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Comment |
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| 2013-03-07 09:59:32 |
My Saintly Wife Rehabilitates Reform School Sinners |
Cute! Almost as cute as widdle Willie. |
| 2013-01-19 10:06:45 |
In the Valley of the Amazons-2: Hosi in the U.S. of A. |
There will be at least one more part and this one has a lot of plot twists as well as some hot sex |
| 2013-01-12 11:27:58 |
GERALD TAMED |
Yes, so would I, but neither of us is submissive Gerald who is trained and conditioned to obey his wife's commands. Other than that I hope you enjoyed the story. |
| 2012-12-08 16:32:01 |
THE WILLING SLAVE 2: FAMILY AFFAIRS (Revised) |
I have two versions of this story here because it didn't go through the first time. Later the administrator corrected the problem, but not until I had posted this one. Confused? Just think how I feel. BUT, I'm glad everyone is enjoying the story! |
| 2012-12-08 16:29:43 |
THE WILLING SLAVE 2: FAMILY AFFAIRS |
When I first tried to post this story only the title appeared--no text. I reposted with the same title and (Revised), it posted perfectly. Later I checked and found that the administrator had fixed the problem with this one, so now I have two versions of the same story. Could be worse! |
| 2012-12-07 19:43:13 |
THE WILLING SLAVE 2: FAMILY AFFAIRS |
There is supposed to be a 21 page story here. I have no idea what happened but I will try to get it resolved. Sorry! |
| 2012-11-26 20:47:07 |
A cuckold, in his rightful place |
You need to reformat after uploading to eliminate the text wall that makes reading it difficult. Other than that it was OK. |
| 2012-07-06 20:09:11 |
THE CHANCE ENCOUNTER-6: MICHAEL'S STORY |
OK, here's what happened--I had two choices for a title--the chance encounter and the close encounter. In what had to be a senior moment I got confused and wrote the last two as the close encounter. worse, this one should be number 7, not number six. If you want to read all of them click on my screen name and you'll see all my stories. Sorry for the confusion. I just hope you enjoy. |
| 2012-06-21 20:01:17 |
THE CHANCE ENCOUNTER-1: I BECOME A SLAVE |
glad it made you cum--I hate to tell you how many times it made me cum while I was writing it. |
| 2012-05-18 23:40:29 |
THE SECOND CHANCE-2: SECOND CHANCE AT LOVE |
Interesting comments, folks, BUT--you're all wrong. Remember, then George died the mother died but the two kids lived! Hard to bring them back if they are already alive. I'm thinking of a third part and I may do it if I can string together enough good ideas. |
| 2012-04-29 16:59:07 |
THE SECOND CHANCE: VIOLET EYES |
When I wrote the story I viewed George's return as a second chance at life, thus the title. What's really important is that people enjoy it. |
| 2011-12-12 17:23:49 |
Kelsey part 2 |
I live in North Carolina. As someone noted in part one the age of consent is 16 which kind of destroys the whole idea of the story. Cute idea, though. |
| 2011-11-05 22:23:25 |
Jakob and Jessie: The Next Generation-Part 2 |
Sorry about the paragraphs. They didn't seem so long when I was writing. There will be one more installment and in this one they tell their parents. Should be fun. |
| 2011-08-25 21:01:25 |
Jakob and Jessie, Part 5 |
There were 3 versions of this story because I had a lot of trouble uploading. The site has deleted two at my request so no more confusion. I don't know how much longer I can sustain this series. I'm running out of new ideas. Any suggestions? |
| 2011-08-19 20:32:31 |
Fun with Nancy |
First of all I swear that this story is 100% true. Nancy loved sex and couldn't say no. Other than the first time when I didn't cum in her I never had unprotected sex with her until she told me she was 2-3 months pregnant, and that I was definitely NOT the father. My one regret is that I didn't have the balls to stick with her, but in the 60's teachers could be fired for just about any reason, even one not related to work. |
| 2011-08-03 20:17:40 |
my first time with a man |
so what happened to you--transexual or crossdresser? |
| 2011-08-03 20:04:10 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 9 |
the answer to your concerns is to save your work to a flash drive that you keep in your pocket. Nothing will be left on the computer unless your company has a program that records keystrokes, in which case you'd already be screwed. You can get a copy of Word that's a few years old pretty cheaply. that's what I did. Great story, BTW |
| 2011-08-02 19:42:13 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 8 |
Sorry my comment is so hard to read. My keyboard sucks and I keep forgetting how this site butchers quotation marks. |
| 2011-08-02 19:40:33 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 8 |
This is a great series,always a + ote, but you misuse of words is comical at times. You are = you're, not "your" which is possessive. also, "shear pleasure?" shears are scissors. You mean "sheer." Just a couple of many throughout the story. It would be great if you would proofread. I use Word and it usually cues me that a word is wrong. |
| 2011-07-26 15:11:31 |
The potential client |
The quotesappear as question marks on the version you see when you log in. On here, reading it, it was fine. this was a really dynamic and forceful story. Well done |
| 2011-07-25 14:48:32 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 1 THE RIDE (revised) |
The story line is excellent but you have so many typos, misspellings, wrong words--like weather when you meant whether and breaks when you meant brakes. Proofreading would have helped and spacing as mentioned by the others. I'm looking forward to the other parts. |
| 2011-07-19 20:30:42 |
I Give My Niece A Ride 2;A Day At The Beach |
Extremely well done, one of my favorites |
| 2011-07-18 15:18:25 |
JAKOB and JESSIE: THE IMPROBABLE COUPLE |
