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Story title |
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| 2010-08-08 21:57:22 |
The Kidnapping of Baby |
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. This story looks like it can be a fun read. After a month of her treatment, Baby may have gotten bred and be with baby. |
| 2010-08-16 05:26:17 |
Crusade of Terror 1 |
I loved it. I hope there is more to come. Perhaps you could have one of the rags watch as you fuck his bitch. Let the rags die together too. Fuck the rags and raglovers that berate your efforts. |
| 2010-08-18 05:26:26 |
Getting my revenge |
If you writer a follow-up, how about some details of the girls age and why she's so submissive. It would be interesting to see the husband go to jail for marrying an underaged girl leaving her with all his money and property. Just an idea. |
| 2010-08-24 23:00:55 |
Debt Collector Pt 4 |
This has been an excellent series thus far. I look forward to the continued tale of Jill, Mandy, the brother, and moste importantly, the debtor father's reaction. The final resolution should be great. |
| 2010-08-25 02:15:34 |
Girls night out gone wrong! Part 2 |
It was a nice story. I hope there is more. What happens when she finally gets home filled with cum? What about the other girls? I look forward to the follow-up. |
| 2010-08-27 03:45:34 |
Good little girl |
I certainly hope there is a part II. However, I too wish you would break your story into paragraphs. Try double spacing between them and they should be separated when you stories are published. |
| 2010-08-27 21:14:52 |
The neighbor's daughter |
Isn't it amazing how an anonyous critic can bad-mouth a work of fantasy. I always wodner how many of those critics have ever written anything. I liked your story and look forward to part 2. |
| 2010-08-30 04:06:12 |
Raping a cheerleader slut |
Isn't it amazing how many readers don't understand the term "fiction?" |
| 2010-09-08 03:30:07 |
Amber, Fucked Like An Animal |
Excellent story! My first wife claimed to have lost her cherry to a rapist who then pissed in her pussy. In later years, she admitted she liked be pissed in. Perhaps your friend will too. |
| 2010-09-25 06:57:34 |
Trucker's Joy |
If you're so upset about the "shitty stor(ies)" on this site, I suggest you find a site more to your liking. A "Fucking perv?" Maybe so, but you're here reading all the perverted shitty stoies. I never concern myself about 'anonymous' comments. Have a wonderful day reading your Little Golden Books. |
| 2010-09-29 03:33:52 |
Megans night |
I had to stop reading this. Have you ever heard of a paragraph? How about punctuation. Almost all writing xt programs have a spell check included. Next time, please try to pretend you paid a modicum of attention in high school English class. |
| 2010-10-26 01:54:03 |
Virgin Drunk Rape |
I agree with the last reviewer. A bit of editing and spell checking would have greatly increased my enjoyment of this story. Far too many educators today fail to be teachers. This writer seems to be one of the many victims of our screwed up educational system in America. |
| 2010-12-23 22:03:32 |
Other Men's Wifes - His Sluts - Chapter 7 |
I have enjoyed this series very much. I too would like to see a bit more detail during the sex scenes. I hope there are several more chapters in this series. |
| 2010-12-23 22:06:31 |
Other Men's Wifes - His Sluts - Chapter 7 |
I hope this isn't a duplicate. I have enjoyed this series, but I too would like to see a bit more detail in the sex scenes. I hope there are several more chapters coming. |
| 2010-12-23 22:09:29 |
Other Men's Wifes - His Sluts - Chapter 7 |
I hope this isn't a duplicate. I have enjoyed this series, but I too would like to see a bit more detail in the sex scenes. I hope there are several more chapters coming. |
| 2010-12-28 05:02:26 |
The Wife Next Door ch. 5-Angela & Lisa part 2 |
This was another excellent series of stories. Like The Professor's Daughter, this series also begs for another chapter. Afterall, both story lines have a young girl about to come of age and in need of a gentle cherry popping. Keep up the good work. |
| 2010-12-31 05:28:19 |
Jack and Jill - A Naughty Nursery Rhyme |
I loved your take on this old story. Thanks and keep up your excellent work. |
| 2011-01-01 17:00:52 |
Breaking and Entering & Two Sisters Home Alone |
I liked it in spite of a few errors. It was sometimes hard to follow who was doing what to whom. Also the girls went from being told to strip to having their tits sucked and pussies fingered. I agree with the need for more detail. You seem to have the talent for writing porn. I am sure you will improve with practice. |
| 2011-01-06 21:29:50 |
Moby’s Big Dick & the Little Girl Who Loves It |
I agree. You have written a fun and erotic tale centered around a classic story. Many have frequently refered to Moby's dick of lore with envy. Good job! |
| 2011-01-07 11:04:10 |
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You have written a good story that needs to be finished. |
| 2011-02-18 03:59:50 |
Ugly duckling |
I loved your story. It should remind all of us that even those less beautiful and worthy of tenderness and love. Well done. |
