses for Monica Part Two |
Love this story. Good boy Blue. Part Three Please....GR939 |
| 2011-05-08 19:35:37 |
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Rebel, Well written story with spacing that makes the story easy to read. Well done and I'm looking forward to where this story is going. You have a knack for keeping up the suspense. + vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2011-05-08 09:30:00 |
Mated for Life by Saul |
Great story - probably the most concentrated fucking I've ever read. 9/10 |
| 2011-05-08 09:28:18 |
Tribal Maiden |
Great story Saul - Agree with Fix'm. +vote GR939 |
| 2011-05-07 21:15:01 |
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Sorry, my friend . . .If this story took five hours, then you wasted five hours. English is probably NOT your first language. You did not try to find out what your potential readers would like. If you did, you would break the story down into easily read paragraphs instead of a solid block of text. You categorised this as a TRUE story then added fiction, so it is not a true story . . .it is a fictitious story BASED in truth. Lastly, if you want to write stories in English, go back to school and learn to write in English, not in some hybrid pidgeon remotely related to English. If your primary language is English, then you obviously only went to school to smoke dope, do drugs and waste time. As it stands, this story is crap. |
| 2011-05-07 07:03:33 |
My new Bride part 4 |
Hey Wantsomefun, This is Ghostrider939 and unlike the real wantsomefun whose name you plagiarize, you haven't written any stories and are too gutless to log in before slagging somebody. You are a defective little microbe. |
| 2011-05-07 06:00:33 |
Prom Dress |
God this was great. More please |
| 2011-05-07 05:52:03 |
dream fuck 1,2 |
Lovely and loving. Enjoyed it heaps. Well Done 8/10 GR939 |
| 2011-05-07 04:30:55 |
Donald: Chapert One |
@ Anonymous 01:48:20. What an infantile response. Obviously you are such a dummy you can't spell manner, preferring a large country house manor. . and if a childish defective like you even lives long enough to have as much of a life as I have had, I'll be surprised. My loving partner and I have just passed THIRTY THREE YEARS of romance. This pathetic story is illegal, obnoxious, degrading to half the human population of this planet and highly offensive, as well as being against the laws of this site and as such I will report it. If that doesn't cover your pathetic diatribe perhaps I can suggest that you - - -Fuck off you deviant pedophile loving dickhead. |
| 2011-05-06 21:16:23 |
Enri's Initiation part 2 |
Still a pathetic racist tirade but at least funny in its idiocy. |
| 2011-05-06 21:14:33 |
Enri Initiation part 1 |
Pathetic racist tirade, written by a defective. Yuck |
| 2011-05-06 21:09:57 |
Donald: Chapert One |
Knew this would be shit when even the heading couldn't be spelled correctly. CHAPTER not Chapert . . . .and from there . . .rapidly downhill. Totally unbelievable scenario from all aspects written with a childish use of the English language. Nothing romantic about it. Yuck. Come back when you turn 9. |
| 2011-05-06 03:35:48 |
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SD, I will admit I have read considerably worse stories than yours, and not too many better. You're good at giving each of your victims personality without using too many words to do it - and the theme of the story is original and interesting and the writing clear and well spaced. + vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2011-05-06 03:29:52 |
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Dapple, I'm not going to blow smoke up your ass and tell you this is the best story I have ever read, BUT, it is pretty fucking good. Positive vote of course, but there were a couple of places where sentences were too repetitive. Having said that I want to see more from you . . . .and I AM looking forward to it. Well written, well spaced and overall, easily read. Well done and thank you. 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-05 21:27:20 |
MY SISTER'S PUNCHING BAG PARTS 2 & 3 (REPOST) |
Yup, VERY enjoyable. Better be a Part 3. Positive vote and 7.5/10 as personal grade. |
| 2011-05-05 21:01:36 |
mysterious fuck at midnight |
Story is sexy and there the good comments end. PARAGRAPHS . . . .a solid block of text is hard to read. Hard to read stories are simply dropped. Space out the story with paragraphs and it becomes easy to read and appreciated. Read other stories and see how layout improves the story. Positive vote for the sexiness but personal 4/10 for crappy layout. |
| 2011-05-05 05:09:02 |
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The only good thing about reading this shit is that I get good clues to pass on to one of my friends who works for the FBI Special Victims Unit. Pedophile bastards deserve 10 years as Bubba's Bitch in Sing Sing or similar. |
| 2011-05-04 23:44:41 |
Fun with Nancy |
IF that was a true story - and I doubt it = Then you're a cunt...I have no respect for someone who fucks a girl, uses no protection, gets her pregnant and then ditches her. Story was well written and nicely spaced . . . .but you're still a cunt. |
| 2011-05-04 23:28:27 |
The Nerd-Part 2 |
Really enjoyed your two Part story senorlongo. I suppose it finishes there but would be pleased to see a Part Three and I will follow all your stories. 8.5/10 and positive vote. |
| 2011-05-04 20:54:10 |
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Agree with 1labelho. Good story fairly well written with a few mistakes, and REALLY enjoyed a few fucking hillbilly inbreds brave enough to bring up Royal family supposed sexual practises, and a few idiot Brits commenting on how the US only came into the war late to garner the glory. I swear it only takes about twelve of these fuckwits to raise the IQ of a syphilitic sparrow. Best of all the fucking CRETIN who threaten death on some comentators. Yay . . way to go...What a dumb fucking failure of genetics and evolution. |
| 2011-05-04 10:56:27 |
...and every girl in the family, chapter 2 |
It's easy to see who the retarded hillbilly kiddie fuckers are because they can't spell for shit and actually think it's OK to screw a preteen child. I've got nothing against incest - just reckon anything under 14-15 is lowlife pedophile shit. |
| 2011-05-04 05:33:12 |
Full Circle - Chapter Seven |
