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Date Story title Comment
2010-07-21 22:17:08 Harry Potter and the Sisters Black - The Complete Saga PART ONE (THE BEGINNING) Well, I cannot be bothered, and I do apologize, to read all other comments, but I read a few.

First, fantastic story. Even though I have used Wikipedia to remember some things, I will say that you are the first I have ever read to successfully create something like this with a fair length to it. I loved it!

Second, you're language is almost perfect, but to many typos and misspellings draw this harshly down.
The best example is Mione's witch oath.
"Where ever he doth do, so too shall I go" which I believe would mean wherever he does do (what?) she will go?

Thirdly, I did have some problems with the sudden, and I mean extremely sudden changes is speed. It goes at a quite nice pace and then suddenly, pace quickens for one sentence and then returns to normal.

Ratings are as follows
Plot: 10/10
Spelling: 9/10
Typography: 9/10
Language: 10/10
Sex Scenes: 10/10
Fan Fiction: 10/10
Average: 9,6/10 or 96%
But the cruelty to Malfoy gives you: 9.9/10 or 99%

Keep up the
2010-07-21 22:34:29 The 16-Year-Old-Tease at Play Good, good, but one thing It lacks a certain build up requiered for that thing called perfection.
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