| 2011-03-30 03:51:11 |
Missy Learns |
I thought it was a nice story, but needed a bit of explaination regarding the whereabouts of the mother. More details of the sex would have been nice too. |
| 2011-03-31 03:53:21 |
Kaylee's Ordeal |
Good story. I hope there is more. Jan needs to share the experience of Mr. Peters' playroom with her friend at his hand. |
| 2011-04-06 02:19:35 |
The Immortal Kiss |
An excellent tale. I hope there are more. |
| 2011-06-01 08:43:33 |
A Man and His Pets |
I usually don't respond to anonymous comments, but I felt the need to make an exception this time. The commenter has absoultely no idea what he is talking about. A Man and HIs Pets is solely my work and involves no plagiarism what so ever. This story may however have seen on another site. It has been posted elsewhere. |
| 2011-06-01 08:46:42 |
A Man and His Pets |
You may also be refering to Buying the Family Next Door. It has a similar theme and does involve extortion. Try comparing these two works by clicking on my name and looking at both stories. I await your appology. |
| 2011-06-02 00:53:04 |
A Man and His Pets |
If you would only pay attention. I wrote both A Man and His Pets and Buying the Family Next Door. Therefore, it is impossible for me to have stolen a story idea. Both were mine in the first place. I think the stories are quite different. The reader may see some similarities because I used some of the same character types. Now take a hike! |
| 2011-06-02 22:35:41 |
Confessions |
Nice story. Too bad it seemed too close to real life in the Catholic Church. |
| 2011-06-03 15:57:30 |
The Hidden Cabin |
I found your story entertaining albeit too short. You cut if off much too soon. BTW, I know what fantasy means. Apparently too many others here don't. Hope to see part two soon. |
| 2011-07-18 04:08:09 |
Whatever You Want |
Good story, but it could have used more detail of the sex scene. Keep at it. |
| 2011-08-16 01:59:13 |
The Hitchhiker - teenage cumslut |
You Sir are a kindred spirit. The action you wrote about wasn't rape. After all, she agreed to your terms.
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| 2011-09-13 04:03:06 |
Mountain Angel |
You have written a wonderfully erotic story. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-09-13 04:19:11 |
Her first time. |
Excellent work for your first effort at this type of writing. |
| 2011-12-26 11:11:51 |
Processing Shelly |
This waste of space appears to have been written by a disturbed preteen. Get some help. |
| 2012-03-03 00:43:05 |
The Girls Next Door |
Improbable but a great story nontheless. I'm looking forward to Chapter II. I hope he gets to fuck Anna's ass until she screams in pleasure. |
| 2012-03-03 20:53:20 |
Taking her virginity |
NIce story, but you could use some practice using paragraphs. |
| 2012-04-02 14:43:16 |
Jail Bait |
Except for the texting codes, I liked your story. Far too many critics act like these stories are up for some kind of writing award. Just write what you like and let the critics go to hell. I look forward to the next installment to your story. |
| 2012-04-06 07:45:31 |
House Girl |
A good start to an interesting story. If I may suggest, please try proof reading your work before you post it. There are several gramatical errors that tend to detract from the flow of your story. I look forward to the follow-up chapters.
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| 2012-04-08 19:00:57 |
My Brother and Me |
I strongly suggest you try three things. One, use spell check. Two, get some real experience so your writing is closer to reality. Finally, pay attention in middle school and high school English. You really need all three of the above to improve this promissing story. |
| 2012-04-16 08:03:06 |
Forbidden Fruit |
You have a nice story. However, double spacing between paragraphs would have made it much easier to read. |
| 2012-04-17 08:26:18 |
I Love you my Brother |
Excellent story! Perhaps his sister can share Ron with a few of her closest girlfriends. A boy with such a filling cock needs to be shared. By the way, your English skills are a good as most English speaking writers I've read. I look forward to your next effort. |
| 2012-04-19 08:52:28 |
Catherine - My First Victim |
Fairly well written, but leaving all that DNA was stupid. |
| 2012-04-19 23:45:20 |
The School Spinster Takes A Chance |
Fantastic story! Yes, it was a bit long, but it held my attention from beginnng to end. I hope you keep writing stories such as this. |
| 2012-05-01 00:28:37 |
The Neighbor's Daughter |
Kim, Savanna, and Cheyanne, if you'll message me here, I' be happy to chat with you. I look forward to hearing from you.
Lucky
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| 2012-05-03 00:37:44 |
Education of Jami |
A vesry good story. If I have any criticism, it would be to point out the need to proofread your stuff. Otherwise, you've done a real good job. |
| 2012-05-18 22:47:52 |
The babysitter returns part 2 |
Another excellent story. I look forward to part three. |
| 2012-05-23 08:06:53 |
I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS!-1 |
You have pened an excellent story. I look forward to the next installment. |