Yee Harr Fix'm. Keep this coming boy. Superlatives mean shit when they're repeated so I won't. 10/10 |
| 2011-05-04 02:03:49 |
Loving My Sister |
Lovely romantic story, beautifully written. Love your talent. |
| 2011-05-04 01:09:58 |
My step-sister Sara! |
Cuteykat, That has GOT to be one of the very BEST first attempts I have ever had the pleasure of reading. You have a real talent for this and I want to see more. Get used to the bloody system logging you out - I hate it too. 9/10 and + vote. |
| 2011-05-03 02:12:09 |
The Nerd--Part 1 |
Sorry Fix'm you missed the other gaffe . . . .Porsche don't make a V6 sportscar. They're boxers ie horizontally opposed or V8 or V10. BUT who cares senorlongo, great start to what could be GREAT story. Looking forward to more. 8/10 |
| 2011-05-03 01:59:23 |
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Hey Tricky. . .real good start to a promising story...Keep going 7.5/10 |
| 2011-05-03 00:42:25 |
How I met her |
What are you up to Fix'm . . . Taking my name in vain OR glorifying it. Really good story and I will follow with interest. BTW (By the way) I have a Roll of Honor of those who died for Texas at the Alamo. Guess what - there is a McGregor there . . . Ohh The STORY . . .positive vote and 10/10 |
| 2011-05-01 19:39:11 |
Carlie and Me. |
Sorry Spacey. I'm just going to join the thinking majority and say I LOVED THE STORY. It was beautifully written and spaced and I hope there is more. Thank you for letting me enjoy your skill. |
| 2011-05-01 06:45:39 |
SAGA FROM LOVING MOM TO BECOME WIFE |
First sentence of this story says it all. I don't know how to start telling my story. English is OBVIOUSLY your second language and it shows. Didn't bother reading much further to have it confirmed.... |
| 2011-04-30 05:40:02 |
New Discoveries |
Poor mommy doesn't get to ride the sugar stick . . .Boo Hoo. Be only half gay and let her have the slippery sausage up her poop shute. PS for a first attempt this was a very interesting and erotic story. Good show Young man. |
| 2011-04-30 05:38:20 |
New Discoveries |
Poor mommy doesn't get to ride the sugar stick . . .Boo Hoo. Be only half gay and let her have the slippery sausage up her poop shute. |
| 2011-04-30 05:33:36 |
20 questions |
I think Sexykitty and Msr. Shakespeare summed it up fairly well, except because unique is a superlative it can't be very unique. (Unique means one of a kind, and something can't be very one of a kind). However I digress, one of the most enjoyable dissertations I have had the privilege of perusing. Well done and thank you for sharing. . . . 9.5/10 |
| 2011-04-29 21:22:45 |
Melody at my cottage |
Red, really good little vignette. I enjoyed it. Three faults : Melody with a capital M - it's her name ; bury your head in her hair not berry - that's a fruit ; sundae is the ice cream - Sunday is a day of the week. Couple of others but . . . . .I repeat, LOVED the story, it's just that little errors break concentration. 8/10 and + vote |
| 2011-04-29 20:45:38 |
Wet Dreams; Bitchy Behavior; Lust & Love |
See Jackass, I JUST KNEW deep down you were a woman. You're in my list of top ten authors : Erudite, grammar and space sensitive. Unlike Anon 16:15:38 I don't want you to be like WP. Be yourself. The difference is what makes you both so much fun to read. 8.5/10 and +vote. |
| 2011-04-29 06:44:31 |
Good Sam's Reward |
Guess I'm a lucky man too. Thank you for posting this beautiful romantic story. I'm just a soppy bastard and loved it. 9/10 + Positive vote |
| 2011-04-29 02:11:23 |
The New Den Mother |
Wrong but well written and exciting |
| 2011-04-29 02:00:28 |
Roberts Drunken night |
Ooops, wrong hole . . . .no right hole on wrong person. Not bad story. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-29 01:58:41 |
A Daughter's Reluctant Love |
Yup, that'll do me. Good Story told by a lady from a girl's perspective. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-28 17:03:06 |
Erin Finally Gets Fucked Up Her Ass |
The premise is great, spacing and spelling OK and the story just plain very good. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-28 16:54:56 |
Daddy and the girls. |
Pedophilia - against the laws of this site, and written by an illiterate teenager or preteen.Spacing and concept quite good.Rest is total crap. 1/10 Reported as illegal. |
| 2011-04-28 16:54:27 |
Daddy and the girls. |
Pedophilia - against the laws of this site, and written by an illiterate teenager or preteen.Spacing and concept quite good.Rest is total crap. 1/10 |
| 2011-04-28 03:56:09 |
Now it's my turn |
Sorry donb, I could have done better and I am, at best a mildly talented author who at least understands the English language (as you do) and sentence structure (also as you do). Theme was very good but not exploited and story was too short. My opinion only and when all is said and done, my opinion is for me. |
| 2011-04-28 03:47:52 |
The Vertical Smile - part 2 |
Nice story donb, but for some reason I expected more. Don't get me wrong and get all defensive, the layout spelling and general theme are good, but you got nearly as much reaction out of me for the title alone as you did for the story. 6.5/10 |
| 2011-04-28 02:53:28 |
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Snoochies, I know you are on the list of XNXX Recommended Writers . .and now I know why. For such a long story you developed it well and I had to read all the chapters? one after the other. BRILLIANT. 9.9/10 and only because you said there would be more and there isn't. GR939 |
| 2011-04-28 00:44:33 |
A Sudden Awakening |
Still do not like rape. .. . . But good fiction nonetheless |
| 2011-04-27 23:40:02 |
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Oooh This I have GOT to read. Written superbly and with a great deal of thought. Hope there's a lot more to follow.GR939 |
| 2011-04-27 21:53:46 |
Holiday Awakening: My cousin Shayla |
Lovely story, romantic and made me so o o horny. And bloody well written.9/10 GR939. P.S. Want more !!! |
| 2011-04-27 21:34:15 |
Pillow Talk |
I'm not gay and in my sixty years have never had a gay experience BUT this is very romantic and almost makes me wonder if I missed something...beautifully written. 8.5/10 and only my preferred orientation stops it being higher. GR939 |
| 2011-04-27 21:05:17 |
Mom's Horny Pills |
Jesus, blueheatt, That is the sexiest bloody story I have ever read. Old men like me don't usually get bloody boners like I got reading this. 10/10 |
