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| 2013-02-03 10:15:45 |
Pottercest - Mirror, Mirror… |
No offence but your portrayal of Ron is way way off. As is your portrayal of Harry as well. You seem to be a good writer but your characterisation could use some work. |
| 2013-01-20 01:02:11 |
Harry Potter and the Legacy of Hogwarts - Part 10 - Let the Games Begin Part 1 |
I asked on the forum as well but since you have not posted there in 3 years i thought i would ask here if you are open to story suggestions or challenges? Thanks. |
| 2012-10-04 00:52:30 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 11 |
Need more Ron and Hermione as their sex life would be even better than Harry's and Ginny's. In saying that though i certainly enjoyed reading this chapter. |
| 2012-09-26 06:29:47 |
Harry Potter and The Last Pheonix |
Since this is probably going to be a Harry/Hermione story i probably won't read it but i still commend you for writing a new story. |
| 2012-08-05 02:37:56 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 9 |
Nice. Its strange that Ginny feels so comfortable being naked in front of Ron but i am certainly not complaining. |
| 2012-07-04 13:31:59 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Without Ron Harry would have led a miserable existance as one of the reasons Hermione loves Ron is that only he can make her relax and have a good time and i suspect that is also one of the reasons Harry likes Ron as Ron can stop Harry taking things quite so seriously and can make Harry enjoy himself. Of course Ron is a really talented wizard on his own but for Hermione and Harry what they most value with Ron is his ability to make them feel better and happier. |
| 2012-07-04 12:37:56 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
That is true. Even in the final battle when he did not know where Ron and Hermione were he spent most of the time worrying about where they were. He could barely function when he did not have Ron and Hermione by his side. I do believe Harry loves Ginny but he would need Ron and Hermione as well (just not sexually). |
| 2012-07-04 11:21:46 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
That is a good point. Ron is not a cheater. He loves Hermione with ever fibre of his being. |
| 2012-07-04 11:00:33 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
The last comment was mine. I don't know why i was not logged in. |
| 2012-07-04 07:06:17 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
I think if Hermione cheated on Ron and she has sex with another girl as well (even if she is having sex with this girl with Ron's permission and Ron is watching) it is only fair if Ron gets to have sex with Luna as well. |
| 2012-07-03 21:53:13 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
I can only imagine what Hermione would offer Ron that is 'special' but i really like the idea of it. I could see Hermione offering to perhaps have a FMF threesome with him though it might also be something else. I think Hermione would really want/need Ron's forgiveness (plus Ron is a amazing shag and she would always cum when she is having sex with him). |
| 2012-07-03 15:25:58 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
I am personally hoping that Hermione does not like girls more as i would love to imagine Hermione wanting Ron more than she wants anyone in the world but also enjoying the idea of having sex with girls. However in my mind Ron will always be the main course and girls would be a side dish. |
| 2012-07-03 14:34:17 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
You could have Harry sleep with Luna shortly after discovering Ginny cheated on him. Perhaps when Harry is beaten up and has to return to the Burrow (maybe Grimmauld Place isn't safe or he needs to warn the Weasley's) Harry and Ginny can sort of make up while Ginny is nursing Harry back to health.
I am quite curious to see what you do with Ron and Hermione in this story, |
| 2012-07-03 10:39:51 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Sounds like a good idea to me and i am looking forward to reading it. Personally i don't imagine Ron would have to much of a problem with the idea of Hermione being bisexual as long as she wants him just as much (ideally more) than the other girls she is having sex with. |
| 2012-07-03 10:10:25 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Pity about the Hermione/Ron/Ginny idea but i understand why some people might not like the incest part of that idea. Still of your suggestions i (or variations of them) i quite like the idea of
Hermione/Ron/Luna
Hermione/Ron
Luna/Ginny/Hermione/Ron (even if there is no Ron/Ginny contact)
For some reason i have also always thought that a part of Harry would love to know what it feels like to have Ron's cock inside his arse. I think if Harry ever had any gay thoughts those thoughts would have most certainly been about Ron. |
| 2012-07-03 07:52:21 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Thats okay as you are the one writing the story. I am just somewhat excited at even the prospect of a Hermione/Ginny/Ron threesome as i think i have only ever seen that threesome in one other story (and i have seen thousands of Harry Potter stories). Also i like the idea of Ron being involved in a FMF threesome as that is also something that is very rare in Harry Potter fan fiction.