Thanks for all the comments. In response, as a teacher and principal I supervised many student overnights. Seniors only a few weeks from graduation are not treated like kids. When I ran eighth grade trips we did chck rooms and monitor the hallways. We did not do that for seniors. By now everyone should know that there are two sequels and there will be at least one more. |
| 2011-07-18 15:11:14 |
My Fantasy - Fucking Katie |
For anyone interested--Chapter 1 is true. There really is a Katie who, for some reason, does like me a lot and would have all kinds of sex with me, a beat up 66 yo. We did have the phone sex described briefly here and it was much more fun than I could have imagined. I'm lucky to have Katie in my life. |
| 2011-05-25 21:41:28 |
The Oldman Down the Road |
As Yogi Berra once said, "It was deja vu all over again. I read the same story months ago on another site. If it is yours, great; if not--not great. |
| 2011-05-24 20:40:12 |
The Nerd-A New Beginning-Part 1 |
I don't see the Nerd headed into BDSM. personally, I find those practices repugnant. I agree with the comment about the Batman series. It does stink. I wrote it to see just how bad a story could be and still get positive reviews. I found out. there will be some more Nerd episodes--how many, what direction--I don't know yet. Sr. Longo |
| 2011-05-16 13:11:59 |
The Nerd -Epilog |
Did Ryan become George or did Ryan become Rita? Good question--you decide. |
| 2011-05-15 23:51:02 |
Laurie shares her daughter with me |
Didn't your English teachers ever show you quotation marks or teach you about changing tenses in the middle of a story? It was really disconcerting reading what was otherwise an excellent story with all these errors. Try proofreading at least once before submitting. |
| 2011-05-15 23:50:48 |
Laurie shares her daughter with me |
Didn't your English teachers ever show you quotation marks or teach you about changing tenses in the middle of a story? It was really disconcerting reading what was otherwise an excellent story with all these errors. Try proofreading at least once before submitting. |
| 2011-05-15 17:21:29 |
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Sorry to hear you're not getting any. Neither am I, and my wife is right here,not serving our country. Beautiful story and extremely well written, as usual. |
| 2011-05-15 17:18:52 |
The Nerd - 5 |
I ended it because I was havnig trouble coming up with ideas to continue. HOWEVER, there will be one more chapter in which the Nerd gets more than he planned for. |
| 2011-05-11 16:15:48 |
Kidnapped |
Good story but sloppily written. You have a lot of commas where there should be none. Also, you can't push a finger into a whole. Proofreading and editing would improve your writing immensely. |
| 2011-05-05 18:05:37 |
The Nerd-Part 2 |
Thanks for the feedback. I've enjoyed writing this one. there will be more parts--at least two. I'm looking forward to a computer orgasm. |
| 2011-04-10 21:54:30 |
Sarah, My Best Friend - Chapter 1 |
Good story and quite well written but some of your dialog is unreal. Do people really say stuff like "...cum on my perky little tits?" Not in my exprience. Other than that, pretty good. |
| 2011-04-07 21:50:51 |
Kelli 1971 |
Very nicely done;extremely realistic and believable. I'd like to see a part 2. |
| 2011-03-19 20:05:14 |
Convient Cumming With Sister |
I have to agree with one of the commenters--great story, not great writing. It cries out for proofreading. I write for this site and spend at least 75% proofreading and editing. |
| 2011-03-17 22:53:03 |
Batman's Darker Side - 4 |
That's why it's Batman's DARKER Side. But all ends well in part 5--coming soon |
| 2011-03-12 10:37:57 |
Batman's Darker Side-1 |
Yes indeed-working on part 2 now. This is the most fun I've had since I learned about sex. |
| 2011-03-06 19:49:28 |
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I'm glad this was described as a fantasy. If the bullies ever beat up a principal in real life they'd be in jail in an instant. But, putting that aside, it showed a lot of imagination and was well written. |
| 2011-03-04 23:40:28 |
A little Surprise |
I have several stories on this site and I'm glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. First, proofread your work several times. I usually spend 25% writing and 75% editting. Also, after uploading it's a good idea to edit again--to put back the spacing that was lost in the upload. It makes the story much easier and enjoyable to read. Good luck. |
| 2010-12-11 21:52:25 |
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I have to agree with the other commenter--it makes no sense whatsoever. |
| 2010-11-17 12:55:33 |
Just a Dream |
Reminds me of soft core TV porn. Also, too wordy. |
| 2010-11-08 12:23:16 |
My One and Only |
Re: the prior comment--I didn\'t know if she was a virgin or not. I only know there was no hymen. It could have been sex with another guy, masturbating with a hairbrush, or anything. I only know there was no resistance when I first penetrated her. |
| 2010-11-06 21:18:04 |
Amish Devil\'s Ohio |
Actually, I have two stories posted now. One should not make assumptions. |
| 2010-11-05 20:04:13 |
Amish Devil\'s Ohio |
Interesting--you changed styles completely in midstream. Like you would do if you were copying text and changing it as you went. then when you picked up later on forgot what you were doing the first time. Also, did you never hear about PROOFREADING? There are so many typos here it\'s ridiculous. |
| 2010-11-05 17:55:41 |
My One and Only |
The story had paragraphs when I wrote it. Apparently when I cut/pasted to upload that disappeared. I\'ll see if i can edit. |
| 2010-10-25 21:08:03 |
Perfect Siblings |
Extremely well written. What some readers don\'t want to understand is the impact of peer pressureand the media on young women. One look at a porn video or Paris Hilton and they all want to shave. Why do 10 year olds wear bras? Because they need to? No-its because they don\'t want to be considered weird. |