| 2011-04-27 09:44:41 |
My first story....'Fantasy" |
Good story. I'd NEVER share my sweetheart but hey, whatever rings your bell - and is consensual, is fine. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-27 09:31:06 |
A Family of Building Blocks |
Really good story, well presented with good character development - few mistakes with names but overall well worth it. Also looking for Pt
Two and thank you for sharing. Positive vote and 8/10 |
| 2011-04-26 05:05:31 |
Christmas With The Family (Re-Write) |
Great story. Gotta be more |
| 2011-04-26 04:44:23 |
Christmas With The Family Chapter 2 |
The family that plays together, stays together. . . . .Thanks Huggy. Really enjoying the story and hoping for a part three |
| 2011-04-26 01:55:32 |
Sins of my Country Girl Sis & Me |
Hey Wantsomefun, and I don't mean the real wantsomefun, the only brain damage your granddaughter has is from the abortion she calls grandfather. Sorry Jackass for using your remarks but you, Slippery and the real wantsomefun are three of the best writers in this site and I don't want anyone to think that troll wanker in any way affects our opinions. |
| 2011-04-25 22:42:38 |
The Hitch-Hiker, Part 3 |
Loved the whole series, and, like you , love this type of story. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-04-25 22:31:57 |
Fantasy becomes reality |
AJ, Very good beginning and I'm looking forward to a sequel, but if I could make one suggestion. . . .some people find large blocks of text hard to read and it would be far better to read if broken down into paragraphs.
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| 2011-04-25 01:53:52 |
The Hitch-Hiker, Part 2 |
First two parts are bloody great. Can't wait for Part Three and I hope they do stay together. Well Done. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-24 03:57:50 |
Suzy's Introduction Part 2 |
Nice to see our resident troll making his usual asinine comments. Too fucking gutless to make himself known, but hey, life wouldn't be such fun without stupid little fuckwits like him. |
| 2011-04-24 03:54:35 |
Susie's Introduction |
Sorry about the numbers folks. They were actually Page numbers and I didn't realise how stupid they would look. Not there in my other submissions. Thank you for your comments and suggestions |
| 2011-04-24 02:26:32 |
Maryann's Birthday Present |
Now, THIS was better than the Tenant Susan story, because of the spacing. Couple that with your talent and I have to confess, "Not too shabby at all." Really enjoyed this one a lot. Thank you. 8/10 and positive vote. |
| 2011-04-24 02:17:54 |
Apartment Complex Susan Pt. 2 |
Like most of your stories, good storyline and character development but as a hint for an otherwise worthy writer, solid blocks of text are hard to read and frustrate avid readers. Separate paragraphs to allow a breath now and then would be helpful. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-24 02:04:28 |
Such Good Friends |
Determined little pussey wasn't she?? Good story, well written and enjoyed it. No real character build up but definitely worth reading. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-24 01:51:25 |
Catherine and her Daddy (repost so it can be read) |
Agree with Fix'm. Pretty standard in plot but beautifully written and spaced. Thank you 8/10 |
| 2011-04-23 08:06:42 |
Seducing Our Sons |
Agree with Fix'm, blueheatt. . .You're a bloody pervert . . .just like us. Bloody good start and I WANT to see more. Three horny pussey's and two permanently hard cocks. You SHOULD be able to do something with that. 8/10 and positive vote. |
| 2011-04-23 07:47:08 |
pleasurable stranger |
Thank you, Great start but take heed of the three previous comments esp Fix'm. He knows. Story needs "fleshing out" and this is a sex story site so more sex and character development needed. At this stage I give positive vote and 6.5/10 |
| 2011-04-23 05:30:24 |
Raising Little Tabby Jack Part Four |
One of my favorite stories written by a master story teller. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-23 05:03:53 |
Innocence Lost |
Great first part. Let's see where it goes b. . . . |
| 2011-04-23 02:35:58 |
Full Circle - Chapter Five |
Fix'm you dipshit. You know what this story is like. Stop and I'll get my wife to hunt you down and HURT you. . . .and she could do it. The last person she got pissed with was a certain George Armstrong Custer . . .and you know what happened to him. Just get a couple more parts up so I can read 'em. |
| 2011-04-21 20:59:27 |
My sister becomes a mother |
I enjoyed this story as well. (at least one of the slaggers admitted he was a sick fuck - haha) 7/10 |
| 2011-04-21 20:53:51 |
My cousin Stacy comes to stay with me |
Contrary to the other idiots, I enjoyed this story and don't care about the heading/classification. |
| 2011-04-21 20:40:17 |
My sister Sandy follows in Mom's footsteps |
Obviously you have become a considerably better writer with experience. Your mommy intr was shit. . . .this is VERY GOOD |
| 2011-04-21 20:33:30 |
My hot blonde mother makes me a man |
True Story - Crap. Obviously only 14 years old and wishful thinking. Don't put True Story unless it is. |
| 2011-04-21 05:35:26 |
A Missy Christmas by Michael K Smith |
Once and once only . . . love it. Great story. well laid out and beautifully written 8.5/10 |
| 2011-04-20 21:24:09 |
MOTHER |
Loved the story and although the spelling wasn't perfect I understood it. 7.5/10 |
| 2011-04-20 08:58:13 |
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Reported. Story about slime pedophiles |
| 2011-04-20 08:25:18 |
Busy Daughter Series (continuation) |
Chilldude is 5,4 250 lb fuckwit with a 2 inch dick. Fuck off boy, this isn't your fucking dating service. Ohh Aaannn, Sorry, your story was bloody marvellous and I loved it except you seem to attract children with delusions of adequacy. . . . .8/10 for the well thought out and well written story. |
| 2011-04-20 02:58:57 |
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Loved the short story, Loved the Intro, Love your talent. |
| 2011-04-20 00:56:37 |
My New Neighbors and Their Sweet Asses |
Great, loving sexy story, obviously a little bit dirty, but hell that makes it so o o good. Positive rating also OBVIOUSLY. Another beaut w.p. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-19 09:14:06 |
The Livingston School for Young Ladies |
Fabulous fantastic story W.P. One of the very best. Keep this going PULEEZ.
