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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2013-05-02 16:59:29 |
The Ten of Them. Chapter 25 |
While I am enjoying this series, I personally feel there needs to be a bit more drama involved. I was thinking maybe JJ gets severely injured either protecting his family, or by an act of revenge against him. Not killing him, just severely injuring him. Maybe something that can bring the newer members of the family closer to him. Just my opinion. |
| 2013-03-25 17:01:45 |
First time using the internet doesn't go so well for her |
@Anon
Thank you. Unfortunately, I am not good with increasing the length of these stories without coming up with useless crap that makes no sense.
Brett is basically her father, just not biologically. He takes care of her as a father would, and as such, sees her as both, sister and daughter. |
| 2013-03-25 17:00:02 |
First time using the internet doesn't go so well for her |
D'oh...I apologize for the Bold issue. I really hate Xnxx's system..it seems to screw up even when I know I did it right. |
| 2013-03-25 09:49:09 |
Kelly Ripa Wants To Be On Top |
This was pretty decent of a story. Had nice amounts of sex, but was still dramatic. |
| 2012-05-12 08:52:48 |
A Not-So-Simple Life: Part 4 |
Somestory,
As much as I hate you for cutting off 3ES, and knowing you most likely won't continue it, I have to say, you have amazing writing skills. The atmosphere of this story reminds me of 3ES in so many ways! Please, for the love of god, finish this series,don't cut if short, like 3ES, and see 3ES through once this is complete.
Also, get rid of Lexi, please. If I was Tucker, I'd of most likely killed her black mailing ass. |
| 2012-04-20 09:15:45 |
The Preacher's Daughter |
So she was punished for having her period? Or what? Either way, horrible story. Please, DON'T continue. |
| 2012-04-20 09:04:01 |
A Not-So-Simple Life: Part 2 |
@Anon last time I checked, I have the account here, you don't. I actually have written a few stories. If I had enough writing talent, I'd of took over writing 3ES. |
| 2012-04-20 09:02:44 |
3 Evil Sister- Part 8 |
Aside from it being a fanfic, it's hardly stealing. He's given proper notice that it's not his story. Personally, he has every right to continue this story since SomeLoser isn't going to. |
| 2012-04-19 15:26:55 |
A Not-So-Simple Life: Part 2 |
Don't get your hopes up. This moron starts series, and then stops because he gets bored. It's an endless circle. |
| 2012-04-17 07:52:17 |
I Love massaging women |
This is more like a fantasy, and something too short to be considered a story. |
| 2012-04-17 07:51:06 |
Brittney: Chap. 1-The Problem |
ASC,
I really enjoyed this, and am looking forward to the next part. Great build-up you got going. |
| 2012-04-17 07:37:24 |
Alice in Brotherland: Part 2 |
There's no way in hell you're 18! First off, your writing style could use some work, and a spell check would help you greatly. All in all, I do like this series, and hope you continue. |
| 2012-03-13 23:47:22 |
My Best Friend |
Ten inches? That's gotta be made up. |
| 2012-03-13 23:45:23 |
Let's have some fun, Part One! |
I'm not sure if you're aware, but there is a word limit on stories, and yours is way too short. For your first story, it's not bad, just needs to be lengthy. As Anon said, stick to one view, either first or third. |
| 2012-03-07 01:21:53 |
An Apocalypse Love Affair |
Even though this is just a story, I still find myself thinking "God damnit" at Jackie being taken. I really enjoy this story, and look forward to part II. Good job. |
| 2012-03-06 06:58:31 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 6 |
LOL, that really just made my morning. You think I'm jealous of his stories? Damn you're funny! I could give a fuck less! I know his stories are better, and it doesn't bother me at all. Funny thing is, all of you are asking for proof, yet, you don't seem to be intelligent enough to go look for it yourselves. |
| 2012-03-05 16:18:27 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 6 |
@Anon FYI, my IQ far exceeds yours, dipshit. Fact of the matter is, If I was writing these stories, I'd have respect for my readers, and would get stories posted in a decent time length. I have found several versions of this story on various other sites, some that were on there before they were posted here. SS is a fraud, which is why it's taking him so long to post, he's waiting for the real writer of the story to publish part 7 so he can rip it and claim it as his own.
