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| 2013-01-28 10:43:33 |
Mantis V - Birth |
Part six is VERY nearly completed. It's going really well. I have to work today but even so, I will very likely post it tonight, or maybe tomorrow. I think it will be the best one yet, with the most sex and I hope you will all like it.
Here is a small excerpt
Yesterday I saw nothing, but today I thought I saw a mantis a little bit ago. I'm wearing my parachute rig over just the skydiving top that I bought. I tried wearing just the rig, but this is more comfortable and I'm sure it'll be warmer at altitude. We removed the reserve chute from the rig to save weight. It wouldn't be legal to jump without a reserve normally but since I'm hoping that the mantids land me safely, the whole rig is really my reserve. I'm also wearing the helmet, partly for protection, but also because it now has a face mask and microphone so I can dictate in flight.
Yes. I do see a mantid now. In fact, I see a few! This could be it! I'm excited and scared. I don't really know what to do to entice the fema |
| 2013-01-26 12:06:31 |
Mantis V - Birth |
I should note that you should read the first four parts which I wrote nearly ayear ago. |
| 2013-01-26 06:43:50 |
Finding her way. |
Some very long sentences (a fault of my own stories too). Too many unecessary carriage returns spoil the formatting. Otherwise a sweet little story and I hope to read more about them. Yes, a very nice little story
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| 2013-01-15 06:45:55 |
My Sex Life 2 |
Liking it. Well written. |
| 2012-12-13 09:39:00 |
I Saw My Sister Stripping And It Turned Me On |
Originally posted by Dark_Brother on July 30, 2011. |
| 2012-11-20 04:43:24 |
Mistress of the Moon |
This is a great story. I have to go and read more of your stuff!
I love this story! |
| 2012-10-02 10:35:48 |
Roomies |
I gave the story a positive rating and I hope you will write more, BUT:
1. Writing in the past tense generally will make a more readable story, as "She ran to her room," rather than "She runs to her room."
2. There are many errors in capitalization, many of your sentences begin with a lower case letter. Also, the first word after a bit of dialogue should not be capitalized, unless it is a proper noun. ("No," he said. instead of "No," He says.)
3. Every paragraph (which can even be a single word) should be followed by a blank line. Your line feeds seem to be pretty much random, with several paragraphs with no separation, followed by random breaks sometimes of more than one line.
Again, I hope you will write more.
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| 2012-07-11 10:41:07 |
Leah's Naked Adventures - Where Are They Now? |
I you have not read "Leah's Naked Adventures," this entire piece will be pretty meaningless. |
| 2012-06-30 00:59:47 |
Cheerleader Leah |
It can be found on the asstr site The Kristen Archives where it appeared first in Directory 42. At about the same time I posted it to a site that was called catsgarden, where it appeared on Feb 5, 2006. The catsgarden site still exists but under a different name.
When I first posted it on this site I didn't understand the workings of this site and didn't realize I would be unable to easily edit it so it appeared without any story codes.
I really don't mind someone lifting it all that much as it isn't like I'm collecting royalties or anything and, yes, I realize the improbability factor. It is a fantasy. |
| 2012-03-20 21:51:24 |
Leah's Naked Adventures - Part 6 |
Thank you for the compliments.
Like I said, the series is done, but I do have other things I want to write about these characters. Don't look for "Part 7" however. Other stories will be more stand alone. |
| 2012-03-17 05:21:39 |
John and Leah; Roommates or more? |
Definitely good enough to continue. |
| 2012-03-04 07:45:03 |
Leah's Naked Adventures - Part Four |
At long last I have published part 5 and I am working on part 6, which my be the last part in this series, though I may write more stories about Leah, Bobby, Karen and Sarah. |
| 2012-02-13 03:59:22 |
Mantis IV |
TRINITYBLUE, even though I finished this part with "The end?" I will most likely write more. It probably will not be before next weekend however. |
| 2012-02-12 17:33:24 |
Mantis III |
Despite what I thought was carefull proofreading, I have spotted at least one typo, sorry. I should also note that to understand this, you should read Mantis I and Mantis II. |
| 2012-02-12 17:27:21 |
Mantis II |
Mantis III has been published. Not a lot of sex in it, sorry. More will come in Mantis IV. I hope you enjoy it and it answers some of the questions. I will consider adding a native girl's story to the mix. |
| 2012-01-29 16:00:37 |
Mantis I |
I know this is much shorter than my usual stories, but then most of them are too long anyway. Mantis II is actaully finished but I'm proofreading it at least one more time before posting it. |
| 2011-12-26 08:31:57 |
Leah's Self Bondage in the Woods |
This story is mostly fantasy, as something I fantasized about doing. I did do some things that were similar to this but I had to embellish to make it less mundane.
Part one of "Leah's Naked Adventurews" is very near autobiographical. after part one that series becomes fantasy as well.
I am past some computer problems and am actively working on "Eva and Me." I may end up publishing part six of "Adventures" before part five as I know where I want to go there, while I'm hung up on part five. |
| 2011-12-13 09:46:44 |
The Tutor and the Nymph |
Your best story yet.
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| 2011-12-11 19:19:04 |
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Very beautiful story.
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| 2011-07-31 19:12:21 |
I found my sister stripping. |
I liked it very much. Well done.
So many more possibilities thuogh. Hope you keep writing. |
| 2010-10-28 11:19:15 |
Leah's Naked Adventures - Part Four |
Parts two and three can most easily be found by looking at my profile. |
| 2010-09-28 11:39:10 |
Pool Partying |
Impeccable style, fabulous story. |