In NZ a stinking Liberal/Radical bitch has destroyed the moral fibre of our young by criminalising smacking . . . .stupid cow. This is the way it SHOULD be. 10/10 |
| 2011-04-19 08:24:45 |
Full Circle - Chapter Four |
Keep goin' Fix'm. I LOVE THIS STORY and I'm awaitin' three generations gettin' plugged. 10/10 |
| 2011-04-19 04:46:25 |
Teaching the Critic a Lesson |
I have always been an opponent of rape, but hey this IS FICTION and I believe this BITCH needed fucking. Great story 9/10 |
| 2011-04-19 04:42:49 |
Stranded on a Rainy Night |
Fantastic story spoiled a little teeny bit by not being broken down into bite sized PARAGRAPHS. Why can't people learn - solid blocks of text are hard to read.Otherwise I loved the story and want an isolated cabin to masturbate until my two sex maniacs turn up. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-18 23:59:13 |
Nothing Compares |
You're a good emotion inspiring writer but this just left me feeling down in the dumps. If that was your aim, you succeeded. |
| 2011-04-18 23:58:43 |
Nothing Compares |
You're a good emotion inspiring writer but this just left me feeling down in the dumps. If that was your aim, you succeeded. |
| 2011-04-18 23:51:53 |
The Object of My Desire |
Not that I particularly care for bondage or rape stories, this is a bloody good start, but as a story it is only a cameo and needs a Part II to make it complete. |
| 2011-04-18 23:46:24 |
Sad Lisa (repost w/comments open) |
Sniff, sniff Good writing, good story |
| 2011-04-18 23:39:02 |
Alanna - Chapter 2 |
Really enjoyed that. Good story, well written. Looking forward to the next. . . . . |
| 2011-04-18 23:03:08 |
Shortcut to rape |
Stories are easier to read if they are broken down into paragraphs. This could be a good story, but I gave up on a solid block of text. |
| 2011-04-18 22:55:14 |
I guess I really DID need a vacation! |
Fuck it wsf, can you even write a BAD story. You have the knack to bring humanity to your characters before they get bonked silly. . . and the bonking is pretty good too |
| 2011-04-18 21:48:52 |
A Different Kind of Love |
NEARLY as good as your 'Holly' story but not quite so 9.9/10. Loved it. You are 'Da Man' |
| 2011-04-18 19:02:23 |
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Hey PEOPLE!! Stop criticising wantsomefun. He's really a nice person born with a defect called typus fuckuppus which means his brain isn't connected to his fingers. Sure he's a defective, but he's a nice defective and he can only hurt you if you let him. Feel sorry for him, because he's such a sorry little fuckwit. |
| 2011-04-18 18:47:41 |
Maryannes Story Secret Kisses |
Thank bp123. Loved the story and although I'm a 60 year old male (and happily married for well over 30 years) I think I'm also a closet lesbian (I'd love to join their little game - LOL) Well written and spaced, clear and well presented. Positive vote and 8/10 |
| 2011-04-18 18:39:27 |
Ranch Life Part 2 |
Anonymous 09:50:14. Sorry you think too short but unfortunately I have the attention span of a goldfish. Jus' for ya buddy, I'll rilly try hard to make it longer. |
| 2011-04-18 18:34:13 |
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No literary or redeeming feature at all. Internet predators disgust me. Your choice of subject April, but if this turns on one sexual predator and hurts one unwilling lady, you're partially to blame. |
| 2011-04-18 18:16:34 |
Revenge |
Daddy, This is a good story, written poorly, disjointed and with a singular lack of capital usage. However, a good story, and as such warranted a positive vote. Scope to be continued. My personal opinion is that stories involving rape and torture are not necessary, and this one is almost a guideline for some defective to use. You're a very good (bordering on GREAT) writer and with this one I feel disappointed. Did you write it ??? |
| 2011-04-18 04:34:46 |
Always and Forever |
Rabbit, I'm glad you said some of the white people because I loved it and I'm white people, and to me that's only surface covering. Blood is the same color.