More proof of this is, when you're a writer, you get deep into your work. You'd work on your story constantly, wanting to improve it and get it to your audience in a decent time, and I should know, I've been writing books for several years now. SS is nothing more than a wannabe writer. |
| 2012-03-05 03:08:37 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 6 |
Lol @ Somestory. You're that much of a retard you can't at least hide your password better? Since my password is a 'random' password, I sent it to my email so I can copy and paste. You honestly expect us to believe your sister erased it, and no you have no way to get back in your account?
The truth is, these AREN'T your stories. I did a search on Google, and came across these same stories on other sites, posted by SOMEONE ELSE! The reason you haven't posted a new story is because the person you're ripping them from hasn't posted one. You low life fuckturd. If you're going to rip off someone's story, at least give them credit for the theft.
I've lost all my respect for you. You can go die now. |
| 2012-03-01 20:39:08 |
A father's ultimate sacrifice |
Lol, just a story bro. =P |
| 2012-02-16 21:22:21 |
Death while on duty |
@Anon
I actually have another story in mind that is based off the same concept. I'll see what I can come up with. |
| 2012-02-16 20:02:38 |
Death while on duty |
Thank you, Anon. I did my best. |
| 2012-02-06 12:05:08 |
Wife's betrayal of a solider |
Thanks, both of you. I know my stories are short, and kinda suck, but I enjoy writing. I was thinking of making a part two, and have it be from Shayna's point of view. |
| 2012-02-06 07:07:25 |
A Planned Rape Turned Into Love. |
Wasn't even worth my read. Horrible grammar, horrible story. Please stick with writing kiddy books. |
| 2012-01-25 02:20:43 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 4 |
While it did take you a while to post this, it seems rushed. I noticed a few errors that would've been seen if you proofread it. Please start releasing these faster if possible. |
| 2012-01-14 10:08:02 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 4 |
Maybe you could have him go back to the house, where Izzy, Ashley, and Riley want max sexually. Wouldn't be bad of a foursome. But, I'm also temped to keep up the drama. Maybe they can treat him like shit again after their big sexcapade, and Max loses it completely. |
| 2011-12-06 15:47:10 |
Meeting Alyssa |
@2 Anon comment
For the most part, almost everything in this story happened. If I did make a part two, all of that would be made up. I'll start working on it later and see what I come up with. Thanks, everyone. |
| 2011-12-06 11:35:09 |
Meeting Alyssa |
*Sigh* I apologize for the errors with the italics. |
| 2011-11-16 17:17:45 |
Sleeping with Jorja (Part1) |
I liked the story, and I vote that you continue. However, you may want to change the title to "Raping Jorja", as sleeping with sounds like she consented. |
| 2011-10-16 03:13:46 |
Girls at the beach |
[i]I would proof read this, because you have quite a few grammar errors, which makes it more difficult to masturbate to.[/i] |
| 2011-09-21 05:44:49 |
Tori, the highschool cumslut |
Good story, but a few things. For people talking, use quotes, not apostrophes. Why is mind control a tag? At the start of "David had just put his books in his locker", and all the way down, there needs to be a break after one of the periods, as it looks like just one big paragraph. The more cluttered it is, the less good it looks. |
| 2011-09-21 05:40:27 |
Amber, Fucked Like An Animal 2 - The second rape |
I'm glad the third story hasn't been posted yet, as these just anger me. I understand her friend didn't know he raped her, but, still...she just left her there like "fuck you, family comes first!" Now, before people bash me for what I'm about to say, I understand how frightening it can be when this happens, but she should've hit or kicked him. Scratch his face, kick him in the balls, or something. |
| 2011-09-21 05:37:57 |
Amber, Fucked Like An Animal |
<i>I have to admit, I did get off to this story, but, at the same time, I'm disgusted. A true story such as this...I'm almost ashamed your friend actually let you post it.</i> |