Anyway even if it doesn't happen thanks for a good first chapter. |
| 2012-07-02 23:54:40 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Also a small note (which isn't that important) but Ginny is supposed to have the Prewit body so while she is quite short she would have rather large breasts for her size. |
| 2012-07-02 23:51:45 |
Harry potter unfinished re-write |
Very nice start. I don't want to get to excited as it might not happen but i would love to see a Hermione/Ron/Ginny sex scene. |
| 2012-07-02 00:29:52 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 6 |
Interesting chapter. I am not a fan of the H/Hr elements in this chapter but i had no problem with the Ginny/Luna parts. |
| 2012-06-30 10:58:06 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 5 |
H/Hr makes no logical sense if you read the books. They are not attracted to one another and have no feelings for each other beyond friendship. |
| 2012-06-29 20:12:55 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 5 |
I was referring to the reviewer underneath me when i said that. |
| 2012-06-29 20:12:16 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 5 |
I imagine Hermione being a very sexual person when it comes to Ron and when it comes to Ron she is more capable of taking a few risks sexually. She would want Ron to see the side of her that she has locked away for years. |
| 2012-06-28 07:36:08 |
Harry potter chapter one |
Please please please don't write Harry/Hermione. Ron/Hermione all the way (perhaps other combinations as well but no Harry/Hermione). |
| 2012-06-26 07:30:55 |
Harry potter chapter one |
It is to hard to read as one big block of text. Also it is important to have proper punctuation as characters names need to be in capitals |
| 2012-06-23 18:50:54 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 4 |
Well it isn't a fact as Hermione got a lot of attention from Krum and McLaggen (not to mention Ron) but i do imagine Hermione being around 5'7 with B cup breasts while Ginny would be around 5'3 with C or perhaps D cup breasts. You are right though that in the books Ginny is supposed to be very attractive. Hermione is supposed to be attractive as well but Harry isn't personally attracted to her so he does not notice so much (and the books are from Harry's perspective). |
| 2012-06-21 05:27:50 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 4 |
To Harry at least Ginny is much better looking (at least in the books). I suspect Ron would have a completely different opinion though. |
| 2012-06-19 06:55:21 |
Harry Potter: As One War Ends Another Begins Part 4 |
Actually you are thinking of the movies. In the books Ginny is described as very good looking. Ginny is supposed to have a Prewitt build so she is quite short but very stocky as well (not fat) so Ginny would have much larger breasts than Hermione would (if you like that sort of thing). |
| 2011-12-28 08:34:57 |
Aunt Peg's Visit |
It problably won't happen but i would love to see a part 2 of this story as it really is a good read (plus i like how you didn't just jump straight into the sex like a lot of authors would as you seem to understand that a build up is important as well). |
| 2011-12-07 04:53:08 |
Forbiden fruits in the forbiden forest. |
As others have said paragraphs would make this story much easier to read. As for the content while i don't like Harry/Hermione i do like Ron/Hermione, Ron/Ginny and Ron/Harry so all the other pairings in this story didn't bother me.
Of course i am a huge Ron fan and almost as big a Ron/Hermione fan so i am quite happy to read any story as long as Ron plays a large part in it (along with Ron/Hermione as well). |
| 2011-11-19 21:30:23 |
Gift Unwrapping |
I really liked this story as not only was it well written but the main characters were genuinely likeable. So often with stories on this site the main characters are so unlikable that it is really hard to care if they get what they want. |
| 2011-10-21 12:57:59 |
Stephen Wells, Neighborhood PI - Part 2 |
Its a good story but i think the transition between innocent child and hormone controled teenager happened a bit to quickly for Stephen. It was only a week ago that he saw his first playboy and now he is having thoughts of fucking his aunt. The transition was to quick to be realistic. |
| 2011-10-14 04:35:45 |
School gloryhole |
Please write more stories as i have just read all of the ones you have written and without exception they are great. |
| 2011-10-06 03:23:38 |
Lessons from Allison part 2 |
Please keep writing stories like this. I love how the main characters are very likable and of course i thought the story was very hot as well. |
| 2011-09-26 04:20:13 |
Internet Encounter |
I loved this story. I didn't love the second chapter nearly as much but i really like the first chapter as a stand alone story. It is much better than the standard stories on this site where the main characters are just so unlikeable (and very arrogant). In this story both brother and sister seem like really nice people who i want to see end up together. I also loved how they got together in a much more imaginative way than something like the sister walking in on the brother masturbating (as that is way over done). |
| 2011-09-26 01:17:22 |
My Handsome Brother |
I think the build up was a bit short but other than that it was a good story. Its nice also having the main characters being likable as so often on this site the main characters are actually very hard to like, |
| 2011-09-22 07:17:54 |
Stripping Anonymously For My Mother |
I think this is easily your best story. I hope you continue writing stories such as this in the future as it is much more imaginative form of incest than most stories on this site. |
| 2011-09-08 01:59:13 |
Sketching My Sister |
Very nice story. The main character wasn't a complete arse (main charcaters on this site are often so unlikeable), the buildup was good and the emotions of the story also seemed realistic as well. |
| 2011-08-26 21:10:04 |
Harry Potter : complete Works |
You no doubt know how to write but i just can't like a Harry Potter story where Harry has a attraction to Hermione because it is just so out of character for him (as Hermione and Harry never had any sexual attraction to one another).