Not all white people are Rednecks and surely someone who is suggesting I may be racist should at least know how to spell it. |
| 2011-04-18 04:31:37 |
Always and Forever |
Rabbit, I'm glad you said some of the white people because I loved it and I'm white people, and to me that's only surface covering. Blood is the same color. |
| 2011-04-18 04:28:46 |
Always and Forever |
Rabbit, I'm glad you said some of the white people because I loved it and I'm white people, and to me that's only surface covering. Blood is the same color. |
| 2011-04-18 04:24:48 |
Always and Forever Chap. 3 |
Well, ebunny, up to your usual standard and I think a little bit better, hence 8/10 for a damn good romantic and sexy read |
| 2011-04-17 23:56:51 |
My new Bride part 4 |
Sorry dav, this one got a bit weird. He got hostile because his lover wanted him to root his sister ???? WTF Sounds like the best of all possible worlds. He needs a shrink to sort him out . . .Still a good story, but come on, a hard cock doesn't have a conscience. The little head doesn't have a brain. |
| 2011-04-17 23:46:11 |
My new bride. Part 3 |
Still a great story, starting to get racey, LOVE IT. |
| 2011-04-17 19:24:23 |
Riding the Ponies II: Disappointments and Excitements |
WHY would a woman want a mutt when I'm here. Defies explanation. Well written story though. |
| 2011-04-17 19:18:20 |
Secret Cameras in the House |
Very good story. Follow up needed. Mummy needs 9 inches. |
| 2011-04-17 19:17:07 |
Secret Cameras in the House |
Very good story. Follow up needed. Mummy needs 9 inches. |
| 2011-04-17 17:54:46 |
my redhead sister...part 2! |
Hey Indie, BIG improvement in this story over the first. Still unaware of where to use capital letters (like the beginning of sentences) but, a lot better. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-17 17:50:34 |
my redhead sister |
Gave a positive for the story and paragraphing, then realized I couldn't also give a negative for the lousy grammar and spelling. Ohh well, still loved the story Indabutt. One day you'll get it right and become a really good writer. |
| 2011-04-17 17:33:02 |
Birthday sex |
Shaun, I TRIED to like this story but : No paragraphs, shocking spelling and an almost babyish use of the English language made it impossible. If you read some of the stories and look at the format of the best, you will see what I mean. |
| 2011-04-17 06:58:08 |
I Raped my mom |
Personal choice aside, a person has to be a sick deviant to even THINK this shit up. Get some help. |
| 2011-04-16 19:29:26 |
My Sister Suzie Q |
Sorry Billy, Shockingly poorly written, lousy spelling tongue and thong are two totally different things, poorly spaced,(no paragraphing) and even a retard knows fucking 8 year olds is a no-no. If you like writing, try again when you graduate from kindergarten. |
| 2011-04-16 03:21:13 |
Klaatu Barada Nikto |
Really good and daft story. Sourdough, you're a freakin' GENIUS !! 9.5/10 |
| 2011-04-16 02:13:42 |
Loving the 14-point spread |
I concur with previous comment - in all respects. |
| 2011-04-16 01:49:40 |
Our Loving Friendship |
Bloody good first effort, well spaced and well written and only one small fault. Damned if you can spell. (definitely NOT defiantly : apologize NOT apologies) and I could do with a bit more of the nitty gritty sex. However, that's nit-picking on what is otherwise a very good story. 7.5/10 |
| 2011-04-16 01:33:57 |
A Kanker gets her man (part 2) |
Hell changed my mind 8.5/10. This was a little bit better than Part 1 |
| 2011-04-16 00:43:56 |
Seven year itch 1, 2 reedited to due to complaints hope you enjoy |
A lovely story about a man who loves his wife enough to do anything for her happiness. Well written and nicely spaced therefore easy to read. 7.5/10 |
| 2011-04-15 23:55:26 |
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Slippery, I don't know how I feel about this story. Mixed feelings. You know 9 year old girl BUT fiction and not being taken advantage of. Told in your unique superlative style. I found it erotic but I don't know. 9/10 for your skill and obviously a positive vote. Well written, spaced etc. |
| 2011-04-15 20:59:33 |
Silence of the Pups |
Ruff, ruff, ruff. I can be a doggy too. |
| 2011-04-15 07:26:32 |
Tender Love II |
There have GOT to be more Chapters to this story. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-14 21:13:36 |
Steamy Shower |
I'm sorry, but this story jumps around too much, is totally unbelievable and is written like a drugged 14 year old would write. |
| 2011-04-14 18:49:16 |
Michelle's Sleeping Bag |
Follow up needed. Very well written sexy story. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-14 18:14:34 |
Ranch Life Part 1 |
You know what I love most about you Wantsomefun . . .NOTHING at all. But at least your a consistent little cocksucker - no valuable criticism . . .just slagging off. GR939 |
| 2011-04-14 18:08:15 |
Always and Forever Chap. 2 |
Nice, Young Lady. Wee bit romantic and wee bit sexy.Well written. 7.5/10 |
| 2011-04-14 18:01:51 |
Outback Bar |
Not bad Wilbur. . .an oldie but a goodie. |
| 2011-04-14 17:58:54 |
Full Circle - Chapter Two |
Hey Fix'm. This is one of those stories any thinking provert would love, so it's great to read and I also hope there's AT LEAST one more part to come. I see old wantsomefun is up to his usual mentally deficient ranting so that means it MUST be better than anything he could write. Maybe in future old Plug could end up with a harem of three generations of gorgeous redheads??? 8/10 |
| 2011-04-14 02:55:05 |
Tommy gets his slave |
True slavery, rape and wanton violence are the realm of mentally defective cretins. Anyone who glorifies or condones such actions is also a mentally defective cretin.I don't know how many black people there are in the world but they are ALL superior to you. BIGOT |
| 2011-04-14 02:50:30 |
Tommy gets his slave |
True slavery, rape and wanton violence are the realm of mentally defective cretins. Anyone who glorifies or condones such actions is also a mentally defective cretin. |
| 2011-04-14 02:34:52 |
The Siblings: chapter 4, The First Time |
