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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2010-12-19 04:28:58 |
a night in the woods |
I agree witth above comments. But write some more and you'll improve! |
| 2010-12-19 04:26:43 |
a night in the woods |
I agree - grammar and spelling are dreadful! Also use paragraphs. Good potential but out there a bit! Try again - practise makes . . . better!
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| 2010-11-13 04:32:03 |
Leeza The Teaser |
Thanks for the comments so far - see Leeza the Teaser 2 ! |
| 2010-11-05 08:34:13 |
Amish Devil\'s Ohio |
You REALLY need education about use of grammar, spelling, etc. It\'s like you can\'t speak english or something? Spoils a reader\'s enjoyment of what is probably a good story. My 4 yr old has better command of English! |
| 2010-11-05 08:33:35 |
Amish Devil\'s Ohio |
You REALLY need education about use of grammar, spelling, etc. It\'s like you can\'t speak english or something? Spoils a reader\'s enjoyment of what is probably a good story. My 4 yr old has better command of English! |
| 2010-11-03 09:15:38 |
Bad dog |
Makes me wanna get a BIG dog again! |
| 2010-11-02 04:26:02 |
The Airport |
Oh Yeah! Let\'s get to using the equipment in the dungeon! |
| 2010-11-02 04:24:10 |
The Airport |
Yeah! Let\'s get to the equipment of torture and pleasure! |
| 2010-11-02 04:23:26 |
The Airport |
Yeah! Let\'s get to the equipment of torture and pleasure! |