As i said you are clearly a good writer but i just don't quite agree with some of your characterisation. |
| 2011-08-24 18:35:30 |
Ron, Hermione and a tree house |
Its really nice to see someone writing Harry Potter fan fiction with the proper characterisation. Thankyou for putting in the effort and writing a very good story. |
| 2011-08-12 20:21:06 |
Mother With The Hots |
This is certainly a well written and hot story though i think i would have preferred it if the son wasn't initally interested in the mother and there was a long build up of the mother finding ways to first get her son interested in her and then her seducing him. |
| 2011-07-28 19:39:04 |
The Potter Wives |
If you can't keep the characters in character why bother writing Harry Potter fan fiction? |
| 2011-07-18 05:33:58 |
Hermione and Ron finally together |
I love this story. There is so many really bad Harry Potter fan fiction stories on this site where characterisation just goes right out the window. This story proves that a story can be extremely erotic and hot while remaining true to the characters.
Please please please keep writing more Ron/Hermione fan fiction. |
| 2011-07-15 19:58:49 |
Big Brothers are the best: Part I |
Its a little bit quick as Jack seemed to go from just being a brother to wanting to have sex with his little sister in only a matter of seconds. |
| 2011-07-15 03:45:15 |
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This is a good story that is well thought out and most of all has likable and believable characters (something you don't often find on this site).
My only slight criticism is that i think they went from being brother and sister to being lovers a bit to quickly. I would have preferred a slower build up rather than a quick one.
However other than that this is certainly one of my favourite stories on this site and i hope you know that you are certainly one of the best writers on this site as your stories are about characters as well as sex (whereas a lot of other stories are all sex and no characters). |
| 2011-07-08 20:28:55 |
Harry's Luck |
This story really isn't good. Not only does Harry feel WAY out of character but the idea that he has a 14 inch penis is ludicrous. |
| 2011-07-08 17:53:14 |
Harry Potter - Chapter 9 Pt1 |
For the most part i am enjoying this story and i also like how they have pretty much separated into canon pairings with Harry and Ginny together and Ron and Hermione together. As for Draco, Crabbe and Goyle hopefully they get what is coming to them.
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| 2011-06-04 05:07:15 |
My sister and I Pt. 1 |
A proper build up to the sex is very important in stories and this is one of those stories that i think does a good job of it isn't of just jumping right into the sex. Sometimes the anticipation can be just as good as the actual sex scenes.
The only minor complaint i have is that it is a bit hard to read due to lack of paragraphs. With better spacing it would make reading it a lot easier. |
| 2011-06-02 03:48:44 |
12 Grimmauld Place Harry Potter |
There are a few issues with this story but nothing that can't be fixed. The paragraphing is a bit off and sometimes makes it a bit hard to read and i personally feel there isn't enough dialogue between the characters but other than that it was well written.
As for the story itself i am a fan of canon relationships but i don't mind Ron/Ginny and even Ron/Harry if the author can make it believable. I'm not really a fan of Harry/Hermione but i just skimmed that part of the story and started reading more intently when Ron and Ginny came into the equation. |
| 2011-04-13 15:58:37 |
Harry Potter Adventures: Chapter 1 6th Year Begins |
I am sorry but the person who left a review at 14:55:55 is talking crap as anyone who has read the books can see there is no sexual tension what so ever between Harry and Hermione. |
| 2011-03-15 13:47:00 |
Harry Potter - Chapter 8 Pt 2 |
I really hope Harry never gets to be with Hermione in this story as he is a complete arse and he doesn't deserve her (plus i firmly believe that Ron and Hermione belong together).
I am hoping that whatever Ginny has planned it is suitably mean. I sort of suspect you are going to have Ron and Harry have sex but i guess i will have to wait and see to see if that prediction is accurate. |