Lovely, makes me regret the fact I was too scared to throw a few inches up my beautiful sister. |
| 2011-04-13 23:49:09 |
Happy Hour at the Happy Rabbit Irish Pub |
Hey WP, I know you'll start thinking I'm gay coz of all my compliments about your stories - BUT I AIN'T. This one is like most of yours, bloody marvellous. Well written, well spaced and REALISTIC fiction. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-13 18:52:32 |
Father/Daughter bonding |
Fandamtastic, No baby fucking, no rape, just good old erotic bonking well written although paragraphs would make it easier to read. 8/10 and plenty of scope to let Kendra have some as well |
| 2011-04-13 18:11:05 |
Waterfall |
Now THIS is my kind of story. Give the people some humanity before getting down to the fun bits. No hymen surprised me for some reason - Missy has obviously ridden the slippery sausage before. Can't but will have to wait for the next part to find out where this goes. |
| 2011-04-13 02:47:34 |
Las Vegas' Best Whore |
Okay, Okay THAT was funny |
| 2011-04-13 02:24:56 |
My deepest darkest secret part 1 |
Gave positive rating for your guts on writing such a story first time up but you could use paragraphing to make it easier to read. Apart from that I like your moxie little one. Eager to see a follow on. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-13 02:09:54 |
A Christmas day Mericle with my cousin Lauren |
Anon 15:42:56 OOps. Hoist on my own petard.Sorry and Anon 10:37:44 Not supposed to be believable. At the top it says FICTION |
| 2011-04-13 01:51:11 |
Melody at the waterfall |
Love at first sight - maybe. I grown NO I groan YES. Very enjoyable story. I'll be reading all your stories just to see how good you will become. 7/10 |
| 2011-04-12 22:04:57 |
Paladin, Paladin Where Do You Roam |
And yes, Paladin. It was me (last comment/submission). Stinking system logged me out AGAIN |
| 2011-04-12 06:15:31 |
Full Circle - Chapter One |
Got to be one of the best opening stories I have EVER read, and I have read thousands of books no tens of thousands. Absolutely fucking brilliant. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-12 05:39:10 |
A Christmas day Mericle with my cousin Lauren |
What is wrong with the bunnies that run this site that they can't fix it so that we can use punctuation. that mess should read DO NOT LET ME DOWN. LOL |
| 2011-04-12 05:36:22 |
A Christmas day Mericle with my cousin Lauren |
Almost exactly the same sentiment as as Anonymous 00:34:25 except I gave you the benefit of the doubt - and Hey - actually enjoyed the story. 7/10 and a positive vote. DON"T let me down with future stories or I'll sick my wife on you and believe me YOU DON'T WANT THAT - at all.Spell-check please. |
| 2011-04-11 18:01:36 |
A chance encounter |
Young BUT Not TOO YOUNG. No violence and a pleased young pussy. Well written story, well spaced and sexy as hell. Great work Druid Loved it. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-10 18:44:45 |
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As a straight fucky fuck writer you're not much cop . . .but as an erotic writer you are superb. Well written and well spaced and erotically loving more than jack off material. If you wrote a full length novel I would buy it. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-10 17:59:39 |
A Kanker gets her man |
Daft . . almost to the point of stupidity . .and HIGHLY entertaining. A little peek at alternative lunacy with a little bit of nookie. Not bad SCT Not bad at all. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-10 17:33:31 |
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Skimmed quickly over this story and decided that I didn't need another poorly written pedophile rant from a deviate who doesn't understand how the English language works. No redeeming value at all. |
| 2011-04-10 17:25:22 |
Sins of my Country Girl Sis & Me |
Another excellent little vignette from a sex mad Jackass. Loved it, and in Part 2 I foresee mummy catching you and deciding to sorrowfully replace daddy's accidental impotency with son's pounding fuck stick. Then, of course she could have a sister and a couple of Leah's freshman friends . . .the limitless possibilities. Anyway 9/10 for this soft non-furry opening. |
| 2011-04-10 01:42:23 |
The Siblings |
Sorry, this bloody system keeps logging me out Happy Rabbit. Just so you know I wrote the agreement with you. |
| 2011-04-10 00:47:58 |
Holly Chapter 1 |
Liked the story but not the male character. Don't like pigs who'll deliberately risk getting a young girl preggers against her will. (LOL)7/10 |
| 2011-04-10 00:38:41 |
Always and Forever |
Romantic and a little bit sexy. I'm a bit of a soppy bastard so I really enjoyed it. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-09 17:49:23 |
My Little Erotic Adv |
Mung, I gave this story a positive vote because I admire your attempt at writing in what is obviously not your primary language. I think you need a native English speaker to re write your stories before submitting them because they are very hard to read. |
| 2011-04-08 06:19:09 |
IT WAS AN ACCIDENT, HONEST! |
Funny, and one of the most enjoyable reads in a while. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-08 06:06:31 |
AUNTS IN HIS PANTS (MOM TOO!) |
I don't give a shit where it came from. Stories are for amusement or gratification and this gave me both. Well laid out and a pleasure to read. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-08 00:54:45 |
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This story made me feel GREAT. Well written. My compliments to the chef. A well prepared and tasty dish served at exactly the right temperature. |
| 2011-04-07 23:33:49 |
My God Mitchell Where Did You Get That? |
In addition to my last post, I can only reiterate that I loved the story and am more than happy to see some of the responses seem to support my theory of imaginative development. |
| 2011-04-07 23:29:42 |
My God Mitchell Where Did You Get That? |
