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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2010-08-14 23:24:54 |
Woman With Plumage |
Oh, wow =P
This was... umm... I'm not too sure.
I've never read anything like this, though I can assure you I enjoyed it greatly ^_^
As someone whos kind of tubby, it's nice to know people like it. |
| 2010-08-14 23:17:36 |
God Of Ra |
I thought this was incredibly good, whether it's accurate or not. What are the tales of the egyptian gods and goddesses, if not made up stories? Most can't prove that they were true. For all we know, your poem is accurate, the one to comment before is just ignorant.
The flow was perfect, in such an imperfect way.
I wish my poems would turn out that nicely, but unfortunately, I am not skilled enough yet I don't think.
Keep writing :D |
| 2010-08-14 23:13:35 |
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Hmmmm...
I like it, but you could work on the flow a bit more.
Other wise, good poem. |
| 2010-07-08 02:30:47 |
Teasing Daddy's Friend Until He Can't Take Anymore |
Mmm.. great story. ^^, I'm dripping wet.
Would have LOVED to be her :D |
| 2010-07-07 01:59:22 |
The Bookworm, the Dog, and Me- Part II |
:D I loved this! I wish I was Mikaela ^^, |
| 2010-06-24 05:13:42 |
Seregech; Senses Lost |
@KingCrazy I'm working on making them longer, and I'm planning on posting more soon
To the unknown reader; Your a knob. Obviously there wouldn't be much of a story plot yet. |
| 2010-06-24 00:51:41 |
Size Does Matter |
LOL this made me smile =P Very well written with a good flow :D |
| 2010-06-24 00:45:52 |
We Started As Friends |
Wow.. that was incredibly amazing :( I feel jealous to be honest. I've been writing poetry for quite sometime but I could never seem to get the whole love emotion into proper words. |
| 2010-06-24 00:42:20 |
I Woke Up With A Fat Chick |
Lmfao.. fat people need a little lovin' too x)
(: Once again, wonderfully put together. |
| 2010-06-24 00:39:40 |
Size Does Matter |
LOL this made me smile =P Very well written with a good flow :D |
| 2010-06-24 00:31:11 |
DOMINATE ME |
I agree, it was lacking flow. It was really good at the beginning though, and got a bit better towards the middle. Just keep practicing (: |