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2010-06-14 05:14:19 Soozers - Preteen Sex Machine - Part Two I hope you will continue to write. But I would suggest that what you have posted with these two stories would be better thought of as an outline. If you could then rewrite then, adding more detail and dialog you could have something much more enjoyable to read. Then wait a week or two before making a final pass for proofreading for continutiy, etc. and post. Of course some readers are not smart enough to read the authors bio, but I think most of the previous messages were intended as constructive. Best wishes for your future work!
2010-07-28 20:46:44 1234 tell me that you love me more It seems to me that there is more to this story. Please continue, The value of this tale is to see where it ends up.
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