@ to Nursie, (and I respect and love all nurses and their caring professionalism) while I agree that the vagina can expand for a baby it is a SIDEWAYS expansion (The womb holds the baby and the vagina is only a corridor to the outside world) and believing my wife that giving birth is more than somewhat painful, and believing Masters and Johnson and Kinsey that the vagina can accept up to 9 inches comfortably when used carefully, I can only assume that those with 12 or 13 inch dicks are embedded in the womb. Since the womb is only about the size of a small grapefruit normally ie when not preggers, these heroes must be 3 to 4 inches into the womb and that must be painful. |
| 2011-04-07 19:15:38 |
MOM WANTS TO BE MY CUM BUCKET! - CHAPTER 4 |
666, I have my own favourites and now there is a new one. GREAT story, well written and spaced and a pleasure to read. If there are no more stories I MAY have to have you hunted down and pissed on. Not my usual genre but sooo good. 10/10 |
| 2011-04-06 18:58:16 |
Emily's Turn: C02 |
I know this story is disgusting and wrong on so many levels, and I doubt I could do it to my daughter, even if she wasn't already grown up' BUT it is so fucking erotic. Kids can be such conniving, determined little beggars when they decide they want something, and men are so sex mad. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-06 06:32:52 |
The Rape of Mary |
Strange but very GOOD. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-05 20:30:40 |
My God Mitchell Where Did You Get That? |
Good story BUT : I don't know whether most people who post here are unable to use a ruler but you're NOT supposed to measure the length of your dick from 4 inches up your arse. Why is it every poster has a 10 - 12 inch dick. I have seven and get complaints about being too big. Can only guess that it's replacing no skill with super size. 8/10 for the story and the fiction. |
| 2011-04-05 20:01:14 |
Virgin Sacrifice |
Good writing. Don't we all want to go that way. Shagged to death so that we pass over in absolute bliss. Now where do I find the female version of Sh'daq who takes plain old men and screws them to death ??? 8/10 |
| 2011-04-05 19:48:33 |
A Rainy Day |
Rebel, Overall you did very well for a first story, so positive vote. Spacing and readability was not perfect but not bad. More paragraphing, I only picked up on the one spelling error ( hymen) and one minor distraction. (Raging hard on is the same as raging hard on - so the capital letter wasn't required in the middle of a sentence). OVERALL : Loved the story and as a writer of short erotic stories, you have potential. I want to see more. Preferably a sequel to this with Blake and Chyanne. |
| 2011-04-04 02:39:08 |
The new neighbors |
Sequel please. Very erotic. Well worth reading. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-04 02:32:06 |
Emily's Lesson |
This is a great story, well written, well laid out and beautifully descriptive. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-03 15:54:17 |
Dealing with my sisters disability |
A well written and beautiful story. Bad things happen and Trish was no doubt helped by knowing that even without legs her brother accepted her as a beautiful young woman. Personally my wife had to have a mastectomy after an accident and I still see her as a lovely and loving partner. Sure, I would have preferred that shit didn't happen but having one less breast doesn't change my love, or sexual feelings for her, and at 60 yrs of age she is still my sexy little minx. 10/10 for this story for the way you approached a sensitive subject. |
| 2011-04-02 16:10:41 |
My God Mitchell Where Did You Get That? |
Well spaced well written and intensely sexy. Great story and plenty of scope for sequels. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-02 16:03:46 |
Deep Sleeper Ch. 05 |
Have to agree with the general consensus , , great story and eagerly awaiting the next instalment. 9/10 |
| 2011-04-01 23:39:06 |
Take It Baby |
Good story. Wish chilldude would fuck off. This is not a dating agency for 2 inch soft dicks. Especially illiterate 2 inch soft dicks. Sorry about the re-submission. Stupid bloody program doesn't like quote marks. Sequel to this would be enjoyed/appreciated. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-01 23:32:24 |
Take It Baby |
Good story. Wish chilldude would fuck off. This is not a dating agency for 2" soft dicks. Especially illiterate 2" soft dicks. |
| 2011-04-01 23:25:40 |
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Definitely different - and really good. I can relate to Adrian, I would place myself as about 80% machine logic and 20% hormonal. Would love to see a sequel where Adrian gains a bit more humanity without resorting to trashy stuff like screwing her mother, eight of her friends and their sisters etc. Could definitely do with some paragraphing to make it easier to read. |
| 2011-04-01 22:58:40 |
Mommy, my dream, my lover (a dream come true) |
Ohh Paladin, You do place me in a quandary. Deciding which of your excellent stories is the best. |
| 2011-03-31 01:53:37 |
Father/Daughter bonding |
Great story and plenty of leeway for sequels. 8/10 |
| 2011-03-31 01:18:48 |
Finally Meeting |
All right, Good start. I'm interested. Hurry up with Part Two. 8/10 |
| 2011-03-29 00:30:01 |
Joe on the Road-Chapter II (Natasha) |
Paladin, my boy. You are rapidly becoming the best damn writer on this site. Fantastic, well thought out, interesting and sexy story. Absolutely fucking magic.10/10 |
| 2011-03-26 22:59:09 |
Clone Whores. |
GOT TO BE SEQUELLED. Great cross genre story. Loved it. 9/10 |
| 2011-03-26 03:48:53 |
Joe on the Road |
8/10 Loved the story and you are a master storyteller. |
| 2011-03-26 03:04:35 |
Tommy and His Mommy |
Don't know why quotation marks end up like that. Hope you get the meaning anyway. |
| 2011-03-26 03:02:44 |
Tommy and His Mommy |
Only someone as good as you, Paladin, could take a stupidly socially unacceptable "sin" and turn it into a beautiful sexy love story. |
| 2011-03-25 18:19:42 |
HONEY LET'S FUCK THE KIDS (All in the Family) |
Each story cements your position as one of the best writers on this site. Great story WP. |
| 2011-03-24 02:30:53 |
Worth the Wait |
Non consensual sex IS rape. Rapists are the scum of the earth. Death to rapists is not enough. Five years in the local pen as Bubba's bitch would be an appropriate start. |
| 2011-03-23 02:39:38 |
Trisha and her hot Mom |
Most negative comments seem to come from wannabees who probably couldn't write their own name let alone a story as good as this. Keep it up. |
| 2011-03-23 02:25:09 |
Wanking at my Moms Request |
A little bit off the beaten track . . .and really sexy. Good story and leaves room for a sequel. You've done some good stories but ,to me, this is the flagship. |
| 2011-03-23 00:24:08 |
Tammy's Sweet Tush |
Great tale. Glad one of the cute but less than perfectly beautiful got her share. LOL |
| 2011-03-22 23:59:36 |
Joe on the Road |
Paladin, The last anonymous post was mine. This bloody site logs out too soon. Bloody marvellous story (Your best and I've read them all) Keep it up PLEASE. |
| 2011-03-21 23:49:57 |
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Quite good story spoiled by being written by a teenage illiterate and blatantly untrue |
| 2011-03-21 23:41:35 |
limerick |
I see up top that your age is secret - obviously not over three. A Limerick has five lines and the first two and the last should rhyme, as should the third and fourth example :
A young fancy boy from Khartoum,
Took a lesbian up to his room,
And they argued all night,
As to who had the right,
To do what and with which and to whom,
This sort of thing belongs on XNXX - your's in a child's primer book. |
| 2011-03-18 19:03:15 |
Encounter at Denny's 3 |
One of the best short erotic stories I have read. GREAT work. |
| 2011-03-16 02:25:56 |
Poor Sarah Pt 1 |
This is a reaffirmation of my beliefs. That a large number of males are scum and should be in a rejected condom before being born. I'm a nearly 60 year old male and the actions of some make me ashamed of my gender. |
| 2011-03-13 19:39:01 |
Hunting Trip 1 |
Good start. Now for the rest of the story . . . . . . . |
| 2011-03-13 19:38:11 |
Hunting Trip 1 |
Good start. Now for the rest of the story >>>>> |
| 2011-03-13 19:08:07 |
Extreme Brother and Sister Love |
Not offended, just amused. This is THE most childish, poorly written and totally unrealistic bullshit I've ever read. Start slinging burgers and try again after you turn 10 years old. |
| 2011-03-13 07:04:53 |
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Great story, well written, Loved it |
| 2011-03-13 06:31:13 |
Callie's Milk |
Obviously a couple of fuckheads here who can't read the word "Fantasy" at the top of the page. . .Good story well written. Part 2 would be welcomed. |
| 2011-03-13 06:19:52 |
My younger Cousin Amanada |
Story may be has potential but spoiled by shit spelling, lousy grammar and crap use of text abbreviations and no layout (ie paragraphing). |
| 2011-03-06 16:47:10 |
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Sorry onehand. I gave this story a positive rating because the basic story idea is not explored very often and appeals to me, BUT, too short, not enough character development and not enough description of the sex. Superficial (although that may be a generation gap thing ie you're in twenties and I'm in my sixties) If this is your first effort I'd love to follow your development as a writer. |
| 2011-03-06 16:46:10 |
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Sorry onehand. I gave this story a positive rating because the basic story idea is not explored very often and appeals to me, BUT, too short, not enough character development and not enough description of the sex. Superficial (although that may be a generation gap thing ie you're in twenties and I'm in my sixties) If this is your first effort I'd love to follow your development as a writer. |
| 2011-02-22 07:27:00 |
Annie's Craving for Cum |
Good prelim but I prefer stories not serials. Well written though |
| 2011-02-22 04:39:42 |
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I LOVE Fucking preggies and this reminds me of my big bellied wife nearly thirty years ago. |
| 2011-02-22 04:27:15 |
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Love it...All the sexiness of the real (and illegal) thing without breaking the law or hurting an innocent. |
| 2011-02-14 22:06:48 |
She Was So Damned Cute! |
Enjoyed the story. Well written, but this is a sex site...more sex. Alexis - Get a big vibrating butt plug, stick it in your horny little pussy, turn it on and wait a couple of years. |
| 2011-02-14 21:46:39 |
Worshipping Miki |
Unbelievable story BUT GREAT. Loved it. Sex and Romance, but then I've always been a soppy bastard. Keep up the good work... |
| 2011-02-14 20:58:57 |
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Loved it. Good story, well written and very very sexy. |
| 2011-02-14 20:45:38 |
Elena |
Love this story. Dad seems too good to be true and Elena obviously likes meat in her sandwich. Exciting and well written. |
| 2011-02-14 20:16:36 |
Elena |
Love this story. Dad seems too good to be true and Elena obviously likes meat in her sandwich. Exciting and well written. |
| 2010-12-15 14:43:56 |
The Surgical Answer To Virginity |
Definitely sequel material. An interesting (and erotic) lateral view of small communities. Where can I get an easy M.D. degree LOL. Well written and I would love more. |
| 2010-11-12 17:34:38 |
Daughter's Accident |
Really well thought out story and totally believable. |
| 2010-11-12 00:04:28 |
Family Vacation 3 |
Incredibly erotic but not vulgar......brilliant. Part 4 Please. |
| 2010-11-11 23:27:22 |
Teresa Chapter 5 |
Great story, but c\'mon Nettles - give the lad a break |
| 2010-11-11 22:01:59 |
Sleeping Cocksucker-Chapter One |
Good start - more to cum (I Hope) LOL |
| 2010-11-10 03:45:17 |
Call Girl Chronicles 3 - Loving Daughter |
BRILLIANT - Crime without crime. Loved it and bloody near blew my wad...Great story |
| 2010-11-10 02:36:49 |
Cousin love- part 1 |
Patty. The beginning was great but the spelling and grammar let it down a bit. Having said this I loved it. Give us Part II and let\'s see if you\'ve got a good imagination. |